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"The price of power is sin."

Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] Amon
Uchiha, Osore.

THE INFO.

Name: Osore Uchiha
Alias: Eyespot
Nickname: N/A
Age: 25
Gender: N/A (Male)
Appearance:
-> Height: 5' 11"
-> Weight: 140lb
-> Hair Color: Black
-> Eye Color: Blue
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A relatively average adult male in most respects with uncommonly light eyes for a Uchiha, though they are rarely seen as the man prefers to have his Sharingan active during most activities and as it requires little chakra to do so, his eyes are more commonly seen with at least a one tomoe Sharingan. With his contacts worn, however, they just appear a light blue. The rest of his face is a fairly cut face with a flat chin and smooth features. As was said, he is an average male in appearances.

His body is well toned but not excessively so and he appears to have a light tan to his skin, though this is rarely seen in battle. Osore prefers to wear a leather armor when moving about anywhere besides his own home and wears a mask to cover his facial features, causing most employers to only know him by his mask and alias. In fact, to date, only one person alive knows what he looks like under his 'casual wear' or his real name. Still, during combat his armor is far from durable and when torn open can reveal his flesh and thus its coloration, the same applying to damage to his mask.

The armor is darkly colored, a tan-ish color to its cloth with brown leather additions to form gauntlet like protections over the arms, shoulders, and legs. It includes a hood and a neck strap designed to hold it in place, as well as prevent minor injury to the neck from strikes from behind, and the mask itself resembles kabuki-facial make up applied to a white face. A single red dot adorns the top of the mask where the forehead resides, similar to an iconic depiction of the sun in lore. A belt, leather shoes, and a buttoned front complete the ensemble.

Forehead Protector: N/A (Konoha)
Personality:
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A terrifying man whose sole purpose in this life and any others is to cause harm to anything that comes between himself and his goals...to cause more harm. Osore is not like many people in that they have some 'redeeming' traits to their inner demons, instead opting to fully embrace the darker nature of his bloodline and himself. This has resulted in creating a man who is a true rarity among the human species, a man who seeks evil for the sake of evil, and who acts as a directionless tool in many ways. Without a goal or cause, he simply sews the seeds of pain and death wherever he goes. It is this sort of thing that makes him frightening, not because of some sort of traits, aura, or actions but because when one looks at his patterns...they cannot find any rhyme or reason to them. A man can be reasoned with...a beast cannot.

To that extent, Osore does not simply 'enjoy' evil (though his brain does give him a chemical reward for his sadism akin to a drug), he feels obligated to it. It is his job to cause pain and to kill others, it is a 24/7 job which knows no holidays. If he has gone 48 hours without killing someone, or something, than he has clearly not been awake during that time. He does not cooperate with or entertain the notions of 'money', 'women', or 'power' as goals worth pursuing unless they are simply paths for him to carve out more blood. This means that he gets along poorly with other criminals and when forced to carry out missions in order to obtain a living wage, he is often very aggravated at having to dilute his ideals just for a few Ryo.

This does not mean that he does not recognize the value of certain people, most especially powerful people, and he does not consider them more 'worthy' of killing. Quite the opposite, Osore prefers to prey on the weak as they are much easier to push along to their demise and tries to avoid conflict with more powerful individuals when he can help it. If someone is too strong for him to kill, he would prefer to avoid confronting them or being caught by them, as the energy wasted fighting them could be better applied killing lesser shinobi. This can be summarized as simple cowardice, but it does miss the underlying logic when summed up this way.

He considers other people who are without noble blood to be lesser peoples and those who lack a bloodline at all are 'rubbish' that should hope for a better chance when they reincarnate. Unlike some Uchiha, he is not ashamed of his bloodline and while he makes an effort to hide it for combat effectiveness, it is not because he actually wishes to hide his heritage. In fact, the only type of people he will not kill if given the chance are other Uchiha, who are often given a free pass provided they do not get in his way or interfere with his work.

Osore's 'leisure' is simply training, he has little comprehension or desire for any other types of activity and finds them to be wasteful. He holds sexual activities in particular contempt, being more than just asexual and actively finding it annoying when other parties engage in sexual activity. This is rooted both in his own inability and lack of genitalia, as well as a general belief that anything that produces life and doesn't produce death is a wasteful and disgusting activity.

To put it bluntly: Osore is Saturday morning cartoon evil.
There is no reason.
No purpose.
No cause.
No meaning.

Just death.
Nindō: The price of power is sin.
Clan: Uchiha
Spoiler:

THE NINJA.

Origin: Ha no Kuni
Affiliation: N/A [Missing Nin]
Rank: B Rank [Teinei]
Specialties: Genjutsu | Ninjutsu
Elemental Affinities: Katon | Suiton
Combat Style:
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Utilizing Genjutsu as a supplementary art, rather than a primary form of combat, Osore is able to open up windows of opportunity through illusions and to deliver the finishing blow with explosive weaponry or flames. The destructive nature of flames and explosives are used to ensure the death of the target. As stated, Osore is not frequently found using extended, overt, or otherwise longer lasting Genjutsu which are intended for staple uses or as a primary way to fight an opponent. Supplementary Genjutsu tend to include jutsu whose duration's are too short to use Kai, meaning that opponent's standard tactics against illusions may not work against this Uchiha's style. He requires only a single mistake, a single slip up, a single illusion to take hold, and the created chink in an opponent's armor will spell the death of the target by violent means. This does not mean that this is the only thing that Osore is capable of, far from it, but that this is what he prefers and if an opponent is not able to be subdued by such simple tactics, often the firepower is increased by way of supplementary Suiton techniques to increased the force of explosive and Katon; and then the attack window is re-opened. As a Uchiha, he is capable of sustained illusions for some purposes and does not go out of his way to not learn them if he can, but they simply take a back seat to more useful Genjutsu which do not fall prey to an opponent's Kai usage, not that Osore makes that simple or cost effective...
Special Characteristics:

Recordless
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Name: Recordless
Rank: D-S
Type: Miscellaneous Based
Physical Requirements: N/A
Training Requirements: N/A (See Description)
Description: Some ninja are cautious about their record, but some are just naturally forgettable, whether through sheer chance or just being 'one of those faces'. No records exist of these shinobi, and no records can be created, they remain an eternal void in any village's Bingo Book or informational database. If they are made, they are destroyed by accident or 'accident'. These shinobi always have friends to make sure that even where their natural abilities fail they are still protected. The only way to obtain information about these ninja is to be told by those who have encountered them or to know them yourself. Verbal records are the only thing that survives but even those are limited.

