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PostSubject: Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] EmptySun 25 Apr 2010, 10:44 am

Basic Information:

Name: Kyruuki , Roxas

Secondary Title: Ryuuk

Age: 13

Gender: Male

Physical Appearance:
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Roxas always wears a thick, long-sleeved coat wherever he goes. It conceals all his hidden weaponry and lets him have a light amount of armor. His eyes are a great brown color along with his brown hair that dances off the sunlight in rays. Underneath, he is provided with a white, plain, short-sleeved t-shirt.

His lightly-toned skin makes him look like a very nice looking young man, but because he is different from most ninja's because of his control over crystal, and his expertise over weapons and they're capabilities, he's considered a nerd. His hair is spiky - which lets him move with gracefulness across the ground, even with his extreme speed.

Personality: Roxas is a normal, average 13-year-old, hormone-driven teenager. Unlike most teenagers, who are angry and always wanting more, Roxas is calm and takes what he gets given with utmost respect. He was brought up that way, and will not disrespect people that deserve the respect they earned through age, wisdom, and battle.

In battle, Roxas changes completely. His calm, normal personality changes into a quick-thinking, risk-taking, incredibly fast fighter. Although he only just thinks about what he's doing, he still has enough time to dodge, even with his remotely fast speed. In most cases, he is able to dodge, but if he gets struck, the shock sends him into a fury - also known as a frenzy - which does nothing but slows him down and ups his power a tiny bit.

Catch Phrase: Awakening

Rank Information:

Rank: Genin

Village Affiliation: Kirigakure no Sato - Hidden Mist Village ;

Special Information:

Character Speciality: Ninjutsu ; Kenjutsu
Main: Ninjutsu
Sub: Weaponry - Kenjutsu
Elemental Affinity: Katon • Fire

Main: Katon • Fire
Sub: Exotic [ According to Vito ]
Special Characteristics:

Skill Information:

Weapon Template:

Name: Kiyurai
Rank: D-A
Appearance:
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Special Abilities/Characteristics: If dug into ground, can make crystal stalagmites spike up in random areas.
Origin:

Created through the use of his late ancestor, Ryuzukai Kyruuki, and his fluent power over crystal. The blade is infused with crystal chakra, allowing it power to control crystal through the ground. Through the past generations, it has been used quite a lot. Roxas has recently re-infused it with his exceptionally strong Crystal Chakra, restoring it to it's former powerful glory.

Because of it's very strong control over crystal, it is able to create different types of crystal, whether that be a crystal shield, crystal chakra clones, or crystal stalagmites from the ground. Though the sword can only create the stalagmites, Roxas can 'borrow' chakra from the sword, leaving him able to create other techniques through use.

Background Information

History:

Academy Student Arc

Sora was different from the other kids. He had an unbelievable control over his jutsu, weapons and his element. The training he was put through was different from normal. Most students did the average training. Learning the Bunshin technique, learning how to do the most basic jutsu, but Sora was different. He was put through training a lot different to them. He had to practice control over his element and weaponry, along with summoning his own weapon, the Jukai, or Crystal Blade, without a scroll. He seemed to learn that to perfection easier than the elemental control, but day after day he just kept with it knowing that he wanted to make his parents proud.

One day after his training, he went to walk home and saw these two ninja walk into his house. He ran in quickly, dropping his bag and summoning his blade. He bursted through the door and looked quickly at the two ninja who had turned his way to look at him as the father stood cornered. He ran over, grabbing a kunai from his weapons pouch and throwing them at them. They dodged, and his father dodged with lightning speed. Sora turned, facing them. “What do you want? Why were you going to kill my father?!” He looked at them, as they lifted their hoods, showing the S burnt into their skin. They spoke nothing, and Sora shuddered. “Y... You’re missing ninja...” They looked to each other, and then turned back at him. “Well well, smart boy. But your bravery can only get you so far... How are you going to kill both of us, knowing that your only an academy student and we, well, we have years of killing under both of our belts” He looked over to his mother. “Mother, get out of here. I will deal with them both” The mother got up, looking away and shaking, then ducking out the backdoor. Sora launched at them, blade in his hands. After making a stabbing motion at them, both of them disappeared with a quick motion, and then came behind him. “Now now, what’re you doing? That’s all wrong” Then quickly, one of them punched one of them with their fist, only to see it disperse. “Wha-“He was stopped with a gurgling sound, then noticed the blade extruding from his heart. Roxas quickly pulled it out, now blood stained to the hilt. The body, now dead, dropped quietly to the floor.

