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Kaguya, Teion.

THE INFO.

Name: Kaguya, Teion
Nickname: Kuroi inazuma
Age: 17
Gender: Male

Appearance:
   Teion stands with a silent confidence at 5'8 and a loose frame. His short cut stark white hair spikes to the rear as if he is always moving against the rushing water of life, leaving only a few strands to float over his forehead protector. The forehead protector covers the mark of his clan, two red dots outlined in black. His eye brows, which are also white, are a bit thin with a sharp cornered arch that gives his face an emotionless expression. His eyes are a dull azure with a slight slant, they usually display an uninterest in life. His lips are a bit thin and never curl, displaying neither pleasure or distaste. The skin on his face is smooth, showing his age correctly. It seemed to him that facial hair wouldn't seem to be too much of an inconvenience for years to come. His jaw line is sharp, and strong, with a cleft that wasn't noticeable unless you really looked close. His neck is muscular but thin, it wouldn't seem he was athletically built unless you saw him shirtless. His body is built like a martial artist's that valued self movement and control over strength by pure force. He seems thin while wearing close, but without, you can see the hard work he put into it. Every muscle is clean cut and in good proportion to the others, allowing him to have more control over his body as a whole. His choice in clothes are a bit strange but he can't help but to enjoy them. He wears a ragged long sleeve button up white shirt with grey pin stripes covered with a torn black vest. His shirt is tucked into his dirty black loose fitting suit pants, which have an old leather belt fastened by a brass buckle. The pants cover just a bit of the top of his dull dress shoes. He liked these dress shoes because they had amazing grip, they felt just as good as any traditional ninja sandal  he had worn. Covering the large majority of his appearance from the head to just even with his calf is a dirty black trench coat with a large hood and high collar. This was his body mask, it hid his face along with the rest of him. It has worn and sun faded embroidery outlining the inner edge of the coat.

His ninja tool kit is located on the small of his back and rest over his pants somewhat on his buttocks. The main weapon he uses, his ninjato, is sheathed the left side of his hip and is usually unnoticeable due to being covered by his coat. His fingerless glove covered hands never rest on the weapon, due to having a habit of not wanting to be known to have it. Teion looks like what he is, a neat poor man.


Forehead Protector: Worn on his forehead to cover up his clan mark.

Personality:
  Teion is usually a laid back person who doesn't talk much and would rather observe a room full of people to somewhat figure out the personalities of each. He almost never makes the first move in a fight and likes to analyze his opponent before making any rash decisions. Teion prefers the company of animals than he does people for some reason. He believes that animals are more pure than humans and show their true colors from the start. As much as he hates to show it, he has a kind heart. The final blow is hard for him to make at times, but he will make it if necessary. Teion is a bit dark, he feels little for people in most situations, thinking that emotions are useless in the battlefield as well as in life. He believes that feelings cloud decisions we make and ultimately negatively changing lives. Teion is curious about friends though, happiness always looks good, but he knows that there is no happiness without sorrow, not introduce one or the other keeps away sorrow.

Teion has a strong passion in life, and that is to find his fathers kill and avenge his family's loss. He hopes to one day become part of the Anbu Black Ops in order to gather more information on finding the assassin. He feels as though conversation is not needed most of the time, this does not mean he barely talks. This means he talks when it is needed, and used to change situations. He does not believe in idol or small talk. If someone want's to know about him he will tell them a minimal amount. He isn't a good person to have a good conversation with unless you really know him and he trusts you. He acquires information and feels that things that waste his time waste his life. He can use any information and start to work with it, taking time from that process is rude to him. This introverted view on social life has left him to be unpopular and not talked to. He finds that people usually don't like or really dislike him. He doesn't leave a real impression that lasts on people, so they forget him. Well, this is what he is going for anyway. He has noticed that his introversion helps with his goal. He doesn't need to be known or liked. He feels that this is one of the best steps to take to become a good ninja dedicated to stealth.

However, in the back of his mind he knows that this is lonely. Just like any other human, he does get lonely. He fights this dilemma every so often when he does feel like he is the only person on earth. When he feels like he is all alone in life, he fuels himself with the rage of the loss of his father and remembers his mission in life. Doing this, he powers through those emotions to keep moving on, adding more dullness to his azure eyes.

Teion finds it easy to put himself in another's shoes. This means it is easy for him to understand what another person is going through. He also likes to analyze how people act and talk, noting the personality and the way they live in general. It has helped him in handle disputes and talk through them. He also uses this in battle when going against any opponent, most of the time not knowing he is. He feels that when he analyzes himself, he progresses because he sees his personality weaknesses and strengths to better prepare himself more mentally and physically.    

