Nara, Mannox [C-Rank Nukenin]

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Nara, Mannox

THE INFO.

Name:Mannox Nara

Nickname: The Mysterious Stranger, Project M

Age: 17

Gender: Male

Appearance: He has short brown straight hair that hangs to about his shoulders with dark brown eyes. He has a deep, wide scar going across his left cheek from below his ear to about an inch from his mouth. He has wide, broad shoulders, and wears a black cloak over his black A-shirt. He has long black gloves that go up to his elbow and he always has them on. He has a tatoo of a White Tiger on his right bicep and a black tribal dragon on his left bicep. He's not well built, but he's not tiny. He wears black baggy cargo pants and black combat boots. He carries a black shafted halberd on his back.

He has a strong, bold, silent, and serious demeanor to his appearance and posture. He stands about 5' 10" and weighs about 180 pounds mostly muscle. When he is pissed off his fingers start to curl as if wanting to wield his weapon. In fact, your quite lucky to catch him without his halberd on the ready to kill. He shows no emotions or remorse excluding anger. When angry, his whole body, including his facial expressions, show he's angry. His posture turns to a much fiercer demeanor. Most of the time he tends to hide his face using his cloak.

Personality: He's a quiet man that tends to keep to himself. He doesn't share much about his dark past and doesn't care to. He doesn't keep many friends and he's always willing to kill for a few coins. He's very blunt and straight forward and tends to hide his superb wit and intelligence. He feels that people only answer to violence and the strong, so he prefers to react that way to everyday situations. He's quite the fast ninja and hates being caught off guard. He will always kneel before someone that he knows is superior in strength, and of course, anyone with the right amount of coins. He also carries a longsword on his side at all times.

He disregards human life and thinks of it as something that was made to be destroyed if it's weak. He has given up on finding love though if it comes his way he'd be overjoyed. Narcissism and Pessimism are his biggest pet peeves. He sees himself as a realist and refuses to look at life any other way. He finds optimists to be funny because of their constant positive view. he finds pessimists to be annoying because of their constant negative view. He has a long fuse, but an explosive temper. Once angered, it takes a lot of time for him to cool down, unless his aggressor leaves in some way, either death or other wise. He does hold grudges, but only if it's really bad.

Clan: Nara

Ninpō: "Stand in my way, and fall like those behind me."

THE NINJA.

Origin: Iwagakure

Affiliation: None

Rank: C Rank Nukenin

Specialties: Weaponry / Ninjutsu

Elemental Affinities: Raiton / Fuuton

Combat Style: He prefers to fight within reach of his halberd, which is up close and personal, but unreachable by normal means of melee combat. He's strong against anything he can see, and weak against something he can't. He hopes to one day master the halberd to the point of being able to wield it with one hand so that he may wield two. He usually practices wielding it one handed when completely alone, sparring, or fighting someone he can easily outmatch. He also moves quite quick when wielding a sword in one hand.

Special Characteristics:

Name: Improved Speed
Rank: C
Type: Physical Based
Physical Requirements: N/A
Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic.
Description: The first level in the art of speed accessible to those who have undergone intense training in high speed movement. The possessor of this talent has an increased speed of 20% which makes them slightly faster. They can cross distances quicker than others would expect and outrun others with little effort.

THE BACKGROUND.

History: Birth-Adulthood: Mannox was born under the seventh moon of the new year. He was a happy child of about 5 years growing, until dark ninja of political importance, kidnapped some young when they snuck out of the village to play. He was among those young. He spent most of his youth into his late teenage years in a facility being tested on. probed, prodded, and cut open a few times, they'd inject multiple substances into his body and watch the reaction. He believes it happened just to satisfy their sick desire to torture human life. As he came closer to adulthood he heard one of them mention some sort of "injection that imbues one with elemental chakra." That one injection hurt so much, but made him so powerful. Most of the tests performed on him were harsh. They ranged from testing poisons, to testing medical equipment, developing jutsus, to training ninjas. He was highly abused in the facility and saw many other people die from the hands of others and from the injections. A few times they forced him to kill others. He also noticed others were mentally controlled to be personal bodyguards and assassins for the facility. He was forced into being a bodyguard a few times and other times, he was sold to other scientists in other facilities to be a "lab rat" for their experiments.

