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Daimon
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|  Kousen, DaimonTHE INFO.
Name:Daimon Kousen
Nickname:Dye-a play on the pronunciation of his first name giving to his family because of him having red hair and everyone else having brown hair.
Age:17
Gender:Male
Appearance:Daimon has bright red hair unusual in his family because both of his father having white hair and brown skin and his mother has brown hair but was later discovered his great grandparents on his mom's side had red hair, and the trait skipped all the way to his generation. He rarely does anything to his hair besides annual cuts so its grown in a natural way simply sitting on his head. He likes to wear his headband across his arm most times however he wears a separate blue headband across his forehead tied tight so the straps hang down his head and even down his back just in an attempt to become more fashionable.
He has slightly tanner skin then normal due to his father's brown skin and his Kousen bloodline but because of his mother he has slightly lighter skin then most Kousens. Due to look so much different then his family, he has always tried to look more similar to them by going out and tanning but because he already has pigment in his skin from his father's side, his skin doesn't get much darker. He has a strange birth mark on his neck in the shape of a triangle that isn't very noticeable unless you are right next to him staring in the spot.
He has big bright blue eyes he got from his mother's side. His mother told him, the Sasaki men were born with those eyes for the sole purpose to attract mates. Daimon's stare often causes people to instantly cheer up and he often uses his eyes for granted.
He lacks any facial hair but not cause of his age but because he always shaves because a red mustache just doesn't look right especially on him. His siblings called him apple fuzz whenever he did so he vowed never to grow facial hair ever.
He stands at an above average 182 cm, the tallest child in his family. He weighs 83 KG, have a nice build due to his intense training and various workouts. He tries to bulk up too much muscle so it won't affect his speed. He has a slim but fit build trying to maintain his figure cause of his reliance on taijutsu and having to be in physical shape.
He usually dresses in light clothing so he can stay cool and to keep casual. When not training or on missions he sports typical short sleeve t shirts and some times sleeveless jackets with jeans His favorite colors are red and blue and alternates the colors for his outfits. While on missions he wears tight long sleeve shirts and work pants with his ninja tabi.
He went and got a tattoo on his back of a brilliant flame with a lion in the middle of it just cause it looked cool that he keeps hidden from everyone. He wants to wait until he faces his top opponent before revealing it. The tattoo was influenced by his desire to overcome any challenge that he faces and himself being the lion, king of everything else and wanting to be supreme, earning the respect of everyone around him.
When ever he is in colder temperatures he sports jackets and bagger jeans but he has a running gag of never zipping up his coats. Daimon is highly fashion conscious and is probably the second most important thing beside actual combat.
He has quite a bit of jewelry. He has a necklace his father gave him and two earrings that his mother bought him when he was a baby. He would go and get one more for his right ear.
Forehead Protector:He keeps the forehead protector on his right arm most of the time but when he gets deep in combat he puts it around his forehead.
Personality:Daimon is incredibly confident in himself. He is borderline conceited some times when it comes to his combat ability. He is always cocky in battle and is always excited to show off his strength. He however does show respect to all of his opponents, and never underestimates a target.
He is quick to anger when being insulted and often tries to start fights. He is a little too courageous, and rarely backs downs from fights, no matter how strong the opponent.
He makes friends pretty easily but is known to trust too much and is easily betrayed. He is very protective of his friends and family to the point he would lay down his life to protect them.
Besides fighting and training, Daimon loves music. He enjoys composing his own music but keeps it a secret from most people from fear they would make fun of him for having such a nonviolent hobby
He seems to always keep a pack of candy with him no matter what, he isn't one to keep a diet and figures if he eats a lot he will just burn all off from training anyway.
Daimon's chivalry when it comes to friends and family comes from his parents often scolding him about watching over his younger siblings and having to watch them while growing up.
He is incredibly stubborn and determined not letting anybody stop him if he sets a goal. By anyone, he means everyone. No matter how high in importance the person is, often getting him in trouble if he craves something. His determination results in him leaving his home for days for his training sessions if its something he wants to improve on.
Despite his confidence in his abilities, he feels as if he will never reach his peak and constantly finds things he needs to improve on. He is considered his own biggest fan and his own biggest critic.
Daimon rarely holds grudges even with his worst enemies often showing mercy and forgiving them unless they have hurt the weak or someone important to him.
Clan:Kousen
Nindō:"The only thing that can stop me is me." and "I didn't lose, victory has just been delayed."
THE NINJA.
