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Kushgee
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 |  Subject: UCHIHA, JIRO Sat 05 Apr 2014, 7:28 am | |
|  Uchiha, JiroTHE INFO.
Name: Uchiha Jiro
Nickname: Ghost of Uchiha Jin
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Appearance: He is Five Feet Ten inches weighs a hundred and fifty seven pounds, with the trademark Uchiha jet black hair that is long flowing and stops just past his shoulders. He only ties it up when he is leaving the village, and does so by placing it into a pony tail. His eyes are sharp and he has intense deep brown eyes. They are hawk shaped and can make eve his mother squirm a little when he focuses them upon her.
He has a toned physique with a scar across his chest, that he obtained in the chuunin exams. Jiro has always said to look like his father, but after his last growth spurt, everyone including his mother have stated he is the spitting image of his father and at the age of sixteen is identical to him in every way except for the scar on his chest. He also has the Uchiha emblem tattooed on the crown of his back, right underneath his neck. He also has the Konoha symbol tattooed on his chest, to symbolize his undying love for his village.
He wears either cargo shorts, or cargo pants, a black t-shirt with the crest of the uchiha sewed in it on the back, and tan sandals, that he claims allow his toes to breath. When he is travelling out of the village, he wears an all white cloak with the uchiha crest on the back, and a hood that covers his face leaving him with an air of mystery. He wears a belt, and has a kunai pouch on his right hand side and a shuriken holster on his left hand side.
Forehead Protector: Worn on his forehead.
Personality: Jiro is quiet and reserved around those he does not know very well, that could possibly be mistaken for being stuck up. That is mainly due to the air of dignity, and the way Jiro carries himself. He realizes that by being the son of the Uchiha Clan, every single one of his actions represents that clan as a whole. However, he does have a goofy and a fun side. He is not above a good practical joke, and will kid around with those he is close to.
When it comes to his future as a shinobi Jiro is very motivated to grow stronger. Strong enough that he will be able to protect not only his clan, or Konoha, but the entire world. This noble way of thinking often gets him into situations that are hard to get out of, but he never seems to learn his lesson, and will always play the part of the hero.
He does not grow angry quickly unless someone taunts his father or his brother, or attempts to harm a weaker individual. He will go out of his way to protect someone, even if they have the means of protecting themselves, because it was a message left to him and his brother, by their father. That the way to overcome hatred is to show love to every single person in the world, that is the way to true power, not by throwing your loved ones aside.
Jiro mourns both the day his father and brother were born, but also the day they were killed, as the days hold significant meaning to him.
Clan: Uchiha
Nindō: On the verge of defeat you either grow strong enough to defeat your opponent, or you give up and die. So long as I breathe I will grow stronger and stronger with each battle.
THE NINJA.
Origin: Hi no Kuni
Affiliation: Konoha
Rank: C Rank
Specialities: Ninjutsu/Taijutsu
Elemental Affinities: Katon/Fuuton
Combat Style: Jiro prefers to battle with a mix of Ninjutsu and Taijutsu, using the ninjutsu to set up deadly combinations with taijutsu. Jiro never rushes in battle, preferring to take his time and try and end things with as little attention drawn to the situation, as well as to prevent damage to the people and the area around them. He uses his own superior speed, chakra reserves, and reflexes in battle, preferring to outlast his opponent.
He has no preference in range, learning techniques to cover a multitude of ranges. This does not mean, he is as proficient at long range techniques, as he is at close and mid ranged techniques, and he does have a tendency to stay within a ten meter range of an opponent. Jiro also believes that a shinobi should be well versed in all areas of combat, not just ninjutsu and taijutsu and as a result he has basic knowledge in most fields, but for the most part sticks with the two, as they are the most commonly used in the Shinobi world.
He is a born strategist and will turn strengths into weakness, and will exploit any false move an opponent makes when in battle. This is not only due to the fact, he does not enjoy battling, but also due to his own personal philosophy of non lethal means of combat. He never seeks to kill from the beginning, and only resorts to using fatal methods when the situation calls for it, and nothing else.
Special Characteristics:
- Combat Based:
Name: Increased Chakra Capacity
Rank: C
Type: Chakra Based
Prerequisites: -
Training: A 600 word training is required to gain this special characteristic
Restrictions: -
Description: Through extensive meditation and physical training the ninja's chakra capacity increases by 20CP.
- Social Based:
Name: Chakra Aura
Rank: C
Type: Social Based
Prerequisites: -
Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic.
