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| Subject: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sat 01 May 2010, 3:04 am | |
| Name: Ryuugo Kaguya
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Age: 14 Gender: Male Physical Appearance: Ryuugo stands at an average five feet, eight inches and weighs about sixty kilograms making him rather tall, he is incredibly muscular due to his intense training and is known to be very pale even for a Sunagakure-Nin. Ryuugo has deep blue eyes which seem to pierce in to your soul when he looks at you. Ryuugo doesn't seem to have eyebrows. Ryuugo has a long, slender nose and very strong cheekbones. Ryuugo has very small ears, which he hides under his hair. Ryuugo seems to always have an emotionless look on his face always trying to hide his expression. Ryuugo has a light blue, tatoo of his clan symbol on the left of his forehead. Ryuugo usually wears a a short sleeve black shirt with red seems and matching trousers. Over the shirt he wears a sleeveless flak jacket. On his left arm is a tatoo of a small black crow. Ryuugo wears a large overcoat, which is a biege colour except for a few white clouds along the bottom. The coat has an exceptionally high collar which goes up to just underneath Ryuugo's eyes. The coat is opened with a zip which is kept up all the way up to the bottom of Ryuugo's neck. Around his neck, Ryuugo wears a green headband with an hourglass like symbol around his neck. Ryuugo has very mess, grey spiky hair. On his left arm, a few centimeters under the tatoo is a sleeve like arm band attached to him by a silver ring which clips around his arm, keeping the sleeve in place. Ryuugo keeps that arm hidden as it is somewhat disfigured due to his constant use of his kekkei genkai. The arm despite being like an average arm in a sense has multiple bones protruding from it, making it look skeletal in nature. Ryuugo doesn't tend to use that arm except for handseals. Personality: Ryuugo seems to be rather emotionless and rarely smiles, Ryuugo has a lot of pride for his village and believes the Kazekage to be some sort of god and would lay down his life to protect him. Ryuugo also believes that weakness is something pitiful and should be wiped out. Ryuugo despite not being very good at communicating with other humans tends to be at ease with animals. Ryuugo enjoys quiet, tranquil places and tends to meditate for hours on end in the middle of the sandy dessert.
Ryuugo is known to be very brutal in the heat of battle, using whatever means neccesary to kill his opponent and doesn't care about honour. Ryuugo is very quick to defend his village no matter what they do, Ryuugo believes it to be right. Ryuugo seems to be heartless and emotionless but it is due to the death of his parents, having nobody to care for him for so many years the only role model he could look up too was the Kazekage. Ryuugo is incredibly intelligent and tends to slowly circle his opponent in battle analysing them before he makes his move. Despite his age, one would be a fool to call him inexperienced and he is known to be wise beyond his years. Ryuugo is considered quite intimidating due to being from the feared Kaguya clan and for his stature, Ryuugo is known to get incredibly angry with those that oppose him.
Ryuugo has one goal in life which is convince his fellow peers to lead an attack on Kirigakure for persecuting his ancestors and would happily kill off a fellow Kaguya just for being loyal to the Mizukage. Ryuugo tends to keep his plans secret and doesn't like socialising or halting his training unless it was something extremely important such as a Meeting with the Kazekage.
Clan Information
Clan Name: Kaguya
Clan Location: Kiri
Clan Traits: -
Kekkei Genkai: Shikotsumyaku
The main capabilities of Shikotsumyaku is allowing the user to manipulate their bones' growth. This allows them to create weapons of bones that can either protrude from any part of the body, or pulled out and used like hand held weapons. They can even fire pieces of their bones as long-ranged projectiles. Any bone that they remove from the body immediately regenerates, as does the skin that is damaged when the bones are removed. Users can increase the density of the created bones, making them stronger than steel. This not only makes the created weapons very powerful, but also makes their bodies virtually indestructible.
In all actuality there ability to manipulate bones does not come directly from their KKG but is the more prominet result of their bloodlines true ability, which also explains there capabilities. In reality The Kaguya are capable of controling and increasing the calcium in their bodies. This translates quite easy into bone manipulation as bones are made up mostly by calcium. This is why bone manipulation is not considered an advanced element Catch Phrase: “Pitiful Weakling!” "Lord Kazekage, (followed by another sentennce)
Special Information: Character Speciality: Main: Taijutsu Sub: Ninjutsu Elemental Affinity: Main: Fuuton Sub: Raiton Special Characteristics: Nondescript The character is naturally difficult to pick out of a crowd. Those who meet him in person are seldom left with a strong impression. If someone bothers to get his name, they soon forget it. The character must go to outlandish extremes or commit spectacular acts to be remembered
Light Sleeper The character is very light sleeper. Any noise at all will instantly awaken him to a state of full alert. The character is no easier to sneak up on while asleep than he is when he is awake
Faith The character has a deep and abiding faith to sustain him. Ryuugo puts a lot of his trust in the Kazekage and in the village, looking to them when their is a problem ahead. Ryuugo believes that without Sunagakure, he would have nowhere else to stay and would have died thus believes the glorious village to be a gift from the heavens.
