Makeshi, Suzu. [Konoha Genin]

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MAKESHI, SUZU.

THE INFO.

Name: Makeshi, Suzu.
Nickname: N/A.
Age: Fourteen [14].
Gender: Female.

Appearance:
Thick, rich locks of dark black fall to her lower back, the colour of it exact to the midnight sky. The darkness of her hair suits her pale skin, despite her many hours of days spent outdoors, daydreaming. Her eyes, which are usually shut, rarely see the sun, but when opened, two orbs of dark brown reveal themselves, seemingly lighter in the daytime. Suzu stands at an average height of 5'5", but is considered rather short among her fellow shinobi. A first glance may direct the viewer to think of her physical stability as delicate and fragile, due to her small figure.

Not a single flaw exists on her soft skin; no scars, or distinguishing marks. However, Suzu has a small tattoo on the back of her left hand, in the shape of a crescent moon. When confronted about it, she brushes it off and tries not to make a fuss about it, but the real meaning of the symbol is unknown to all, except for Suzu. Some say it symbolizes her love for the evening, as she is seen countless times, alone around at night.

So, rather than letting them go to waste, Suzu often wears revealing clothes, letting the public marvel at her perfect complexion. Perhaps too much, as her v-neckline shirt [if it could be called a shirt in the first place] goes down as far as to reveal her complete clevage, but stopping before revealing anything more. Her bottoms have the same characteristics, best described as belts, rather than legit shorts. Her professional clothes are very similar to her casual attire, as she believes that criminals, all alike, can easily be persuaded, thus, easily seduced. There have been many controversies regarding her unprofessional appearance, but her theory has been proven to be extremely effective, so the council argues no more.

Personality:
Despite her angelic appearance, Suzu possesses an inner emotional demon, whose personalities fluctuate between hormonal and aggressive. Her aggressive nature reveals itself when she is disagreed with, or when she isn't satisfied, and she shows it rather frequently, especially to persons of authority because of her personal prejudices towards them. But seldom does she show anger or fury towards the males, as the more flirtatious side comes out to play in those scenarios.

Along with her sexually unrestrained nature, Suzu is unable to stay away from troubled affairs. No one really has been able to, or has tried, to cure her of her immature and intolerable attitude, but most have given up. Regardless, she shows kindness and compassion towards the outcasts in society, most importantly to the misunderstood, as they remind her of herself.

Suzu refuses to accept help from others and never admits to being the onet at fault, even if her disposition is guilty. Her arrogance and disagreeable personality limits deep thinking, so she's well known with going with her gut feelings, or “winging” it. It has proven to work out well in combat, as she also puts her personal prejudices and vanities aside when assigned to a task. So, despite her troubled nature, her skills are high enough to tolerate.

Clan: N/A.
Nindō: N/A.

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THE NINJA.

Origin: Kirigakure no Sato.
Affiliation: Konohagakure no Sato.
Rank: Genin.
Specialties:
Main: Ninjutsu.
Sub: Medical Arts.
Elemental Affinities:
Main: Suiton.
Combat Style: Suzu may appear to be ruthless, but during combat, she'll take the time to analyze her surroundings and work things out before she makes her attack. Despite her rather aggressive nature, Suzu isn't too fond of violence, and would rather settle a deal than raise her fists.
Special Characteristics: N/A.

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THE BACKGROUND.

History:

Rogue Arc
The pitter patter of Suzu's footsteps were evident during the few years after she had been born. Living on the outskirts of Kirigakure and exposed to her surrounding waters, she had grown fond of the outside world and as she spent most of her time outdoors, her body had quickly adjusted to the cold temperature, despite it being young.

Suzu's birth was quite unusual, mostly for her mother. Two hours before labour, she was kidnapped by an employee of a vengeful ex-mother-in-law. The man who took her from her home had tied her hands to the rails of the closed-down grocery store's basement entrance. In labour, her cries of help were futile, as the building had been avoided by many. It took 3 hours for the officials to locate and find her mother. Were it not for the sloppy evidences and an efficient lead, she, and Suzu, could never have seen the daylight.

