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Tsuya Tayama
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 |  Subject: Tsuya, Tayama Tue 22 Jul 2014, 5:02 am | |
|  Tsuya, Tayama.THE INFO.
Name: Tsuya, Tayama
Nickname: Tity
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Appearance: Tayama, or Tity for short, has a height of 5 feet and 7 inches, and weighs around 120 pounds. Tayama may not seem strong, but under the clothing he wears he is fairly muscular, and tries to keep healthy. He has a smooth complexion, with a slight tan going on. Tity has cyan colored eyes, with dark blue sparked hair that flows backwards. Besides the normal Kirigakure shinobi uniform, Tayama likes to wear a variety of things. For example, the Kessho Clan's green wool collar with a fishnet shirt having the clan symbol on the back. The Kirigakure uniform, which is a basic black coverup with a light purple chain armor typed thingy, it's just to plain for his tastes. On a day home, or a simple day off, he would wear a basic shirt with shorts. If it was a day off, his attire would be kind of different though. It wouldn't be shocking to imagine him in a boxers with no shirt on, due to not having to work for the day. Accessory-wise, Tayama would wear some fancy hats, goggles, a chain or a necklace. Maybe even a bracelet to symbolize the relationship he has with someone special to him, if he felt like it.
On some occasions, Tayama may wear certain clothing dependent on his mood at that given moment. For example, when he is happy he may just wear a yellow t-shirt since it resembles the brightness of the sun, as if the sun itself were smiling. If he were feeling gloomy or sad, he would probably wear a blue t-shirt. Because the color blue symbolizes the rain, and how it always makes the sky seem blurry and messed up.
Tayama has very short toenails that he cuts occasionally since they can became very sharp. Also with his casual clothing he may wear his headband in a different position, for example his arm. On a hot days out, he would wear slippers or something similar to sandals that would allow his toes to get some rest. Rather than spending so much money on buying other clothing, Tity likes to reuse the clothing that still fits him. Located on his chest, he has a huge scar from his training's as a younger kid when he had used to fight wild animals, like bears. The scar resembles a equal sign with two slashes vertically going down through it.
Forehead Protector: Traditional forehead style
Personality: Tity is a very reasonable and shy guy around girls. He doesn't try to get himself involved in things he doesn't feel like is any of his business. Through past events, he doesn't really like to talk about his family members. It would make him feel uncomfortable. Tity can be very nice and useful at times of need to others, but he can also be mean. He may be mean when someone bothers him while he is doing something important, or even when he is accused of something he had never committed. Of course being the gentle young man he is, Tayama doesn't like it when he is mean to others or others to him. He likes to push himself to the limit, so he could see how much he progressed with his shinobi skills from the day before.
Getting stronger is a regular routine for him, because Tity wants to protect everyone and everything. Violence is something he doesn't like using, because not everything can be solved with violence, but he isn't afraid to use it when he needs too. He also likes drawing random things on a sketch pad, or something similar. Drawing is not only fun, but can be relaxing once someone really uses their imagination. Tity may suck at drawing, but he doesn't care. In his mind, it is like he is drawing the most awesome medieval castle filled with knights, a king, and a queen. Though, there are certain things he just can't tolerate with the short life he is living. For example, Tayama dislikes it when there are constant robberies that happen in the different nations, and killing others isn't any better. Tity doesn't want to kill anybody, because it hurts him more than it may hurt them. But if he is forced to kill someone, that's just the way it has to be sometimes. He likes to sometimes think in battles, and form a plan to receive a quick and easy victory. But then other times, he may be rash about his choices and get himself in a pickle.
Clan: Kessho clan
Nindō: I will always get stronger. Never will I run like a coward. I will protect everything and anyone with my life, that is my Nindō! My ninja way!
THE NINJA.
Origin: Mizu no Kuni / Water Country
Affiliation: Kirigakure
Rank: C-rank
Specialities: Ninjutsu & Weaponry(Primary: Close; Secondary: Long)
Elemental Affinities: Earth & Lightning > Shōton
Combat Style: Tity is a very odd fighter at times, but knows how to pick his battles. He is very serious, and tries to think of the best solution to quickly overcome the battle, and using his disadvantages as an advantage to control the battlefield. Range wise, he prefers to get close in on the enemy to preform serious damage, and sooner or later end up finishing it with a final blow. Every time he attacks an opponent, he make sure that there is a reason for him doing so, maybe even to lure the enemy into a trap. Though at times he can be reckless, and the enemy could figure out his plot before he even finishes coming up with it, leaving him in a predicament. That's why he can't afford to make mistakes most of the time, and may even rely on luck to help guide him through. When Tayama is forced back with force, thus having him to go defensive, he makes sure to keep his distance, and let's the enemy take control of the battle, or at least that is what he wants them to think until he figures out a plan.
