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UCHIHA, SUZUMI.
◘ The road I walk is paved in gold to glorify my platinum soul ◘
◘ I am the closest thing to god ◘
◘ So worship me and never stop ◘



THE INFO.

Name: Uchiha, Suzumi (Pronounced; Sue Zoo Me).
Nickname:
Quote :
Suzu-Chan • A casual nickname used on her since she was a child. Those who do not know her personally should never call her by that.

Mistress of Malice • A nickname bestowed on her by the vast amount of challengers she has fought.
Age: 26.
Gender: Female.
Appearance:

Most wouldn’t suspect Suzumi is an Uchiha. After all, she does not possess the usual black spiky hair or deep mysterious colored eyes. Nor does she bare the Uchiha symbol on any article of her clothing for those to see. Despite appearances, she is very much so an Uchiha. Hidden under her cyan colored eyes is the Sharingan just waiting to be activated. Layers of long hair in shades of turquoise and teal mask what was once short, spiky, black hair. Amazing what hair dye can do, neh? Usually tied up in pigtails or a single ponytail; three or four ornaments hang delicately to add a more traditional geisha vibe decoration. The only make up she tends to wear is some form of eye makeup. Standing at five feet and five inches, Suzumi’s skin resembles that of ivory. A single tattoo in the shape of a small lavender cloud resides on the left side (her right side) of her ribs. The scars she has are never longer than four inches. Both tattoo and scars are almost definitely covered up by clothing or bandages.

Their is little to no difference between Suzumi’s casual wear and professional wear. In fact, the only real difference is you won’t be seeing shoes nor her Shantakai robe being worn while off-duty. To see a dress or kimono on her is particularly rare; her usual attire being short-shorts and bikini tops. She would describe the materials of her clothing as stretchy and comfortable. The young woman’s shoes are low-heeled black boots that go up to her thigh and tie up on the side. Her wardrobe mostly contains black and grey, though Suzumi admits she likes just a bit of pink, as well. Moving off the basic stuff, the young woman tends to also wear arm warmers (though only one at a time for some odd reason). Then their is her acidic pink colored sash. It is capable of keeping a maximum of two swords/katana in place on her as well as three small scrolls. Suzumi has a vast amount of jewelry. She never wears an overbearing amount, however. Her headband is tied around like a necklace.

Personality:

Suzumi has the unhealthy mentality that she must be a goddess like figure or else she will be forgotten. Whether she is bad or whether she is good; she must be remembered and known. She cannot afford to be overlooked or ignored as she was when she was a child, thus the idea of being a goddess seems like a very good way to avoid this. Their are many types of goddesses, of course; some of war, some of life, and many more. What type Suzumi’s aiming for though is currently (and perhaps surprisingly) unknown. None the less, the young woman has the most undying dedication to reach that high status. So much, in fact, that it’s really quite admirable and perhaps inspiring. Of course, it is also incredibly narcissistic and troubling at times.

As another part of her ultimate goal, Suzumi could be classified with having monophobia; an abnormal fear of being alone. If she is alone no one can acknowledge her existence. Not being acknowledged is being forgotten. Being forgotten cannot be permitted. That’s how this young woman sees it as, anyways. Should someone begin to leave her or should she expect she is about to become alone, an immediate panic rushes through her. However, she attempts to mask her panicked state and any symptoms that come with it; never speaking of her phobia, either. The young woman isn’t even picky of who her company is. All in all, you could say she’s just one ambitious attention whore.

Family is a taboo subject with her. It triggers various memories from her childhood that can send her into a temporary downward spiral. Whether it be her sobbing or lashing out at you, it won’t be particularly pretty. Provoking her or taunting her upon the subject can cause her to easily snap. She will attack, if not physically than definitely verbally. It’s a delicate topic to say the least. Those who are not highly respected by her shouldn’t even attempt to address family matters or times from when she was a child. Not only must she respect you, but trust you, as well. Suzumi can put up a tough fight, too. She isn’t one to give up easily and trying to get her to stop can prove perhaps a bit difficult.

During the limited times she is not too preoccupied with finding a way to reach goddess status or keeping herself from becoming alone; Suzumi acts rather serene and relaxed. She does not shun socializing (of course) and doesn’t mind crowded or busy places. At times, she can be heard talking to herself in murmurs, but normally Suzumi talks to herself within her head. The young woman just so happens to enjoy fortune telling or anything similar (she’s ever so slightly superstitious), games involving cards, and jewelry. She dislikes cold weather and unpleasant fortune telling.