Description: Many people have vibrant, stunning personalities. Others can be colder than a Yuki's heart. Whatever the case, these people have personalities of such extremes, it even influences their chakra. While giving it no particularly special features, morbid individuals may find their chakra to carry a blackened tinge, carefree and happy ones may be surprised to find they emit a yellow glow, and those who are quick to anger might find a red surprise reminiscent of a Bijuu host.
Color:Red, Orange, and Yellow. The colors of fire, all swarming around him in a flickering motion, much like a fire.
THE BACKGROUND.
History: Jiro was the second son born to Uchiha Jin and Akira Yuki. On the day of his birth, only moments before he was born a large bird, similar in color to the legendary phoenix flew over Konoha towards a rainbow, a sign his parents took that he would change the world. His mother was a wedding planner, who didn't agree with the shinobi lifestyle, while his father was known as the dragon of the Uchiha before being killed on a mission when Jiro was only three years old.
The result was his mother being forced to work full-time in an attempt to support her children, leaving them with relatives while she did so. Her dislike of Shinobi growing into a full-born hatred of anything associated with the lifestyle. While she worked to support them Both Jiro and his older brother were watched over by aunts and uncles of the Uchiha side of their family. These family members knew that to carry the Uchiha name, especially as the sons of Uchiha Jin, they would be required to know how to defend themselves, and to protect the ones they loved.
So as a result from the age of six both of them began training secretly behind their mother's back. At the age of eight, his brother joined the academy and graduated in less than two years, however he was killed on his first C-ranked mission away from the village. Jiro was devastated by the news, and didn't leave his room for weeks at a time for an entire year. During this years time, he vowed he would grow stronger so he would be able to protect everybody in the world.
This also caused his mother to become much more stricter on Jiro, who ran away to stay with his uncle at the age of nine before joining the academy. He graduated and returned to tell his mother he would grow stronger where his brother and father had both perished, he promised his mother that he would become the greatest shinobi ever to live, and won't die until he has done so. Much how the phoenix rises from the flames to continue to live, he said he would rise from defeat stronger each time.
In the two years since he graduated, he was completed over twenty D Ranked Missions, and over twelve C ranked missions, but failed the Chuunin exams two times, both times in the second exam due to his teammates falling behind and not finishing in time. He grew into the spitting image of his father and has been called the Ghost of Uchiha Jin, a name he uses when travelling into foreign lands. However, he prefers to be known as Pheonix no Uchiha, or the Pheonix of the Uchiha, a title that boasts upon the fact a phoenix flew over Konoha to welcome him to the world, and is the basis for his Nindo.
Roleplay Sample: He stood about twenty meters from the enemy chuunin. The two of them were breathing heavily, their bodies rising and falling with each breath and Jiro's hawk like eyes were fixated on him, scanning his body, waiting for any signs of movement. He had come to far, done to much, and he had lost both of his teammates, to let a lonesome chuunin get in his way. There was no way he would let that happen, especially when the chuunin was trembling with fear. "Why are you here? You are trespassing on Kumogakure's territory, if you do not answer me I will be forced to come at you with the intent to kill."
"I am the ghost of Uchiha Jin, I believe Kumo was responsible for my death yes? However, I am not here for revenge, so you have nothing to worry about." Jiro said as he took a step forward before he extended his hand to the chuunin, and spoke softly. "I've come to collect the scroll that you and your platoon were hired to guard. It is the property of Konohagakure. It was stolen by Kumo ninja, and we were told to retrieve it any means." Jiro said as he stopped walking about about five meters from the chuunin and spoke again. "I have already lost my two teammates on this mission, and it has come down to just me and you." He stated and the chuunin threw kunai at him, and Jiro took out his own kunai and blocked them before he threw his kunai and dashed forward behind it, doing hand seals as he did so.
The chuunin ducked under the kunai and started his own hand seals. Jiro opened his mouth and exhaled a fireball and the chuunin countered with a ball of compressed water, the two attacks hit each other and exploded in a veil of steam. Jiro continued to run through the steam before he crouched underneath the chuunin and kicked him into the air before he jumped above him, and rotated sending a powerful kick to the Chuunin's torso, knocking him into the earth with a sickening thud and Jiro landed before he walked over to search the Chuunin's body, before seeing it was only a log. "Kwarimi Jutsu? You used it quickly, I'll give you your props, but you still won't be able to defeat me."
"Young Uchiha, I see that you are quite skilled in Katon and Taijutsu, however you are still years away from being able to stand up to a Chuunin of Kumogakure." Jiro scoffed and did a series of hand seals, and spit out a gas that spread throughout the area and Jiro jumped back several times before he was no longer in the mist of gas. The chuunin laughed. "You think a poisonous gas will be enough to defeat me? I am immune to all known poisons."