Origin:Land of Lightning
Affiliation:Kumogakure
Rank:Genin
Specialities:
1. Taijutsu
2. Ninjutsu
Elemental Affinities:
1. Raiton
2. Suiton
3. Ranton
Combat Style:Daimon focuses his taijutsu on making fast and precise strikes in important spots on an opponent in an attempt to hinder them so he can strike even faster and get an advantage on an opponent.He bases his style of combat on a viper, striking quick and hindering the opponent and decreasing an opponents attributes so they gain an even better advantage. Daimon is known to put opponents in submission holds focusing on limbs to cause soreness He doesn't rely on physical strength, but more on locating enemy weaknesses and taking advantage of them so he can easily take opponents down.
Defensively, he doesn't rely on his strength either but his speed. He tries to avoid attacks instead of blocking them,and if he can dodge diverting attacks in other directions or attacking an opponent before they can.hit their target. He likes to draw the beginning of fights on so he can view how his opponent fights, and draw their strengths and weaknesses so he knows how to avoid attacks more efficiently and how to counter them effectively. He likes to prey on opponents somewhat kind like playing with his food so he can get the most out of them before he can defeat them.
For Ninjutsu, he uses the elements Raiton, Sution, and his clan element Ranton. Other wise known as Storm Release. He likes to use his elements to hinder opponents as well to give himself an advantage as well as using his ninjutsu to enhance his own abilities to further bully opponents. He likes to use moves that can impede opponents to where they he can outmatch them with speed, restrain them so he can easily attack and do whatever he want and set up for more moves that can hinder them, acting more on that snake like combat, constantly injecting an opponent with "poison" until they can't move anymore.
He uses his Raiton techniques to strength himself also, but his attacks focus on fast attacks hard to dodge. He uses sutiton techniques mainly for enhancing his raiton techniques but sometimes he has some more to enhance his abilities or set up some other tricks. Ranton, he mixes both of his strategies in an attempt to confuse opponents and dominate them with complex moves.
Special Characteristics:
- Spoiler:
Name: Enhanced Speed
Rank: C
Type: Physical
Prerequisites: -
Training: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic.
Restrictions: Amongst the Speed, Endurance, Strength, and Acrobatics SCs, members may only possess two of them, unless they possess both Weaponry and Taijutsu as their Primary and Secondary Specialties. If one possess Weaponry or Taijutsu as a Primary specialty, with one other specialty, and acquire Weaponry or Taijutsu as a Sub-Specialty, they may possess up to any three of them.
Description: After training relentlessly in cardiovascular and high speed movement, shinobi are able to greatly increase their overall stamina and movement speed. Those talented with this speed are capable of running with speed half a man greater than their peers and even last a bit longer during extraneous activities without becoming exhausted. This boost in speed is usually enough to quickly catch escaping targets or outrun most regular citizens.
Name: Infinite Riches
Rank: C
Type: Social Based
Prerequisites: -
Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic.
Description: The ninja gains near infinite Ryo from either inheritance or a unknown circumstance which makes them filthy rich and now highly respected in their village. They can now live in large mansions in their villages and possess the latest technology and training equipment. They can purchase anything without fear of running out of money which makes them both popular and feared for their power.
THE BACKGROUND.
History:Daimon was born to a two parent home to six different siblings. He was the fourth oldest and when he was born he had a trait that stood out from all of his siblings who had brown skin and white hair. His bright red hair often confused people and made them wonder how did he get it. He was unique as he received a trait none of his siblings got from their ancestors. His siblings often teased him about it.
His father was a village famous swordsman and his mother was famous for her taijutsu and the both of them taught their kids much about their arts resulting in them all being proficient in both fields. Daimon however seemed to be the best at both compared to his siblings that often caused them to start arguments.
In the academy, Daimon was much above his peers in Taijutsu and Ninjutsu and pretty decent with ninja tools, but was absolutely horrible with genjutsu which was the only reason he couldn't graduate any sooner. Many students teased him about that, saying he wasn't even a ninja, and all he could do was fist fight. That only made him that more hungry to succeed.
After finally improving his genjutsu to the minimum level he was able to graduate from the academy. He could have been top rookie if it weren't for his genjutsu, angering him that much more. He vowed that day he would not let anything else prevent him from becoming the best in the world.
Daimon also developed his elements early as well causing his siblings to get jealous but also elevating their own game causing the family to get eyes from the whole village as a talented family of ninjas. Daimon however, wanted to be known for more then just his family, but because of his own talent. He had dreams to be the strongest ninja in the entire family. Daimon after graduating the academy, would go live with his oldest brother, who is a jounin.