Her mother never thought of explaining the current status of who exactly Suzu's father was. A mix between the fact that she herself, was unsure of who it was, and her tendency to avoid the subject had prevented her from informing Suzu of the truth. She could only guess that he had been a Koori as well, as it would strongly explain the abilities Suzu had inherited, but the exact inheritance information was alien to her mother. As far as Suzu knew, daddy had died while protecting his country.

Working part-time at a slow marketplace, her mother was barely making enough to support herself, let alone another human being. When the market went bankrupt, she filed Suzu into an orphange. She explained to her daughter that it was just a fun trip where she'll stay overnight for a couple of days. Oblivious and innocent, Suzu trusted her for two months. When she realized that her mother wasn't coming to pick her up, the effects of her emotions were harsh. However, used to this behavour, the employees of the orphanage were able to bring Suzu back to her usual self.

A trusted man from the outskirts of Kiri had funded the Ninja Academy of Kiri for years up to this day. But due to the country's unusual way of teaching and developing the skills of the Academy Students, not much cash went into the Academy. Totally ignorant of this, the funder still does not know that most of the cash goes into the Academy teachers' pockets.

All orphans had the option of attending the Academy. The orphanage employees usually forced the children into attending, but Suzu did not need any special persuasion or lectures to "go to school."

Academy Student Arc
Bookwork and notes weren't Suzu's forte, and nor was it one of her preferred way of learning. To her, she thought the Academy was a school that only taught physical education. Outside, whether it be running or throwing kunais had always been the highlight of Suzu's day. It took her mind off her her current orphan-state, but back in the classroom, all her thoughts focused on that subject. The more she thought why her mother had left her with other miserable kids, the more she neglected her.

As she focused less and less on her mother, Suzu was able to direct her attention to her training. She had grown to be a slow-smiling individual, only speaking when asked to. Rarely did she act out, and all her emotions were bottled up in her body. The theory she had heard about bottled emotions coming back and blowing up in your face was bizarre and inaccurate to her. Nothing unfortunate or miserable had happened to her during the duration of time when she had kept her emotions to herself.

Exams neared and nearly all were devoting themselves to perfect their clones, while Suzu stood at the sidelines, wondering what difference it'd make. It's just a simple test, she thought, over and over, not knowing the opportunities this exam would open for her. Nevertheless, she went along with the flow and started to increase her training time.

A week before her scheduled exam date, Suzu had been put up for adoption by the orphanage. Usually, they weren't too keen on letting the orphans go, considering the small population of Kiri and the lack of adoptive parents, but at this time of year, orphans began pouring into the house, and some had to be let go. To their hopes, a couple called, asking to meet their future adoptive child. The exam was then rescheduled.

Being in the orphanage, Suzu grew less and less ignorant of these things. She learned the basics of how the orphanage worked, and its key events and informations. Such as the rare occasion of adoptive parents showing up. All orphans considered an honour to be taken away to a real home, but Suzu had grown to the orphanage. She was ambivalent, but to her surprise, it was clear that these folks had a way of luring her in. They were quick paced with a hint of impatience, but above all, it seemed the couple already knew enough about Suzu to take her in. Things she'd never revealed to anyone, but her mother.

Things at her new home at the heart of Kiri didn't seem to change. Her adoptive parents' efforts into spending more time with her subsided after the two days she'd spent with them, as Suzu informed them of her exam. As she told them and stressed the importance of the event, it grew more and more evident to her. It was no longer "just a test."

Her performance was nothing short of impressive. Although she wasn't at the top of her class, teachers all agreed that the training had paid off. Because of Suzu's hatred towards the mandatory book work, some teachers doubted her potential, but it was always that one person who threw off the counting. Genin life was just around the corner.