He has many favorite techniques and strategies that he likes to use in battle, that better help him receive the victory. For example, he could set up a trap underground, and using the Double Suicide Decapitation Technique immobilize the enemy in said trap to cause an explosion, if there were explosive tags already there of course. Tayama may even use the cheap old tricks he used as a child to get the advantage of the battle, like messing with the opponents head or getting them angry. Honestly, it doesn't matter what you do when you are trying to win a battle, as long as you win you will feel awesome.
Special Characteristics: - Spoiler:
Name: One-Handed Seals Rank: C Type: Physical Prerequisites: - Training: A 600 word training is required to gain this special characteristic. Restrictions: This cannot be used as a way to perform two jutsu at the same time.Description: the ninja discovers a unique talent which allows them to mix chakra by performing seals with only one hand. With an ability such as this the ninja can fight while also performing jutsu, delivering surprise attacks to their enemies. Since those who can perform one-handed seals are naturally good at what their talents, they are even capable of performing hand seals behind themselves, leaving the enemy oblivious to the ninja's next attack. Name: Friends in All Places Rank: C Type: Social Based Prerequisites: - Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic. Description: After many travels, the ninja has gained s scattering of allies that wish to ensure safety to the user through either kinship or a repaying favor. Having these types of connections in the villages means the user always has some sort of home and can easily take refuge. Restrictions:
- Each country must be visited at least once IC to merit having a friend in such a place.
- Each contact must strictly be a civilian NPC, who has no particular knowledge about ninja activities, or any particular ninja. The only services they can offer are a safe haven to rest one's head.
THE BACKGROUND.
History: - Young age Arc:
There was once a shy young boy by the name of Tsuya, Tayama. Tayama was a descendant of the Kessho Clan, that utilized their skills using the Crystal Release, a rare and specialized field of elemental ninjutsu. He didn't take in the clan's respective name, but instead his mothers last name for unknown reasons. Tayama didn't know how to control or use the Crystal Release at the time, and his other ninja skills weren't all that great. The kids from the Ninja Academy would make fun of him, mainly because he had no knowledge whatsoever about being a ninja. He had been failing his classes, and slacking the entire time because he didn't believe in himself. The kids from the Ninja Academy on the other hand, were spoiled rich kids that didn't care about other peoples feelings. This had made Tayama mad, but he knew violence wasn't the answer to his problems. He tried resorting to a peaceful conversation, and said please leave me alone, I do not wish to fight you. But of course the spoiler rich kids didn't care about his personal opinion. They had found it fun to bully a useless kid, when he had done nothing to them. Tayama was tired of this punishment he was receiving, and wanted to put a stop to it. He had the temerity to speak up, and told the instructors of the Ninja Academy about what was going on in the glass rooms. But the instructors thought it was all a lie, and didn't seem like they really cared. Maybe because they were payed to keep quiet, and not to speak bad about the rich spoiled kids. It all made sense to Tayama, the reason why the instructors acted the way they did. It came to him that this whole system was insane. The instructors literally made sure that he wouldn't speak about this anymore, they would threaten him, beat him, and do all sorts of rash things. But honestly, he didn't care about their concern, only for his. They weren't the ones getting bullied, he was. Why couldn't the instructors understand what Tayama had been going through? Because they were afraid of what the rich spoiled kids parent's would say.
So one day, Tayama came up with a plan on how to get his revenge on the spoiled rich kids at the Ninja Academy. There was a girl by the name of Yasi Rokurona. Even though she was rich, she wasn't spoiler and she didn't approve the things that the other rich kids were doing. Tayama thought that she would be a great asset towards his plan, and filled her in on the whole thing. Later that day, they both had met up at the Ninja Academy once more, to finalize their ideas and thoughts on Codename RSKAPH. Which really stood for Rich Spoiled Kids Are Poopy Heads. Of course at there current age, which was around 6 or 7, they lacked creativity when it came to name calling. It was currently recess time, in the middle of the afternoon. It had been the time when all the kids normally got to practice their ninja skills, talk, play, etc. All the rich spoiled kids were always in a group, finding different targets to bully. Just looking at them had pissed of Yasi, but Tayama was able to control his anger. He didn't want to use violence, but to simply show them a lesson through revenge.