In game terms, other characters do not know, and cannot know, information regarding a character with this SC without being told by another character or learning for themselves. All information about them must come from the SC holder, one way or another. They do not have a Bingo Book entry and can never gain one so long as they hold this trait. If they cause a scenario in which it becomes difficult for them to remain unknown (ie. driving a herd of cattle into the middle of Konoha) then they are required to go through a 'clean up' thread where they remove any NPCs who knew about what they did, and any record of it. This has a word count requirement determined by the Staff.

To learn this SC, you must do the same 'clean up' thread based on the number of NPCs that would know about your character and the amount of recorded data, thus it becomes prohibitively more difficult the more infamous (or famous) your character may already be. Per Rank effects and limitations detailed below in the provided spoiler.

Spoiler:

Yin Release
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Name: Yin Release.
Rank: D-S.
Type: Chakra Based.
Physical Requirements: Must have Genjutsu specialty.
Training Requirements: 700.
Description: Genjutsu is a notably skillful specialization that requires great intelligence and chakra control in order to perform. Those who have attained this special characteristic have met those criteria which has allowed them to take their illusions to the next plane. Genjutsu fittingly falls under the broad category of Yin Release and it has been revealed that those with superior talent in Genjutsu likewise have greater mastery in Yin Release. This type of mastery allows them to more accurately manipulate the victim's chakra flow to their brain and stimulate more powerful illusions, making you're illusions more realistic and bypassing a persons perception. Because of your more powerful illusions, it now takes double the chakra cost to perform a Kai Release than it normally would for targets.


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THE BACKGROUND.

Birth & Early Life Arc
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Genin Arc
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Chunnin Arc
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Missing Nin Arc
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Roleplay Sample
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From Bleach Gotei

"I'm apparently not the least frugal of my peers it seems..."

The Octava spoke aloud to himself, looking up at the building before him and wondering what could possess a man to either purchase or erect a building on a cliff face just for seeming shits and giggles, did he imagine himself a religious leader now? A Hollow? Now that would've been quite the amusing little bonk on the noggin then, what kind of Hollow fancies themselves righteous enough to guide the spiritual enlightenment of others, unless he intended to devour them wholesale afterwards. Which wouldn't be a terrible idea, a modification of his own plans really but with a religious stigma attached to it. He wasn't certain if this was good or bad yet as he hadn't yet considered all the variables but it was certainly unusual at least. If Enrique wasn't using this as an elaborate ruse to lure humans souls to their demise...well, he didn't know what to think besides the fact that clearly he was unstable. Not that he didn't already know that.

He sighed and snapped his fingers, the black portal behind him coming into view as the large black curtain positioned behind him adjusted itself at the sound of his fingers, though it was less a curtain and more a Gillian. Enrique was seemingly unaware of what had occurred within Las Noches and it was only by chance that he managed to intercept the message by way of his own messengers, one of his Fraccion relaying the information to him through a kindly Gillian whom he'd promised snacks if he would behave long enough to repeat the information to him. Of course, he wanted to make sure he wasn't being duped obviously so he'd forced the creature to tag along, only now was he permitted to leave.

"I thought you were yanking my chain...well a deal is a deal, didn't mean to startle you, I just wanted your attention."

He tilted his hand, rolling it at the wrist and catching a small white seed in his grip as he walked straight up through the air to reach to creature's face. "You'll want to crush this, its a bait pellet, wherever you're comfortable and then the buffet will bring itself. Store it under your tongue for the time being, I'd recommend rural China personally, the population is fairly large...then again, you're eating your brothers at this stage, not humans...either way, open up."

The large mask split itself open at the jaw, teeth parting and a tongue sticking out far enough for him to touch it, Garra placing the bait against the underside of his tongue and then gesturing for him to close his mouth and retrieve it. This was done quickly and with that he followed it up with a gesture for the creature to leave through the Garganta that had been created, deciding that he should figure out what was going through the mind of the Segunda now. He apparently just didn't know what was up...that was a dilemma Then again, he hadn't seen him during the invasion and that made him fairly cross. If he didn't have one hell of an excuse than he suspected their meeting would end poorly. Like...one less Espada poorly. He didn't like to kill other Hollows but as of late he was getting rather used to it because they had a terrible habit of just pissing him off...

All in all that process took...maybe three hours? Not the most rapid response but also not a very slow one and he was resolved to tell the Espada that if he wanted to reach him, all he had to do was buy a fucking phone book. Or the internet. Spirit_Net was a thing, he could've tried to ask about his whereabouts that way rather than involving physical creatures in what amounted to a game of telephone...it was all so tedious. In fact, to prevent this problem from ever reoccurring Garra had written out his number on a piece of paper and signed it off with lipsticks and a few XOXOXOs. Maybe he'd hold onto it better that way...

These were side notes though, for now he was watching from above the monastery itself and was only now convinced to go down as he watched the Segunda make himself at home on the front door step. That couldn't be safe, not with thunder, but eh...theatrics...they had their time and their place but he didn't think involving an energy source which could super heat your blood away if you gave it enough time was the best choice for such a show...so it was neither the time nor the place.

