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Yamanaka, Ju


THE INFO

Name: Raisuke Ju
Nickname: "Juroi", "Nisuke", "Rogue"
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Appearance: First things first, Ju is somewhat short for an average person his age.He is 1.65 meters tall and weighs 50 kg. Other than that, he is quite a "standard" Yamanaka, with his blond hair that he takes care of so patiently and passionately; and his multi-toned blue eyes that cause the illusion that his eyes are windows to a deep, but clean ocean. On sunny days, his eyes sometimes turn out to look green, instead of blue; but that is merely a result of the light. By the clothing, he is once again more of a "standard" Yamanaka clan heir, instead of an original designer of clothes.

He wears white and black clothes, and on them he wears (as most of the other Yamanaka do too) purple/indigo pieces of clothing. (For example; his indigo scarf and the purple headband he wears on the upper part of his right arm.) The only thing that may differ him from usual Yamanaka clan heirs may be his messy and spiky hair, which he is proud of, since he would want to be differed from the part of the clan that seeks only beauty (which Ju finds arrogant, and idiotic).

Anyway, he usually wears some white robes over slim, black clothes; basically a t-shirt and a pair of trousers. The white robe is long enough to cover the back of his trousers, but not large enough to make Ju look any bigger than he actually is. His usuaaly-spiky blonde hairs are once in a while combed to seem straight. His low height makes it possible for him to take on stealth missions. Another advantage his height provides is being able to enter small doors or gates a usual person won't be able to go through.

A disadvantage may be that his "Short Range" is shorter than a usual person's. For example, of course somebody taller than him would have longer arms, and the person would have a longer range even if they both equipped the same weapon.

Forehead Protector: Ju wears his headband around his right arm. The whole headband except for its metal part was painted purple, this love for the color being a habit of his, being raised by the Yamanaka.

Personality: Ju is, first of all, silent. Not asocial, nor shy, but just silent. In the short amount of time he lived for, he had learned that speaking without thinking twice was the most arrogantly, utterly stupid thing he had turned out to face with. Both this, and the fact that he prefers his inner world to the beauties of the physical world(*), caused him to think too much, sometimes causing an "overdrive", and not speak near as much. He rather listens to everything, observes the situation carefully, makes his mind up on what his decision will be, and finally, when he has no question marks in his mind, he helps other people figure out what his mind has concluded, or what his opinion is.

This being the case, he is very proud of being a heir of the Yamanaka clan, one that is known for their mental gift. He is committed to the clan, not only because of this particular reason, but also because of many other things, such as his physical apperance being an inheritance from the clan, as well as his love for the color purple, which makes him feel like he is "more of a Yamanaka". The other thing that he thinks makes him more of a Yamanaka is his way of ninja; not only his stubbornness, but also the fact that logic's place being much mroe important to him than feelings (that may not actually be the way of the Yamanaka, but at least one of many consequenses of the way he has been treated, or what he had lived through.

Other than that, ju likes being around people, and even talking to friends about everything and nothing once in a while. His behaviour would change according to the situation, for example, he would of course be "colder" and more silent around people he does not know, when he can be warm, cheerful and happy around his friends, or those whom he had acknowledged as respectable human beings. When he is not around friends, nor people he does not know, he would often get distracted by the smallest thing and then become lost in thoughts, usually forgetting what he was doing before he got distracted.

*The fact that he prefered his inner world, and his mental side to the physical world and his physical senses, has caused him to develop a second personality, that is fortunately (yet) passive, meaning the personality hadn't yet taken control of the boy's body. In this passive stage, all the contact that is likely to happen can be either Ju hearing this persona's voice in his head, or seeing his image in his inner world (pretty much like Jinchuriki facing their Bijuu, but of course in a different manner. Also, Ju will travel into this world oftenly, due to his psychological problems. This second persona is even more silent than Ju himself, but his motives are different. He sees himself a being greater than any other life form. The persona also has anappearance that is completely different from Ju's. First of all, he is almost twice as long as Ju is; has long, straight, green hair and shiny green eyes.

