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Aburame, Eight

THE INFO.

Name:Aburame, Eight
Nickname:
Age: Fifteen [15]
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Like all Aburame, Eight is mysterious. In appearance and also in personality, lets start with his hair. Eight's hair naturally stick ups without the use of any products, it also follows the other males in family and is the colour black, this helps him blend into dark area's as many people won't be able to see the top of his head. But this is countered with his pale complexion and also his sunglasses as if a little light shines of his shades then he will be noticed. The glasses run in the family as all Aburame's wear them to keep their mysterious ego's up.

Eight's glasses are shaped like a rectangle, more longer in horizontal ways then diagonal ways. These glasses were passed down to him from his granddad just before his death from natural causes, because of this happening, he always keeps them on his face and rarely takes them off unless he is sleeping. He doesn't like his eyes as they are small and remind others of bugs. which spooks them out a little bit. Also he has a straight nose with small nostrils and his lips are quite thin. Eight has always wondered why the Aburame wear glasses, but he has never asked, therefore he has came up with his own theory. The Aburame wear glasses to make them mysterious just like the bugs that in-habit their bodies.

Going down to his attire, he wears a light blue shirt. This is quite a baggy shirt, so people often mistake it for a jacket, where in fact it is not. Due to the shirt being a lighter material then most jackets, this allows him to move easier and faster with hardly any weight on him, the long sleeves also mask where he is placing his bugs or if he is using them at all. Continuing down, Eight wears black shorts, that just go over his knees, this again makes his bugs harder to see, also it lets Eight move more freely which he is aiming for.

Wrapped around his leg is the everyday kunai pouch and then the shuriken pouch is located on his waist at the back. Then he just wears the average shinobi sandals, he wears the colour black as that is one of his favourite colours. Due to his mysterious look, many people just try to avoid him when walking down the road, Eight doesn't like this so much but he doesn't really mind as he has his own friends that he gets on very will with, also many people are very surprised when they find out that he is a genin of the village.
Forehead Protector:
Following the genin flow, the most seen place to put a protector is on the forehead. So thats what he does.
Personality:
Eight is quite a mysterious one out of the other shinobi from the village. Even if he is not as mysterious as his family members, he is still quite weird to the other genin that have been around him and talked to him. His mysterious side of him is that he does not let anyone know his weakness, where as many may seek help to strengthen their's, Eight keeps it to himself and thinks of a way to get around it, so he can solve the problem that he is having. He also doesn't let anyone know his strengths, this helps when coming into a fight, as his opponent has no dirt on him it means that people have to be weary of him and this may cause them to slip up due to the stress on their shoulders.

But as I said before, he is not as mysterious as his family. This is because un-like his family, Eight actually likes to have a laugh with his friends and team mates, this means that he can have a good time and actually show it to his friends making them feel more comfortable when around him. Eight hates to make people un-comfortable or awkward and this is why he likes to show his emotions to his friend, but this changes when in a fight. Instead of showing how he feels, he hides it really well so his enemy can not get one up on him.

Due to his family getting quite a lot of hassle due to their weirdly amazing clan ability, Eight is quite protective of his family and will try to scare someone if they dare try and take the mick out of them. This sometimes makes Eight hated due to his threats and sometimes he has got into a fight because of it, he never backs down because that shows weakness and that is one thing that he will never show. Also his love for his clan goes so far, that he wants to make a own district for the Aburame.

He likes to wonder the streets and look at different buildings getting a sight for everything and different kind of architecture. Sometimes he may jot them down on a small piece of paper so that he can remember what it looks like, he also loves to draw but mainly just draws different building ideas. Eight hates arrogant people and would gladly love to slap them around a little, but then again. He doesn't.
Clan: Aburame
Nindō: 'Theres always choice'

THE NINJA.

