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Kamaze , Tadao .

THE INFO.

Name:Kamaze, Tadao
Nickname:Dreaded Ace
Age:16
Gender:Male
Appearance:
Long silver hair, often tied back in a ponytail. Is scarred over and blind in his left eye. Has a very slim and athletic physique. Tadao, mostly likes to wear his headband on his neak, recalling his former village. Even thought he is non-associated with any village at the moment.He wears tattered clothing usually, to give a sort of dreadfull bad look. Underneath the tattered clothing would be a long sleeve skin tight shirt. But he does like to wear non-tattered clothing to. His favorite thing to wear, is battle armor. He loves armor. Whenever he's not wearing long sleeves hes wearing his bandages wrapped around his arms. His forearms are pretty banged up scars and sorts all over them. He also wears a belt, with a holster attached and a couple compartments. Sometimes he wears black gloves made of leather, that have alot of grip on them.

Everyday Outfit(s): Looks like he has slept rough (which is often the case) and near always wears his torn and rough white coat atop scraps of clothing and armor he‘s scavenged. His arms are heavily bandaged and bare beneath them many still fresh cuts as he uses his own blood for many jutsu’s. A very rare headvisor with the (Insert Name here )
symbol hangs around his neck(The symbol means something very secure and passionate, which is why I will not address exactly what it means..to be revealed in ic.]


Personality:
Has an air of mystery about him, is mostly serious, aloof and seemingly detached, appearing cold and emotionless to others, but has a quiet childlike curiosity and a desire to know how things work and see sights for himself. He is very distrustful of people. Privately he is tortured mentally by his sadistic burdens and a dark sickness that has been slowly killing him since he made the Deal. He likes to spread fear in peoples eyes mostly. Just so that once his presence is felt, they will show respect. Because though his years he had learned that civilians just don't approach people they fear, and disrespect them.

An aggressive person for sure, he wants to get what he wants now. He demands it, but sometimes if he has that much respect for the person, he'll ask nicely. Only then if he doesn't does he either attack or let them be. But likely to attack.
He is also great at keeping his emotions bundled up inside of him. He doesn't let them out. Only on rare occasions do you see him burst. All and all he can be rather nice to you, if you play your cards right...
Good Habit(s): Disciplined, patient, entirely self sufficient, honest and respectful to innocents and kind-hearted people.

Bad Habit(s): Violent disdain toward authority, distrusts strangers, shinobi in particular. Smokes.

Like(s): Kindness, innocence, puzzles, rain and nature.

Dislike(s): Close-mindedness, authority and drunkards.
Clan:Uzumaki
Nindō:
“To free my soul and see the groundwork for future generations of our Konogakure to live in Hell. Nothing else matters.”[

THE NINJA.

Origin:Konohagakure
Affiliation:None
Rank:C- ranked
Specialties:Fuuinjutsu, Ninjutsu.
Elemental Affinities:Lightning, Earth
Combat Style:

Strength(s): Well versed in relatively unknown forbidden jutsu’s, making him unpredictable in combat. Strategic mind, disciplined and patient, always has a pre-planned exit strategy up his sleeve.

Weakness(es): Is a loner so has no-one to serve as a distraction or protect him while performing his more powerful jutsu’s, which require time to prepare. If he has planned for a fight he is extremely deadly but if he is surprise attacked and not given time to perform jutsu’s he is limited to his Taijutsu which is fair weak compared to a Jounin ranked ninja.


Special Characteristics:Chakra Based

THE BACKGROUND.

History:

Beginnings
Spoiler:

Deal
Spoiler:

Tourist

Spoiler:


Roleplay Sample:
Spoiler:

THE ARSENAL.

Jutsu, Weaponry, Items etc.

Jutsus
Spoiler:

FACE CLAIM.

Character Claim:
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PostSubject: Re: Kamaze, Tadao [Done.] Kamaze, Tadao [Done.] EmptyMon 17 Oct 2011, 12:12 am

First of all fix all your coding. Not everything needs to be bold. Also remove the color from the usual text and leave it black. You can color the title and sub titles, just don't make it yellow, it's hard to see.

You can have only 2 specialties, and since you're an Uzumaki you can have Fuuinjutsu and one more. Also choose one special characteristic from the Special Characteristic topic. Oh, almost forgot. You can't be a B rank (Chunnin) without permission from an admin. So change to genin and remove every B rank jutsu.
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fixed.
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PostSubject: Re: Kamaze, Tadao [Done.] Kamaze, Tadao [Done.] EmptyMon 17 Oct 2011, 3:06 am

Part of your application is still bolded, please fix that. Your personality should be about two paragraphs in length as well. Also, for the sake of those who might be reading this in the future, please spoiler both your history and your RP sample. Once those things are done you should be ready for approval.
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PostSubject: Re: Kamaze, Tadao [Done.] Kamaze, Tadao [Done.] EmptyMon 17 Oct 2011, 7:07 pm

The coding on the Jutsu bothers me so please fix that. Sometimes it seems you have tried to quote certain techniques and from time, there are bits and pieces out of place. Also please put Jutsu in to visible, reasonable categories, not all of them packed together like that.

Secondly, please look through the first half of your Application and fix all the space issues eg. 'Name:Kamaze, Tadao' needs a space between the Name and the category.
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What is that suppose to mean?
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