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Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin]
Raisuke
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Subject: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Wed 05 Jun 2013, 8:02 pm
Yamanaka, Ju
THE INFO
Name: Raisuke Ju Nickname: "Juroi", "Nisuke", "Rogue" Age: 18 Gender: Male Appearance: First things first, Ju is somewhat short for an average person his age.He is 1.65 meters tall and weighs 50 kg. Other than that, he is quite a "standard" Yamanaka, with his blond hair that he takes care of so patiently and passionately; and his multi-toned blue eyes that cause the illusion that his eyes are windows to a deep, but clean ocean. On sunny days, his eyes sometimes turn out to look green, instead of blue; but that is merely a result of the light. By the clothing, he is once again more of a "standard" Yamanaka clan heir, instead of an original designer of clothes.
He wears white and black clothes, and on them he wears (as most of the other Yamanaka do too) purple/indigo pieces of clothing. (For example; his indigo scarf and the purple headband he wears on the upper part of his right arm.) The only thing that may differ him from usual Yamanaka clan heirs may be his messy and spiky hair, which he is proud of, since he would want to be differed from the part of the clan that seeks only beauty (which Ju finds arrogant, and idiotic).
Anyway, he usually wears some white robes over slim, black clothes; basically a t-shirt and a pair of trousers. The white robe is long enough to cover the back of his trousers, but not large enough to make Ju look any bigger than he actually is. His usuaaly-spiky blonde hairs are once in a while combed to seem straight. His low height makes it possible for him to take on stealth missions. Another advantage his height provides is being able to enter small doors or gates a usual person won't be able to go through.
A disadvantage may be that his "Short Range" is shorter than a usual person's. For example, of course somebody taller than him would have longer arms, and the person would have a longer range even if they both equipped the same weapon.
Forehead Protector: Ju wears his headband around his right arm. The whole headband except for its metal part was painted purple, this love for the color being a habit of his, being raised by the Yamanaka.
Personality: Ju is, first of all, silent. Not asocial, nor shy, but just silent. In the short amount of time he lived for, he had learned that speaking without thinking twice was the most arrogantly, utterly stupid thing he had turned out to face with. Both this, and the fact that he prefers his inner world to the beauties of the physical world(*), caused him to think too much, sometimes causing an "overdrive", and not speak near as much. He rather listens to everything, observes the situation carefully, makes his mind up on what his decision will be, and finally, when he has no question marks in his mind, he helps other people figure out what his mind has concluded, or what his opinion is.
This being the case, he is very proud of being a heir of the Yamanaka clan, one that is known for their mental gift. He is committed to the clan, not only because of this particular reason, but also because of many other things, such as his physical apperance being an inheritance from the clan, as well as his love for the color purple, which makes him feel like he is "more of a Yamanaka". The other thing that he thinks makes him more of a Yamanaka is his way of ninja; not only his stubbornness, but also the fact that logic's place being much mroe important to him than feelings (that may not actually be the way of the Yamanaka, but at least one of many consequenses of the way he has been treated, or what he had lived through.
Other than that, ju likes being around people, and even talking to friends about everything and nothing once in a while. His behaviour would change according to the situation, for example, he would of course be "colder" and more silent around people he does not know, when he can be warm, cheerful and happy around his friends, or those whom he had acknowledged as respectable human beings. When he is not around friends, nor people he does not know, he would often get distracted by the smallest thing and then become lost in thoughts, usually forgetting what he was doing before he got distracted.
*The fact that he prefered his inner world, and his mental side to the physical world and his physical senses, has caused him to develop a second personality, that is fortunately (yet) passive, meaning the personality hadn't yet taken control of the boy's body. In this passive stage, all the contact that is likely to happen can be either Ju hearing this persona's voice in his head, or seeing his image in his inner world (pretty much like Jinchuriki facing their Bijuu, but of course in a different manner. Also, Ju will travel into this world oftenly, due to his psychological problems. This second persona is even more silent than Ju himself, but his motives are different. He sees himself a being greater than any other life form. The persona also has anappearance that is completely different from Ju's. First of all, he is almost twice as long as Ju is; has long, straight, green hair and shiny green eyes.
