Kazami Clan

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The biggest issue with this clan is the Dōjutsu, namely the sight based abilities and how it mimics to some degree Canon Dōjutsu, which in turn conflicts with two primary rules of making a clan.

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Edited and removed what was similar to the Uchiha and Hyuga.

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Quote :: Gurandoekuripusu - Grand Eclipse

Does this technique follow you or does it stay in one location? Is it always created with you at the center?

Quote :: Arms of Darkness - Yami No Buki

Are these chakra constructs or actual summons? If they are actual summons they will need to comply with the Summoning Guides/System rules.

Quote :: Dākuu~ēbu - Dark Wave

This dark wave, it won't be able to work on weapons unless they're chakra conductive correct? And it shoots out in a linear fashion I'm assuming. (straight line)

Quote :: Name: Dākuhoīrusupairaru- Spiraling Dark Wheel

The damage and functionality of this technique is like Rasengan

Forbidden and Limited Jutsu wrote:: The following is a list of Kekkei Genkai and Hiden that are not allowed on Ultimate Shinobi. This list is less strict than the Manipulation Abilities list, however any attempt at making a clan with any of these abilities or a similar variation to these abilities will be denied immediately. The list is subject to change at any time, and certain abilities may be lifted from the list if the staff sees fit. DO NOT pester the staff with questions about whether a certain one of these Kekkei Genkai or Hijutsu will be allowed. If they are still here, then they are still forbidden; so the answer will always be “no.”

So it is denied along with the Barrier and Repulsion techniques which are too similar to Shinra Tensei and Bansho Tenin

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Update: New KKG added: Steel Release - Due to Doujutsu failing and falling under forbidden techniques.

Grand Eclipse - This technique stays in the center were it was performed.
Arms of Darkness - They are constructs of chakra.
Dark Wave - I don't personally see the problem with it being channeled through a weapon or not, but its been removed to only hands and feet and as stated, it travels across the ground, so yes in a linear fashion.

New jutsu have been added and made accordingly, ready for checking yet again.

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How are steel release and dark chakra related? Just want to make sure everything makes sense for clarity

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Could you define what you mean by how they're related please? I'm afraid I don't get what you're trying to ask.
But Ill try and give an answer to see if its what you're looking for.
The dark chakra, is simply a trait which is in no form related to Dark Release as Dark Release was said to be banned, yet the one that I used had none of the stuff which was banned, but then I was told that Dark Release wasn't a thing, thus lead to the changes and now to Steel Release.
It's merely an visual trait and sensory trait to show their corruption.
As for the relation? None apart from how it'd effect the release visually I believe.

*However, if to make things easier the non-steel release techniques, can be custom jutsus specific for my character.

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The problem with the Dark Chakra is that it serves no relation towards the Bloodline Limit of Steel Release. When creating a clan and even in canon reference, a bulk of the clan traits serve as a facet to relate to an aspect of the clan it is scarce to have an element or trait of a clan that simply 'just is' without some form of connection.

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To make things easier, the other jutsus have been removed but are still in existence on the new character sheet due to them already being balanced and looked at.
So now there is only the steel release which is related to the clan if thats better.

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Clan Traits | History | Clan Based Continuity: There still remains that some of your clan traits hold no real relation to either he historical references or the Bloodline Limit of your clan. Specifically (as previously noted) Dark Chakra and Corruption, both of which made sense as traits related to your previous Bloodline Limit before editing, but not so much now.

Darkness:

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But due to living in the dark, their eyes had grown accustom to the dark, allowing them to see regardless of how dark it is but their eyes are still effected by the light as someone with normal sight would react.

If the eyes of clan members have adapted to see in the dark, then they should be more reactive to standard levels of light and thus light itself at standard or higher levels should be natural hindrance.

Steel Release: You need to largely expand on the description of your Bloodline Limit. If it's an Advanced Chakra Nature then it needs to be the result of a combination between two standard Chakra Natures. You should list, strengths, weaknesses and general functionality. Thus you will need to expand greatly before it can be honestly moderated.

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I'd like this to be archived untill further notice.
Thank you.

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Archived upon user request