Skill Information: Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them. Taijutsu
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Name: Dynamic • Action Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Element: - Description: Dynamic Action is a taijutsu technique. A ninja will launch themselves at an opponent and then use a barrage of strikes and kicks.
Name: Hayabusa Otoshi - Peregrine Falcon Drop Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Element: - Description: Hayabusa Otoshi is a Taijutsu technique. While at an elevated position, a ninja will grab his opponent from behind. Firmly locking himself to their back, they will lock his ankles to their neck to get their body rigid. They will then plant them head first into the ground. Essentially a belly to back piledriver, the move can provide a great concussion to their opponent's head.
Name: Dynamic • Entry Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Element: - Description: Dynamic Entry is a taijutsu technique. A ninja will often throw a kunai to distract his targets attention (though not necessary), he will then use his/her speed and agility to quickly approach and attack his/her opponent from their blind side.
Name: Seishun Furu Pawaa Rank: A Type: Taijutsu Element: - Description: The user will perform a full frontal assault on an enemy. Typically begun with Shofuu, the user will rise above an enemy in mid-air and gather a large quantity of chakra to their leg, raising upward before releasing it in a downward kick, which will send an enemy crushing to the ground in a great flash of light, making it a powerful attack.
Name: Swift Palm Strike Rank: C-B Type: Taijutsu Element: Fuuton Description: The user will focus Fuuton chakra to the palm of their hands and will strike at the opponent at ferocious speeds. If used by a Chuunin or higher the user can use extra chakra, to use the technique to deflect projectiles by pushing them away with the gust of wind from their palms.
Name: Hurricane Hammer Rank: B Type: Taijutsu Element: Fuuton Description:By clenching both hands together like a fist and launching himself high in the air, the user will drop down like a hammer crushing whatever is below with his intense strength coupled with the added speed of the Fuuton chakra.
Name: Tornado Slicer Rank: B Type: Taijutsu Element: Fuuton Description: The user will envelope their arm with Fuuton chakra and rush towards the opponent, then by slicing forward they will send a gust of wind forward and when the arm connects with the opponent it will send them flying backwards.
Name: Gale Force Kick Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Element:Fuuton Description:The user will channel Fuuton chakra throughout their body and jump in the air and do a round house kick towards the opponent. Kekkei Genkai
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Name: Drilling Finger Bullets Type: Taijutsu Rank: C Element: - Description: The user fires his fingertip bones at an opponent like bullets. Since they has regenerative bones, the rate of fire from his arsenal can become limitless. These bullets are unable to penetrate more dense materials though they can severely dent it and nearly pass through due to sheer impact. The skin the bullets tear through to fire is also healed by the end of the technique.
Name: Dance of the Willow Type: Taijutsu Rank: C Element: - Description: To use this dance, the user grows long straight bones from select places in the body. It is limited to the palms of the hands, the shoulders, the knees, and the elbows. Not all the places have to be used in this jutsu, but it takes an additional C rank amount of chakra per place after the first three places. This dance form is incredibly acrobatic, using spins, charges, and long sweeping slashes to make the strikes more effective and to evade opponents' counter strikes. They can also extend the bones with out moving their body, but each extension also costs another C rank amount. Each bone is initially protruding a foot out from the body.
Name: Larch Dance Type: Taijutsu Rank: B Element: - Description: This jutsu is effectively a much more advanced for of the Dance of the Willow in that it causes bone to protrude out of the body while remaining connected to the skeletal structure. These bones are razor sharp and can come from virtually anywhere on the body, though it can be limited by chakra supply. There is a distinct cost which has to be taken into consideration. First the body is divided into areas from which the cost is associated with. These are left arm, right arm, left leg, right leg, the chest, and upper back. Now when this jutsu is used the bones are free to grow from four of these places. To access the other divisions of the body for this jutsu, they must pay an extra C rank amount of chakra per section. They are able to grow these bones at such a fast rate that they can impale a target as they grow, but are limted to extending to a foot and a half past the body. They can even be used to block or trap the opponents strikes and also makes them virtually untouchable as the sheer danger this provides to people who get to close.