Clan: Uchiha.
Ninpō:

Quote :

“I won’t be ignored.”

“I am your goddess.”

THE NINJA.

Origin: Konohagakure no Sato.
Affiliation: Shantakai.
Rank: S-Rank Missing Ninja.
Specialties: Genjutsu; Weaponry (Swords/Katanas | Exotic).
Elemental Affinities: Katon; Raiton.
Combat Style: Suzumi is a close range fighter- if not due to majority of her genjutsu being of that range, then most definitely from her specialty in the art of swords. Being capable with weaponry, she is centered around speed more so than strength. She considers far range fighting a weakness.
Special Characteristics:

Quote :

Name: Clan Prodigy.
Rank: C.
Type: Chakra Based.
Physical Requirements: -
Description: A trait given to ninja who posses a innate talent for the manipulation of clan based techniques and has trained thoroughly to improve their skill. Their power over the the clans abilities has become so considerable that the ninja is now considered a young prodigy by the clan elders. Because of this, the user's clan based attacks are 20% more destructive with their increased power and size.

Name: Improved Speed.
Rank: C.
Type: Physical Based.
Physical Requirements: -
Description: The first level in the art of speed accessible to those who have undergone intense training in high speed movement. The possessor of this talent has an increased speed of 20% which makes them slightly faster. They can cross distances quicker than others would expect and outrun others with little effort.

Name: Improved Perception.
Rank: C.
Type: Mental Based.
Physical Requirements: -
Description: The ninja trains their skill in perception and analyzing their environment to more distinct levels. Every physical motion is identified to the ninja whether its a movement in a leaf or change in temperature. This skill is handy when faced with genjutsu as it makes the user capable in identifying an illusion of C-Rank or lower. However although they can sense the genjutsu they must rely on other methods of breaking the spell.

Name: Street Smarts.
Rank: C.
Type: Miscellaneous Based.
Physical Requirements: -
Description: Being raised in a era of battle and war the ninja has sometimes faced instances where they must gain natural street smarts in order to survive in various situations. Those with this characteristic gains a natural ability of self-preservation which allows them to survive in nearly any society or community by any means necessary. They can hustle Ryo quicker than one could imagine and can hold their own in times of struggle. Ninja with street smarts tend to have a heightened sense of intuition, honor, and fear in their respective communities.


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THE ARSENAL | PART I.
◘ I got, you want ◘
◘ It's just, don't stop ◘

Quote :
Name: The Albino Blossom.
Rank: B.
Type: Weapon, Katana.
Appearance:
Uchiha, Suzumi. (Shantakai) Thaitsuki-roiyaru-sanmai-katana-limited-ivory-edition-s03i
Quantity: 1.
Storage: Tied at Suzumi’s wasit via sash.
Special Abilities:
• This katana is chakra conductive. Elemental or not, as long as it’s chakra, it can definitely be conducted into this weapon. This allows more efficient and deadly attacks.
• Should anyone aside Suzumi attempt to use this weapon, the handle will induce a First-Degree (redness, pain, and minor swelling) burn upon their hand(s).

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Name: The Double Dispenser.
Rank: B.
Type: Weapon, Exotic.
Appearance:
This is a wrist-mounted device; the part worn around the wrist being a black cuff. On top of the cuff are two glass cylinders, side by side, no bigger than the cuff itself. Each have their own small nozzle which allow certain substances within them to be blown out in a more controlled manner. The first cylinder is empty; this one being used to pump the fire element into and then let out, similar to a flamethrower. The second cylinder is filled with dark purple smoke; it being similar to a smoke bomb, though pumped out in a more controlled manner.
Quantity: 1.
Storage: Mounted on Suzumi’s right wrist.
Special Abilities:
• This wrist-mounted device is chakra conductive. Elemental or not, as long as it’s chakra, it can definitely be conducted into this weapon.

Quote :
Name: The Divine Locket.
Rank: B.
Type: Genjutsu Enhancer/Supplementary Item.
Appearance:
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Quantity: 1.
Storage: Worn on around Suzumi’s neck.
Special Abilities:
• This locket is capable of triggering certain genjutsu. By channeling a certain amount of chakra within this piece of jewelry, the jewels encrusted along it will shine considerably brighter and give off a faint red glow/aura. This can cause individuals to be entrapped within a genjutsu after making eye contact with it.
• Should anyone aside Suzumi attempt to wear this locket, the ring will induce a First-Degree (redness, pain, and minor swelling) burn upon their neck.
• Not a special ability per say, but this locket can be opened to reveal a clock.