This second persona, even when he is passive, can communicate with Ju through telepathy, and can even interrupt Ju when he is using Yamanaka clan Jutsus, for example, join the telepathic communications taking place, or appearing in the head of somebody else, when Ju is using Mind Reading Technique on that person. Also, he sometimes appears in the real world like an imaginary friend, only able to be seen by Ju himself, or those who he is connected to with Telepathic Communication Technique.
Origin: Land Of Lightning Affiliation: Kumogakure Rank: Genin Specialties:
Ninjutsu (Main)
Taijutsu (Sub)
Elemental Affinities:
Fuuton (Main)
Raiton (Sub)
Combat Style:
Inheritance of the Yamanaka Family:
Being a Yamanaka clan member, Ju has developed his skills in the clan jutsu, such as the Mind Reading Technique or the Telepathic Communication Technique. Having slightly more chakra than an average person his age, he had also trained himself in Ninjutsu, so he can keep the enemy in long range if possible. He would rather use Yamanaka clan Jutsu than other non-elemental Ninjutsu, but he doesn't feel even slightly bad if he needs to use some techniques that do not represent his clan, he is quite O.K. with it.
Ju Ken & Ni Ken:
Even though he is great at Long Range battles, Ju has no trouble when acting in close-range combat, him also being a Taijutsu specialist, and having the capability and knowledge of the Ni Ken and Ju Ken Combat Styles.
Firstly, Ni Ken (Ni: Two, Ken: Fist) is the combat style that was taught to Ju by his father Katsu, who was also known as Noroi (literal meaning: Curse). "The Art Of Two Fists", "The Art of Twin Fists", or "Double Fist" is pretty basic. It is the art of using the two symetrical sides of the body evenly, or in a flowing motion, that they would balance each other. Some examples of thing Ju is able to do may be using two, four, six or 8 weapons at the same time, while each weapon can move in a continuos motion, distracting the oppoent and making it hard to track the movements of each weapon, even if not all the weapons are used for the attack at the same time (which can also be done.). If not used without weapons, it can be used as using edges of the body (hands, wrists, elbows, shoulders, etc.) in an experienced way, moving easily, knowing what can be done. This ranges from doing spins to tackles, each in different appearances.
Ju Ken (Ju: Ten, Ken: Fist)can be considered as "the limit to Ni Ken". It was invented by Ju himself, and he even got named after this combat style. The user will be able to use 10 weapons, or 10 parts of his body at the same time; this combat style being far mroe developed, allowing Ju to move swiftly, and do non-expected attacks. The Ju Ken can be improved even greater, using 5 parts or weapons instead of 10 to make the combat more precise. This art is called Go Ken, The Art Of Five Fists.
Special Characteristics:
Physical Based:
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Chakra Based:
Name: Increased Chakra Capacity Rank: C Type: Chakra Based Physical Requirements: N/A Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic. Description: Through extensive meditation and physical training the ninja's chakra capacity increases by 20CP.
Mental Based:
-
Misc Based:
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THE BACKGROUND
History:
Pre-Academy The son of a Shinobi called Katsu Goka and a Kunoichi called Nira Yamanaka, both living in the Village Hidden in the Clouds, was born on the mountain, in a room full of fresh air with open windows looking at the valley. "It is a boy !". The father was holding the kid close to his chest. The boy was blonde and had blue eyes; just like his mother, and not anything like the father who had dark brown hair and crimson eyes. The boy's name was an argument before the birth, but when Katsu saw what the kid looked like, he gave in to the Yamanaka's opinion: "Your name will be Nero Yamanaka..." the man whispered into the newborn's ear.
After that day, for the next several years, Nero (as his name was back then) was beiedng taken care of by both his father and his mother; usually not at the same time due to their job, at least one of them always having a mission they had to accomplish. Maybe this turned out to be better for Nero, because due to this fact, he has developed himself both in close-range battles, being trained Taijutsu (and even the combat style his father himself has invented) by his father, and the way of the Yamanaka, also Ninjutsu (including basic things such as the academy techniques) by his mother. So, even before joining the academy, he had taken many steps towards the goal of becoming a ninja.