Daimon's current plans are training so he can get promoted, until he gets to a rank with more difficult missions and more freedom feeling as if genin missions are limited to just chores and he is never sent to actually help people or test out his own abilities.
Daimon lately has been in some trouble with the Raikage after an arguement when Daimon requested a tougher task and the Raikage refused so Daimon challenged him to a fight with the reward being a tougher mission.
Daimon's disrespect led to him being put on probation for a month and his title as genin suspended until his probation expired. Daimon, stubborn as a mule, went and worked as a vigilante at night, combating thieves or various other criminals in a mask just to pass the time until his title was restored.
Daimon's constant problems with the Raikage has went back since his academy days during one day on a field trip to the Raikage's office and Daimon accidentally knocked over an important heirloom and instead of telling the truth and apologizing, he tried to blame the wreckage on another student but was eventually found out.
Roleplay Sample:What are you going to do about it Red Head!" shouted Daimon's older brother as he held Daimon's book full of songs. "I said give it back!" shouted Daimon as he walked after his sibling. "If I don't what are you going to do? Set my head on fire like yours is?" joked the sibling. Daimon had enough with the constant insults and mistreatment by his family and Daimon would just crack his knuckles and point his index finger at his brother. "This is my last warning. Give it back or I will be force to deliver a foot to your rear." He shouted, knowing he was capable of doing it even if he was the younger sibling. His brother shrugged his shoulders and stuck a vulgar finger up at him.
"You just signed your fate." Daimon mumbled under his breath as he sped forward and jumped in an attempt to tackle his brother. His brother would disappear and in his place was a pillow with the use of the substitution technique causing Daimon to tackle the pillow and fall onto the floor. "Look up carrot top, pull your head out your butt!" his sibling teased as Daimon stood back up and glared with an even angrier look. "So we are using our ninja knowledge?" He mumbled under his breath as he sighed and took a deep breath.
Blood in his eyes as he gritted his teeth together he would charge forward with the force of a raging rhino. He sped forward with the intent of murder as he did his sibling sensed the rage and was some what intimidated as Daimon jumped and tackled his target and sent him into a wall. They would break through and hit the floor as they did Daimon would stand up and grab his brother's leg and turn him on his stomach and sit on his back bringing the leg back. "Say uncle!" Daimon shouted as his brother screamed in pain.
"Hush up you fear beacon!" His sibling screamed as Daimon looked back at him with anger in his eyes and he stood back up and grabbed his brother by the arm and pulled him back up. His brother was only playing possum as he stood back up he grabbed Daimon by the head and hit him with a right hook sending Daimon to the floor. His brother smirked and cracked his own knuckles. "I think its time i taught you a lesson huh Ginger Biscuit?"
Daimon would spin and do a sweep kick sending his brother to the floor. As soon as Daimon pounced and was about to send a punch to his brother his father had appeared above them. "What did I tell the both of you about fighting?" His patriarch preached with his arms folded as Daimon stood up. "Yeah." His father picked up his brother and smiled. "Proud of you my boys. Show that Kousen toughness!" He shouted as he put his hands up. "Now how we all fight then!"
THE ARSENAL. Academy
- Spoiler:
Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type: Genjutsu
Range: N/A
Medium: Optical
Element: N/A
Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others.
Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Element: N/A
Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread.
Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand.
Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu.
Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Chozou no Jutsu • Storage Technique
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed.
Chakra Cost: 1 to seal; 1 to unseal.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: NA
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Clan
- Spoiler:
Name: Reizaa Akuto - Laser Act
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close, Mid (0m-7m)
Element: Ranton
Description: After making two hand signs the user channels ranton chakra into on of their limbs and releases a single beam of energy that can have its trajectory changed freely. It has an impact force equivalent to two explosive tags. The user must remain still in order to control this technique and it is released in a "stream" so if it hits something or that stream is interrupted the jutsu will end.
Chakra Cost: 5 + 2 per post up to 3 posts.
Village Specific
- Spoiler:
Name: Rariatto - Lariat
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m)
Element: -
Description: Rariatto is a taijutsu technique. After gathering enough chakra within their entire body, the user will be able to gain an sudden burst in strength and speed. The user will straighten their dominant arm so that they can form a greater attack. Then using their speed the user will rush towards their target and ram into their upper chest with their strengthened arm, forcing the opponent to the ground.
