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PostSubject: Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] EmptyMon 02 Aug 2010, 3:59 am

Basic Information:

Name: Sabure,Keitaro [Keitaro Sabure]
Secondary Title:
N/A
Age: 15
Gender: male
Physical Appearance:
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(Facail) Keitaro's skin is tan colored. His eyes are of the color of purple. His hair is of purple in the same style of sasuke's from naruto.
(Torso prt 1-Stomach and back) Keitaro wares a blue rope draped over his black vest that he wares to be like the rest of his famliy. On his back {under the nodochi {long sword used by skilled swordsmen} lies his clan symbol known as the Ni Buki (two weapons). On the front part of his stomach he has two silver straps one on each shoulder. At his lower stomach area he wares a blue belt which has symbols of circles going around it. The belt is tied around his waist.
(Torso prt 2-Arms and wrists)Keitaro wares a blue rope draped over his black vest that he wares to blend in with his famliy. Under the robes he has a wrist gaurd wraped in a white wrap with the symbol of the village he left marked out in red.
(Bottoms)Keitaro wares a blue rope draped over his black vest that he wares to blend in with the rest of his famliy. under the robe he wares ninja pants that are baggy and the color of black. At the side of his right leg he has a small straight blade tied to his waist.
(Shoes)Keitaro wares black shoes cut out like sandles with a white strip going from the heel to the ankle

Personality:
On the surface, Keitaro seems to be a shallow and self-absorbed man, infamous among many of his colleagues and subordinates alike for the selfish and narcissistic aura he gives off. Easily as arrogant as his young friend Keiji, Keitaro is wont to act in an ostentatious manner and appears to act mostly out of self-interest rather than any sort of philanthropy. He comes off to most as a sort of cocky layabout, shirking most of his duties and delegating his paperwork to subordinates while sitting idly at his desk with an amused smile on his face as he procrastinates, but quick to take action when it appears that there is glory and military notoriety to be gained. Keitaro is expertly manipulative and prone to think several steps ahead of those around him, giving him a remarkable talent for making subordinates act exactly as he wishes despite appearing not to have had a hand in their decisions - all traits which make the fact that he has managed to attain the lofty rank of genin at such a young age a matter of public gossip.

Keitaro also has the reputation of being an incorrigible womanizer, and it's said he spends much of his time cavorting about town with various women and wooing several of the servicewomen with his abundant charm, good looks and charisma. This adds another facet to his unpopularity among the enlisted men, many of whom have had their sweethearts and crushes romanced away from them by his hand.

However, while these traits do have a place in his real personality, much of his outward persona can perhaps be considered an intentional façade perfectly designed to cause those unfamiliar with him to underestimate his remarkable intelligence and ability. Keitaro is an exceptional tactician, well-versed in various strains of combat theory and particularly talented in the realms of surreptitious information-gathering, covert operations and enemy ensnarement.

At the core, he is a remarkably devoted commander whose primary focus and personal duty is to his friends and subordinates. Though he hides it well behind a veil of cynicism and self-importance, Keitaro is a man who cares deeply about the people who trust and support him and goes to great lengths to ensure their safety and well-being, even at the risk of his own. As a man with considerable power, Keitaro considers himself a protector to those without and acts accordingly, earning the staunch loyalty of his most trusted compatriots. His words to his companions were "As an individual I am powerless. That's why I need all of you to help me protect this nation. I will protect you. In turn, you will protect as many others as possible. No matter how few, always look out for your subordinates. And those below you will in turn protect their subordinates. No matter what happens, stubbornly cling to your will to survive. Live and help change this country."

Unfortunately, his self-imposed position as protector has caused him to display a penchant toward stubbornness in regards to his pride on the field and a fiery temper, both of which have been shown to cloud his judgment in certain situations.

Catch Phrase:
"As an individual I am powerless. That's why I need all of you to help me protect this nation. I will protect you. In turn, you will protect as many others as possible. No matter how few, always look out for your subordinates. And those below you will in turn protect their subordinates. No matter what happens, stubbornly cling to your will to survive. Live and help change this country."

