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PostSubject: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyWed 07 Apr 2010, 2:10 am

Clan Name: Tomoko Clan, The All Knowing Mind.

Clan Location: Konoha Only.

Clan Traits: When people are born, they are extremely ugly, and are often referred to as trolls. Once they hit puberty, they grow into highly beautiful people, and they often turn heads when they walk the streets of populated areas. Tomoko children develop their milestones in their childhood twice as fast. The Tomoko are extremely intelligent, and may be the most intelligent people in the world. They can calculate things extremely fast, find solutions to problems with ease. In more extreme cases some have a photographic memory.

Kekkei Genkai: The Tomoko have the ability to see ones past by touching them after increasing the flow of chakra in the brain. There are different levels in which this can be done. Tomoko in the Academy Student range to the Genin range can see about 6 or 7 hours into the targets past. Chunin can see the targets past 24-48 hours. A ranked shinobi may be able to see up to 72 to 96 hours in the past, and S ranked shinobi can see the user's past week. When the user see's the targets past it usually happens in an instant as if the memories are copied, and then pasted in the users mind.

There is also a dark secret to the Tomoko. When a member dies, another member generations later will inherit thier memories. It is not known why, but the Tomoko believe that people will inherit the memories of another member who closely resembles them mentally and spiritually. The deceased and the living share a close bond. This bond should be closely monitored, because in some rare cases the user will actually become the deceased ancestor in a way. They will begin to think exactly like them, talk like them, act like them, and they might even change their appearance to resemble them. This is the clan's secret, and even Konoha know's nothing of it. The Tomoko can be equivalent to a library. They hold the world's future in many fragments.

Secret Clan Jutsu: [Jutsu that can only be used by your clan.]


Name: 6 Hour Remembrance
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Element: None
Description: After touching the target, the user is able to see the last six hours in the targets past. This costs 5% of the user's chakra.


Name: 24-48 Hour Remembrance
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: None
Description: After touching the desired target, the user is able to see the last 24-48 hours of the targets past. This cost 10% of the user's chakra.


Name: 48-92 Hour Remembrance
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Element: None
Description: After touching the desired target, the user is able to see the last 48-92 hours of the targets past. This cost's 15% of the user's chakra.

Name: Memory Seal
Type: Medical Jutsu
Rank: A-S
Element: None
Description: After touching the desired target on the head, the user is able to literally delete that last month of the target's memory. This takes 80% of her chakra. This jutsu can be used one step further(S), in which the user deletes the entire memory of the target. The effect is that the user goes into a coma for 48 hours(Real time). After that it will take a full day(24 hours) to recover their chakra, and even then they will be weak. The target does not lose jutsu or abilties.

Name: 168 hour remembrance
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: S
Element: None
Description: After touching the desired target, the user can see the last 7 days(169 hours) of the targets past. This takes 20% of the user's chakra.

Name: Memory Subtraction and Addition
Type: Medical
Rank: S
Element: None
Description: After touching the target's head the user is able to either delete a specific memory or add an entirely new one. The user is able to add or subtract a maximum or two memories at a time. These memories, or lack of them, last forever). There is no way to reverse this or have the the target remember something that has been temporarily deleted. This can not be used in battle and must be used with a controlled target. This jutsu can take multiple hours.

History:
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Kiki Tomoko, the Tomoko Clan Founder was rumored to appear as one of the first shinobi in the world. During the first wars she fought as a mercenary, and quickly rose beyond the position of a common mercenary. Soon Kiki had a company of her own mercenaries which fought alongside the uchiha for a short time before abandoning them to a rival clan. Tomoko's company was slaughtered and she was taken captive by the man in charge. Kiki was treated like a common slave, and eventually used her intelligence to become the commander's mistress. The army fought countless times against minor bloodlines and common mercenaries. Kiki soon became the brains behind the entire army. She was the meaning of the saying "Behind every great man lies a great woman."

Throughout the years Kiki laid with the commander many times, and bore 12 children by the time of her death. 4 Children possessed the bloodline, though she kept it a secret. Kiki would soon murder her master, and flee leaving the children without the bloodline to fend for themselves at a young age. She took the children to a valley where they lived for 15 years. Soon after those 15 years Kiki died of a brain tumor. The children would continue the bloodline for the sake of their mothers memory.