Name: Clematis Dance : Vine Type: Taijutsu Rank: B Element: - Description: Using this jutsu, the user will remove the spine from their back, pulling it out from the top, as they grow a new one to replace it. The spine can then be utilized as a flexible chain staff which can be used primarily for attack. The difficulty in this jutsu is due to the great danger in removing ones spine and the expert timing it would take. The protrusions on the vertebrae or modified making them stronger and sharper so they are an effective cutting tool.
Fuuton Ninjutsu
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Name: Third Arm Gale Type: Ninjutsu Rank: D Element: Fuuton Description The user will create Wind-Natured Chakra in the form of a third arm, that can be used to cause minor damage to an object but is mostly used to push things forward or too move heavy objects. Ryuugo uses this technique in the sandy deserts, to immitate a a member of the Sabure Clan as a joke while in fact he is just moving the sand around and cannot use any sand related techniques.
Name: Daitoppa - Great Breakthrough Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Element: Fuuton Description: Fuuton • Daitoppa is a Ninjutsu technique which utilizes the Wind Element. After bringing his hand to his mouth, the user will blow a large blast of wind capable of leveling almost anything in its way. A variation of the technique involves a smaller blast of wind which gets ignited with flame.
Name: Air Shuriken Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: Fuuton Description The user will create a shuriken from Wind Natured Chakra, by constantly spinning the energy around a single point. After preparing the technique, the user will launch it towards an opponent at a great speed, these shurikens are powerful enough to cut an opponent's flesh but if a normal shuriken was thrown at it, the blast would probably be cancelled out along with the shuriken.
Name: Wind Sphere Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: Fuuton Description The user creates a spinning ball of Fuuton chakra and slams it down at an opponent, creating a great deal of damage. This technique is rather powerful but is difficult to control and if the user is hit while travelling with the sphere it will disappear and it cannot do any major damage in comparison to Ryuugo's other attacks.
Name: Reppushou - Gale Wind Palm Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Element: Fuuton Description: Fuuton • Reppushou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Wind Element. After forming the needed hand seals, the user will send a strong gust of wind towards his target. When acting in conjunction with another thrown weapon, the wind can increase its power and deadliness.
Name: Wind Vortex Type: Ninjutsu Rank: B Element: Fuuton Description: The user will create a vortex of wind that they can direct towards an opponent, if the user uses this technique in conjuction with a Katon Technique it becomes much powerfuller. The blast is very sharp being able to cut through thin rock and wood.
Name: Wind Clone Technique Type: Ninjutsu Rank: B Element: Fuuton Description: The user creates an identical clone of themself which can interact with the environment but when damage is inflicted the clone will explode in a gust of wind damaging anything within 3 meters of the clone and will pick up any small objects and move them. If somebody were to punch the clone their hand would probably be cut by the constant travel of Fuuton chakra.
Name: Take to the Skies Type: Ninjutsu Rank: B Element: Fuuton Description The user uses the Fuuton Chakra to launch themselves in the air and also too keep them from falling. By using this jutsu the user can almost fly momentarily but it is actually just a lot of jumps aided with Fuuton Chakra, the user can stay in the air for a total of 3 posts before returning to the ground. This is good for scouting missions as the user can look down, when a shinobi is new to this technique they can experience stomach pain from the speed that they are travelling at and can even throw up.
b]Name[/b]: Renkuudan - Drilling Air Projectile Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu Element: Fuuton Description: Fuuton • Renkuudan is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Wind Element. The user inhales a large amount of air into his chest and then slams his fist into his chest to expel it. When expelled it forms concussive spherical projectiles capable of inflicting large damage. Raiton Ninjutsu
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Name: Touza no Jutsu Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Element: Raiton [b]Description: A close range jutsu on which the user makes an electric current pass throw the enemy, by touching the opponent with both hands. This jutsu can leave an enemy paralyzed for one post.
Name: Kyuu no Jutsu Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Element: Raiton Description: A jutsu on which the user creates a chakra made sphere of lightning energy in his hands, and throws it to the opponent, giving him a strong electric jolt. This lightning ball will be heavy and thrown in a lateral direction.