Clan Information:
Clan Name: Sabure

Clan Location: Suna

Clan Traits: -

Kekkei Genkai:

Sand Manipulation

The members of this clan hav a very unique ability to manipulate sand as though it were an extension of themselves in terms of ultimate defense and ultimate offense. It is said to be one of the most dangerous and effective tools a ninja of the sand village can have. The members of this clan have unique chakra with in themselves that allow them to do this, and it is not a mix of two elements, rather it is a new off set basic element and as such is the main element of all ninja who wield it. (This meaning that all ninja in this clan can only have sand and a sub element contrary to advanced element clans which allow three elements.) However, they can not create sand just from their chakra (another difference from advanced elements) and need a source of sand to use their jutsu. For this reason, many find a way to carry sand with them at all times.

This ability is largely tied into their history and founding from the ninja Gaara, the very first Kazekage and founder of the Village Hidden in the Sand as well. The man was imbibed with a demonic beast known as Shikaku, the sand demon. Having the demons influence his entire life, it altered his very genetic structure, granting him the natural ability to manipulate sand with his will at the expense of chakra. Being that the demon provided a mutation on a genetic level, this trait was passed to his children, and the children of his children. Being that this derived from one person alone, and by comparison is a relatively new clan, it is small by comparison to other clans, but is abundant enough to be considered a clan.

Secret Clan Jutsu:

Name: Sand Armor
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Sand
Description: Using this jutsu, the user can cover themselves in a compacted layer of sand, providing an additional defense. Though quite effective, maintaining the armor requires a large amount of chakra and stamina. Furthermore, it is nowhere as resilient as the Shield of Sand, since it easily breaks away upon impact, meaning that the sole purpose of the armor is to absorb impact channeled unto the body during battle. And will reduce the impact of all taijutsu and weaponary by 75% effectiveness. Another weakness is the additional weight of the sand means a decrease of speed and mobility. It takes a D rank amount of chakra PER POST to keep it activated (not counting the first post used).

Name: Sand Shield
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Sand
Description: This creates a curved shape wall of sand to come up from the ground around the users vacinity, the restriction is only 2 meters away from the person using it. The shield is capable of withstanding considerably strong attacks and projectiles, and can be hardened to a point where it's stronger than steel. It can be defeated by avoiding it completely with extremely high-speed attacks, or merely overcoming the shield with incredible brute force. It costs a C rank amount of chakra per shield wall created and additional C rank per post (minus the post created) to maintain the wall or else it will crumble back to sand, impacted or not.

Name: Third Eye
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Element: Sand
Description: This jutsu creates a small sphere shaped object of sand that creates a direct link to the users optic nerve. The ball will then from into an eye shape and then take the appearance of an eyeball floating in the air. The user can then see anything the eye ball can.

Name: Sand Shuriken
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Element: Sand
Description: The user creates up to five shuriken made from sand that are launched at the target. Unlike regular shuriken, these are merely fast-moving balls of sand that cause blunt trauma, not actual wounds. They are thrown much faster than regular shuriken; therefore, the pain caused can be considerable.

Name: Sand Clone
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Sand
Description: The user creates a copy of themself out of sand, although it lacks color and is immediately recognizable as sand. This means that it is almost useless as a decoy. Unlike most bunshinjutsu, the clone still retains its shape after it is struck, and can even ensnare whatever comes into contact with it.

Name: Sand Coffin
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Sand
Description: With the ability to control sand, the user encases the opponents in a large amount of the sand, immobilizing them. It can be used to suffocate an opponent or in preparation for a deadlier technique, the Sand Burial. This appears to be the clans favored technique. It takes a C rank amount of chakra per post if used only to capture and hold the target.