Quote :
Name: The Skull Queen Ring.
Rank: A.
Type: Genjutsu Enhancer/Supplementary Item.
Appearance:
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Quantity: 1.
Storage: Worn on Suzumi’s left index finger.
Special Abilities:
• This ring is capable of triggering certain genjutsu. By channeling a certain amount of chakra within this piece of jewelry, the jewels encrusted along it will shine considerably brighter and give off a faint black glow/aura. This can cause individuals to be entrapped within a genjutsu after making eye contact with it.
• Similar to a flashlight, the decorative crown upon the skull’s head will illuminate. This is achieved by channeling a certain amount of chakra within this piece of jewelry. This can be particularly useful in dark areas and at night.
• Should anyone aside Suzumi attempt to wear this ring, the ring will induce a First-Degree (redness, pain, and minor swelling) burn upon their finger.


Quote :
Name: The Black Mamba.
Rank: S.
Type: Weapon, Katana.
Appearance:
Uchiha, Suzumi. (Shantakai) Samurai-swords-masahiro-handmade-kill-bill-katana
Quantity: 1.
Storage: Tied at Suzumi’s waist via sash.
Special Abilities:
• This katana is chakra conductive. Elemental or not, as long as it’s chakra, it can definitely be conducted into this weapon. This allows more efficient and deadly attacks.
• Should anyone aside Suzumi attempt to use this weapon, the handle will induce a Second-Degree (redness, severe pain, and blisters) burn upon their hand(s).
• The blade belonging to this weapon is unbreakable.
• Due to the chakra reserves within this weapon; once per battle, Suzumi is capable of accessing said chakra reserves to restore her own chakra by 15CP.



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THE ARSENAL | PART II.
◘ This is entertainment ◘
◘ Lies are entertainment ◘
◘ You are down on your knees ◘
◘ Begging me for more ◘

◘ BASIC TECHNIQUES ◘:

◘ CLAN TECHNIQUES ◘:

◘ GENJUTSU ◘:

◘ WEAPONRY ◘:


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THE BACKGROUND.
◘ I own the right ◘
◘ To let go, destroy you ◘
◘ This is my life ◘



History:

◘ SPITE | Birth Arc ◘:

◘ ANALYZE | Rank-less Arc ◘:

◘ CONFESSION | D-Rank to C-Rank Arc ◘:

◘ BROKEN | C-Rank to B-Rank Arc ◘:


◘ REBIRTH | B-Rank to A-Rank Arc ◘:

◘ POWER | A-Rank to S-Rank ◘:

Roleplay Sample:
◘ 783 WORDS ◘:
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Completed!
Finally, haha.. My first Uchiha/S-Rank/Missing Ninja..!
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Just so you know, you're allowed up to 5 SCs =]

"Should anyone aside Suzumi attempt to use this weapon, the handle will
induce a First-Degree (redness, pain, and minor swelling) burn upon
their hand(s)."

What causes this function, fuuinjutsu or something else?

How much chakra does it cost to fill the double dispensers fire chakra container, and how big is the flame produced?

For your locket-
"Should anyone aside Suzumi attempt to wear this locket, the ring will
induce a First-Degree (redness, pain, and minor swelling) burn upon
their neck."

What gives it this effect?

Same question for your skull queen ring

What about the Black Mamba makes it S rank? does it have any other special abilities aside from being chakra conductive?

"Name: Izanagi.
Rank: A.
Type: Doujutsu - Genjutsu.
Range: Close (0m).
Requires: At least Three-Tomoe.
Description:
Izanagi is a powerful technique used by members of the Uchiha Clan have
have acquired the final version of the Sharingan. Izanagi is a genjutsu
that is cast on the user instead of others. It is the most powerful
amongst this type of genjutsu. When activated, the caster removes the
boundaries between reality and illusion within their personal space. To a
degree, this allows the user to control their own state of existence.
It is normally only active for the briefest of moments. This technique
is capable of turning injuries and even death inflicted upon the user
into mere illusions. Whenever the user receives a fatal injury, he or
she automatically fades away as though they were an illusion all along
and then returns back to reality; physically real and unscathed.
Chakra Cost: 22CP (Additional 3CP Per Post)."

Doesn't this cost a Sharingan per use? I'm not up to date on the manga, so correct me if I'm wrong.

"
Name: Life Monitor.
Rank: D.
Type: Genjutsu.
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: -
Description:
This technique begins after Suzumi has clapped once within the target’s
earshot. After doing so, the target(s) cannot hear anything but their
own breathing and heart beat. Lasts 3 posts.
Chakra Cost: 3. (Chakra Cost Per Post: 1)"

This essentially deafens, and should be above D rank because of that.