Academy Due to the fact of Nero being trained by his father and mother in the way of the ninja already, he had no trouble with the lessons taught at the Academy. In fact, thanks to the fact that he already knew anything that was being taught at during the lessons, he did not need to work on any of the lessons at all, so he could easily find time for himself, to train in the backyard of his house, or outside with some of the other "experienced" Academy students. In fact, the time he spent on training during the Academy is when he had invented and developed "The Art Of Ten Fists", Ju Ken.
After completing this task, he was given the name "Juro" by his parents. That was the first time Ju (as he was calling himself now) felt truly happy, achieving such an important thing for the first time, which motivated him even more into becoming a ninja. And him already being superior to most of the other students, he easily graduated from the Academy, and became a Genin, now an official ninja serving the Village Hidden in the Clouds.
Life as a Genin Starts After graduating, Ju's life made a wild turn. His life was suddenly much better, and he was suddenly much more comforted. His parents, Katsu and Niro were proud of him. The life of the family was never better. Unfortunately, this happiness didn't last long. Now that Ju was a Genin, and also a teenager able to take care of himself, his parents started going out to missions at the same time, now that they didn't need to leave one behind to take care of Nero, who was just a little kid back then. And one day, they were assigned to the same mission, that was to assassinate a spesific person planing a coup d'etat on the current lead of the village. Unfortunately, as it turns out, the person was way out of the league of his mother and his father. Ju used to count days until his parents returned home, but this time, all he got was a letter... A letter stating the death of both of his parents. That was the day Ju became the person he is today. Silent, and psychologically problematic. In days after the occasion, he developed the second personality known as "Akuma".
Roleplay Sample:
Spoiler:
A single tear was shed by the young Yamanaka when he was ripping the letter apart. "No." he tried to tell himself, deep down, "A shinobi must not show his tears. Never.". But that voice was being pushed down by both the feelings, the grief, the shock Ju was trying to deal with, and also the sound of his heartbeat, which was now so loud, Ju could not hear himself braething, which he was heardly managing to do. He cleared the single tear he shed from his face, with the back of his right hand. Ju knew he shouldn't have shed another single tear. He tried to keep his feelings shut, deep down. He was now only standing on the street. Only standing, and listening to his heartbeat. If he was careful enough, he could have heard another voice in his head, talking to him, tr"ying to reach him. But unfortunately, he was taken away by the sound of the wind that was now blowing stronger into the body of the short and light boy. He was now having a harder time standing straight.
Ju decided to return to his home and try accepting the deaths of the two ninja. He would walk along the path he had first taken to retrieve the letter that was for him. As soon as he returned to his house, he went to his room, jumped to his bed, and depressively thought about all those things he has lived. The grief was something he was not familiar with. It didn't only depress him, but it scared him too. After a few minutes, he fell asleep. In his dream, he saw a tall, green haired and good-looking man staring at him from a distance of 5 to 10 meters. "Finally..." the man told. Ju woke up after a whole day of sleep. He heard the voice again, though he was now fully awake. "Finallly..." the voice repeated, this time more peacefully.
Ju jumped out of his bed. He tried to shout "What the hell ?", but the only thing that came out was a whisper: "What ?"... He stood still, looked around to make sure the sound was coming from outside, and it was not just something he thought was happening. He believed that the voice was his father's, and he heard it due to the grief he was living. He was only partially right. It was a made-up voice, that happened to be born as an outcome of the grief. But the voice didn't belong to his father Nero. It was heard again. "You can hear me, can't you ? Who the hell are you ? What the hell are you". Ju was this time, even more scared. "What the hell is going on ?" he thought to himself. The voice answered to the thought. "Answer my question first...". Ju was shocked. He realised that the voice was coming from within his head. He closed his eyes. He saw the green haired man once again. The man's appearance then blurred and disappeared. As this was happening, the face of the man was looking disappointed.