The other ninja looked down and then back up at Sora. “You… You killed my brother!” He looked at him, his eyes now red and his face purely angry. “I’m going to kill you!” He hurdled himself at Sora, who quickly put his sword up in defence, only to stab him through the chest. He met his breathe quickly with a pant, then a gurgle. Roxas looked up, shocked that he did that, and then pulled it out. The body dropped to the floor, and his mother ran out. “Sora… Sora?! You killed them?!” He met his mothers’ eyes, who seemed to be just as surprised as Roxas was. “Come, we’re going to the Kage” His father walked out, following him, and looked at the dead bodies. Sora quickly dismissed his blade, and pushed free of his mothers hold and ran at him, full pace, then thumping into his chest. “I did it Dad. I really did it” To his surprise, his father looked away, and then looked back. “You did it son... Good job” The family then left out to the Kage.

Role-Play Sample:

Taken from Naruto RPG Reborn

Minoichi himself had no idea what was happening. It was an early day, he had just woken up. He saw fit to wear black today, it was unearthly color. Covering his depressing thoughts, they lifted to see clouds of gray. Rain. Blood. Blood was instantly filling his mind at this time, and he knew not of why. Maybe his brother Inaraka had cut his hand when making the homemade meals, he didn't know.

Minoichi was no perfect person, infact, more far from it than usual. Although death was hard to him, it was nothing that really inflicted on his body... Not did he know, though, that his girlfriend was sitting by a puddle, sobbing over the death of a family member. He never knew what she was doing there, and, to tell the truth, he didn't even know she was there. This day was just like a telepathic dream to him, and it felt like hell.

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3 Years Before.
Grief. Pain. Sorrow. Tranquility and Death.
This story of life to Minoichi is but a dream, and not a nightmare.
This story of how Minoichi's family died is a deathly story.

His mother lay there, dead on the floor. Tears streaming from his eyes like party blowers. In his apartment, he looked to his father. Saddened, he saw the tears on his face. This happened at 3AM in the morning, so his father ordered him back to bed immediately. He did as he was told, but only after an hour of sinful crying and disorderly death. He hugged his mother the final goodnight he could give her, then his father. He knew not that this was the last time he hugged his father also.

8AM in the morning, Minoichi woke up to blood leaking through the door. He shrieked, panicked, and then opened the door. His mother was gone, taken by the ambulance. His father laid there still. He whispered to himself. "Papa...?" He knew he was dead. The silence of the wind swayed at him. He screamed into the wind. "Papaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" He screamed and dropped on the floor, hugging him and wishing he was still there. He looked at his wrists, cut, neck, cut, forehead, bullet hole. He cried for 3 hours, until finally, he ran out of tears. His way of venting was crying, he then called the ambulance. They picked his father up and gave Minoichi a prognosis, "He committed suicide" He said as the 9 year old Minoichi dropped once again to the floor. He was a genin none-the-less, which meant he could stick up for himself. The Kage gave him no where to stay, and almost cried during the saying that Minoichi had 2 days to find a place to live, or else, he was kicked out of the village.

2 Days passed and no one wanted to adopt him into their house. Not family, their house, doesn't sound hard, right? He eventually got to the village gate, meeting nothing but his uncle, Saruno, and the wind. 6 Days later, he was living happily in the abandoned home his S Rank Uncle left in the top left corner of Konohagakure.

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Minoichi replayed those moments of shear displeasure. His wanderings set off to the temple of a god, puddle nearby. Kimiko sit there, driftly sobbing and crying over the loss of her mother. Minoichi walked up, sat down, and hugged her into his chest. "We'll... We'll be alright.. Kimiko" He began crying, sharing her pain with his and keeping his pain to himself, not to make her cry further.

The only thing that kept Minoichi going from committing suicide to see his mother and father, was this girl and Saruno. This girl, Kimiko, reminded him so much of his far off distant mother, and that was his depressing thought. It was clearly lifted as he smiled with tears. "Mother... You sent down my angel... My dear life is in this girl now... Kimiko is your way of saying... Your still there... Thank You... Mother" Swaying in the breeze, he kissed Kimiko on the forehead and hugged her tightly.