Adulthood-Present: He escaped from the facility through destruction and murder, and has been labeled an outlaw ever since. In those years of freedom, they attempted to capture and return him to those facilities to "prevent the monsters from coming out of the closet." They have caught him three times, but could never completely contain him. Now he creates a trail for them, with the blood of their own. He continues to run to this day, but no longer looking at it as a means of survival. Now it's just a game that he enjoys playing.

Roleplay Sample: Sin woke up early one morning and he walked out of the alleyway. He looked around and thought, "I wonder what I can do today." He began walking around and saw nothing that seemed to interest him except for one boy who was out so early in the morning. This boy intrigued him, so he decided to follow the boy. As he saw him approach the gate he ran to the wall a little to the right and became an eagle. He flew up and out of the city landing quite a ways from the gate as he waited for the boy to leave.

He noticed the boy becoming a wolf and figured he'd follow him as an eagle for quite some time, after all, flight was always faster than foot speed. Shortly after flying he landed and became a Scorpion. Sin wandered the desert as a scorpion, following this boy. He was skittering through the hills, following the boy, when he spotted an oasis. He turned into an eagle and flew towards the oasis. It was lush and green with a few trees spotted around it. He circled it quite a few times from the air and noticed the lake was wide and quite clear. He landed beside it and began to drink. He saw the boy across the lake and flew close to the water across to the boy. He landed and looked the boy up and down. He then began to peck him.

THE ARSENAL.

Name: Nocturnal
Rank: C
Type: Polearm
Appearance: This polearm has a pure black shaft made of oak wood that is about 7 feet long. It has a steel axe head, that has a spear at the tip, an axe on one side, and a pick axe on the other.

Spoiler:

Quantity: 1
Storage: In a holster on my back.
Special Qualities: None as of current.

Name: Death Touch
Rank: D
Type: Long Sword
Appearance: This appears to be a normal long sword with a black blade that reaches a length of 2 feet long. the hilt is black with a gold hand guard that has the Nara clan symbol in the middle of it. the handle itself is about 6 inches long.
Quantity: 1
Storage: In a holster on my side.
Special Qualities: None as of current.

Name: Prepared Needle Shot
Rank: C
Type: Weaponry
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: N/A
Description: Using a wrist-mounted device, the user can launch five needles at their opponent. The device is usually used to surprise the enemy, as it may be concealed under long sleeves. The needles can also be dipped in a deadly poison, increasing their lethality. The user can also spit these needles out of their mouth but not as many and not nearly as precise.
Chakra Cost: 5

Name: Lightning Release: Electromagnetic Murder
Rank: C-A
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: Raiton (Lightning)
Description: This technique allows the user to create a wave of electricity from their hands. The user can vary its power from a small surge to shock an opponent to a powerful stream of lightning capable of ripping through solid rock.
Chakra Cost: C (5), B (10), A (20)

Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc.
Chakra Cost: 1

Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured.
Chakra Cost: 1

Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead.
Chakra Cost: 1

Name: Explosive Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand.
Chakra Cost: 1

Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. This technique can only be used if the user is a higher rank then their captive.
Chakra Cost: 1

Name: Kai • Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them.
Chakra Cost: 4

Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: NA
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique.
Chakra Cost: 3

Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall.
Chakra Cost: 3

Name: Kagemane no Jutsu | Shadow Imitation
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Clan: Nara
Description: Kage Mane no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Nara clan. It's original purpose was as a skill to help delay any pursuers. After forming the needed hand seals, the clan member is able to manipulate their shadow along any surface. By using other nearby shadows they can further extend the reach of their shadow, however they are limited to the surface area of the original cast shadow. Once the clan members shadow reaches the target shadow, it will attach itself. While attached the target will be frozen, only able to replicate in mirror form the actions of the clan member. If the clan member is low on chakra, the Kage Mane will falter and the shadow will return to its normal form.
Chakra Cost: 4CP (Additional 2CP Per Post)

Name: Kage Kubi Shibari no Jutsu | Shadow Neck Bind Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Clan: Nara
Description: Kage Kubi Shibari no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Nara clan. Kage Kubi Shibari no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique developed by the Nara clan. To perform the technique the clan member will first bind their target using the Kage Mane no Jutsu technique. Once the target can no longer move, they form the needed hand seal to initiate this technique. The clan member uses their shadow to form a hand which will creep up their opponents body to their neck. Once the hand reaches the neck, it will constrict in such a manner so as to strangle the opponent. Opponents may break this technique by exerting 7CP after the strangling process. In addition, this technique cancels the Kagemane no Jutsu as well.
Chakra Cost: 7CP (Additional 2CP Per Post)