Garra slide his hands into his pockets as he walked down the 'air steps' from the upper level of the mountain where he'd made his Garganta, he doubted that his spiritual pressure was unnoticed so it wasn't an entrance with stealth in mind, more just him not feeling like walking down the mountain itself. Once his feet touched the earth he placed himself within a few meters of the invitee, smiling at him innocently. "One, Pureza and Titus can't make it because they have terrible cases of death. Re-death to be more accurate. Two, you owe me some explanations as to why you aren't dead with them like most everyone else who fought in the Invasion. Three..."

The Octava strolled up closer, retrieving the paper from his pocket and palming it off to the man, whether he wanted it or not. "I have a cellphone. Try calling it sometime. If you can afford a building you can afford long distance or interdimensional."


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THE ARSENAL - EQUIPMENT.

Ninja Kits
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Inventory
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Weaponry
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THE ARSENAL - NINJUTSU.

Academy
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Elementless
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Bloodline Release
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Katon Release
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Suiton Release
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THE ARSENAL - GENJUTSU.

Amateur [E & D]
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Novice [C]
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Adept [B]
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SUMMONING CONTRACT.

Moths - Clan Contract
Requires permission from Uchiha, Osore
A powerful contract species which was acquired not through formal agreement or even the choice of the contracted species, but rather through manipulation and the control of their kind by way of the Sharingan. As such, the moths summoned through this contract have a distinct feature to them which makes their ties to the clan evident; where they would normally have eye spots they instead have Sharingan symbols.

Despite their ties with the clan, not every clan member can summon them. They are contracted specifically only to a subset of the legendary Uchiha clan who are different from their peers, choosing to use their bloodline to dominate other life forms through indirect means. Unlike the Crow contract (common to Uchiha), the moth is its prey in a natural environment and must learn to rely on clever means to elude it. This subsect of the clan has similar ideals, doing whatever it takes to survive, even if it means killing their own brethren. They are a species for those seeking power, but smart enough to do so cautiously.

The moth summoning contract has been the product of decades of breeding programs and Sharingan influence, to the point where the species now is entirely dominated by their contractor and they have no free will to speak of. They are a frightening display of the Uchiha's power, if a rare one. This rarity is only helped further by the fact that many Uchiha, who know of the species, consider them to be an open act of betrayal to the main clan. Still the power of the contract cannot be denied.

The strength of the summoner's Sharingan directly influences the moth's strength. They become more powerful when summoned by a powerful holder of the Sharingan, their eye spots adjusting to the current level of Sharingan their Uchiha summoner is using and increasing their abilities in tandem. Moths use primarily Genjutsu and light-based Ninjutsu techniques, holding the Katon element like their summoners.

The larval and pupal forms of the moth contract are available to be summoned as well, though they lack the large Sharingan eye-spots that their mature forms hold and simply resemble enlarged versions of normal species. They are poor in strength and versatility however, mostly relegated to summoning related jutsu and not actual summoning contracts.

Sharingan eye-spots do not act as Sharingan eyes, transplanted eyes, etc. the summoner may, however, utilize their own Sharingan through their summoning for certain jutsu. See specific techniques.

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Name: Bakkin [Penalty]
Rank: B
Appearance: A large black moth whose main body is roughly the same size as an adult male although a bit larger in length at roughly 3m long. Compound eyes and a coiled tongue on the creature's face imply that it is of low intelligence to the observant eye but despite this it is quite capable at illusionary techniques by natural instinct. The moth's wingspan is much large, naturally, and reaches roughly 10m from point to point horizontally, allowing it the size and strength to bear up to three humans into flight without burden. Sharingan eye spots are found on all four of its wings and when it uses its more powerful illusionary techniques, gazing into them can spell the slow demise of the unfortunate target. Its long, slender, and numerous (six to be exact) legs are frail and useless for Taijutsu or Weaponry combat but it makes up for this by being highly capable of avoiding combat by way of air travel. All in all it mostly appears to be an enlarged, black, house mouth with Sharingan eye spots and has few to no distinct traits about it.
Personality: N/A (See Contract)
Contract Type: Clan
Species: Moth
Specialty: Genjutsu
Elemental Affinity: Katon
Summons Jutsu:

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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] EmptySun 21 Apr 2013, 5:53 am

FACE CLAIM.

Character Claim: Amon (Noatakk)
Source: Avatar the Last Airbender: Legend of Korra
Image URL: Which one?

APPROVER NOTES.

Permissions
Adam wrote:

Uchiha permission granted.

Adam wrote:

You can start with summons on your application as long as it isn't over the top.

I guess, let me know if its over the top?...anyways...

Anyways, approver notes...

Ahem.

NO. LUBE. GO HARD. SO HARD.
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My handler has told me that I'm supposed to behave.
But fuck that guy right?
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I am the Text of my Character
Pixels are my body and .jpeg is my blood
I have created over a thousand jutsu
Unknown to denial
Not known to approval
I have withstood criticism to create many jutsu
Yet these hands will never perform handseals
So, as I pray
UNLIMITED JUTSU WORKS
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For the Anime illiterate...

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You know, I was feeling hopeful at first like oh look not too many custom techniques considering whose app I'm checking and then I got to the genjutsu and I'm like Hage pls Dolan. Anyways BITE THE PILLOW I'M GOING IN DRY.



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Name: Recordless
Rank: C
Type: Miscellaneous Based
Physical Requirements: N/A
Training Requirements: N/A (See Description)
Description: Some ninja are cautious about their record, but some are just naturally forgettable, whether through sheer chance or just being 'one of those faces'. No records exist of these shinobi, and no records can be created, they remain an eternal void in any village's Bingo Book or informational database. If they are made, they are destroyed by accident or 'accident'. These shinobi always have friends to make sure that even where their natural abilities fail they are still protected. The only way to obtain information about these ninja is to be told by those who have encountered them or to know them yourself. Verbal records are the only thing that survives but even those are limited.