Origin: Hi No Kuni
Affiliation: Konohagkure
Rank: Genin [C-Rank]
Specialties: Main: Ninjutsu | Sub: Taijutsu
Elemental Affinities: Main: Lightning [Raiton] Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] 18px-Nature_Icon_Lightning.svg |Sub: Earth [Doton] Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] 18px-Nature_Icon_Earth.svg
Combat Style:
As his bugs are his main weapon in his arsenal. He usually uses them and due to their effectiveness from far range, that is what he tends to do, Eight usually uses his bugs to mask his appearance and also uses them to sneak up on the enemy which they won't be expecting. But don't get Eight wrong, if he has to get into taijutsu, he will. That is why he has taught himself in the art of hand to hand and in sometime soon, wishes to mix his bugs into it as well. This has never been done before but Eight is certain it will work, there is already a bug barrier but nothing involving bugs when hitting a person, he wants to change this.

Eight had always been good in far ranged ninjutsu since he was a little kid and it stayed that way through out his life, his dad taught him that way and that is basically the only way he knew how to fight, before a little while ago. As soon as he can, he wants to get them rare nano bugs that have been spreading around the clan, then he will be the best. Aburame's aren't very known to be close range, around the world they are known for their sneakiness and their amazing skill to get around un-seen. Eight wants to change this and show the world that they can actually deal some damage with their fists. Some may say this will un-balance the whole thing, but he knows that the Aburame are looked down on by other clans and he in-tends to do something about it.
Special Characteristics:

Spoiler:

THE BACKGROUND.

History:
Crawley Kid:

Bug in the Academy:

Post Academy:
Roleplay Sample:
From Ingoo:
Really?
THE ARSENAL.

Clan Jutsu:

Academy Jutsu:

Lightning Jutsu:

Doton Jutsu:

FACE CLAIM.

Character Claim: Shino Aburame
Source: Naruto
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Completion bump.
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] EmptyWed 23 Jan 2013, 1:19 am

So. How about that there roleplay sample?
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] EmptyWed 23 Jan 2013, 1:20 am

Well I've been on this site for years, I understand if a new player joined. But for someone that most people know can ropleplay..

EDIT: But there ya go!
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] EmptyThu 24 Jan 2013, 6:02 am

Nindo is a rule your character lives by, not just a random line.

Origin is meant for the country you're from, not the village. In your case it's Hi no Kuni

For the combat style, I would like it to be a little bit more longer.

As for the history, that needs to be way longer.

Drew, you might have been on this site for years, but that doesn't matter, we always require an RP sample. So it's nice that you made it after all.

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Name: Kangekiha - Inspiration Wave
You need to have an earth jutsu for this one, and you decided not to start with the Earth element. It is your choice but I suggest starting with 2 elements from the start and you can have up to 15 jutsu. You now have 6, counting this one, or 5 if you decide that you will start with only 1 element since you will have to remove the jutsu.
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Alrighty roo, edited!
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] EmptyThu 24 Jan 2013, 12:15 pm

You still can have 2 more jutsus if you wish. Be sure to add them if you want. Anyway, here it is.

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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] EmptyThu 24 Jan 2013, 3:05 pm

Ill pass on the two extra. Can't find any jutsu I want at the moment.
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] EmptyFri 25 Jan 2013, 2:50 am

Hey there, so I have just a tad bit to mention before I give my approval.



  • You don't talk much about your guy's appearance. Like you leave out the facial description, and don't even mention how his eyes are. I get that he walks around with those sunglasses almost everywhere he goes, but we still want some details on him. Smile

  • Your personality is very short I gotta say. I like to see a bit more effort when people are applying for clans. It doesn't need to be anything major, just a few lines more. Adding a bit more to what he likes or dislikes.

  • You need to link the clan to the application.

  • Quote :
    That day he learnt never to mess around on a mission

    I am confused over that part of your history. As you clearly state that he was using bugs to find the other children in hide and seek, and that was the cause of his punishment? Plus, he was only 7 so he wouldn't have been in a mission to begin with.

  • You also say that he was held back a year and didn't enter the academy until he was 11, but to my believe the kids enter the academy at around 6 years old. And they graduate when they are about 12.

  • Add a little bit to your history about his current life please.

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You don't talk much about your guy's appearance. Like you leave out the facial description, and don't even mention how his eyes are. I get that he walks around with those sunglasses almost everywhere he goes, but we still want some details on him.

I talk quite a lot about his appearance. Plus the whole 4 paragraphs.

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Your personality is very short I gotta say. I like to see a bit more effort when people are applying for clans. It doesn't need to be anything major, just a few lines more. Adding a bit more to what he likes or dislikes.