That was the first time ju has met his second personality, though he didn't yet know that. Ju thought it was a one-time hallucination that would have been "cured" in days or in an even shorter time.
THE ARSENAL
Jutsu:
Ninjutsu | Fuuton:
Name: Daitoppa - Great Breakthrough Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m) Element: Fuuton (Wind) Description: This is a relatively simple technique that creates a sudden gust of wind, but its scale varies greatly depending on the user. If used by a superior shinobi, it has enough destructive power to knock down a large tree. The wind from the squall can blow away all things in the user's line of sight. A variation of the technique involves a smaller blast of wind which gets ignited with flame. Chakra Cost: 9
Name: Reppushou - Gale Wind Palm Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Fuuton (Wind) Description: Fuuton • Reppushou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Wind Element. After forming the needed hand seals, the user will send a strong gust of wind towards his/her target. When acting in conjunction with another thrown weapon, the wind can increase its power and deadliness. Chakra Cost: 5
Ninjutsu | Raiton:
Name: Raitoningu no Kengen - Lightning Manifestation Rank: C Type: Weaponry Range: Close (0 - 5m), Med (5 - 10m), Far (10m+) Element: Raiton Description: Raitoningu no Kengen is a weaponry technique utilizing the lightning element. Using their lightning affinity, the Kumogakure shinobi is able to enhance any weapon they possess and coat it with lightning chakra to give it a more powerful hit. The lightning will be able to numb the area where the weapon strikes and also cause minor burns. Any weapon can be enhanced by this attack, Kunai, Shuriken, Blades or even Arrows. The technique can only be used on weapons though, once the weapon has struck something the lightning will fade away. Chakra Cost: 6
Name: Gōmon no Muchi - Torture Whip Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0 - 5m) Element: Raiton Description: Gōmon no Muchi is a ninjutsu technique utilizing the lightning element. After performing the required handseals, the Kumogakure shinobi will be able to use their chakra manipulation and affinity to make a whip of lightning within their dominant hand. The whip measures to one and a half metres long. If a person is struck by this whip then they will suffer from flesh wounds, first degree burns and also have the effected area made numb. The whip requires a constant supply of chakra, if the user lets go of the whip even for a second then the whip is instantly deactivated. Chakra Cost: 6 [2]
Name: Raitoningu no Kenshutsu - Lightning Detection Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0 - 5m) Element: Raiton Description: Raitoningu no Kenshutsu is a ninjutsu technique utilizing the lightning element. After performing the required handseals the Hidden Cloud member will be able to send out a pulse of lightning, covering a radius of five metres with the user being at the centre. The dome - like lightning will allow the user to detect any chakra - enhanced traps, people, animals or weapons coming at them from blind spots. This can only be used once per post and anyone who is caught in the pulse will feel a tingling sensation covering their entire body. It's use is to ensure that safety is always maintained for the Kumogakure shinobi. Chakra Cost: 8
Yamanaka Clan Jutsu:
Name: Shinranshin no Jutsu | Mind Transfer Jutsu Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: - Description: Mind Transfer Jutsu is a technique used by the members of the Yamanaka clan. This technique allows the user to enter the mind of another person or even an animal. The user transfers their consciousness to the opponent, giving them complete control of the body for the duration. Their original body is left defenseless while this jutsu is active, leaving it susceptible to attack until they return. The mind transfer is quick but moves in a straight direction, and takes a few seconds to return to the user's body if it misses. Should any physical injury befall the victim's body while the mind-link is active, it would cause the user's body to also receive those same injuries. For example, should the victim's arm be detached, the user's arm would be detached as well, leading to the conclusion that, should the victim die, the user would also die. This can be rectified if user cancels the jutsu before the victim's body receives the damage. This technique can be used on both characters, and NPC. Chakra Cost: 5CP (Additional 2CP Per Post)
Name: Seishinetsudoku | Mind Reading Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m) Element: - Description: Seishinetsudoku is a technique used by the members of the Yamanaka clan. By placing a hand on the target's head, the user will be able to enter the target's subconscious and extract any information needed, even if the target has forgotten it himself or has had it blocked. One may not learn specific details such as secret clan jutsu through this method. Chakra Cost: 6CP
Ninjutsu | Non-Elemental:
Name: Kumogakure no Jutsu - Hidden Cloud Technique Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0 - 5m), Med (5 - 10m) Element: - Description: Kumogakure no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique utilizing no element. A technique that imitates that of the Kirigakure no Jutsu, once the user has performed the required handseals they will be able to call upon a thick and heavy cloud that will appear almost out of nowhere. The cloud will be able to cover a ten metre radius around the user and only the user is able to sense where others lurk within the cloud. Those with doujutsu or chakra sensing techniques are also able to see through this thick cloud but without any aid, then you'll be blind within the cloud. If a C - Rank or above fuuton technique is activated, then the cloud will be blown away. Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Kuchiyose no Jutsu - Summoning Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: A powerful jutsu, Ninpo Kuchiyose allows a ninja to summon animals and objects to fight on their behalf. The ninja normally signs a blood contract with the animal species, which allows them to summon different size and skill levels of creature. Signing this contract also allows the animal to reverse summon the human ninja to their location. Chakra Cost: 5 (C Rank Summon), 10 (B), 15 (A), 20 (S)
Taijutsu Techniques:
Name: Rariatto - Lariat Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m) Element: - Description: Rariatto is a taijutsu technique. After gathering enough chakra within their entire body, the user will be able to gain an sudden burst in strength and speed. The user will straighten their dominant arm so that they can form a greater attack. Then using their speed the user will rush towards their target and ram into their upper chest with their strengthened arm, forcing the opponent to the ground. Chakra Cost: 8
Name: Modoru Kikkā - Back Kicker Rank: D Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m) Element: - Description: Modoru Kikkā is a taijutsu technique. Once the user has gathered enough chakra to their feet, they will try to maneuver themselves behind their opponent so that they can deliver a chakra - enhanced kick to the back. A normal kick would be damaging enough but to have chakra reinforcing it will result in more pain. If a direct hit is made, they'll be able to force their opponent down onto their knees or flat onto their face. Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Dynamic • Entry - Dainamikku • Entorii Rank: D Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: This jutsu simply appears to be a flying jump kick, often performed on the face of an enemy, while dramatically screaming the words "Dynamic Entry". Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Konoha Reppuu - Leaf Violent Wind Rank: D Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: The move here is a simple rear spinning low kick, but a strong enough user can send a large adult flying as if they weighed nothing. The goal is to throw the enemy off balance, and deal damage to the lower half of their body. Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Konoha Senpuu - Leaf Whirlwind Rank: D Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: A taijutsu where one launches a succession of high kicks and low kicks. Firstly, the opponent's evasion margin is restrained upon seeing the high kick, thus augmenting the chances for the low kick to hit the mark. Chakra Cost: 4
Nin-Taijutsu Techniques:
Name: Rakurai - Lightning Strike Rank: D Type: Nin - Taijutsu Range: Close (0m) Element: Raiton Description: Rakurai is a ninjutsu and taijutsu mixture utilizing the lightning element. After gathering chakra to the fist, the user is able to create multiple sparks of electricity to form around the top of their hand for it then to alter into a source of lightning. This lightning is to enhance the pain when delivering a punch and also numbs the area of attack for an entire post. Chakra Cost: 3
Academy Jutsu:
Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique Rank: E Type: Genjutsu Range: N/A Medium: Optical Element: N/A Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others. Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: 10 meters Element: N/A Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread. Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand. Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu. Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Chozou no Jutsu • Storage Technique Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed. Chakra Cost: 1 to seal; 1 to unseal.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: NA Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
(15 Jutsu in total.)
Weapons:
Custom:
Name: Noroi's Throwing Daggers Rank: D Type: Close Range - Short Blade Quantity: 10 Description: [Appearance] 10 daggers left for Ju as a legacy from his mother. Both are double-edged blades used for hitting, stabbing or thrusting. Short and small, they are wielded as easily as kunai or shuriken, and are perfect when wishing to perform quick stabbings.