For about 50 years the four children expanded the clan in that same valley, later named Tomoko Valley. However a massive blow would hit the clan. Surrounding people living in and out of the valley heard of the Tomoko's power, and began to think of them as witches and demons. Hundreds of people raided the villages of the Tomoko's and butchered well over half of the clan in the span of about a year. During these months the clan members were taught in the way of warfare and began fighting back. Some of them became complete savages. The Tomoko clan became to disorganized they began wandering around the world. Some became so poor they began to eat the bodies of their victims. The clan disappeared for about 100 years before a small tribe returned to seek safety. Soon after that time the Fire Country was established, and they wished to seek safety at the shinobi village. Throughout the years, women have been elected to lead the clan because a great woman had started it. Kiki became a god and was worshiped. There was a prophecy that whoever inherited Kiki's memories would rise to become a great woman, but would have a tragic ending much like Kiki's. The clan has also not forgotten the Uchiha's betrayal, and many memories spit upon the mention of an Uchiha.
Clan Details: Open. I would like if people got my permission before joining.


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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyFri 09 Apr 2010, 4:24 am

Memory Sub/Add-

needs to have something that makes sure it's impossible to use this in battle, like, it takes an hour to use or something. Other than that, looks good.
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyFri 09 Apr 2010, 4:38 am

Why shouldn't I be able to use it in battle?
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyFri 09 Apr 2010, 5:35 am

Because you need to concentrate and spend time finding specific memories. Not only that, but you need to have the target in a controlled enviroment, otherwise you would just go deleting random memories. In order to be specific, you need time, easily 6 hours if not more to sort, find, and add/delete.
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyFri 09 Apr 2010, 5:40 am

I'd also like to point out that altering the brain like that seems more like Eijutsu then Ninjutsu.
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyFri 09 Apr 2010, 5:50 am

Oh Never mind I misread what Pat had said.
And what is Eijutsu?
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyFri 09 Apr 2010, 5:51 am

Medical Ninjutsu
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyFri 09 Apr 2010, 6:07 am

Alright, i fixed the problems? Anymore things I need to edit/
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CYANIDE CANDY
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptySun 11 Apr 2010, 6:03 am

It has been agreed with a few mods that altering the brain and messing with the mind leans more towards Medical Ninjutsu. You'll need to edit your jutsu and make them Medical Ninjutsu.
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptySun 11 Apr 2010, 7:23 am

For all of them?

I agree that the following are medical: Memory Subtraction & Addition and Memory Seal

However, the other jutsu(24,48, and 168 Hour remembrance) require that the user just touch the subject. It doesn't change any part of the brain, and it doesn't mess with it. The user also doesn't even need to know on how to apply a band aid in order to do those. I think the Medical Category is for Jutsu that need Medical Understanding and Practice in order to perform. The 24 Hour, 48 hour, and 168 Hour jutsu do not.
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptySun 11 Apr 2010, 10:55 pm

Mm, I see your point.

Please change Memory Subtraction & Addition and Memory Seal to Medical Ninjutsu, but the others are fine as Ninjutsu.

By the way, under Memory Seal, you have it's element listed as Ninjutsu. Razz
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptySun 11 Apr 2010, 11:43 pm

Thanks, Very Happy.

Done
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyTue 13 Apr 2010, 4:40 am

My character is waiting on this clan...

Approved?
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyTue 13 Apr 2010, 4:50 am

Your adding and subtracting memories only last one week? So you can remove a memory,but after 1 week they would regain it?
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyTue 13 Apr 2010, 5:03 am

I assumed it would be too OP for A rank. I will make it S rank and make it permanent, any other issues?
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyTue 13 Apr 2010, 5:18 am

Ummm, how is this not a weakened down version of Yamanaka?
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyTue 13 Apr 2010, 5:19 am

It's completely different?

The Yamanaka control people, the Tomoko read peoples memories, or can add or delete some.
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyTue 13 Apr 2010, 6:34 am

How is your memory seal different from your adding and subtracting jutsu? One memory, or two can be deleted for good, or an entire month can be deleted? (Just asking for clarificaton)
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyTue 13 Apr 2010, 7:23 am

The month deletion takes much more time, preparation, and have more consequences since it is deleting the last month of the characters memory.
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PostSubject: Re: Tomoko-Finished- Tomoko-Finished- EmptyTue 13 Apr 2010, 7:28 am

Alrighty, since I dont see this being a huge problem on usage due to time constraints on the technques, approved.
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