The plan was pretty simple. Since Yasi was a puppet user, and was very good at chakra control and using string, Tayama had thought that he would challenge the spoiled rich kids to a shuirken battle. The rules were simple, whoever could throw the most shuriken's in a perfect line to the top of the tree won. Tayama was horrible at throwing shuriken's, so that was when Yasi stepped in. She would use her string that had appeared nearly invisible because of her chakra control, and line all the shuriken's that Tayama had thrown in a perfect line. This was all to prove that the rich spoiled kids were not the best, and they they could be beaten at their own game. The rich spoiled kids had immediately suspected that they had been up to something, and moved in. Tayama had been a little scared, since their shadows were overwhelming. While Yasi on the other hand was just about ready to shove her fist in their faces. Tayama had proposed the whole shuriken battle to the rich spoiled kids, and happily they accepted. It was all still a little fishy, for them to accept the challenge so easily, but whatever. They had gone first, throwing 1 shuriken directly at the tree from a good distance. It was truly amazing that they were able to pull it off so easily. But now it was Tayama's turn, and he was panicking. With a swift of his arm, the shuriken started to move, for a short distance though. Slowly it started to go down, until Yasi used her string to bring it back on her path, thus hitting the rich spoiled kids shuriken, knocking it down with his as a replacement. It isn't exactly what he planned, but it looked like the original plan had changed. The rich spoiled kids were boiling with anger, and di the unthinkable at that very moment. While Tayama had his eyes closed, crying in happiness, the rich spoiled kids had planned to throw their shurikens at him. Luckily, Yasi saw through their plan, and immediately jumped in front of him, getting hit by all the shurikens, having a horrible death.
A few weaks had passed by, and Tayama was suffering something worst than death. Guilt, anger, hatred, he had been feeling emotions he had never felt before and didn't know how to go about it. He didn't want to seek vengeance on the rich spoiled kids, but a part of him literally wanted to kill them. He started to think back, way back when his mother had been alive. What would she had said? Tayama started to calm down on the though, and from that day started to become more confident in himself. He had a certain goal he had to achieve, that he could only do by himself. Tayama had started studying harder, working his body, and becoming a skillful ninja that he always wanted to be.
- Genin Arc:
A few years have passed by, Tayama now currently at the age of 15. It's been a long time since he spoke about that accident that had happened long ago, but he uses the experience he faced as his motivation. Through all those years though, he has progressed tremendously with his ninja skills, and took the Genin exam to prove his strength. He had passed with flying colors, but this was just the beginning of what he would have to go through.
Roleplay Sample: It was a quiet and frightening night, in the middle of no where. There was nothing but the sound of the wind, banging the branches of the trees on the window frame. Tayama was scared out of his mind, since he was all alone with no one to protect him. Even though he had passed the Genin Exam, and grew stronger in strength, there was still a part of him that was afraid of the dark. Not only that, but the wind had sounded like an angry monster trying to eat him.
Tayama literally pissed his pants from the experience, because he never expected the night to go like this. In the morning there was the sun, clouds, birds, animals, but in the night time it all seemed like dark figures with scary faces. He had wished he was dreaming, but this dream was so real that he couldn't take it. Tayama got up from the corner he had been stuck to for the last hour and a half. He heard the sounds of the doors from downstairs being opened and closer, and he also heard the sound of the kitchen cabinets slamming against each other.
Maybe the wind had gotten inside the house, but that would mean a window must have been left open. The scary part about it was that Tayama was sure he didn't leave any windows opened. With a flashlight in his hand as his light source and weapon, he tip-toed downstairs. He was extra careful not to make too much noise once coming down the stairs, or else he would scare himself to death. He saw a small shadow nimble across the floor, instantly disappearing with the sound of the wind. Things were getting more weird every second. As soon as Tayama had set foot on the floor, fully reaching the downstairs portion of the house, he froze. He took a second to think clearly on what he was about to do, then sighed to himself. Entering the kitchen, he tapped pots, pans, etc to himself as armor. Tayama had felt better prepared this way. With a glimpse of his eye, he noticed the shadow again, and swung the flashlight at it. Luckily he hit it, and turned on the lights to see what it was. He noticed his neighbors cat with a flashlight marking on it's left rib cage, 'meowing' in pain. The best way to handle this situation, was of course to put the cat in a bag, put the bag in a present box, and then send it back to it's owner. On the card it would say something like, 'I got you a brand new cat' because after that flashlight hit, it never looked the same. 