This second persona, even when he is passive, can communicate with Ju through telepathy, and can even interrupt Ju when he is using Yamanaka clan Jutsus, for example, join the telepathic communications taking place, or appearing in the head of somebody else, when Ju is using Mind Reading Technique on that person. Also, he sometimes appears in the real world like an imaginary friend, only able to be seen by Ju himself, or those who he is connected to with Telepathic Communication Technique.

Clan: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] 18px-Yamanaka_Symbol.svgYamanaka Clan
Nindō: "Believe. Act. Accomplish."





THE NINJA

Origin: Land Of Lightning
Affiliation: Kumogakure
Rank: Genin
Specialties:

  • Ninjutsu (Main)
  • Taijutsu (Sub)


Elemental Affinities:

  • Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] 18px_nature_icon_wind_svg_by_thebarcay-d67wul7 Fuuton (Main)
  • Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] 18px-Nature_Icon_Lightning.svg Raiton (Sub)


Combat Style:

Inheritance of the Yamanaka Family:

Ju Ken & Ni Ken:

Special Characteristics:
Physical Based:
Chakra Based:
Mental Based:
Misc Based:


THE BACKGROUND
History:

Pre-Academy
The son of a Shinobi called Katsu Goka and a Kunoichi called Nira Yamanaka, both living in the Village Hidden in the Clouds, was born on the mountain, in a room full of fresh air with open windows looking at the valley. "It is a boy !". The father was holding the kid close to his chest. The boy was blonde and had blue eyes; just like his mother, and not anything like the father who had dark brown hair and crimson eyes. The boy's name was an argument before the birth, but when Katsu saw what the kid looked like, he gave in to the Yamanaka's opinion: "Your name will be Nero Yamanaka..." the man whispered into the newborn's ear.

After that day, for the next several years, Nero (as his name was back then) was beiedng taken care of by both his father and his mother; usually not at the same time due to their job, at least one of them always having a mission they had to accomplish. Maybe this turned out to be better for Nero, because due to this fact, he has developed himself both in close-range battles, being trained Taijutsu (and even the combat style his father himself has invented) by his father, and the way of the Yamanaka, also Ninjutsu (including basic things such as the academy techniques) by his mother. So, even before joining the academy, he had taken many steps towards the goal of becoming a ninja.

Academy
Due to the fact of Nero being trained by his father and mother in the way of the ninja already, he had no trouble with the lessons taught at the Academy. In fact, thanks to the fact that he already knew anything that was being taught at during the lessons, he did not need to work on any of the lessons at all, so he could easily find time for himself, to train in the backyard of his house, or outside with some of the other "experienced" Academy students. In fact, the time he spent on training during the Academy is when he had invented and developed "The Art Of Ten Fists", Ju Ken.

After completing this task, he was given the name "Juro" by his parents. That was the first time Ju (as he was calling himself now) felt truly happy, achieving such an important thing for the first time, which motivated him even more into becoming a ninja. And him already being superior to most of the other students, he easily graduated from the Academy, and became a Genin, now an official ninja serving the Village Hidden in the Clouds.

Life as a Genin Starts
After graduating, Ju's life made a wild turn. His life was suddenly much better, and he was suddenly much more comforted. His parents, Katsu and Niro were proud of him. The life of the family was never better. Unfortunately, this happiness didn't last long. Now that Ju was a Genin, and also a teenager able to take care of himself, his parents started going out to missions at the same time, now that they didn't need to leave one behind to take care of Nero, who was just a little kid back then. And one day, they were assigned to the same mission, that was to assassinate a spesific person planing a coup d'etat on the current lead of the village. Unfortunately, as it turns out, the person was way out of the league of his mother and his father. Ju used to count days until his parents returned home, but this time, all he got was a letter... A letter stating the death of both of his parents. That was the day Ju became the person he is today. Silent, and psychologically problematic. In days after the occasion, he developed the second personality known as "Akuma".