Im sure you've seen shorter ones for a genin. Im 100% sure you have seen shorter ones then mine.

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Add a little bit to your history about his current life please.

What current life? I haven't roleplayed with him yet, so Im not gonna make a history about something that hasn't happened since the academy.

I have said that after he graduated, he went and trained.

Basically, you are nit picking.
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] EmptyFri 25 Jan 2013, 6:36 pm


  • Quote :
    I talk quite a lot about his appearance. Plus the whole 4 paragraphs.

    First of all, one of your "paragraphs" is only about his glasses and what he thinks about them. And as I said before, there is nothing said about his -face- or his -eyes-.

    Second of all, a paragraph is 250 - 300 words. Not 4 sentences.

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    Im sure you've seen shorter ones for a genin. Im 100% sure you have seen shorter ones then mine.

    Of course I have seen shorter than yours and shorter in general. And I ask them all to kindly fix that, just like I did with you.

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    What current life? I haven't roleplayed with him yet, so Im not gonna make a history about something that hasn't happened since the academy.
    So you are telling me that from the time he graduated and until now, nothing at all happened? I ask -everybody- to add just a tiny bit about what they are doing right now in their life. Is he training something special? Having a grudge against someone? You say he went to train, can you add like 1 sentence or two about what he's training and for what?

    If the histories wouldn't matter, I doubt they would be a section in the template.

    You still don't explain why there are missions mentioned towards his hide and seek part when he was 7. I get that his father was teaching him an important lesson, but I don't get why you were mentioning missions.


    Quote :
    Basically, you are nit picking.

    I am being precise. I can be even more precise if you want me to be? The only things I have asked you to do is adding what, a few more sentences to his appearance, personality and history. How come you find that too impossible and decide to be rude to me? I don't find my requests even remotely hard to fulfill, so I don't understand why you are making a big deal of them.

  • Also, it's "Hi no Kuni" not "Ki."
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Before he even got given a team, Eight went home and started to train harder and more lethal as well. He knew that his skills were not good enough for a genin, so he had to improve them so he would be the best Aburame genin out of the entire world. It was also the day that he made a bet with his friends to see who would become Chuunin first, the first one to acheive that rank would have to take the others out on a dangerous mission, also they would get a little bit of money from it.

This is the last paragraph in the history part.

Obviously you have not read it at all. If you say "I have" then you should notice that in the para before the quoted one, that he got genin, then in this one. He is making a bet with his friends and training. If thats not present day, then smack my ass and call me spanky.

Im out.
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] EmptyFri 25 Jan 2013, 7:19 pm

This looks like one day to me. One day that he went home to train and then make a bet. I'm sorry but I cannot see this as something he did of the span of what... 1 - 2 years.

Also, if you say you have made something that is -out of the academy- aka after he graduated, then you should make that in a separate spoiler. And not in the academy spoiler, just to clear things up. Your history is very short as it is, so I am asking you to add a few more sentences, preferably more about his current life or then add more to the academy.

And no, I am not bullying you or anything. I ask this of -everyone-. That also means that you are not going to be getting any special treatment and be left of the hook just because you are trying to be smart ass with me.

And frankly I have no desire to spank you, good sir.
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I don't know where I said you was bullying me..but whatever.

Also I don't see why I can't roleplay with him straight out of the academy.

Im not making a new arc because I wish to fill that stuff when I do an update with what I have actually done with him.

But I have added a bit onto my history about what he is doing, added onto his looks on what his eyes look like. Also on the history I have edited it from, 'he learnt that day about being serious on missions' too 'his dad basically had a talk to him about missions'. Also added a bit to personality on likes and dislikes
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] Aburame, Eight [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 26 Jan 2013, 11:00 pm

You didn't specify exactly when he graduated, and I felt that 14 was a bit old to be graduating. But I can live with what you have added in, thank you so much for the cooperation.

Now if you would only make a separate spoiler in your history for the "out of academy" years/days, and fix what my esteemed colleague pointed out then we can get a rolling on things.
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Edited and what you on about?
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Ivan wrote:
You still can have 2 more jutsus if you wish. Be sure to add them if you want. Anyway, here it is.

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Sometimes I wonder if I am high when I wake up.

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