Name: Kiba Kyuu no Jutsu Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu Element: Raiton Description: The evolution of Raiton Raikyuu, this time, the sphere turns into a piercing fang when thrown at the opponent giving him not only lightning damage, but also a small piercing wound. If this jutsu hits a preexisting wound, then the opponent will experience immense pain and the muscles in that area will spasm uncontrollably for one post. Other Jutsu
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The 3 Basic Academy Jutsu
Name: Kuchiyose no Jutsu - Summoning Technique Rank:C Type: Ninjutsu Element:N/A Description: A powerful jutsu, Ninpo Kuchiyose allows a ninja to summon animals, objects and the dead to fight on their behalf. There are many ways in which the ninja can sign a contract with a summon but it is usually done with the ninja signing a blood contract with the animal species. This allows the user to summon different size and skilled animals to fight along side them, or on their behalf. . Name: Bunshin no Jutsu - Clone Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: Bunshin no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. The Bunshin technique creates a copy of the ninja without substance. The copy resembles the ninja in every way. This clone can function as a distraction or as means to confuse one's opponent. As soon the Bunshin gets attacked or comes into contact with an opponent, it will disperse
Name: Henge no Jutsu - Transformation Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: Henge no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu - Change of Body Stance Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themself with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
Other commonly known Techniques
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza - Act of Water Surface Walking Rank: E Type: N/A Element: N/A Description: A variation on the Kinobori no Waza (Act of Tree Climbing), the art of water surface walking allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water
Name: Kinobori no Waza - Act of Tree Climbing Rank: E Type: N/A Element: N/A Description: Kinobori no Waza, the art of tree climbing serves a dual purpose. Taking part in Kinobori Shugyou (Tree Climbing Training) helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed
Name: Explosion Tag: Activate Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: The user will activate an explosion tag. Normally, the tag will be placed by them, so they know where it is and can easily activate it.
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu - Escaping Skill Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: A very basic technique that allows a ninja to escape from rope binds.
Name: Kai - Release Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.
Rank Information: Rank: Chuunin/B-Rank Village Affiliation: Sunagakure
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| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sat 01 May 2010, 3:49 pm | |
| History Pre-Academy Arc (0-10)
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The Kaguya Clan were known as the most Blood Thirsty War Mongers of Kirigakure, they slaughtered countless enemies in an attempt to fuel their rage. The rest of the villagers cowered in fear of this all mighty clan of warriors who could manipulate their own bone structure, they were never far from a weapon. The Sandaime Mizukage organised a population culling, to decrease the clan's numbers by 40%. The villagers prepared their pitch forks to start an angry mob to overthrow the noble clan. The clan were able to fend of the other vilagers for a only a tiny amount of time until they had to give up the game and flee. One of the most feared members of the clan, Ichirou Kaguya was known for his skills in dispatching of an enemy fled the village in hope that he could carry on living peacefully. Ichirou arrived on the sandy desert of Sunagakure where he pledged full allegiance to the Kazekage in return for a safe place to live. News of Ichirou had spread throughout the Shinobi and the Kazekage was happy to have such a great shinobi on his side and gave Ichirou a young woman to seal the deal. Ichirou and his new wife Nagami, acted like an average family for many years and even had a son named Ryuugo. Ryuugo was born an incredibly happy child and was extremely playful and enjoyed spending his days watching his father train. At the age of four; a team of Kirigakure-Nin had arrived at his village. The three shinobi knocked rampantly on the door, until Nagami would open it for them to enter. It seemed as if they were two Jounin led by one of the Seven Swordsman of the Mist. Ichirou put up a good fight but was easily dispatched of by the Hidden Mist Ninja, leaving the body behind as a memento to Ryuugo. After witnessing his father's death and noticing that he was powerless to stop it, Ryuugo faced a drastic change in personality. The young child seemed to become a lot more peaceful but would flip and enter a fit of rage each time somebody would mention his father. Ryuugo also become content with what he had and decided to continue with his studies knowing that the Kazekage would need an intelligent ninja. From the age of five, he had already devised a plan for revenge and began to work on putting it in to motion. Academy Arc (10-12)