"Name: Alice Human Sacrifice.
Rank: S.
Type: Doujutsu - Genjutsu.
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+).
Element: -
Description: This technique begins after the target has made eye contact with Suzumi’s Sharingan or
after she has made the necessary hand seals. It is activated within an
instant and the target then sees a completely different world despite
not having seen any progression that lead up to it. Their is three
stages.

Quote:

STAGE ONE; THE FIRST ALICE:
This is the first part of the genjutsu that the target sees. All their
surroundings are black with the exception of a single red path that lays
out before them; the path glowing lightly and essentially the best
source of light from within the black void. The only other source of
light (which is considerably more brighter than the path) is straight
ahead at the very end of the path off in the distance. Large red rose
bushes block majority of the path. Should the user attack or even touch
the rose bushes, ten black silhouettes emerge and attack the target. If
they escape and reach all the way at the end of the path, an open door
takes them to stage two.

STAGE TWO; THE SECOND ALICE:
This is the second part of the genjutsu that the target sees. After
reaching the end of the path from stage one and crossing the open door,
the surroundings of the target are a black room with a blue circular
platform. The platform glows brightly and is the only source of light
within the area. A happy man is singing in the center and appears
harmless. He does not even acknowledge the target’s presence. A locked
door lies behind him. As the man continues to sing, the same black
silhouettes from before return and will attack the target. The door will
not unlock unless the man is defeated (ceases to sing).

STAGE THREE; THE THIRD ALICE:
This is the third part of the genjutsu that the target sees. After
defeating the singing man and passing through the door, the surroundings
of the target are a black room with a green staircase leading up. The
staircase glows brightly and is the only source of light within the
area. At the bottom of the staircase is a throne with a queen sitting in
it. She politely addresses the target, “Are you alright, stranger?”
with a petite angelic voice. Her body is beautiful. “I’m a queen, you
know.” she will explain after only a mere second of her first speaking
to the target. “The fairest of them all. B-But I can’t be forever.” she
brings a hand to her own cheek. “My beauty..” she chokes back on tears.
“My beauty!” she shrieks. And with that, her eyes turn black. Her skin
rots and she bleeds from her nose. The same black silhouettes from
before escape from her mouth and attack the target. If you escape and
run up the staircase, two twins lunge out from the black depths and
pulls you into falling off the stairs. The genjutsu ends here.

This
genjutsu cannot be immediately Kai’d out of. The target may use Kai
after a certain amount of posts depending on the rank. C-Ranked may do
so after seven posts. B-Ranked may do so after five posts. A-Ranked may
do so after four posts. S-Ranked may do so after three posts. Should the
target specialize in genjutsu, the amount of posts before they may Kai
decreases by two. All harm done to the target within the genjutsu does
not effect them physically in the real world, only emotionally and
mentally. Should the target pass out or die within the genjutsu, the
illusion is released and the target is unconscious for the rest of the
topic.
Chakra Cost: 39. (Chakra Cost Per Post: 9)"

I am okay with this, only under the condition that you are unable to attack the person under this genjutsu. otherwise, it would be way overpowered, as it is already borderline
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Pattycakes wrote:
Just so you know, you're allowed up to 5 SCs =]

• Really? But the starting limits for S-Rank say 4 at the max.

Pattycakes wrote:
How much chakra does it cost to fill the double dispensers fire chakra container, and how big is the flame produced?

• That is answered with the following technique-
Spoiler:

Pattycakes wrote:
What about the Black Mamba makes it S rank? does it have any other special abilities aside from being chakra conductive?

• My apologies, I was trying to make sure it wasn't too overpowered. I'm not used to making such high ranked items and such. Would making the blade be unbreakable be considered an S-Rank trait?

Pattycakes wrote:
"Name: Izanagi.
Rank: A.
Type: Doujutsu - Genjutsu.
Range: Close (0m).
Requires: At least Three-Tomoe.
Description:
Izanagi is a powerful technique used by members of the Uchiha Clan have
have acquired the final version of the Sharingan. Izanagi is a genjutsu
that is cast on the user instead of others. It is the most powerful
amongst this type of genjutsu. When activated, the caster removes the
boundaries between reality and illusion within their personal space. To a
degree, this allows the user to control their own state of existence.
It is normally only active for the briefest of moments. This technique
is capable of turning injuries and even death inflicted upon the user
into mere illusions. Whenever the user receives a fatal injury, he or
she automatically fades away as though they were an illusion all along
and then returns back to reality; physically real and unscathed.
Chakra Cost: 22CP (Additional 3CP Per Post)."