In game terms, other characters do not know, and cannot know, information regarding a character with this SC without being told by another character or learning for themselves. All information about them must come from the SC holder, one way or another. They do not have a Bingo Book entry and can never gain one so long as they hold this trait. If they cause a scenario in which it becomes difficult for them to remain unknown (ie. driving a herd of cattle into the middle of Konoha) then they are required to go through a 'clean up' thread where they remove any NPCs who knew about what they did, and any record of it. This has a word count requirement determined by the Staff.

To learn this SC, you must do the same 'clean up' thread based on the number of NPCs that would know about your character and the amount of recorded data, thus it becomes prohibitively more difficult the more infamous (or famous) your character may already be.

Could you make this a multi-rank SC and tier it. I won't force you to tier it in a specific manner just yet as I want you to propose something before I go all Nazi on it.



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Name: Tomoe Release
Rank: D
Type: Bloodline - Doujutsu/Ninjutsu
Range: Sight
Element: N/A
Description: A technique which uses the Sharingan to produce a long-ranged Kai effect on any target that the caster can see. This is performed by 'overlaying' the caster's Sharingan over the target's eyes, closing their eyes and then causing their Sharingan to appear in the eyes of their target as the illusion is shattered (this is mostly cosmetic and does not afford the target the benefits of Sharingan sight.) The caster may pay the entire Kai cost or opt to force the target to pay for whatever portion of CP they do not (determined when cast.) If the user has Three Tomeo Sharingan active than they pay only half the Genjutsu cost.
Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu

This needs to be the same cost as the regular Kai technique and the Three Tomoe benefit can't be there.



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Name: Tomoe Returning Shot
Rank: D
Type: Weaponry
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Requires: At least One-Tomoe; Redirecting Kunai
Element: -
Description: A technique which employs the Sharingan to angle a projectile weapon's launch so that it is fired in such a way as to strike an opponent, disappear from the battlefield, and return later to strike the target a second time when they do not expect it. This is similar to Redirecting Kunai but can employ any projectile weapon and is much more delayed, the second attack happening during the target's next post after they respond to the initial throw. If the projectile is destroyed or otherwise forced to deviate from its normal flight path on the first hit, the second hit may not occur. Dodging the first hit does not alter the second.
Chakra Cost: 3CP

Please up this to C rank and adjust the chakra cost to 6.



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Name: Black Cloud Fuel
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Suiton (Water)
Description: A Suiton jutsu which creates a black flammable oil that is released from the caster's mouth, shot in a stream into an existing Katon technique to empower it, causing it to burn as a black flame which is immune to being put out by Suiton techniques. Instead, it acts like a grease fire, consuming the water added to it and burning more powerfully. The flames are increased by one letter rank in damage potential when this jutsu is used.
Chakra Cost: 5CP

I'd consider this at least an A rank jutsu, please remove it for now.



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Name: Ordinary Arms
Rank: D
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 10m
Medium: Optical
Element: N/A
Description: A simple optical technique which does not require handseals (just a physical gesture) and which allows the caster to change the appearance of a weapon to any other weapon that is close to its own size; masking the specifics of a special item or changing the way opponent's dodge or react to it. This can be used to hide the cutting edges of larger weapons making them more dangerous or to hide the type of a projectile, meaning projectile type specific jutsu cannot be pre-judged. Regardless of condition, this Genjutsu affects only a single object or single set of objects per casting and only lasts for a single round before requiring a re-cast, or simply using other tactics.
Chakra Cost: 1CP

Up the chakra cost please.



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Name: Eye Candy
Rank: D
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 25m
Medium: Single Target; Genjutsu Focus
Element: N/A
Description: A nervous system based illusion which creates the illusion of a figure which the target finds attractive tilting their head, commonly by the chin, to look them in the eyes. If visual impediments are in the way (ex. special glasses) they are removed. The Genjutsu applies pressure to the nervous system along with the visual illusion to convince the body to go along and move in the real world with the illusion, even removing their own equipment as the illusion does for them. The jutsu's illusionary female's eyes line up with the caster's and once contact is made, they may immediately switch to another Genjutsu which requires eye contact. This Genjustu ends shortly before the secondary one is started, providing a short-lived realization of what has occurred, making the new illusion far more obvious as a consequence.
Chakra Cost: 2CP

Remove the words Genjutsu Focus from the medium, I know what you mean for it however a lot of people won't. The range on this needs to lowered to about three metres. I'm probably gonna get shit for not telling you to remove this but fuck it, change the Rank to C-S and make it so you can only initiate genjutsu of a rank below of the rank used of this genjutsu. Propose costs for each rank and I will consider them.



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Name: Swap
Rank: C
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 25m
Medium: Optical
Element: N/A
Description: A Genjutsu technique which simply swaps the physical appearance and location of one target with another, or multiple targets. This causes the swapped targets to only change physical appearance but continue to appear their same actions, though this can cause confusion when appropriately applied. As it is more or less a visual illusion, it is less effective when used to disguise allies as enemies or vice versa as their voices can give the illusion away almost immediately.
Chakra Cost: 5CP + 2CP/post

Change the max range to 20m.