"You're mistaken." Jiro stated and he did three hand seals before he sent out a fireball, that when it came into contact with the gas, ignited it and the entire area went up in flames, the Chuunin caught within was burned to a crisp. Jiro searched the Chuunin's body for the scroll, finding it in a pocket that was apparently fireproof, and headed back to Konoha. The mission being completed as directed, but he was worried he had taken it to another level by setting part of the forest on fire. Either way, he would have to hurry back before someone made their way to the scene.
THE ARSENAL.
- Academy Jutsu:
Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type: Genjutsu
Range: N/A
Medium: Optical
Element: N/A
Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others.
Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Element: N/A
Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread.
Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand.
Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu.
Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Chozou no Jutsu • Storage Technique
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed.
Chakra Cost: 1 to seal; 1 to unseal.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: NA
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
- Kekkai Genkai:
Name: Sharingan Activated: One Tomoe
Rank: -
Type: Bloodline - Doujutsu
Accessible To: C-Ranked Uchiha
Description: The One-Tomoe version of the Sharigan is accessible to young Uchiha who skills have deemed them C-Ranked in power and skill. Like all versions of the Sharingan, the user is able to see the flow of chakra whether it be internal or external. Such skills derived from his ability include being able to identify clones, detecting chakra barriers and genjutsu, and even telling if someone is placed under a genjutsu by detecting chakra irregularities. Being the beginner form of the Sharingan, the One-Tomoe form grants the user the basic skill of the Sharingan which is being able to grant its wielders incredible levels of perception and clarity. In a more simplistic explanation, the user's vision is now able to see perceive things in slow motion. From flying weapons, to enemy movements, everything is slowed to a speed readable of that of the user. However, even though the user may be able to see an attack or know it is coming, their body may not have time to react.
Chakra Cost: 2CP per Post
- Ninjutsu:
Name: Endan - Fireball
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m – 10m)
Element: Katon (Fire)
Description: Katon • Endan is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. After doing the necessary hand seals, the ninja draws chakra to their lungs before swiftly exhaling it, allowing them to blow a jet of fire from their mouth. Depending on the rank at which it is performed, Endan ranges in size and heat. Starting at a moderate level of heat and a reach of up to 3m, at D rank, and increasing in temperature to an intense heat and up to a 10m reach, when performed at A rank.
Chakra Cost: D: 4 (1 per post), C: 5 (2 per post), B: 12 (3 per post), A: 23 (5 per post)
Name: Goukakyuu no Jutsu - Great Fireball Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Katon (Fire)
Description: Katon • Goukakyuu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. The ninja does the necessary hand seals, draws chakra from their mouth into their chest and them immediately exhales it. They then blow a stream of fire which erupts into a large sphere of flames. To better manage the flames the ninja will bring their hand to their mouth to control it.
Chakra Cost: 5 (2 per post
Name: Ryuuka no Jutsu - Dragon Fire Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: Katon (Fire)
Description: The user breathes fire along a cord or any other type of long object, which rushes forward in straight line catching the enemy on fire. The flames are meant to target, and assault the enemy's upper body just like a projectile weapon.
Chakra Cost: 5
Name: Kasumi Enbu no Jutsu - Mist Waltz Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: Katon (Fire)
Description: After performing the necessary hand seals, the user is able to create and blow a flammable gas from their lungs. Once it comes in contact with fire or sparks, the gas ignites into a large fireball.
Chakra Cost: 8
- Taijutsu:
Name: Konoha Reppuu - Leaf Violent Wind
Rank: D
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: The move here is a simple rear spinning low kick, but a strong enough user can send a large adult flying as if they weighed nothing. The goal is to throw the enemy off balance, and deal damage to the lower half of their body.
Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Konoha Senpuu - Leaf Whirlwind
Rank: D
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A taijutsu where one launches a succession of high kicks and low kicks. Firstly, the opponent's evasion margin is restrained upon seeing the high kick, thus augmenting the chances for the low kick to hit the mark.
Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Konoha Kage Buyou - Leaf Shadow Dance
Rank: D
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: Konoha Kage Buyou is a Taijutsu technique that is used to position a ninja's opponent into a vulnerable aerial position. The ninja will first quickly appear below their opponent, then with a switch upper kick they will launch their target into the air. The ninja will then jump into the air to "shadow" the target with the target's back to their chest. This move is used before preforming "Omote Renge - Front Lotus" or "Shishi Rendan - Lion Combo".
Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Konoha Dai Senpuu - Leaf Great Whirlwind
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A series of kicking attacks, starting from a low kick and linking into a middle kick and high kick then finishing off with a heel drop. As the rotation speed picks up the user gains buoyancy, which they use to shift into gradually higher attacks.
Chakra Cost: 5
Name: Konoha Shoufuu - Leaf Rising Wind
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: This jutsu uses the entire body as a spring by amassing power in the legs before kicking upwards. Because the power of the kick from the ground is instantly converted into a blow, the enemy hit with this attack will be launched high into the sky.
Chakra Cost: 5
Name: Shishi Rendan - Lion Combo
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: The user first uses the "Konoha Kage Buyou - Leaf Shadow Dance" to manuever his/her opponent in a vulnerable aerial position. While shadowing his/her opponent, the user will attempt to strike them from a vulnerable angle. If he/she is unable to make a clean strike, he/she will strike anyway as a feint, to draw his/her target's attention and defense to one area. The user can then strike the undefended area and begin knocking them downwards towards the ground. As the enemy falls back to the earth, the user will deftly rotate his/her body around to deliver a full force kick to their chest.
Chakra Cost: 7
- Village Jutsu:
Name: Gōruden Ikari no Ha - Golden Leaves of Fury
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0 - 5m), Med (5 - 10m)
Element: Katon
Description: Gōruden Ikari no Ha is a ninjutsu technique utilizing the fire element. After having the Illuminating Halo active the user is able to perform the sequence attack in case of danger arising. In order to do so, the golden oak tree leaf made up of fire, will rise up from the centre of the halo and begin to launch seven copies of itself towards the users opponent. After preforming the tiger seal, one can direct the leaves by a simple point of the finger. If hit, the target will be met with minor burns on the skin and possibly have their clothes set alight. Once the technique has been performed, the golden leaf will settle back into the centre of the halo where it must recharge for two posts.
Chakra Cost: 5 + 2 for recharge
Name: Shōmei Heirō - Illuminating Halo
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0 - 5m), Med (5 - 10m)
Element: Katon
Description: Shōmei Heirō is a ninjutsu technique utilizing the fire element. After performing the required handseals, the user is able to call forth a ring of fire above their head. This halo - like ring has the same circumference as the users head and is also able to light up a ten metre radius around the user. It's often called a golden ring, due to the perfect ring having golden - yellow flames occupying it. At the centre of the ring an oak tree leaf made of fire is found, it's used for a sequence attack.
Chakra Cost: 7
Name: Chimei-teki Fera - Fatal Blow
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m)
Element: -
Description: Chimei-teki Fera is a taijutsu technique. After charging a small amount of chakra towards the dominant leg, the user will try to use their speed and strength so that they can perform a sideways kick to the opponents ribcage. In order for direct contact to be made the shin, where most of the chakra is stored, will hit the centre of the ribcage forcing a shock wave of pain to make it's way across the body. If the technique is performed correctly, they will be able to force their opponent to the ground and possibly even stop them from being able to stand back up.
Chakra Cost: 7
FACE CLAIM.
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Source: Google
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|   | | Søren
Posts : 1187
| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Sat 05 Apr 2014, 12:48 pm | |
| I am writing this because it says that it is completed, however in future please could you make a post saying that it is finished as well.
- Firstly I will open up by asking if you have permission to make an Uchiha from an Admin?
- At the top of your app you say that your name is Uchiha Jin, then underneath your picture and in your name slot you say it is Uchiha Jiro. Please could you correct each one of these.
- It is customary to give an explanation of how you got your nicknames.
- Since this is a Genin application you should be aiming for at least 450 words on your appearance and personality, if not more.
- In your clan section please can you provide a link to the Uchiha clan.
- Your origin should be the country, not the village. In your case it should be Hi no Kuni, since he comes from the Fire Country (I am assuming).
- You can have more than one elemental affinity, unless you only wanted one.
- Combat styles should be at least 250 words.
- Are you sure you do not want Special Characteristics? Or do you just not know what they are? Either way I would recommend getting them, they can be found here.
- In your history you write 'Hitsuki Yuki and Uchiha Jin'. Firstly the name Hitsuki Yuki, should be the other way around. Secondly, this brings me to my second point about your name. Uchiha Jin is the name on your app, please fix this, unless your character is Uchiha Jin the second.
- "He graduated and returned to tell his mother he would grow stronger on the verge of death, not give in and perish as his father and brother had done." I really do not understand this sentence, it might just be me being stupid but is it saying that he is on the verge of death? Please can you change it so this is ore clear.