Name: Sand Burial
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Sand
Description: After wrapping an opponent with sand, the user will cause the sand to implode and crush whatever is within. When used to kill a person, the death is so quick that there isn't even time to feel pain. The pressure also produces a sizable fountain of blood. The user can control the pressure used in the attack, which allows them to either break bones or completely liquefy an opponent.

Name: Sand Drizzle
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Sand
Description: An alternative to Sand Coffin, the user simply gathers sand from the earth and makes it come down like a rain, targeting the opponents from above. To make sure the rain hits its mark, it can be combined with Sand Coffin to immobilize the target.

Name: Successive Shots Sand Drizzle
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Sand
Description: This creates the cloud of sand behind the user rather then over head. Several sand bullets will erupt from the cloud and bombard the opponent at once. These are much thiner and faster then those used in Sand Shuriken and are capable of actually piercing through the target, rather then just causing blunt force trauma to the body.

Name: Sand Suspension
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Sand
Description: Gathering sand beneath them and/or an ally, the user will create a platform of sand to raise up from the ground and float in the air. It costs a B rank amount of chakra to cast the jutsu and a D ranked amount per post afterward to sustain it over time.

Name: Prison Sand Burial
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Sand
Description: Using the ability to manipulate sand, the user will loosen the ground below the targets and cause them to sink two hundred meters into the earth. By being imprisoned at this depth, the pressure will completely nullify their ability to move. Also, the pressure resulting from being buried at such an extreme depth would surely kill any normal human, if not from suffocation.

Name: Sand Tsunami
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Sand
Description: This jutsu sends a massive amount of sand towards an opponent in the form of a wave, covering and "drowning" them in an ocean of sand. In addition to the wave effect of the jutsu, The user can control the sand, allowing him to attack his opponent while they attempt to outrun the wave. The jutsu is so powerful as to be able to change the landscape into a miniature dessert. It will smother and bury any one who is caught in it, though it is quite easy to come back up from this burial. Though it is only a B ranked technique, when used it costs as much chakra as using 2 B ranked jutsus, draining much more chakra.

Name: Giant Sand Burial
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Sand
Description: Following Sand Tsunami, the user will slam both hands palm down into the sand, creating powerful shock waves that compress the sand. Anything buried in the sand is subsequently crushed. The compressions also creates several small scale earthquakes.

Name: Sphere of Sand
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Sand
Description: The user surrounds them self completely with a Shield of Sand to guard against attacks. They can then use the Third Eye to watch an opponents' movements and control sand as necessary to battle them. In addition to being extremely dense, this sand-sphere can form spikes from its surface to spear any would-be attacker. With sufficient piercing or blunt force this defense can be broken through.

Name: Sky Sand Protective Wall
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: S
Element: Sand
Description: This air defense technique creates a giant shield of sand that is suspended in mid-air by raising a great amount of sand from the ground. By gathering the best possible mineral-rich sand, the hardness of the shield is considered to be very high. Furthermore, the sand has its defensive strength raised by flowing chakra through it. It is the strongest of all sand defenses usable. It is also extremely large, form a circle shape of about 50 meters in diameter.

Name: Sand Prison
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: S
Element: Sand
Description: This uses an enormous quantity of sand to completely envelop the target from every direction and capture them. The speed, hardness, and scope of the sand depend on the amount of chakra poured into it. This allows the user to fine-tune the sand's properties to the size and characteristics of the target. No matter if the target is on the ground or flying in the air, it is almost impossible to escape from this technique. However, even if someone successfully escapes from it, it is easy to use one of the offensive techniques, like the Sand Coffin, to immediately attack the target.

History:
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The clan started with the man Known as Gaara Sabure, Ironically his last name meaning sand. It is unknown if this was his given last name at birth or a change made later on with the birth of his children and the underlying creation of the clan. At birth the man was imbibed with a demon known as Shikaku who was known to all as the demon of sand. It was a fairly wicked demon, but precautions took by the family of the child and thier friends created barriers to which the demon could not come out and control the child as it would have liked. In desperation the demon tried to fuse itself physically with the boy at a genetic level but was not able to over come his strong will. In the end this only granted him the ability to manipulate the sands of the earth and gave the demon no more control then before.