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Name: Don't Go!
Rank: C
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 10m
Medium: Single Target; Genjutsu Focus
Element: N/A
Description: A Genjutsu technique which tugs on the nervous system along with creating a physical illusion of a subject which the target views as emotionally significant physically restraining them. This is commonly used to create the illusion of a child or lover tugging on the clothing to hold them back with the iconic 'Dont go!' phrase used. It is intended as a momentary but critical distraction, requiring the target to turn around to face their interfering party and opening them up for other attacks. Even if the target does not respond to them, they are still physically paralyzed for the Genjutsu's duration, opening an attack window either way. This Genjutsu requires the caster to sit still and perform constant handseals for the moments it lasts however, meaning it cannot be used to protect the caster with any degree of efficiency.
Chakra Cost: 6CP + 2CP/post

Name: Clean Bill of Health
Rank: C
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 10m
Medium: Single Target; Genjutsu Focus
Element: N/A
Description: A utility Genjutsu which convinces the target's body that they are perfectly healthy regardless of the inflicted injuries, negative effects, poisons, etc. that may be affecting them. The nervous system is used to go so far as to create phantom limbs or flesh if need be to compensate for inflicted harm and will cover over any abnormal sensations or feelings. This Genjutsu's only true purpose in battle is to provide another barrier to purging the body or fixing injuries and otherwise has no noteworthy effects on an opponent. The jutsu becomes more obvious the more severe their injuries or effects were prior to casting, as is obvious by its nature.
Chakra Cost: 7CP + 2CP/post

For both of these remove the Genjutsu Focus bit from the medium.

For Don't Go!: Make the genjutsu end the post after should they address the child.



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Name: Clone Restraint
Rank: B
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 10m
Medium: Single Target; Genjutsu Focus
Element: N/A
Description: A paralytic Genjutsu which creates the illusion of a bunshin of the caster which appears behind them, holding them in a physical lock and preventing them from moving or protecting themselves. Once per post, the target is able to 'break free' of the bunshin holding them, breaking it apart into smoke, only to find a new bunshin holding them shortly afterwards. This gives the illusion of the caster expending large amounts of chakra to restrain the opponent and overstate their actual chakra use, while also holding them in place both in the illusion and the real world. This can be combined with physical Kage Bunshin to blur the line bettween illusion and reality. While cast, the caster cannot move or perform other jutsu.
Chakra Cost: 12CP + 3CP/post

Again, remove Genjutsu Focus.



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Name: Tomoe Relay
Rank: B
Type: Bloodline - Doujutsu/Genjutsu
Range: Sight
Medium: Single Target; Genjutsu Focus
Element: N/A
Description: A jutsu which syncs a target's nervous system with the caster, allowing the target to gain, indirectly, the benefits of the Sharingan through Genjutsu. The target's vision is overriden by the caster and they percieve time more slowly than normal, muscles in use within enemy bodies light up, clones are outlined in a blue hue, and the chakra flow appears lines of flame throughout their body, simulating the primary information the Sharingan normally gives. Because this jutsu relies on the caster's vision, they must have Sharingan active and be able to see whatever the target sees in order to accurately relay this information. Inversely, this is infinitely faster than sharing information verbally and can greatly improve an ally's combat effectiveness at the cost of the caster's chakra.
Chakra Cost: 12CP + 3CP/post

I think this will have to wait until A rank.



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You know, I was feeling hopeful at first like oh look not too many custom techniques considering whose app I'm checking and then I got to the genjutsu and I'm like Hage pls Dolan.


Oh you don't even know yet. The only thing that'll slow me down from 100+ jutsu is approval times and...well, every other life obligation I have. Oh well, I'll have plenty, promise, wouldn't want to disappoint.

Ame wrote:

Anyways BITE THE PILLOW I'M GOING IN DRY.


That sounds familiar...

Ame wrote:




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Name: Recordless
Rank: C
Type: Miscellaneous Based
Physical Requirements: N/A
Training Requirements: N/A (See Description)
Description: Some ninja are cautious about their record, but some are just naturally forgettable, whether through sheer chance or just being 'one of those faces'. No records exist of these shinobi, and no records can be created, they remain an eternal void in any village's Bingo Book or informational database. If they are made, they are destroyed by accident or 'accident'. These shinobi always have friends to make sure that even where their natural abilities fail they are still protected. The only way to obtain information about these ninja is to be told by those who have encountered them or to know them yourself. Verbal records are the only thing that survives but even those are limited.

In game terms, other characters do not know, and cannot know, information regarding a character with this SC without being told by another character or learning for themselves. All information about them must come from the SC holder, one way or another. They do not have a Bingo Book entry and can never gain one so long as they hold this trait. If they cause a scenario in which it becomes difficult for them to remain unknown (ie. driving a herd of cattle into the middle of Konoha) then they are required to go through a 'clean up' thread where they remove any NPCs who knew about what they did, and any record of it. This has a word count requirement determined by the Staff.

To learn this SC, you must do the same 'clean up' thread based on the number of NPCs that would know about your character and the amount of recorded data, thus it becomes prohibitively more difficult the more infamous (or famous) your character may already be.

Could you make this a multi-rank SC and tier it. I won't force you to tier it in a specific manner just yet as I want you to propose something before I go all Nazi on it.


Well I could always make it D-S based on the level of event that can be handwaved or otherwise restricted information-wise, not that I really think this is SC is all that powerful (more of a metagame insurance policy.) Something like this...


  • D Rank: May expunge or avoid record for events which do not involve PCs and no more than a dozen NPC characters may have access to the information being removed or prevented. Under special circumstances, Staff may apply additional conditions. Cannot remove information classified above the user's rank.
  • C Rank: May expunge of avoid record for events which may involve a PC, but no more than fifty people total may have access to the information being removed or prevented. Under special circumstances, Staff may apply additional conditions. Cannot remove information classified above the user's rank.
  • B Rank: May expunge or avoid record for events which may involve a PC, but no more than one hundred people total may have access to the information being removed or prevented. Under special circumstances, Staff may apply additional conditions. Cannot remove information classified above the user's rank.
  • A Rank: May expunge or avoid record for events which may involve a PC, but no more than a city's worth of people total may have access to the information being removed or prevented. Under special circumstances, Staff may apply additional conditions. Cannot remove information classified above the user's rank.
  • S Rank: May expunge or avoid record for events which may involve a PC, regardless of numbers of NPCs present. Any information is free game and may be destroyed with little to no effort, similarly records have an uncanny 'luck' for destroying themselves before any eyes reach them. You become an effective ghost, a media deadzone, to anyone and everyone without even trying.