Doesn't this cost a Sharingan per use? I'm not up to date on the manga, so correct me if I'm wrong.

I had to actually research that because I've forgotten. It does however say that whatever eye using the Sharingan to cast Izanagi will become blind in exchange.

Pattycakes wrote:
"
Name: Life Monitor.
Rank: D.
Type: Genjutsu.
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: -
Description:
This technique begins after Suzumi has clapped once within the target’s
earshot. After doing so, the target(s) cannot hear anything but their
own breathing and heart beat. Lasts 3 posts.
Chakra Cost: 3. (Chakra Cost Per Post: 1)"

This essentially deafens, and should be above D rank because of that.

• Raised to C-Rank. Is that acceptable?

Pattycakes wrote:
"Name: Alice Human Sacrifice.
Rank: S.
Type: Doujutsu - Genjutsu.
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+).
Element: -
Description: This technique begins after the target has made eye contact with Suzumi’s Sharingan or
after she has made the necessary hand seals. It is activated within an
instant and the target then sees a completely different world despite
not having seen any progression that lead up to it. Their is three
stages.

Quote:

STAGE ONE; THE FIRST ALICE:
This is the first part of the genjutsu that the target sees. All their
surroundings are black with the exception of a single red path that lays
out before them; the path glowing lightly and essentially the best
source of light from within the black void. The only other source of
light (which is considerably more brighter than the path) is straight
ahead at the very end of the path off in the distance. Large red rose
bushes block majority of the path. Should the user attack or even touch
the rose bushes, ten black silhouettes emerge and attack the target. If
they escape and reach all the way at the end of the path, an open door
takes them to stage two.

STAGE TWO; THE SECOND ALICE:
This is the second part of the genjutsu that the target sees. After
reaching the end of the path from stage one and crossing the open door,
the surroundings of the target are a black room with a blue circular
platform. The platform glows brightly and is the only source of light
within the area. A happy man is singing in the center and appears
harmless. He does not even acknowledge the target’s presence. A locked
door lies behind him. As the man continues to sing, the same black
silhouettes from before return and will attack the target. The door will
not unlock unless the man is defeated (ceases to sing).

STAGE THREE; THE THIRD ALICE:
This is the third part of the genjutsu that the target sees. After
defeating the singing man and passing through the door, the surroundings
of the target are a black room with a green staircase leading up. The
staircase glows brightly and is the only source of light within the
area. At the bottom of the staircase is a throne with a queen sitting in
it. She politely addresses the target, “Are you alright, stranger?”
with a petite angelic voice. Her body is beautiful. “I’m a queen, you
know.” she will explain after only a mere second of her first speaking
to the target. “The fairest of them all. B-But I can’t be forever.” she
brings a hand to her own cheek. “My beauty..” she chokes back on tears.
“My beauty!” she shrieks. And with that, her eyes turn black. Her skin
rots and she bleeds from her nose. The same black silhouettes from
before escape from her mouth and attack the target. If you escape and
run up the staircase, two twins lunge out from the black depths and
pulls you into falling off the stairs. The genjutsu ends here.

This
genjutsu cannot be immediately Kai’d out of. The target may use Kai
after a certain amount of posts depending on the rank. C-Ranked may do
so after seven posts. B-Ranked may do so after five posts. A-Ranked may
do so after four posts. S-Ranked may do so after three posts. Should the
target specialize in genjutsu, the amount of posts before they may Kai
decreases by two. All harm done to the target within the genjutsu does
not effect them physically in the real world, only emotionally and
mentally. Should the target pass out or die within the genjutsu, the
illusion is released and the target is unconscious for the rest of the
topic.
Chakra Cost: 39. (Chakra Cost Per Post: 9)"

I am okay with this, only under the condition that you are unable to attack the person under this genjutsu. otherwise, it would be way overpowered, as it is already borderline


Understood.

• And to answer your questions about the burns the items leave, they are caused by a permanent reserve of Katon chakra Suzumi has left within them. If this is a problem, obviously let me know. Smile
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everything looks good. Making unbreakable is acceptable, you could also add another neat feature, like an ability to replenish 15CP once per battle, or something along those lines. S rank weapons usually have intense abilities, such as The Samehada's ability to absorb chakra.

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Edited.
Thank you, Pat.
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No problem =]

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