Chakra Cost: 8
Name: Kumogakure no Jutsu - Hidden Cloud Technique
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0 - 5m), Med (5 - 10m)
Element: -
Description: Kumogakure no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique utilizing no element. A technique that imitates that of the Kirigakure no Jutsu, once the user has performed the required handseals they will be able to call upon a thick and heavy cloud that will appear almost out of nowhere. The cloud will be able to cover a ten metre radius around the user and only the user is able to sense where others lurk within the cloud. Those with doujutsu or chakra sensing techniques are also able to see through this thick cloud but without any aid, then you'll be blind within the cloud. If a C - Rank or above fuuton technique is activated, then the cloud will be blown away.
Chakra Cost: 4
Type: Nin - Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m)
Element: Raiton
Description: Rakurai is a ninjutsu and taijutsu mixture utilizing the lightning element. After gathering chakra to the fist, the user is able to create multiple sparks of electricity to form around the top of their hand for it then to alter into a source of lightning. This lightning is to enhance the pain when delivering a punch and also numbs the area of attack for an entire post.
Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Raitoningu no Kenshutsu - Lightning Detection
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0 - 5m)
Element: Raiton
Description: Raitoningu no Kenshutsu is a ninjutsu technique utilizing the lightning element. After performing the required handseals the Hidden Cloud member will be able to send out a pulse of lightning, covering a radius of five metres with the user being at the centre. The dome - like lightning will allow the user to detect any chakra - enhanced traps, people, animals or weapons coming at them from blind spots. This can only be used once per post and anyone who is caught in the pulse will feel a tingling sensation covering their entire body. It's use is to ensure that safety is always maintained for the Kumogakure shinobi.
Chakra Cost: 8
Name: Rakurai - Lightning Strike
Rank: D
Type: Nin - Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m)
Element: Raiton
Description: Rakurai is a ninjutsu and taijutsu mixture utilizing the lightning element. After gathering chakra to the fist, the user is able to create multiple sparks of electricity to form around the top of their hand for it then to alter into a source of lightning. This lightning is to enhance the pain when delivering a punch and also numbs the area of attack for an entire post.
Chakra Cost: 3
Raiton
- Spoiler:
Name: Raiton Bunshin no Jutsu - Lightning Clone TechniqueRank: CType: NinjutsuRange: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m) Element: RaitonDescription: Raiton Bunshin no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that utilizes electricity to create a Bunshin clone. Unlike a normal Bunshin, the Raiton Bunshin has the ability to interact more with the environment due to it having physical substance. This allows the clone to carry out limited attacks on its target, but none utilizing chakra. The range of the clone is limited however, it can not travel further than 10 meters from the original body. If the Raiton Bunshin is injured, the clone will disperse in a discharge of electricity with no offensive capabilities.Chakra Cost: 7 (Per clone)Restrictions:
- No weapons, armor, or equipment can be replicated to have above C-rank quality.
Name: Lightning Release: Electromagnetic MurderRank: C-AType: NinjutsuRange: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)Element: Raiton (Lightning)Description: This technique allows the user to create a wave of electricity from their hands. The user can vary its power from a small surge to shock an opponent to a powerful stream of lightning capable of ripping through solid rock.Chakra Cost: C (5), B (10), A (20)Name: Kangekiha - Inspiration WaveRank: CType: NinjutsuRange: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)Element: Raiton (Lightning)Description: The user will first create a protective wall of water (must be done with a water technique, it is not included with just this technique). They will then form the needed hand seal and emit a bolt of electricity into the water which will increase its defensive effectiveness and stun any targets who attempt to pass through. The electricity only affects the water for the post it is used, and the stunning effect only lasts as long as the user is making contact with the water. Chakra Cost: 6
Suuiton
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Name: Suirou no Jutsu - Water Prison Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Suiton (Water)
Description: Suirou no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that utilizes water to imprison an opponent. The ninja forms the necessary hand seals which causes the water to form around the target into a spherical prison which only allows for limited movement. The ninja must keep their body touching the water prison to maintain its existence. If the contact is broken, the water falls away and their target is released. When combined with a solid bunshin technique, the ninja can imprison their target but still allow for a clone to attack others nearby.
Chakra Cost: 9 (2 per post)
Name: Mizuame Nabara - Starch Syrup Capture Field
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Suiton (Water)
Description: Suiton • Mizuame Nabara is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Water Element. After forming the needed handseals, the user will expel a sticky liquid from his/her gullet. This liquid can cover approximately 20 square meters. If the target runs on top of the liquid, their feet will become glued to its sticky surface. If the ninja focuses chakra to their feet before touching the surface, they can hover above and move over it without hindrance. This allows the user or a comrade to charge and attack without fear of becoming bogged down as well.