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At the age of ten, Ryuugo enrolled in the Academy. Ryuugo was bored believing all the lessons were effortless but what he truly excelled in was Taijutsu. Ryuugo learned most the basic jutsu with little effort and found class incredibly exciting as it would further his training to make him more like his father. His teachers stated that he was some sort of Child Prodigy and was treated with great respect. Though Ryuugo seemed content on the outside back at home things were taking a turn for the worse, as his mother became an alcoholic. Preferring Sake to taking care of her son, Nagami began to become more abusive and then after a nervous break down Nagami was labelled Critically Insane and it was Ryuugo's job to look after her despite what she had previously done to him. Back at school, Ryuugo continued to show exceptional skill in techniques. Ryuugo struggled making friends and continued being shy and secluded. At home, Ryuugo learned of his ability to control his bone structure and decided to spend some time outside of school trying to harness this strength to use as a weapon. Ryuugo graduated from the Academy at the age of twelve and began his life as a shinobi. Approaching, his final goal. Ryuugo was paired with Sakuma Nara and Ikumi Uchiha, originating from other villages the Raikage decided to group them together in case they weren't spies. Under the watchful eye of Okimi Yotsuki a Jounin, famous for her Medical Skills. Genin Arc (12-13)
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The three twelve year old Genin and their nineteen year old teacher were known as Team 8. At first Ryuugo was disappointed with the life of a Genin due to the intelligible missions which usually involved helping a pet cat down from a tree, pulling the weeds from somebodies garden. The three worked tirelessly under the guidance of Okimi, hoping that they would soon start to do more exciting missions. They received their first breakthrough when they were asked to Escort a Famous Artist to the Land of Rivers. The crew were incredibly excited for the upcoming mission. The team trekked for days on end, guarding the Artist. Sometimes they would have to camp out for the night, one of them would have to stay awake just in case somebody tried to attack them. Ryuugo was slightly angry, as the Artist seemed to believe he was more important than them, treated them as tools and didn't care for their safety as he merely complained that somebody of his importantance should receive more skilled bodyguards when Ikumi was injured by a group of Genin from The Land of Rivers. Having ran away from the threat, they carried on with their mission until they noticed that were being followed by the Genin once again. As they were a few hundred meters from the border between the Land of Iron and the Land of Rivers. The Genin arrived to stop, it turned out it wasn't just Ryuugo who had something against the Artist but the rest of the villagers. The last Leader of the Land of Rivers, was the Artisan's brother and the two lived like kings and the villagers like animals until a group of rebels killed the king and they were after the man next. Okimi told them not to get involved in the countries affairs and all they had to do was to leave that man in the village and head back. The enemy Genin were infuriated and launched a barrage of shurikens towards the team and unexpectedly they were intercepted by another set from Ikumi. When Ryuugo and Sakuma asked how she could been so fast to react, they noticed a new look in her eyes. Her sharingan had activated. After the rebel Genin were dispatched of and the Artist was in the village. The others decided it would not be a good idea to head back home. When the Raikage learned of how they fought against the enemies, she decided that they were a trustworthy Team and they continued to do missions. At the age of thirteen, after Team 8 had made a name for itself they decided it would be time to enter the Chuunin Exams. Chuunin(13+)
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Through hard work and determination, the team was able to pass the Exams and were allocated a position in the tournament. Ryuugo showed his true strength, annihilating his foes. Ryuugo passed with flying colours and was promoted to Chuunin rank. It was then decided that Ryuugo would be in charge of his team for now. Ryuugo took up the challenge, “How hard could it be? I can look after mother” he thought to himself. Ryuugo would continue doing missions by day but after work he would seclude himself from society, lingering in the darkness. Ryuugo grew tired of the burden that forever halted his progress, in the dead of night the young shinobi approached his sleeping mother. Focusing a blade of wind chakra in his finger tips, Ryuugo would begin to furiously attack. It was the perfect crime; the chakra left not marks and she was dead in minutes. Ryuugo let out a hysterical laugh and would bury his mother in the desert and carry on with his life. Ryuugo became closer to the Kazekage, now that his parents were both gone. He needed to do so, he needed somebody strong. Somebody that wouldn't fail him. The Kazekage was constantly busy with other affairs and chose one of his elite tutors to teach the young Kaguya. Ryuugo's new tutor was a former TSKOR member who went by the name of Gyou. Ryuugo would spent hours each day learning new techniques and skills. It was under Gyou's tutelage that Ryuugo developed the ability to control the Raiton element in battle. Ryuugo was ecstatic with his new found power and teacher and believed his new teacher to be very similar in strength to his father. The youthful Chuunin for his brilliant progress was taught the Summoning Technique and was given a scroll which had once belonged to his father. Doing the neccesary handseals and making a small cut on his finger to draw blood. With a cloud of smoke, a young lion cub emerged from dust. This was unlike an average lion, he possesed the ability to speak and use jutsu and told Ryuugo that he was named Shishimaru. Not only that but Shishimaru was identified as a B-Rank summon and stood at three meters tall. Now that he had obtained a summon, learned a new element, Ryuugo felt as if his dream was becoming more of a reality.
