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PostSubject: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyTue 17 Aug 2010, 4:33 am

Name: Kuroi, Hinoko
Secondary Title: Banana or Hina
Age: 17
Gender: Female

Physical Appearance:

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Personality:

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Catch Phrase:
Turn off the camera...

Clan Information:

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Rank Information:

Rank: Chuunin, Approval from Hugh
Village Affiliation: Sunagakure.

Special Information:

Character Speciality:
Main: Weaponry: Kenjutsu/Ranged. (I.e. Shuriken, and Kunai, adding to longer throwing range)
Sub: Ninjutsu

Elemental Affinity:
Main: Raiton
Sub: N/a

Special Characteristics:
Oddly, Hinoko does not have a color in her eyes most of the time, and are simply gray. Only when strong emotions come to the front, like hate or excitment do they change color.

Skill Information:

Jutsu:

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Item Template:

Name: Basic Ninja tools: Shuriken, Kunai, Caltrops, Bomb Tags.
Rank: E = Shuriken, E = Kunai, C = Caltrops D = Bomb Tags.
Type: Other; Support

Natural Abilities: Basic ninja tools and weapondry. Shuriken and Kunai are used for medium range combat, usually a simple way to injure someone. Caltrops are traps, used for taking someone down stealthily and, quite possibly; painfully. Caltops come in many different sizes, they look a little like animal traps. Bomb Tags are pieces of paper with a bomb seal on the front. They are usually sticky, and found on certain areas like trees. Motion detonates them, a good way to land an ambush without getting involved. Med Packs negate any damage done by a level D rank jutsu or lower. Contains bandages or all sizes, medical tape, ointments for burns or infections, and drops for eye or ear fuzzyness, and liquid bandages. (Gluing a small cut together.)

Quantity: Shuriken: 8x, Kunai: 10x, Caltrops: 3x, Bomb Tags: 4x, Med Packs: 3x

History:

--Pre-academy Arc--

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--Academy Arc--

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--Genin Arc--

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--Chuunin Arc--

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Roleplay Sample:

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Jutsu Used:
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyTue 17 Aug 2010, 4:59 am

Shock Fist: Use the correct site template. Also, a turn isn't 5-10 minutes, its far less then that.

Lightning Spark: Use the correct site template. Needs to be fleshed out.

Lightning Fang: Use the correct site template. How much damage can this jutsu inflict/defend? How big is it.

Shikomizune: Chakra conductivity is for B-rank weapons.

Remember that we expect you to post at least 100 words within your RP sample on average.
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyTue 17 Aug 2010, 4:33 pm

Also, as a note, turn the time into posts, it makes it easier for everyone to stay on the same page with jutsu lengths
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyTue 17 Aug 2010, 5:48 pm

Approved for Chuunin Slot. Still needs regular approval though
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyTue 17 Aug 2010, 8:01 pm

Can't you approve it? . .; Eh, nevermind. You're too busy for stupid things like this...
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyTue 17 Aug 2010, 8:19 pm

Gotta edit your Weaponry specialty first to correspond with the weaponry rules.

Also, as a Chuunin, your jutsu list is far to small. Id suggest adding some weaponry techniques, more elemental jutsu, and even choose another element
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyTue 17 Aug 2010, 9:08 pm

Not only that, you are missing a Chuunin Arc.
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyWed 18 Aug 2010, 1:01 am

Mkay...Working on the Chuunin Arc, and specs...
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyMon 23 Aug 2010, 9:30 pm

BUMP! O.O'''
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyMon 23 Aug 2010, 10:58 pm

AmayaHikari wrote:

Name: Genjutsu Kai (Genjutsu Release)
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Dispels a Genjutsu of rank C or less. Also dispels any kind of Genjutsu of rank B and lower from an ally. This requires basic Genjutsu resistance to perform. The range is short, about 10-15 feet.

Please remove that technique and replace it with this jutsu. They both do the same thing, but this one just has more detail and what everyone here uses -

Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Kai - Release
[b]Rank:[/b] D
[b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Element:[/b] N/A
[b]Description:[/b] Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.



You have Shunshin no Jutsu listed twice. Only one is needed.



Code:

[b]Name:[/b] Suimen Hokou no Waza - Act of Water Surface Walking
[b]Rank:[/b] E
[b]Type:[/b] N/A
[b]Element:[/b] N/A
[b]Description:[/b] A variation on the Kinobori no Waza (Act of Tree Climbing), the art of water surface walking allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water

[b]Name:[/b] Kinobori no Waza - Act of Tree Climbing
[b]Rank:[/b] E
[b]Type:[/b] N/A
[b]Element:[/b] N/A
[b]Description:[/b] Kinobori no Waza, the art of tree climbing serves a dual purpose. Taking part in Kinobori Shugyou (Tree Climbing Training) helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed

[b]Name:[/b] Explosion Tag: Activate
[b]Rank:[/b] E
[b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Element:[/b] N/A
[b]Description:[/b] The user will activate an explosion tag. Normally, the tag will be placed by them, so they know where it is and can easily activate it.

Please include these jutsu into your application. They're basic.



You also have your weapon specialty listed as Kenjutsu (swords). You are allowed two specialties in the weaponry category.



Also, you may want to think about adding a few more techniques since you're going for Chuunin rank and all.



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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyTue 24 Aug 2010, 11:44 pm

Done Cyanide :3 Added two Weapon Techniques, and one Weapon Ability, added to basic ninja tools; Med Packs: 3x
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyTue 31 Aug 2010, 6:40 pm

.....Bump.........
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyTue 31 Aug 2010, 7:50 pm

For your weaponry spec, put this in:

Weaponry: Kenjutsu/Ranged (thats swords and ranged projectiles).

Also, if you wish to add more jutsu do so now since you still have a limited amount for the rank you are applying for. Otherwise your app looks good.
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptyThu 02 Sep 2010, 5:34 pm

Since This hasnt been edited or said it was edited within the past two days, I will assume more techniques will not be added. With that assumation:

Approved
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] Kuroi, Hinoko [Suna Chuunin] EmptySun 12 Dec 2010, 11:17 am

Archived due to inactivity.
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