Name: Kagemane Shuriken no Jutsu | Shadow Imitation Shuriken Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Clan: Nara
Description: Kagemane Shuriken no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Nara clan. By infusing a blade with his own chakra beforehand, the weapon are given the effect of his shadow techniques. By using these weapons to pierce the enemies' shadows, they are paralyzed in place. To pierce the shadow, it is necessary to avoid the target just barely. Since it is more difficult for the enemy to notice it, this ninjutsu compensates for the weak point of the similar Shadow Imitation Technique, being its limited effective range. The enemy may remain paralyzed in place for two of their posts. Removal of the blade or a disruptance in a enemies shadow will cancel this technique.
Chakra Cost: 8CP

Name: Kageayumi no Jutsu | Shadow Walking Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: -
Clan: Nara
Description: Kageayumi no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Nara clan. This is a transportation technique that allows the user to transport themselves to a specific location that is touched by their shadow. When doing so the user's body is consumed by their shadow and they meld into their shadows initial spot. They will travel through their shadows technique length and appear in their desired spot.
Chakra Cost: 8CP

Age : 31 Posts : 381

Since you do not have ninjutsu as a spec, you cannot use ninjutsu, besides the basic academy jutsu.

Please add more History and Personality. You could also add more for Appearance.

Lastly, your name HAS to have your clan name in it. If you want a nickname with a different last name, by all means add it, but your last name must be Nara if you plan on joining the Nara clan.

Age : 35 Posts : 340

fixed.

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Fix your age. I think it is a typo.

Take out your ninjutsu that is not academy. Look at the beginning of your jutsu. There are some above your academy jutsu

Not Sure if you have changed your last name or not. I think it should just have Nara as a 'birth' last name. You can have the name as a nickname but for the main name please leave it as nara.

Your have only pole-arms as your weaponry specification. You still have one more slot open. Loot at the Weaponry guide in the rules section.

Also you have another element slot, you can have one more with your Raiton

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Other than organization, i do not see anything that will keep me from approving you. I just need to ask you one more thing. Under SC you are allowed to start off with one. If you want to go and look at the SC section and choose one. Then post after you have made your edit.

You will then have my approval.

Age : 35 Posts : 340

Complete

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1/2 Approved!

Age : 30 Posts : 8965

You don't have Ninjutsu as a specialty, which essentially means you need to remove your elemental affinities and your Nara clan techniques, which means that its pointless being in the Nara clan, therefore I'd advise that you exchange Taijutsu for Ninjutsu and remove anything you have linking to Taijutsu like jutsu.

Age : 35 Posts : 340

fixed.

Age : 31 Posts : 1118

The Snow Village isn't an open village, so please change to either Iwagakure or Kusagakure for your affiliation and origin. You're also quite old for a C-ranked ninja, especially if you're wanting to be in a village.

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Elder Sage wrote:: The Snow Village isn't an open village, so please change to either Iwagakure or Kusagakure for your affiliation and origin. You're also quite old for a C-ranked ninja, especially if you're wanting to be in a village.

The age is alright for his slandered. C rank shinobi's age can be up to 17 years of age.

As for the Village I will pm you about a question I have

Age : 35 Posts : 340

I don't want to be in a village. I'm a nukenin. I was told that I needed to add a village to my list.

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I think the issue is fine. Although because of the village issue it will be ES who will give you the 2/2 approval.

my 1/2 is re-submitted after the error that was brought up.

Age : 35 Posts : 340

fixed with Iwagakure

Age : 31 Posts : 1118

Quote :: Affiliation: Iwagakure

Rank: C

Change that, to this:

Quote :: Affiliation: None

Rank: C-Rank Nukenin

Age : 35 Posts : 340

Received and Edited. Seems good for completion now?

Age : 31 Posts : 1118

2/2 Approved.

Subject: Re: Nara, Mannox [C-Rank Nukenin] Sun 03 Apr 2011, 5:09 am

2/2 approved. Remember to claim the image of your character.

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