RP Sample
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Ryuugo sat adjacent Ikumi, in the grand foyer. Truly this was a place of elegance, it felt like the comfort was taking over his mind. He didn't even feel like it would be neccesary for him to even bother standing back up. Ikumi turned too face him, staring deep in his eyes. Ryuugo couldn't bring himself to break the silence, something felt awfully strange about the seat. Ikumi's image seemed to disappear, a murder of crows taking her place. Ryuugo's seat soon changed form, the elegant art nouveau style had now altered to some sort of gruesome slime, glueing him to the chair. Ryuugo felt as if he was sinking ever so deep in to the chair, looking up out of the windows all he could see was a large, blood red eye. The eye of a Uchiha, the Sharingan. Glaring down at him, insulting him. Ryuugo mustered all of his strength, raising from the painful comfort of the seat. “The mind, humanities greatest weapon. I feel sorry for you Ikumi. We could've ruled the Shinobi Realms. A Uchiha by my side would have been a great asset. Unfortunately some people doesn't deserve their god given gift.”
Ryuugo warped back to reality, he was drenched in blood lying on the ground. It seemed a minor bite from Shishimaru had woken him up. Forcing himself back up, Ryuugo would throw his coat over his injured body. “I have to say Ikumi, you sure had me fooled with that Genjutsu.” he would add, edging closer to the female. A long, white stalk of bone began to form from Ryuugo's arm. The Sunagakure Chuunin, will place his opposite hand on the pole. Focusing Fuuton-based chakra in to, greatly increasing the sharpness of the blade. Ryuugo's eyes darted to left, directing Shishimaru to head back behind the kunoichi. Ryuugo would launch himself high in the air and would spin down towards the ground as if he was a drill and the Chakra infused bone was the drill-bit. As Ryuugo thundered down towards her, Ikumi would pull out a steel, jutte from her back. Ikumi swung the jutte, trying to catch the bone and break it but swiftly Ryuugo would flip right side up, charging his path. The jutte and the bone would collide with a devastating thud, Ryuugo forced his arm forward, Ikumi was pushed back by Ryuugo's brute force. Then Ryuugo would withdraw the bone, Ikumi taking the chance would swing her jutte at his head. The Chuunin would fall back using a matrix-esque dodge. Ryuugo's back was arched, his hands firmly on the ground. Then, kicking both legs in the air. Slamming Ikumi straight in the jaw, as his feet connected, Ikumi would yelp in pain and would fall back too the ground with a loud, thud. Shishimaru would rush forward, placing his powerful jaw firmly around her arm. When his fangs were firmly clenched around the young girls arm, he would pull ripping of the flesh from her. Ikumi would scream, this was a pain she had never experienced before, it was engulfing her. She had too fight it, she wasn't going to die. Not here, not now. Not my the hands of Ryuugo. Ryuugo would lower himself to her level, looking at her straight in the eye. “What a waste” he muttered yet he was far from sympathetic. Caressing her body, he would place one of his hands on her chest. Ryuugo would bring himself closer to her lips and despite the recent events it seemed Ikumi was inviting him to do so. For that moment of bliss, their tongues dance together. Ikumi slowly felt as if the pain was easing, did Ryuugo have a changed of heart. Ryuugo would dig his fingertips deep in her chest, the pain was cut short by the euphoria of the kiss then Ryuugo would break away from the kiss. Stepping back from her, Ikumi would fall to the ground head first, from behind you could see five minuscule, bullet like objects emerging from her back. Ryuugo smirked, “Pitiful weakling.”
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| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sat 01 May 2010, 6:21 pm | |
| Name: Shishimaru Rank: B (Increases as he grows older) Appearance: Shishimaru stands at roughly five feet tall, making him much larger than your average human. Shishimaru has glorious white fur, which is pristine and rarely gets dirty. Shishimaru has a long golden mane and incredibly sharp fangs. When Shishimaru begins to use Raiton jutsu, it changes to a blue colour and seems to flow like electricity. Contract Type: Blood Donation Species: Lion Elemental Affinity: Raiton Special Abilities/Characteristics: - Shishimaru can speak - Shishimaru is much stronger than an average human and much faster because he is a lion.
