Poison Request, Chakra Fever

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Poison Name: Chakra Fever
Rank: D
Poison Description: Having come into contact with poisons and chakra study in her days at the academy, Wanizame thought of the possibility of a poison that fed on chakra to cause more harm to the human anatomy. Lack of experience and materials left it hard to create, leaving her with a much milder version of the poison she had in mind. Pinkish in color, unable to become a solid unless frozen inside a block of ice, it created flu-like symptoms as it received more chakra to feed off of. With the lack of rare plants, Wanizame’s relative new abilities in the field of poisons left her first attempt at this rather mild and easily curable with a few common herbs.
Solid State: Can only be contained inside a solid (Ice)
Liquid State: Oily Pink Colored
Gaseous State: Pinkish Hazy Heavy Mist
Poison Effect(s):
[ Post 0 / Nothing]
[ Post 1 / Inability to concentrate the more a person’s chakra is used.]
[ Post 2 / Fever and headaches begin to get worse with each jutsu and as more chakra is used the symptoms move towards flu-like symptoms without the cough.]
[ Post 3 / Fever has mostly run its course, though the inability to concentrate fully is still there if there has been a lot of chakra used in the last couple of posts.]
[Post 4/ The Poison has run its course

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How does it enter the body? Why does it function better with more chakra?

Properties of each state, for physical, is it tough? is it brittle? is it ductile? etc.; for liquid, is it poisonous in this state? is it a viscous fluid? Does it have any scent? can it be used to poison other liquids or solids? at what point does it become a liquid from its solid or gaseous states?; for gaseous, does it have any scent? how thick? is it light enough to be dispersed? if so, by what means? how does the gas 'move'?

Your first post effect is very vague, to what degree are they unable to concentrate? How is this related to the chakra used? What is the exact ratio here, using jutsu ranks (D, C, B...)? For the second post effect, describe flu-like symptoms, not many are apt to go look things up when your poison should provide such information. To what degree are the fever and headaches (also, you say they get worse, but you haven't actually induced a fever or headache previously so how does it get worse?) Once again, the ratio, 'a lot' is very vague, and how poor is the concentration? Same with the third post.

Age : 34 Posts : 591

Delete this app please, taking character in different direction.

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