THE ARSENAL.
Academy jutsu
- Spoiler:
Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type: Genjutsu
Range: N/A
Medium: Optical
Element: N/A
Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others.
Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Element: N/A
Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread.
Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand.
Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu.
Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Chozou no Jutsu • Storage Technique
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed.
Chakra Cost: 1 to seal; 1 to unseal.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: NA
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Weps
- Spoiler:
Name: Katana
Rank: C
Type: Close Range - Long Blade
Quantity: 1
Description: Commonly refereed to as a 'Samurai sword', the katana is characterized by its distinctive appearance. It has a curved, slender, single edged blade up to three feet in length, circular or squared guard, and long grip to accommodate two hands. As such, it has become renowned for its sharpness and cutting ability.
Earth
- Spoiler:
Name: Shinjuu Zanshu no Jutsu - Double Suicide Decapitation Technique Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: Doton • Shinjuu Zanshu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. The ninja will travel through the ground to appear below their target. They will then surprise their target by then pulling them into the ground. Once in the ground their target is thus immobilized. Chakra Cost: 4 Name: Doro Gaeshi - Mud Overturn Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: Doton • Doro Gaeshi is a defensive Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. After striking the ground with their hands, a large wall of earth will rise into place as defense. The defense is not perfect though, a hard or drilling impact can puncture the wall. Name: Gansetsukon - Rock Spear Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: This jutsu allows the user to take a small chunk of rock and turn it into the shape of a staff. The user can then use it as a weapon or throw it at their opponent. Because it is made of thin stone, it is very brittle. Name: Retsudo Tenshou - Revolving Split Earth Palm Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: Doton • Retsudo Tenshou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. This technique allows the ninja to control nearby stone and rock. When the ninja forms the needed handseals and slams their palm to the ground, surrounding rock will begin to churn and twist up crushing all those trapped within it. Name: Doton Bunshin no Jutsu - Earth Clone Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m) Element: Doton Description: Doton Bunshin no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that utilizes the earth to create a Bunshin clone. Unlike a normal Bunshin, the Doton Bunshin has the ability to interact more with the environment due to it having physical substance. This allows the clone to carry out limited attacks on its target, but none utilizing chakra. The range of the clone is limited however, it can travel no further than 10 meters from the original body. If the Doton Bunshin is injured, the clone will revert into rock that crumbles to the ground. Chakra Cost: 7 (Per clone) Restrictions:
- No weapons, armor, or equipment can be replicated to have above C-rank quality.
- Replicated explosive notes, explosive kunai, explosive senbon, and exploding pouches are inert and cannot be set off.
Name: Doryuusou - Earthen Rising Spears Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: This technique lets the user condense mud or stone, from the ground, and shape them into spikes that will protrude from the ground in order to skewer the target. The spikes are brittle, and can be broken with a strong blow or tough defense. Chakra Cost: 7
Lightning
- Spoiler:
Name: Lightning Release: Electromagnetic Murder
Rank: C-A
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: Raiton (Lightning)
Description: This technique allows the user to create a wave of electricity from their hands. The user can vary its power from a small surge to shock an opponent to a powerful stream of lightning capable of ripping through solid rock.
Chakra Cost: C (5), B (10), A (20)
Kirigakure specific
- Spoiler:
Name: Kirigakure no Jutsu - Hidden Mist Technique
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0 - 5m), Med (5 - 10m)
Element: -
Village: Kirigakure
Description: This jutsu is developed and trained within Kirigakure as a village specific jutsu. After forming the needed hand seal, the user will place their hand over their head and cause a large amount of mist to gather. This mist is extremely difficult to see through from someone not of Kirigakure, who are used to looking through heavy mists, and are more able to do combat while within said mist. The jutsu involves kneading chakra into the mist, allowing the user to create extremely thick or thin levels of mist. Those with doujutsu or chakra sensing techniques are also able to see through this thick mist but without any aid, then you'll be blind within the mist. A C-Rank Fuuton Jutsu can dispel the mists.
Chakra Cost: 4 (2CP)
Name: Ninpou; Kiri Suramu - Mist Slam
Rank: C
Type: Weaponry
Element: --
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m), Mid (5m~10m), Far (10m+)
Village: Kirigakure
Description: This jutsu is developed and trained within Kirigakure as a village specific jutsu. This jutsu requires no hand seals. After activation, the user will rush towards the target and make a giant swing with massive power in order to try and cleave them in half. This swing will be powerful enough to crush rock, depending on the size and momentum of the sword. Instead of using hand seals, the user will gather chakra within their arms before use.