The man later became known as one of the greatest Shinobi of his time and became the founder of the village in the sand, creating the structures and everything from the desert itself using his powers granted by the accursed demon. He was known as a hero and was one of the most respected founding Kage's. He eventually wed and his wife bore unto him children. Three. These three all showed the natural talent to manipulate the sands and so was revealed that the ability was a dominant trait and that it would be passed down through the ages so long as his children and their children and so on continued to create new life. With the passing of Gaara also came the passing of the demon, and his death day became known as a holiday for a celebration of his life and also the destruction of a threatening demon who was no more.

Clan Details: Open

Rank Information:

Rank:
Genin.
Village Affiliation:
Suna.

Special Information:

Character Speciality:
Main:Nin
Sub:Gen
Elemental Affinity:
Main: Sand
Sub:
Special Characteristics:
N/A

Skill Information:
Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them.

Jutsu Template:
Basics
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Clan
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Weapon Template:
N/A

Item Template:
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Background Information

History:
birth arc
Keitaro was born he was born in the middle of the thrid great shinobi war. What he saw made him want to stay out of the shinobi world but his parents urged him to become a shinobi to be strong. As he went in to the academy already knowing a few of his clans jutsu he was a few steps ahead of the other childern. Already knowing how to controle chakra and knowing how much to use in a jutsu he learned the basics quickly. Soon he was the second in the class but wanted to be on top.

So the last month of the ninja academy lead to a fight between keitaro and kentaro. Both were very skilled for their ages and as such it was going to be a good fight. Or so they thought kentaro rushed at keitaro and sent a punch at his face. Only to meet a wall of sand and be blocked. The academy teachers were surprised to see keitaro use a C rank jutsu all though it wasen't masterd it seemed. Then out of the wall came five Sand Shuriken. Each one hit kentaro and knocked him out making keitaro the top of the class when he graduated.



genin arc
There sensai gave them the bell test. Keitaro came up with the plan after seeing one of his teammates speed and knowing of the hyuuga's infamous doujutsu and with his own clan jutsu. they got the bell's after a plan of having the fast one use his speed to trick sensai into falling into a trap Keitaro had built. When sensai was stuck then which the hyuuga would trigram sensai to where he couldent move to then wich when he finally got unstuck. Keitaro ran and grabed the bell's their sensei passed them and they went home. For the next year they completed 50 D-rank missions and 4 C-rank.

But his team died on a C rank that turned out to be a SS rank with a missing ninja that was jounin lvl. he killed Keitaros team mates quickly but his sensai killed him self and the missing ninja. He is now waiting for a new team while he trains in his famliy's clan jutsu. Such as the jutsu Sand Shield which he has yet to have perfected. He all so now switching to temp teams most of the time. He had all so receantly learned he was getting a new team within the next month.



Role-Play Sample:
It had been weeks since dabura had made keitaro relive his past. Keitaro felt a dark power running through him at all times now. Suddenly the little blue demon that told keitaro dabura wanted to meet him ran up. "Keitaro-sama your under the wrong demon king follow me and i'l-GAH!" the little demon said as it was now held in keitaro right hand. "Hmm a false demon king?, Well then i guess i have to report this to dabura. Where is this false king at?" keitaro asked "In southern hell!" the little demon yelled as keitaro snaped the little demons neck. Keitaro enterd dabura's castle dabura had two human female's sitting around his throne "Keitaro what is it?" the demon king asked.

"My lord it seems that there is a false king in the southren part of hell...What are my orders?" keitaro asked the demon king. Keitaro looked into the demon kings eyes and fire's of rage were in them. Keitaro in the first time in his life was afraid. "Keitaro i am going with you to face this false king. I am giving you full controle over my army." the king said as he got up from his throne and told them women to keitaro into battle armor.
Keitaro looked upon the armor he was placed into it was brown with spikes all over it then the women started to talk "This armor well protect you from any and every fire of hell out there. It'll also help stop you from being possesd." the girls finished with a smile.