- With that I feel that your entire history should be bumped up to 450 words, as well as your Roleplay sample.
- You do not have the Academy jutsu, they can be found here.
- There is broken code on the jutsu 'leaf violent wind'.
- On top of that your entire jutsu section is a mess. You should have the ninjutsu and the taijutsu separated, not all mashed together.
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| | | | Kushgee
Age : 29
Posts : 13
| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Sat 05 Apr 2014, 10:01 pm | |
| | Fixed |
| | | | Søren
Posts : 1187
| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Sat 05 Apr 2014, 11:33 pm | |
| - Satan wrote:
- Firstly I will open up by asking if you have permission to make an Uchiha from an Admin?
- It is customary to give an explanation of how you got your nicknames.
- Since this is a Genin application you should be aiming for at least 450 words on your appearance and personality, if not more.
- In your clan section please can you provide a link to the Uchiha clan.
- You can have more than one elemental affinity, unless you only wanted one.
- Combat styles should be at least 250 words.
- "He graduated and returned to tell his mother he would grow stronger on the verge of death, not give in and perish as his father and brother had done." I really do not understand this sentence, it might just be me being stupid but is it saying that he is on the verge of death? Please can you change it so this is ore clear.
- There is broken code on the jutsu 'leaf violent wind'.
- "Only moments before he was born a phoenix flew over Konoha towards a rainbow". We don't have phoenixes on this site.
- You have a number of spelling errors throughout your app.
- "He graduated and returned to tell his mother he would grow stronger on the verge of death" explain this to me, is he the one on the verge of death?
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| | | | Kushgee
Age : 29
Posts : 13
| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Sat 12 Apr 2014, 6:32 pm | |
| | Fixed, still waiting on Uchiha Approval However. |
| | | | Søren
Posts : 1187
| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Sat 12 Apr 2014, 6:43 pm | |
| - Satan wrote:
- Satan wrote:
- It is customary to give an explanation of how you got your nicknames.
- In your clan section please can you provide a link to the Uchiha clan.
- You can have more than one elemental affinity, unless you only wanted one.
- Combat styles should be at least 250 words.
- There is broken code on the jutsu 'leaf violent wind'.
I am sorry I didn't make it clear, can you please do a minimum of 250 words for both appearance and personality. Sorry, I read back what I said before and it was confusing. |
| | | | Kushgee
Age : 29
Posts : 13
| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Sat 12 Apr 2014, 6:55 pm | |
| | Hopefully? |
| | | | Kushgee
Age : 29
Posts : 13
| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Tue 15 Apr 2014, 2:47 am | |
| | bump |
| | | | MsMoney
Age : 37
Posts : 2201
| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Sat 26 Apr 2014, 11:07 pm | |
| | Is this still waiting for Uchiha approval? |
| | | | Kushgee
Age : 29
Posts : 13
| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Mon 12 May 2014, 1:17 am | |
| | Yes |
| | | | lifeanddeath
Age : 31
Posts : 1490
| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Fri 18 Jul 2014, 12:15 am | |
| Permission given for Uchiha.
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| | | | Anna
Age : 31
Posts : 1900
| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Fri 18 Jul 2014, 12:46 am | |
| Congratulations on being approved for Uchiha! There's a few things that still need fixed or could be added to this application before approval.
- Genin are allowed 15 start jutsu (not counting Academy Jutsu), you currently have 14. You are allowed to add 1 more jutsu if you want. This jutsu can be Fuuton jutsu too; you don't have to start with strictly Katon based jutsu.
- You are allowed to have a Genin Kit for free; as equipment. Bare in mind, you cannot start off with a Custom Kit and you may only start with one kit. If you want to make a custom kit later, you will have to pay for it. Also, If you do not choose to select a kit now then you will have to purchase any kits after approval. Here's the link to the kit page: Here.
- You may also have C-rank and below Equipment if you'd like. Here's the link to Open Equipment: Here. If you select any weapons, they must be D-rank and below.
- Side Note: A kit and any equipment, if you want any, go under the "Arsenal" section.
- "a title that boasts upon the fact a phoenix flew over Konoha to welcome him to the world," <- Fix this statement in your history please. We do not have phoenix's here. Phoenix looking bird could work though.
- Why is he known as the Ghost of Uchiha Jin? Is it because he is following in his father's footsteps? Please explain this more in your history.
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| | Subject: Re: UCHIHA, JIRO Wed 22 Oct 2014, 5:13 am | |
| Is this application still being worked on? |
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