Chakra Cost: 6
Non-elemental
- Spoiler:
Name: Chakra Kyuuin Jutsu - Chakra Absorption Technique
Rank: C-S
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: After activitating the technique, the user's hand will glow with chakra. When he or she touches his or her palm on his or her opponents body, the user can withdraw the physical and spiritual energy out of them. By reducing their chakra, it greatly increases the user’s advantage over his or her opponent.
Chakra Cost:
Costs the User: C (5) | Takes From Target: D (4)
Costs the User: B (10) | Takes From Target: C (9)
Costs the User: A (20) | Takes From Target: B (15)
Costs the User: S (35) | Takes From Target: A (25)
Kessho clan
- Spoiler:
Name: Suishō Tō | Jade Crystal Blade
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Shōton (Crystal Release)
Description: Suishō Tō is a technique used by the members of the Kessho clan. With this technique the user can quickly form a blade made of crystal on their arm, and use it in a manner reminiscent of a Tantō. Blades can be formed on both arms if needed, though this consumes an additional 3CP.
Chakra Cost: 3CP
Name: Kesshō no Yoroi | Crystal Armour
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: Shōton (Crystal Release)
Description: Kesshō no Yoroi is a technique used by the members of the Kessho clan. This technique allows the Kesho member to cover their skin with a thin sheet of crystal, protecting themselves from blunt attacks. This armour can also aid the member to perform stronger physical attacks, but will break when struck by a decent C-rank technique.
Name: Kesshō toge o Seichō Sa Seru | Growing Crystal Thorn
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Shōton (Crystal Release)
Description: Kesshō toge o Seichō Sa Seru is a technique used by the members of the Kessho clan. The user creates growing thorn-like crystals from the ground that continuously grow towards the opponent's direction.
Chakra Cost: 5CP (Additional 2CP Per Post)
Name: Suishō Rō | Jade Crystal Prison
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Shōton (Crystal Release)
Description: Suishō Rō is a technique used by the members of the Kessho clan. The user summons crystalizes the space around a target completely encase a single target in crystal. If a person was so unlucky to be encased in the crystal then they will have quite a hard time breaking free from it, if the crystal itself was broken and a person was encased within it, then that segment of crystal would be destroyed allowing the victim to have free movement where they were once trapped.
Chakra Cost: 8CP
Name: Omiwatari | The God's Crossing
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Shōton (Crystal Release)
Description: Omiwatari is a technique used by the members of the Kessho clan. The user places their hand on a surface, creating a long stream of sharp crystals to bind and pierce a target.
Chakra Cost: 8CP
Genin kit
- Spoiler:
Name: Genin Kit
Rank: C
Quantity: 1
Contents: 6 Kunai [6], 10 Shuriken [5], 9 Senbon [3], 10 Makibishi [2], 4 Exploding Notes [4], 3 Exploding Pouches [1], 3 Smoke Pellets [1], 12m String [4], 1 Windmill Shuriken [5], 1 File & Scissor [1].
FACE CLAIM.
Character Claim: Takasugi Shinsaku
Source: Bakumatsu Rock
Image URL: image link
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|   | | Tsuya Tayama
Age : 23
Posts : 7
| | Subject: Re: Tsuya, Tayama Wed 23 Jul 2014, 12:37 am | |
| Went through hell trying to understand all of this, totally worth it xD
Bumping for completion  |
| | | | Keos
Age : 29
Posts : 1585
| | Subject: Re: Tsuya, Tayama Wed 23 Jul 2014, 3:06 am | |
| Hello there! So, you did a nice job with your application, but let me point out some things that you'll need to change in order for it to be approved. Shall we?
- First of all, I'd like you to leave a space line between sections with paragraphs of text for the sake of clarity and for aesthetic purposes. This means you should leave a space line between appearance and forehead protector, forehead protector and personality, etc.
- Secondly, I'd like to ask you to split your personality's paragraph in half, just to make it easier to read and have it look more structured. Same goes for your role-play sample, which you can divide in three smaller paragraphs.
- Thirdly, you have included most things about his appearance in your paragraph, but how about expanding it a little bit. You could use some more detail about his features and also the reasons behind his preferences. I.e. "He'll opt for blue t-shirts during the hot days of summer, as he really likes shades of blue, which remind him of the sky." Just some stupid example, you see where I'm coming from. And then, you write "Besides the normal Kirigakure shinobi uniform", which is something that's not standard on this forum. I know that there are ninja uniforms in the canon world of Naruto, but even if they match the ones here, you have to describe his uniform in a more elaborate way. This will help expand your paragraph as well.