Chakra Cost: 7
Name: Suiben - Water Whip
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Suiton (Water)
Description: The ninja will create a whip of water which can strike and bind an opponent. The user can also funnel lightning chakra to shock anyone wrapped in it. Can only affect one target at a time.
Chakra Cost: 6 (2 per post)
Name: Mizukiri no Yaiba - Sword of Draining
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Suiton (Water)
Description: A jutsu that utilizes water to create a sword. The sword can be wielded in the normal fashion, allowing the ninja to cut and stab like a normal blade. This sword can also go through most fire jutsu of equal rank and below.
Chakra Cost: 8 (2 per post)
Taijutsu
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Name: Mizu kurō - Water Claw
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0M)
Element: Suiton
Description: This elemental taijutsu allows the user to coat their hands in water, shaping it into claw-like gloves. These gloves allow the user to make open-palmed, lacerating strikes. Additionally, the gloves will protect the user's hands from equal ranked and lower Katon jutsu, and can be used to silently drown an opponent if they are caught by surprise, and the user clamps a hand over their mouth. Due to the nature of the jutsu however, the user cannot perform jutsu requiring hand-seals while using Water Claw. The claws themselves reach six-inches past the knuckle of the user's closes fists.
Chakra Cost: 7 CP ( 2 CP per post)
Name: Konoha Raiken - Leaf Thunder Fist
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: The user will spin to gain momentum and then lay a powerful strike into his or her opponent via punch.
Chakra Cost: 6
Non Elemental Ninjutsu
- Spoiler:
Name: Chakra Kyuuin Jutsu - Chakra Absorption Technique
Rank: C-S
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: After activitating the technique, the user's hand will glow with chakra. When he or she touches his or her palm on his or her opponents body, the user can withdraw the physical and spiritual energy out of them. By reducing their chakra, it greatly increases the user’s advantage over his or her opponent.
Chakra Cost:
Costs the User: C (5) | Takes From Target: D (4)
Costs the User: B (10) | Takes From Target: C (9)
Costs the User: A (20) | Takes From Target: B (15)
Costs the User: S (35) | Takes From Target: A (25)
FACE CLAIM.
Character Claim:Roy
Source:Fire Emblem
Image URL:http://3.bp.blogspot.com/-FP6hPXFPLt4/T8O09nCW_rI/AAAAAAAABIg/uXzHoK1EX9s/s1600/Roy.jpg
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|  | | MsMoney
Age : 37
Posts : 2201
| | Subject: Re: Kousen, Daimon (Kumo Genin) Tue 11 Mar 2014, 4:07 am | |
| 1. I'd want you to add more descriptions to your appearance and personality. Both should reach at least two paragraphs (one paragraph is around 200 - 250 words).
2. Did you get permission from Mugen to use his clan?
3. When you choose Weaponry as a speciality, you also have to mention what range is dom and what range is sub.
4. Combat style needs to be longer, reach about two paragraphs.
5. You seem to have accidentally cut off the name part of the template for the Speed SC.
6. Add more description to your history. Talk a bit about his academy life. Talk about his current life. Etc. You can also have it in bulletins if you so desire.
7. You can't have Ninjutsu techniques if you don't possess ninjutsu as a speciality. Also there seems to be a broken code on your app in the jutsu section. |
| | | | Daimon
Posts : 13
| | Subject: Re: Kousen, Daimon (Kumo Genin) Thu 13 Mar 2014, 4:30 am | |
| Ok I edited!
I changed specialties to Tai and Nin and shall postpone weaponry till jounin. |
| | | | MsMoney
Age : 37
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| | Subject: Re: Kousen, Daimon (Kumo Genin) Sat 15 Mar 2014, 8:05 pm | |
| - Your personality and history need a bit more adding to.
- There seems to be a broken code within your jutsu (check out the Raiton section), plus some of them are a different font than the others. Not sure if that was on purpose? Also can you please fix the random messed up spacing between your jutsu?
- You also have only 11 Jutsu but can start with 15, you sure about that choice? |
| | | | Daimon
Posts : 13
| | Subject: Re: Kousen, Daimon (Kumo Genin) Sat 15 Mar 2014, 11:05 pm | |
| | Edited |
| | | | MsMoney
Age : 37
Posts : 2201
| | Subject: Re: Kousen, Daimon (Kumo Genin) Sun 16 Mar 2014, 1:10 am | |
| | 1/2 approved. |
| | | | lifeanddeath
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