Background: Shishimaru was taught how to use the Summoning Technique when he became a Chuunin, the Contract with the lions once belonged to his deceased father. Shishimaru is the son of the head of the Lion Summons and usually resides high in the mountains near Kumogakure. Most of the adult lions tend to feel hostile around humans and judge them in strength but when he was summoned he was only a cub and grew closer to Ryuugo. Summons Jutsu:
Name: Lightning Cannon Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Element: Raiton Description: Shishimaru will begin to fire spheres of electricty from his mouth rapidly (firing about 20) out in random directions, though not fatal the spheres can break small rocks and objects, good for clearing an area.
Name: Thunder Fang Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu Element: Raiton Description: The user will begin to channel Raiton chakra through their teeth and then they will clamp down on an object sending a surge of energy through it, if used on an area with an existing wound the opponent's muscles will spasm for 1 post.
Name: Mane of Thunder Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu Element: Raiton Description: Shishimaru's mane will spike up and fire out hundreds of tiny bolts of hair with Raiton chakra running through it, the technique is incredibly painful and is hard to evade.
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| | | Hiruzen
Age : 32 Posts : 1178
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sat 01 May 2010, 7:40 pm | |
| i shouldnt post here, but Jounin is full |
| | | Rahim
Posts : 16
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sat 01 May 2010, 8:03 pm | |
| Is it? |
| | | CYANIDE CANDY
Posts : 1084
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sun 02 May 2010, 3:00 am | |
| Jounin is not full, but you'll need approval from the Raikage. |
| | | Caranore
Age : 35 Posts : 1492
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sun 02 May 2010, 8:57 pm | |
| Jounin is 16 minimum. Gaara was the original kazekage, 250 years ago if you read the Suna guide. Any other canon character references will need to be taken out.
Your RP sample is a block post. I would much prefer it was seperated into paragraphs, it makes it easier to read on everyone.
Jounin permission needed from the Kazekage.
Until you get his permission, I wont go over the rest of the application. |
| | | Rahim
Posts : 16
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sun 02 May 2010, 9:17 pm | |
| I chaged it, and I'll see if the Kazekage thinks its good enough. I'll improve it if neccesary. |
| | | Pattycakes
Age : 30 Posts : 1701
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Mon 03 May 2010, 12:06 am | |
| Physical appearance could be a bit longer. Two paragraphs on the larger side =]
get rid of the term "Electrocuted" from any jutsu. It actually means to die by electricity, not just get zapped =] |
| | | Rahim
Posts : 16
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Mon 03 May 2010, 11:18 pm | |
| bump |
| | | Travis
Posts : 414
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Tue 04 May 2010, 12:04 am | |
| Contact the Kage of the village. Do not bump until permission is given. It'd be pointless to review the app if we are gonna have to make you strip half of it if you don't get the Jounin spot. |
| | | Rahim
Posts : 16
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Tue 04 May 2010, 12:25 am | |
| I have permission, what makes you think otherwise? Huh? |
| | | Pattycakes
Age : 30 Posts : 1701
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Tue 04 May 2010, 12:29 am | |
| *rolls eyes* Prove you have permission. |
| | | Caranore
Age : 35 Posts : 1492
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Tue 04 May 2010, 12:32 am | |
| You have permission to TRY. Not to actually take the position. Big difference. |
| | | Rahim
Posts : 16
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Tue 04 May 2010, 1:03 am | |
| Well, what a stupid question. Hugh hasn't been on in 2 days, obviously he hasn't checked the app yet and if only he can approve, why do you bother? |
| | | Pattycakes
Age : 30 Posts : 1701
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Tue 04 May 2010, 1:06 am | |
| *rolls eyes* just cool your pants and wait for Jiro |
| | | Hugh
Age : 37 Posts : 1136
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Thu 06 May 2010, 1:52 am | |
| Sorry I have been ill so haven't been active
Incorruptible & Faith SC’s should be expanded to explain why your character has them. Needn’t be long but I would like to know how they relate to your character
You seem to have no clan info. Add it please. There is no reason it should be excluded especially given all you need to is copy and paste it from the cannon clan thread
Jutsu – For All Jutsu please code properly. I expect the best from my Jounin and a min req is a meeting core standards:
Tai: Potentially add some more Tai (you ought to have more for a Jounin) and remove all unrelated erroneous references such as Raikage
Fuu: Add English names to all jutsu and more erroneous references this time to people like Jariaya. I am a little worried by your choice of second spec which seems to be tacked on. Your Fuuinjutsu show no originally and use the limited and rather weak cannon seals that exist. The best Fuu apps rely almost entirely on original work to take adv of the unique yet underdeveloped spec. Your selection is frankly worse then Caranores, who is a genin. I suggest you either redevelop your Fuu and consult Fuu users on the matter or pick a spec your familiar enough. Currently it seems like a waste of spec, Fuu is good but only when you invest time developing it, otherwise it’s perhaps the worse spec of all.