Roleplay Sample:

Spoiler:

THE ARSENAL
Jutsu:

Ninjutsu | Fuuton:

Ninjutsu | Raiton:

Yamanaka Clan Jutsu:

Ninjutsu | Non-Elemental:

Taijutsu Techniques:

Nin-Taijutsu Techniques:

Academy Jutsu:
(15 Jutsu in total.)

Weapons:

Custom:

Close-Range:

Medium Range:

Long Range:

Kits:


FACE CLAIM
Character Claim: Toshiro Hitsugaya
Source: Bleach
Image: http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2013/113/2/b/bleach___toshiro_hitsugaya_by_aidenkyoto-d4rd1qr.jpg


Last edited by Raisuke on Sat 15 Jun 2013, 11:38 am; edited 3 times in total
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] EmptySat 08 Jun 2013, 4:20 pm

Done, I believe.
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] EmptySun 09 Jun 2013, 2:31 am

Can you not change our forum background please? o.o
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] EmptySun 09 Jun 2013, 4:39 am

I'm also going to ask you to not have your youtube embed be an autoplay. You're welcome to have it there, but please don't make it play without being clicked on.
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] EmptySun 09 Jun 2013, 8:35 am

Sorry, sorry. Done, what else ?
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Bump
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] EmptyThu 13 Jun 2013, 4:33 pm

Let's see.

Your appearance needs to be increased. We encourage at least two paragraphs, and in comparison with your sizable personality and combat style, I'm not sure why you opted for a much shorter physical description.

Also, could you remove all the 'Total Jutsu' remarks? It might just be my OCD, but they aren't really necessary and in the future, may be a source of frustration for moderators.

Could you mention how large your custom daggers are? All I need is something along the lines of 'slightly larger than a kunai', for reference's sake. 

Also, Academy Jutsu do not count towards your Starting 15 Jutsu Limit. So you can have 9 more techniques ^_^
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] EmptyThu 13 Jun 2013, 11:00 pm

Chris wrote:
Could you mention how large your custom daggers are? All I need is something along the lines of 'slightly larger than a kunai', for reference's sake.


That's actually a quote from the "dagger" in the universal short-range weapons list. I changed it anyway, just saying this in case you'd like that to be changed too (or not, idk how things actually work here)



Chris wrote:
Also, Academy Jutsu do not count towards your Starting 15 Jutsu Limit. So you can have 9 more techniques ^_^

Thanks ^.^ Done. And the other 2 things you asked are done too.
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] EmptyFri 14 Jun 2013, 9:29 pm

Well since they're custom, I wanted it to be more specific ^^

Also I just noticed that you can't have 'Noroi's Gou' since Genin can only use D Rank Weapons. Sorry.

By the way shouldn't 'Raitoningu no Kenshutsu - Lightning Detection' be in its own section (e.g. Kumo Techniques)? Currently it's under Yamanaka techniques.
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] EmptySat 15 Jun 2013, 11:38 am

Chris wrote:
Also I just noticed that you can't have 'Noroi's Gou' since Genin can only use D Rank Weapons. Sorry.

By the way shouldn't 'Raitoningu no Kenshutsu - Lightning Detection' be in its own section (e.g. Kumo Techniques)? Currently it's under Yamanaka techniques.


Ooops, sorry. Fixed. I put that one and some others in the "Raiton Ninjutsu" section instead of "Kumo-Spesific Jutsu" section, as well as Lariat in Taijutsu and Rakurai in Nintaijutsu so they are easier to find.
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] EmptySat 15 Jun 2013, 2:10 pm

Good stuff ^^

Welp, I can't see anything wrong with this application anymore Smile

Which means, it's hereby Approved 1/2
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] EmptyMon 17 Jun 2013, 12:25 pm


Job well done on the application, Raisuke!
Can't seem to find anything wrong and I look forward to seeing how your second personality develops.

Approved.
2/2

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What in the hell are you going on about now? Stop wasting my time.
Archived due to inactivity.
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