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PostSubject: Re: Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] EmptyMon 26 Apr 2010, 8:57 am

Basic/Academic/Genin Jutsus

Spoiler:

Fire Jutsu

Spoiler:


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PostSubject: Re: Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] EmptyThu 29 Apr 2010, 8:45 am

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Name: Shikyaku no Jutsu - Four-Legged Technique
Rank: D
Type: Attack
Chakra Cost: 15
Element: N/A
Description: Shikyaku no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilized by the Inuzuka clan. After forming the needed hand seals, chakra begins to emit from the body of the clan member and they take on a more canine-like appearance. These body changes give them increased speed and agility.


Remove. You arent Inuzuka.

Edit all your jutsu to take out the chakra cost. We dont have that here.

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Natural Abilities: Ability to slice through almost everything.

Kunai cannot cut through almost anything. It is also assumed that a ninja carries kunai automatically. Unless you plan on carrying more that around 20 or so, they dont need to be put on application.

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Special Abilities/Characteristics: Poison-tipped, but only mild. Can't kill, but can burn.
Origin: Newly created.

Poison needs to be registered seperately, theres a tempalte for that in equipment and items. Not only that, but poisons might be a medical thing or puppetry thing only. Im not sure, i dont touch that part of the applications.

Origin needs to be atleast a paragraph. Newly created doesnt count. How you got it, why, where, from who.

Kenjutsu is not a specialty, that falls under weaponry. You get a main weapon specialty and a sub weapon specialty. refer to the Weapon guide in the creation section fr more details.

Appearance needs to be 2 decent sized paragraphs, 5-7 lines, same for personality.
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PostSubject: Re: Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] EmptyThu 29 Apr 2010, 9:09 am

My character plans to be carrying around 30+ Kunai, concealed weapon pouches.

- On second thought, i'll remove them. No need for that..

Other than that, all done. Edited.
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PostSubject: Re: Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] EmptyThu 29 Apr 2010, 2:15 pm

Bump.
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PostSubject: Re: Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] EmptyThu 29 Apr 2010, 4:30 pm

You still are missing a sub Weaponry specialty. If you have no idea or dont want one, just put exotic down, that could technically allow you to use really weird swords or something

Keep in mind that until you reach Chuunin, your swords are just swords. Once you hit Chuunin, you can utilize the stalagmite part of your weapons. There will need to be a distance/range for how far they extend, etc.

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Though the sword can only create the stalagmites, Roxas can 'borrow' chakra from the sword, leaving him able to create other techniques through use.

Do me a favor and explain this. Im reading it as you can utilize the crystal forming chakra ability of the sword to create and use new crystal techniques? Or...?
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PostSubject: Re: Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] EmptyFri 30 Apr 2010, 12:00 am

Basically, he can take chakra from the sword to use the power he once gave it. It's basically returning the favor.

And I know the swords are just that - swords. I was just putting them on app so I don't have to find the sword pictures, re-edit the abilities, etc.

Edited all the rest, by the way.
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PostSubject: Re: Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] EmptyTue 04 May 2010, 1:45 am

Personality and Appearance need to be longer


Special Abilities/Characteristics: If dug into ground, can make crystal stalagmites spike up in random areas.

how much chakra does this cost?

this
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Character Speciality: Ninjutsu ; Kenjutsu
Main: Ninjutsu
Sub: Weaponry - Kenjutsu
Elemental Affinity: Katon • Fire

Main: Katon • Fire
Sub: Exotic [ According to Vito ]

should look like this

Quote :

Character Speciality:
Main: Ninjutsu
Sub: Weaponry [Kenjutsu] [Exotic]
Elemental Affinity:
Main: Katon • Fire
Sub: [Second Element or N/A]
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PostSubject: Re: Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] Roxas Kyruuki [Finished!] EmptyFri 21 May 2010, 5:16 am

Appearance and personality need to be fleshed out.


you should center your weapon picture seeing as everything else is centered.


Why is your weapon D-A? It also needs A LOT more detail for the ability.

you need a genin arc.

please remove Magic Cloak of Invisibility Technique, its a very controversial jutsu

Temporary Body Paralysis Technique isn't basic at all and steps into raiton ninjutsu or eijutsu

Please remove Sexy Technique, this is a PG-13 site. Without the convientally placed clouds this jutsu is inappropriate. Also, it wouldn't have the effect you would like it to have in most cases. ALSO it has cannon references in it.
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