Genin Arc
Now that the exam and the graduation ceremony were finished with, her adoptive parents wished to take Suzu to the deep waters. Family trip, they called it. Suzu had never heard the word "family" in quite a long time; even her own mother seldom spoke it. To their disappointment, Suzu's graduation to Genin meant much more than they had hoped.

They didn't understand, or even try to understand the big picture. To them, being a Genin meant that Suzu had graduated the Ninja Academy. They never thought that their daughter would be so caught up with this business. Those rare moments when Suzu would take a break would be used to their advantage, but even then, Suzu knew how to avoid those "family" time. She'd indulge herself in extra training, books and be requested to be left alone. Her parents felt neglected, but their efforts never permanently ceased.

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THE ARSENAL.

Jutsu:

Academy Jutsu

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Suiton Jutsu

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Medical Jutsu

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Weapons

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I've already looked over these jutsu before in other places so this is approved.

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Archived.

Subject: Re: Makeshi, Suzu. [Konoha Genin] Sun 03 Jul 2011, 10:05 pm

Unarchived due to user request

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Ready for review.

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Age : 31 Posts : 208

2/2 Approved

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Unapproved, jutsu aren't from the Encyclopedia. You also have 25 jutsu (excluding the academy techniques) whereas Genin are only permitted 15 techniques (excluding the academy techniques)

Shame on Mino and Sean.

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Fixedddd.

Note: The medical jutsu are not from the encyclopedia, due to the lack of D and C-ranked jutsu. These were ~~made by myself~~ found on the interwebz. I slapped on the chakra costs (which do meet the requirements, my dear Adam) so it's ready for review, again~

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Quote :: Shame on Mino and Sean.

Seriously.

Jutsu aren't in the right template, add a range.

Quote :: --Name: Orb of Protection
--Rank: C
--Element: -
--Type: Medical
--Description: The Orb of Protection is a staging area for the healing to be done. It is like a barrier, but after created, it doesn't require the creator to continue turning it on. It protects the wounded Shinobi and the medic to do what they wish without interruption during the battle. However, a strong enough jutsu can beat it.
--Chakra Cost: 8

-This isn't a medical technique. It is also denied, because creating a construct of pure chakra in the shape of a dome does not only fall behind the realm of a kkg, but is classified as higher than a C-ranks worth technique.

Quote :: --Name: Water Style: Reflecting Pool
--Rank: C
--Element: Suiton
--Type: Ninjutsu
--Description: An immensely simple jutsu that consumes only a D Rank amount of chakra, despite its rank. This jutsu purifies muddy or tainted water, making it pure and reflective. This can be used on Suiton jutsu as well, and when used effectively, can create interesting effects that enhance combat ability. Any jutsu affected by this jutsu becomes pure enough to reflect images, enabling site of them by looking at the technique.
--Chakra Cost: 5

-You say it costs D-rank amount of chakra but its CP scales with a C-rank which doesn't make sense. Also its CP should always scale with it's rank so either make it D or C.

Quote :: --Name: Water Style: Bubble Burst
--Rank: C
--Element: Suiton
--Type: Ninjutsu
--Description: Though the jutsu is C Rank, it does not actually consume chakra, rather, this jutsu functions by releasing chakra presently held on a Suiton jutsu. With the formation of a single handsign, a designated Suiton jutsu that the user created will prematurely break apart into a burst of water. This burst cannot harm opponent’s though it can soak them and provide a chance to perform further Suiton jutsu.
--Chakra Cost: 6

-If has to consume chakra since it's a technique, especially if you're capable of using this technique on any suiton technique including those of B-A rank where it can douse a large area.

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Added range for all medical jutsus.

Orb of Protection: Removed~

As for Reflecting Pool and Bubble Burst, I have already removed them and added the Suiton jutsu from the encyclopedia.

Age : 31 Posts : 1118

Alright thank you.

1/2 approved.

Age : 36 Posts : 1004

2/2 u gots it