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Name: Tomoe Release
Rank: D
Type: Bloodline - Doujutsu/Ninjutsu
Range: Sight
Element: N/A
Description: A technique which uses the Sharingan to produce a long-ranged Kai effect on any target that the caster can see. This is performed by 'overlaying' the caster's Sharingan over the target's eyes, closing their eyes and then causing their Sharingan to appear in the eyes of their target as the illusion is shattered (this is mostly cosmetic and does not afford the target the benefits of Sharingan sight.) The caster may pay the entire Kai cost or opt to force the target to pay for whatever portion of CP they do not (determined when cast.) If the user has Three Tomeo Sharingan active than they pay only half the Genjutsu cost.
Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu

This needs to be the same cost as the regular Kai technique and the Three Tomoe benefit can't be there.


No can do boss man.
1. It does cost 'regular' Kai cost, it says it right in the jutsu.
2. Thats not even 'regular' cost because regular for an ally is 1/2 cost.
3. The triple Tomoe effect allows me to pay the 'regular' ally cost and exists for that reason.
4. Seems pretty balanced to me already, I pay 2x the Kai cost I would normally pay to Kai and ally for a long distance Kai. If I pay another cost for Triple Tomoe, I am graciously allowed to pay the 'regular' cost.

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Name: Tomoe Returning Shot
Rank: D
Type: Weaponry
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Requires: At least One-Tomoe; Redirecting Kunai
Element: -
Description: A technique which employs the Sharingan to angle a projectile weapon's launch so that it is fired in such a way as to strike an opponent, disappear from the battlefield, and return later to strike the target a second time when they do not expect it. This is similar to Redirecting Kunai but can employ any projectile weapon and is much more delayed, the second attack happening during the target's next post after they respond to the initial throw. If the projectile is destroyed or otherwise forced to deviate from its normal flight path on the first hit, the second hit may not occur. Dodging the first hit does not alter the second.
Chakra Cost: 3CP

Please up this to C rank and adjust the chakra cost to 6.


Alright.

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Name: Black Cloud Fuel
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Suiton (Water)
Description: A Suiton jutsu which creates a black flammable oil that is released from the caster's mouth, shot in a stream into an existing Katon technique to empower it, causing it to burn as a black flame which is immune to being put out by Suiton techniques. Instead, it acts like a grease fire, consuming the water added to it and burning more powerfully. The flames are increased by one letter rank in damage potential when this jutsu is used.
Chakra Cost: 5CP

I'd consider this at least an A rank jutsu, please remove it for now.


How do you figure? Oil rains from the sky at the same rank as an AoE...I can't shoot it as a linear projectile for the same rank? You're going have to explain this one to me. I'm not seeing it honestly. Is it the Suiton doesn't put it out thing (it is a Suiton jutsu so it isn't weak to its own element) or the Katon rank increase (pay more CP, get more boom)?

I can change it or remove, but as is I have no idea whats objectionable, I'd like a more in-depth explanation on the topic.

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Name: Ordinary Arms
Rank: D
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 10m
Medium: Optical
Element: N/A
Description: A simple optical technique which does not require handseals (just a physical gesture) and which allows the caster to change the appearance of a weapon to any other weapon that is close to its own size; masking the specifics of a special item or changing the way opponent's dodge or react to it. This can be used to hide the cutting edges of larger weapons making them more dangerous or to hide the type of a projectile, meaning projectile type specific jutsu cannot be pre-judged. Regardless of condition, this Genjutsu affects only a single object or single set of objects per casting and only lasts for a single round before requiring a re-cast, or simply using other tactics.
Chakra Cost: 1CP

Up the chakra cost please.

Woops, that is a low cost aint' it? What would you suggest? I'm thinking 3 CP.

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Name: Eye Candy
Rank: D
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 25m
Medium: Single Target; Genjutsu Focus
Element: N/A
Description: A nervous system based illusion which creates the illusion of a figure which the target finds attractive tilting their head, commonly by the chin, to look them in the eyes. If visual impediments are in the way (ex. special glasses) they are removed. The Genjutsu applies pressure to the nervous system along with the visual illusion to convince the body to go along and move in the real world with the illusion, even removing their own equipment as the illusion does for them. The jutsu's illusionary female's eyes line up with the caster's and once contact is made, they may immediately switch to another Genjutsu which requires eye contact. This Genjustu ends shortly before the secondary one is started, providing a short-lived realization of what has occurred, making the new illusion far more obvious as a consequence.
Chakra Cost: 2CP

Remove the words Genjutsu Focus from the medium, I know what you mean for it however a lot of people won't. The range on this needs to lowered to about three metres. I'm probably gonna get shit for not telling you to remove this but fuck it, change the Rank to C-S and make it so you can only initiate genjutsu of a rank below of the rank used of this genjutsu. Propose costs for each rank and I will consider them.


If its a rank below the rank of the jutsu used I'd be paying somewhere around 2x the cost per Genjutsu which puts me out pretty hard, which means I'd have a better time (and easier, sans the metagame lulz to be had) to just do things manually.

Though I'm not really certain where to put the medium stuff in Genjutsu.
If you know better, you can always share.
I was under the impression I had to specify that I could use a focus if I wanted to use one.

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Name: Swap
Rank: C
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 25m
Medium: Optical
Element: N/A
Description: A Genjutsu technique which simply swaps the physical appearance and location of one target with another, or multiple targets. This causes the swapped targets to only change physical appearance but continue to appear their same actions, though this can cause confusion when appropriately applied. As it is more or less a visual illusion, it is less effective when used to disguise allies as enemies or vice versa as their voices can give the illusion away almost immediately.
Chakra Cost: 5CP + 2CP/post

Change the max range to 20m.