Close-Range:
Name: Ninjato Rank: D Type: Close Range - Short Blade Quantity: 5 Description: Short and straight, this blade takes a similar form of a katana, but without the curvature in the blade. With the blade measuring no more than one and a half feet, and a square guard on top, this weapon has been popularized by many ninja, especially the ANBU, hence the name.
Character Claim: Toshiro Hitsugaya Source: Bleach Image: http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2013/113/2/b/bleach___toshiro_hitsugaya_by_aidenkyoto-d4rd1qr.jpg
Last edited by Raisuke on Sat 15 Jun 2013, 11:38 am; edited 3 times in total
Raisuke
Posts : 13
Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Sat 08 Jun 2013, 4:20 pm
Done, I believe.
Adam
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Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Sun 09 Jun 2013, 2:31 am
Can you not change our forum background please? o.o
Pretty Girl Swag
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Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Sun 09 Jun 2013, 4:39 am
I'm also going to ask you to not have your youtube embed be an autoplay. You're welcome to have it there, but please don't make it play without being clicked on.
Raisuke
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Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Sun 09 Jun 2013, 8:35 am
Sorry, sorry. Done, what else ?
Raisuke
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Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Wed 12 Jun 2013, 11:03 am
Bump
Chris
Age : 28 Posts : 3145
Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Thu 13 Jun 2013, 4:33 pm
Let's see.
Your appearance needs to be increased. We encourage at least two paragraphs, and in comparison with your sizable personality and combat style, I'm not sure why you opted for a much shorter physical description.
Also, could you remove all the 'Total Jutsu' remarks? It might just be my OCD, but they aren't really necessary and in the future, may be a source of frustration for moderators.
Could you mention how large your custom daggers are? All I need is something along the lines of 'slightly larger than a kunai', for reference's sake.
Also, Academy Jutsu do not count towards your Starting 15 Jutsu Limit. So you can have 9 more techniques ^_^
Raisuke
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Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Thu 13 Jun 2013, 11:00 pm
Chris wrote:
Could you mention how large your custom daggers are? All I need is something along the lines of 'slightly larger than a kunai', for reference's sake.
That's actually a quote from the "dagger" in the universal short-range weapons list. I changed it anyway, just saying this in case you'd like that to be changed too (or not, idk how things actually work here)
Chris wrote:
Also, Academy Jutsu do not count towards your Starting 15 Jutsu Limit. So you can have 9 more techniques ^_^
Thanks ^.^ Done. And the other 2 things you asked are done too.
Chris
Age : 28 Posts : 3145
Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Fri 14 Jun 2013, 9:29 pm
Well since they're custom, I wanted it to be more specific ^^
Also I just noticed that you can't have 'Noroi's Gou' since Genin can only use D Rank Weapons. Sorry.
By the way shouldn't 'Raitoningu no Kenshutsu - Lightning Detection' be in its own section (e.g. Kumo Techniques)? Currently it's under Yamanaka techniques.
Raisuke
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Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Sat 15 Jun 2013, 11:38 am
Chris wrote:
Also I just noticed that you can't have 'Noroi's Gou' since Genin can only use D Rank Weapons. Sorry.
By the way shouldn't 'Raitoningu no Kenshutsu - Lightning Detection' be in its own section (e.g. Kumo Techniques)? Currently it's under Yamanaka techniques.
Ooops, sorry. Fixed. I put that one and some others in the "Raiton Ninjutsu" section instead of "Kumo-Spesific Jutsu" section, as well as Lariat in Taijutsu and Rakurai in Nintaijutsu so they are easier to find.
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Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Sat 15 Jun 2013, 2:10 pm
Good stuff ^^
Welp, I can't see anything wrong with this application anymore
Which means, it's hereby Approved 1/2
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Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Ju [Kumo Genin] Mon 17 Jun 2013, 12:25 pm
Job well done on the application, Raisuke! Can't seem to find anything wrong and I look forward to seeing how your second personality develops.
Approved. 2/2
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