Books are a part of his very being. He loves to read and learn. Most of the time he will have his nose in a book that is filled with a new subject or genre. Sometimes he feels as though there isn't enough information in the world to satisfy his constant hunger for knowledge. He loves to be able to think like other people and put himself in the state of mind of as many people as possible, and books are one of the easiest ways to do this.



Clan: Kaguya
Nindō: Know, don't be known.

THE NINJA.

Origin: Mizu no Kuni
Affiliation: Kirigakure
Rank: Gennin
Specialties: Ninjutsu, Weaponry (close-range/mid-range)
Elemental Affinities: Raiton, Suiton

Combat Style:
Observe, test, calculate, set up, strike, repeat. Teion likes to find the fastest and efficient way to take down his target. He would rather use as little resources as possible. Teion will analyze his opponent(s) and gather as much information from them before, during, and after a confrontation. Opponents may find themselves being treated as though they are not a threat, when in fact they are the biggest threat in his mind. He takes no chances and thinks of people as bigger threats then they may be.

If the battle is serious and posses a real threat, even from the beginning, then his style is of no style. He only fights acting, reacting, memorizing, adapting, and exploiting through out the battle. He becomes precise, not making mistakes and punishing those made.

Special Characteristics:
Spoiler:

THE BACKGROUND.

History:
birth and childhood:

academy:
Roleplay Sample:

RP SAMPLE:


THE ARSENAL.


Academy Jutsu:

Kaguya clan Jutsu:

Raiton jutsu:

Suiton Jutsu:

Non-Elemental Jutsu:

Weapon Jutsu:

Weapons:


FACE CLAIM.

Character Claim: Vergil the demon slayer, son of Sparda, brother of Dante.
Source: Devil May Cry 3 (white haired)
Image URL: https://i.servimg.com/u/f39/17/66/15/52/virgil13.jpg


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PostSubject: Re: Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] EmptySun 27 Jan 2013, 1:07 pm

Is your application done? If not, put the WiP on the Title of the topic. Once you complete everything just remove it.

But since I'm here, appearance, personality, combat style, history need to be much, much longer.
RP Sample will need to be at least 250 words for a genin.
Origin is from which country you originate, in your case, Mizu no Kuni, while the village is Kirigakure.
Also, you have to have the Kaguya physical traits, so white hair is neccessary, same as pale skin.
Also, you are allowed to start with 15 jutsus, not counting the academy ones.
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PostSubject: Re: Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] EmptyTue 29 Jan 2013, 12:11 am

sorry i didn't put wip on here, nost of whats on here are just notes while i study your site more. thanks for the tips and pointers. can I use a RP sample from another site and char I had?
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PostSubject: Re: Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] EmptyTue 29 Jan 2013, 1:17 am

Sure, you can use them. But the word count has to be at least 250 words min since you're starting as a genin.
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PostSubject: Re: Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] EmptyTue 29 Jan 2013, 8:14 am

What needs more length:
  • Personality
  • Appearance
  • Combat Style
  • Possibly your history, although I am not going to be a bitch about that. I have seen numerous bullet point histories around here, so I think yours should be fine. Just something to think about.


Other then that, please copy/paste your RP sample, if that's how you're going to do it, instead of just posting a link there. Thanks.
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added to all. notha bumpy
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You need to fill out your face claim area.
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I dont see anything wrong here.
Approved.
1/2
COOKIE!
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BAM!
Approved 2/2
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Set up an account here: http://www.ultimateshinobi.org/f199-accounts
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Archived due to user inactivity.
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Unarchived.
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PostSubject: Re: Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] EmptyFri 02 Aug 2013, 8:46 pm

Yup, I'm ready to try again. Can I get a "BUMP" lawd?
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PostSubject: Re: Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] Kaguya, Teion [Kiri Genin] EmptySat 03 Aug 2013, 1:49 am

This is a generally solid app. I do have a qualm however - please please please fix some of the spelling, grammar, capitalisation and so forth. It's very disheartening when you start off a paragraph with a lower-case letter.

Also, if you don't mind, I would love if you could expand your Appearance and Personality a little bit, and maybe add a paragraph to the History as well ^^

It's always good to have lengthy apps: it helps in attracting roleplaying partners.
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Thank you thank you thank you. I feel like I rushed myself when I did this. I just wasn't sure if I was really allowed to go through it again.
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Much better. Could you also, lastly, go over your Combat Style (capitalise pleaushs xD) and your Jutsu (capitalise pleauuuuuush)? My OCD will go all haywire otherwise Razz

After you've done that, I would consider this application 'Approved 1/2' :3
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Alright, I cleaned it up some more. Thanks for all the help. :3
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