Alright.

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Name: Don't Go!
Rank: C
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 10m
Medium: Single Target; Genjutsu Focus
Element: N/A
Description: A Genjutsu technique which tugs on the nervous system along with creating a physical illusion of a subject which the target views as emotionally significant physically restraining them. This is commonly used to create the illusion of a child or lover tugging on the clothing to hold them back with the iconic 'Dont go!' phrase used. It is intended as a momentary but critical distraction, requiring the target to turn around to face their interfering party and opening them up for other attacks. Even if the target does not respond to them, they are still physically paralyzed for the Genjutsu's duration, opening an attack window either way. This Genjutsu requires the caster to sit still and perform constant handseals for the moments it lasts however, meaning it cannot be used to protect the caster with any degree of efficiency.
Chakra Cost: 6CP + 2CP/post

Name: Clean Bill of Health
Rank: C
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 10m
Medium: Single Target; Genjutsu Focus
Element: N/A
Description: A utility Genjutsu which convinces the target's body that they are perfectly healthy regardless of the inflicted injuries, negative effects, poisons, etc. that may be affecting them. The nervous system is used to go so far as to create phantom limbs or flesh if need be to compensate for inflicted harm and will cover over any abnormal sensations or feelings. This Genjutsu's only true purpose in battle is to provide another barrier to purging the body or fixing injuries and otherwise has no noteworthy effects on an opponent. The jutsu becomes more obvious the more severe their injuries or effects were prior to casting, as is obvious by its nature.
Chakra Cost: 7CP + 2CP/post

For both of these remove the Genjutsu Focus bit from the medium.

See above.

Ame wrote:

For Don't Go!: Make the genjutsu end the post after should they address the child.


Sure I can do that.

Ame wrote:




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Name: Clone Restraint
Rank: B
Type: Genjutsu
Range: 10m
Medium: Single Target; Genjutsu Focus
Element: N/A
Description: A paralytic Genjutsu which creates the illusion of a bunshin of the caster which appears behind them, holding them in a physical lock and preventing them from moving or protecting themselves. Once per post, the target is able to 'break free' of the bunshin holding them, breaking it apart into smoke, only to find a new bunshin holding them shortly afterwards. This gives the illusion of the caster expending large amounts of chakra to restrain the opponent and overstate their actual chakra use, while also holding them in place both in the illusion and the real world. This can be combined with physical Kage Bunshin to blur the line bettween illusion and reality. While cast, the caster cannot move or perform other jutsu.
Chakra Cost: 12CP + 3CP/post

Again, remove Genjutsu Focus.

See above.

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Name: Tomoe Relay
Rank: B
Type: Bloodline - Doujutsu/Genjutsu
Range: Sight
Medium: Single Target; Genjutsu Focus
Element: N/A
Description: A jutsu which syncs a target's nervous system with the caster, allowing the target to gain, indirectly, the benefits of the Sharingan through Genjutsu. The target's vision is overriden by the caster and they percieve time more slowly than normal, muscles in use within enemy bodies light up, clones are outlined in a blue hue, and the chakra flow appears lines of flame throughout their body, simulating the primary information the Sharingan normally gives. Because this jutsu relies on the caster's vision, they must have Sharingan active and be able to see whatever the target sees in order to accurately relay this information. Inversely, this is infinitely faster than sharing information verbally and can greatly improve an ally's combat effectiveness at the cost of the caster's chakra.
Chakra Cost: 12CP + 3CP/post

I think this will have to wait until A rank.

This is another one of those 'Nope.avi' things.
At D Rank a shinobi can make a full illusion of multiple people at once.
I am making a HUD.
A HUD that requires I look at the same thing as someone else.
Use up my Genjutsu ability (because I can only hold one as far as I know.)
And pay an upkeep cost for.
To make a HUD.
Of an ability.
I already have.

I absolutely will not move this one rank higher. Its B Rank just to humor people already, it should be C Rank. Its a visual display with s many drawbacks its not even funny and its not exactly rocket science for a Genjutsu user. Actually, I will drop this to C Rank, presuming my explaination suffices here...because I sure as hell aint' paying A Rank chakra costs to show somebody some pretty lights and colors.

Ame wrote:




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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] EmptyMon 29 Apr 2013, 2:54 am

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Well I could always make it D-S based on the level of event that can be handwaved or otherwise restricted information-wise, not that I really think this is SC is all that powerful (more of a metagame insurance policy.) Something like this...


  • D Rank: May expunge or avoid record for events which do not involve PCs and no more than a dozen NPC characters may have access to the information being removed or prevented. Under special circumstances, Staff may apply additional conditions. Cannot remove information classified above the user's rank.
  • C Rank: May expunge of avoid record for events which may involve a PC, but no more than fifty people total may have access to the information being removed or prevented. Under special circumstances, Staff may apply additional conditions. Cannot remove information classified above the user's rank.
  • B Rank: May expunge or avoid record for events which may involve a PC, but no more than one hundred people total may have access to the information being removed or prevented. Under special circumstances, Staff may apply additional conditions. Cannot remove information classified above the user's rank.
  • A Rank: May expunge or avoid record for events which may involve a PC, but no more than a city's worth of people total may have access to the information being removed or prevented. Under special circumstances, Staff may apply additional conditions. Cannot remove information classified above the user's rank.
  • S Rank: May expunge or avoid record for events which may involve a PC, regardless of numbers of NPCs present. Any information is free game and may be destroyed with little to no effort, similarly records have an uncanny 'luck' for destroying themselves before any eyes reach them. You become an effective ghost, a media deadzone, to anyone and everyone without even trying.