- This is not that big of an issue, but I think you don't mention anywhere the reason why your character's last name is not Kessho. Am I right? You should either do that, or change his last name to the respective clan name.
- Your village is your character's affiliation, while his origin is his country. Please change the Origin to Mizu no Kuni / Water Country.
- You should add the Academy Techniques found here. They are free and don't count towards the starting limit.
- You should mention what ranges you specialize in as a Weaponry user. Include two weaponry ranges (choose between close, mid and long range) in brackets next to Weaponry, making it look like i.e. Weaponry (Primary: Close; Secondary: Long). You should give the Weaponry Guidelines a look. Then after that, why don't you replace your Torpedo Needle and Flying Nail Mist Pierce jutsu (because they require to have nails) with other weaponry jutsu that will fit your weapons. You can find a list of weapons to choose from here.
- Are you sure you don't want to include any of your clan's jutsu in your application? Your starting limit is 15 jutsu.
- Last but not least, let's talk about your Combat Style, which is the only section you left blank, you have to provide us with a paragraph of around 200 to 250 words about his fighting styles. Is he a reckless fighter? In what range is he more powerful and effective? Does he prefer to fight head on, or does he hide in the shadows and surprise the enemy? Does he rely on others in fights, or does he only rely on himself? What is his most common pattern of fighting style? Favorite techniques and strategies? Will he escape when at risk? Will he fight an unnecessary battle? Will he throw his life on the line to save somebody else? Answering things like these will help you write your combat style.
Take things one step at a time, and your character will be ready for approval if you manage to make these changes. |
| | | | Tsuya Tayama
Age : 23
Posts : 7
| | Subject: Re: Tsuya, Tayama Wed 23 Jul 2014, 4:17 am | |
| Dude your amazing, I didn't get some of the things mentioned until you mentioned it in your post, and now everything is organized.
Ok, so I did basically everything you said, expect for the name thing. I was wondering, do I have to list that in a specific place? Or could I just give a small reasoning next to the name itself? Honestly, all I was going to put was that I inherited my mothers last name.
Before you approve my application could you explain SC's to me? I never really understood them. |
| | | | Keos
Age : 29
Posts : 1585
| | Subject: Re: Tsuya, Tayama Wed 23 Jul 2014, 4:42 am | |
| Your application looks neat and clean now, so kudos to you! I'm glad to hear I helped you clear things out! Now for the last name thing, you can just mention it somewhere in your history that when he was born he inherited his mother's name. That'll do. For your clan and face claim section links, try using this code so that they look nice and neat: - Code:
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[url=Insert Link Here]Insert How you want it to look like here, e.g. Kessho[/url]
Now for the SC's, it's basically simple. Every character has some unique traits that make them stronger in various ways. Our forum has implemented the SC system if anything to keep members from listing a ton of special abilities. They are a way to organize and keep things within reasonable borders, offering you the option of making your character more powerful. It's basically a log for abilities, similar to jutsu. You can't just use a jutsu without having it in your arsenal, and the same happens with a special power, or in this case, a SC. If for example, you want your character to be quicker than most genin, you can't just role-play out a scene where he is getting dramatically faster without a reason. You have to obtain the respective SC. You can read the guide in order to keep track of things. You will be able to train for more after approval, reaching up to the limit mentioned in the guide as well.
Don't hesitate to ask any questions through a personal topic in Forum Assistance or Private Messaging (you can send PM's once you reach 10 posts). And don't worry, it'll take some time but once you've read the guidelines and had your questions answered, you'll get the hand of it.
Given that you will make these final and trivial edits and everything else looks fine to me,
Approved ½. |
| | | | Tsuya Tayama
Age : 23
Posts : 7
| | Subject: Re: Tsuya, Tayama Wed 23 Jul 2014, 5:10 am | |
| | Bump |
| | | | Cross
Age : 30
Posts : 1012
| | Subject: Re: Tsuya, Tayama Fri 25 Jul 2014, 3:13 am | |
| | With the details done that I asked of you: approved 2/2. Don't forget to make an account here |
| | | | Anna
Age : 31
Posts : 1900
| | Subject: Re: Tsuya, Tayama Sun 09 Nov 2014, 4:42 am | |
| Archived due to failure to respond to activity check. Please message staff to have your character unarchived. |
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