Keitaro walked out of the castle along side dabura and his army. Keitaro heard the chanting grow louder as soon as they were spoted it stoped. Every last demon rushed them dabura killed them all in one swift move. Keitaro turned to the army "Men.....ATTAAAAAAAAAACK!" he yelled as the army and keitaro him self rushed to the false demon king. They rushed the false king only to be knocked back by him. Keitaro had a good look at the false king.

He was large about two feet taller then dabura he wore a dark armor with helm that cover his face. Keitaro got up holding his arm "I DID NOT WALK TWO HUNDRED MILES JUST TO GET DEFEATED!" keitaro yelled as he rushed the false king holding one of the demons blade. It was an odd blade it was black with red ruby's incrusting the hilt. The false king not thinking right went to hit keitaro again only to be held back by dabura. Keitaro jumped into the air and with one swift move cut the false kings head off. Keitaro stood there coverd in blood and smirked "Some king he was." keitaro said as he gave the head to dabura and left the area.


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PostSubject: Re: Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] EmptyMon 02 Aug 2010, 4:11 am

Each arc needs to be at least 2 paragraphs, besides that, everything is fine.
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PostSubject: Re: Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] EmptyMon 02 Aug 2010, 12:17 pm

I have to add one more thing.

Your RP sample also needs a few more lines, since it currently contains 210 words and the minimum posting requirement is 250 words.

Other than that, like Z said, there is nothing wrong with your application.

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PostSubject: Re: Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] EmptyMon 02 Aug 2010, 5:42 pm

Bump D:
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PostSubject: Re: Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] EmptyMon 02 Aug 2010, 9:18 pm

I almost forgot to add:

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Secondary Title:
Do your friends call you anything specific, or are you known and feared by many with a certain name?

Remove the underlined part and just put None or N/e.

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Character Speciality:
You may pick 2 skills: Ninjutsu, Genjutsu, Taijutsu, Kenjutsu, Weaponry, Medical, Puppetry, Fuuinjutsu

Remove the underlined part.

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Elemental Affinity:
What element(s) your character possesses, no more than two

Remove the underlined part.

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Special Characteristics:
What things are special about your character and set them apart from others, that isn't related to a Kekkei Genkai or clan trait.

Remove the underlined part and just put None or N/e.

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PostSubject: Re: Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] EmptyMon 02 Aug 2010, 9:25 pm

Finished Pedobear
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PostSubject: Re: Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] EmptyMon 02 Aug 2010, 9:38 pm

While editing, you made a little mistake.

Sand is not an element.

You can start with two basic elements, such as Wind, Earth, Fire, Water and Lightning. If your clan has an advanced element, you can start with it as well.

I would advise you to pick Wind and Earth since they are the best elements for a Sand manipulation clan member.


If you want, add some Jutsus of your element as well, before your application gets approved.
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Name: Sand Armor
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Sand
Description: Using this jutsu, the user can cover themselves in a compacted layer of sand, providing an additional defense. Though quite effective, maintaining the armor requires a large amount of chakra and stamina. Furthermore, it is nowhere as resilient as the Shield of Sand, since it easily breaks away upon impact, meaning that the sole purpose of the armor is to absorb impact channeled unto the body during battle. And will reduce the impact of all taijutsu and weaponary by 75% effectiveness. Another weakness is the additional weight of the sand means a decrease of speed and mobility. It takes a D rank amount of chakra PER POST to keep it activated (not counting the first post used).

This was taken from the clans page.
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PostSubject: Re: Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] Sabure, Keitaro [Suna Genin] EmptyTue 03 Aug 2010, 1:09 am

Okey, I guess that you are right.

That makes no sense to me, since in the Canon sand is not a element at all.

But, I guess that is not case here.


Since you do not wish to add more Jutsus, I say approved.
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