Looks good to me.


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No can do boss man.
1. It does cost 'regular' Kai cost, it says it right in the jutsu.
2. Thats not even 'regular' cost because regular for an ally is 1/2 cost.
3. The triple Tomoe effect allows me to pay the 'regular' ally cost and exists for that reason.
4. Seems pretty balanced to me already, I pay 2x the Kai cost I would normally pay to Kai and ally for a long distance Kai. If I pay another cost for Triple Tomoe, I am graciously allowed to pay the 'regular' cost.

Kai cost is actually the cost of the Genjutsu + 2 that's all I really wanted.


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How do you figure? Oil rains from the sky at the same rank as an AoE...I can't shoot it as a linear projectile for the same rank? You're going have to explain this one to me. I'm not seeing it honestly. Is it the Suiton doesn't put it out thing (it is a Suiton jutsu so it isn't weak to its own element) or the Katon rank increase (pay more CP, get more boom)?

I can change it or remove, but as is I have no idea whats objectionable, I'd like a more in-depth explanation on the topic.

My issue is with both of them as a whole, seperately I have no real issue with the effects. I think if you were to up the rank to B and make it cost 10 CP I would be okay with it.


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Woops, that is a low cost aint' it? What would you suggest? I'm thinking 3 CP.

Works for me.


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If its a rank below the rank of the jutsu used I'd be paying somewhere around 2x the cost per Genjutsu which puts me out pretty hard, which means I'd have a better time (and easier, sans the metagame lulz to be had) to just do things manually.

Though I'm not really certain where to put the medium stuff in Genjutsu.
If you know better, you can always share.
I was under the impression I had to specify that I could use a focus if I wanted to use one.

How about we make it D-A and you can do a genjutsu of an equal rank or higher? (Same cost proposal deal as before.

Foci techniques aren't the foci themselves instead they use one such as the Sharingan to be cast, furthermore they cannot be a jutsu below the rank of B. The way you have these set up as a single target is all that is necessary for the ones that I asked you to remove the Focus as a medium to work.


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This is another one of those 'Nope.avi' things.
At D Rank a shinobi can make a full illusion of multiple people at once.
I am making a HUD.
A HUD that requires I look at the same thing as someone else.
Use up my Genjutsu ability (because I can only hold one as far as I know.)
And pay an upkeep cost for.
To make a HUD.
Of an ability.
I already have.

I absolutely will not move this one rank higher. Its B Rank just to humor people already, it should be C Rank. Its a visual display with s many drawbacks its not even funny and its not exactly rocket science for a Genjutsu user. Actually, I will drop this to C Rank, presuming my explaination suffices here...because I sure as hell aint' paying A Rank chakra costs to show somebody some pretty lights and colors.

The way you have expalined it here makes it fine to be used as a B rank Focus genjutsu.


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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] EmptyTue 30 Apr 2013, 12:33 am

Changes made.
Returning Shot removed, can't have C Rank Weaponry jutsu.
SC details spoiler'd in.
Kai cost adjusted. Three tomoe effect kept.
Oil technique increased to B Rank and 10CP.
Cost of Ordinary Arms adjusted to 3CP.
Genjutsu focus removed from most jutsu.
Eye Candy has been made 2CP | 5CP | 10CP | 20CP, rank respective.
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] EmptyThu 02 May 2013, 1:13 am

First of all sorry for the late response, second thanks for not taking advantage of my wording on the D-A rank Genjutstu.

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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] EmptyThu 02 May 2013, 7:03 pm

I did what now?
Ah well, onto part 2 then!
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] EmptyFri 03 May 2013, 6:54 pm

- You mention nothing of your character's height. It may not seem important, but it is a useful feature for other role-players to identify your character by when roleplaying with you.

- Bunshin no Jutsu is actually classed as an academy technique, so you can move it from Genjutsu to Academy jutsu and have another jutsu before reaching your limit of 25, if you want.

- You may want to consider including the Japanese names for your custom jutsu.

Other than that, it looks like Kyle covered everything else.
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Just to butt in here, you'll need to remove the Sharingan Copying technique, as it requires at least the two tomoe Sharingan, to which you do not have.
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] Uchiha, Osore [B Rank Nukenin] EmptyWed 08 May 2013, 2:36 pm

Aaron wrote:
- You mention nothing of your character's height. It may not seem important, but it is a useful feature for other role-players to identify your character by when roleplaying with you.

- Bunshin no Jutsu is actually classed as an academy technique, so you can move it from Genjutsu to Academy jutsu and have another jutsu before reaching your limit of 25, if you want.

- You may want to consider including the Japanese names for your custom jutsu.

Other than that, it looks like Kyle covered everything else.

The height is there already, you might've glanced over it.
Noted.
I believe I have 2 openings so I'll have to fill it in when I have time.

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Just to butt in here, you'll need to remove the Sharingan Copying technique, as it requires at least the two tomoe Sharingan, to which you do not have.

I can't find a note saying I have to start with a single Tomoe and two Tomoe is B Rank.
Did I miss something?
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I'm sure we had something written up about it, but now I can't seem to find it. A, apparently unwritten, rule is that Uchiha members are not allowed to start with the Sharingan form that is equal to or above their own rank excluding the first stage of the Sharingan. Thus B - Ranks can't start with the Two Tomoe form and A - Ranks can't start with the Three Tomoe form. I was under the assumption that you knew the rule, as you've currently listed the One Tomoe Sharingan within your Arsenal, unless that was a mistake? Either way, you'll be unable to access the Two Tomoe right now without training for it and this consequently blocks you from obtaining the Sharingan Copying technique. Apologies on the rule not being written up, I'll have it stated within the Uchiha Clan page now.
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Unwritten rules aside, I should finally be updated here (work is a bitch.

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