Please using coding on your Summon too
With your history needs to bear in mind the my characters only been kage for 12 years so wouldn't have been kage until your PC reached 4
Hmm your app is closer to chuunin then Jounin to be fair. Poor coding, failing to editing Jutsu appropriately and general lack of original Jutsu suggest to me that while you have some experience its not quite there yet at least on US (where standards are high). The biggest problem is the Fuuinjutsu which feels largely tacked on with a small bunch of all cannon techs that I can tell you from experience are generally not very practical. However the history was interesting enough and I did think your rp sample was good so its left me at a quandary. I am not going to give you blanket consent but I do give you consent to continue working on the app while I make up my mind. I suggest you follow all the changes suggested and comments mentioned in this post. I should state that if I decide not to you will be asked to consider one of are vacant chuunin’s position. In short the app has good aspects but to get a Jounin place I need it to be good top to bottom |
| | | Rahim
Posts : 16
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Thu 06 May 2010, 8:34 pm | |
| I shall add everything, sorry about no clan info. I accidently deleted the app on saturday and forgot to add the clan info again. I shall change to Ninjutsu as I can expand on the kekkei genkai. I'm not sure about more tai, I might make more bone related ones. |
| | | CYANIDE CANDY
Posts : 1084
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Fri 07 May 2010, 4:42 am | |
| Please fix your coding in your Taijutsu area and Fuuton area. |
| | | Rahim
Posts : 16
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Fri 07 May 2010, 10:04 am | |
| I have improved it, what do you think Hugh? |
| | | CYANIDE CANDY
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| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sat 08 May 2010, 12:22 am | |
| Before Hugh looks over this again, just thought I'd tell you seeing as your Jounin and have a creature, that you should have this jutsu.
- Quote :
- Name: Kuchiyose no Jutsu - Summoning Technique
Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: A powerful jutsu, Ninpo Kuchiyose allows a ninja to summon animals, objects and the dead to fight on their behalf. There are many ways in which the ninja can sign a contract with a summon but it is usually done with the ninja signing a blood contract with the animal species. This allows the user to summon different size and skilled animals to fight along side them, or on their behalf. |
| | | Rahim
Posts : 16
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sat 08 May 2010, 12:48 am | |
| I do, don't I? Thanks anyways |
| | | Jsalos
Posts : 191
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sat 08 May 2010, 6:55 am | |
| - Quote :
- Name: Raiton Engai no Jutsu
Rank: A Type: Ninjutsu Element: Raiton Description: The user’s body is surrounded by an electric shield from the user’s, which can protect the user from Taijutsu. Any one who tries to hit him will be electrocuted and sent back. However, if the Taijutsu is powerful enough, then it can break through. Also, Hyuuga techniques can penetrate this shield. This will last for one post, due to the nature of the technique, and the user is rendered immobile. How does this affect oncoming ninjutsu, or is it a taijutsu only defense?
- Quote :
- Name: Raiton Kago no jutsu
Rank: A Type: Lightning Element: Raiton Description: First the user concentrates their chakra into a ball of lightning above their head. The ball is of moderate size, like a dodgeball. This will begin to rotate, and each successful turn, a small bar of lightning will be propelled forth in any direction the user chooses. This is very fast. This jutsu may be used for defense for it is very hard get past the bars. It also is very effective at dispersing large crowds around you. What do you mean by a bar? How big is it? Add a chakra drain for each continous post of usage.
- Quote :
- Name: Grand Thunder Storm
Rank: A Type: Lightning Element: Raiton Description: Ryuugo will blow out a gust of wind while Shishimaru will send out pulses of electricty from his mouth, once the two techniques connect a gust of wind carrying electricty will travel at great speeds away from the user, this technique is incredibly difficult to evade and once it hits it can tear through the opponent's flesh. Illogical: the wind would not help nor enchance the lightning, it would cancel it out, the way wind techniques cancel out lightning ones of equal or lower rank. |
| | | Rahim
Posts : 16
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sat 08 May 2010, 10:22 am | |
| Umm, it says Taijutsu for a reason and I removed the second technique, I have way too many A-Ranks and I don't really need it and I changed the attack. It's ready to be checked again now. |
| | | Rahim
Posts : 16
| Subject: Re: Kaguya, Ryuugo [Suna Chuunin] Sun 09 May 2010, 1:37 pm | |
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