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Seiki Nela
Seiki Nela

Age : 27
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Basic Information:

Name:
Seiki Nela
Secondary Title:
Kiki
Age:
16
Gender:
Female

Appearance:Nela, Seiki (Done~) Ferret


Seiki stands at about 5 foot and 4 inches, being the shorter one out of her family. However, no one knows her exact height. She has blue-ish hair that falls down roughly to her shoulders. This is a very strange trait, however, because the rest of her clan has jet black hair. This sets her apart from the rest of her clan. Seiki has dark colored eyes that change color, (depending on what her mood is), and light colored skin. She weighs approxiamatly 107 pounds. When with her friends, she likes to dress casual, wearing a t-shirt and sweatpants. When on a mission, however, she dresses in a shirt that zips up in the front and exposes most of her stomach and shorts. Sometimes, she will also bring along her childhood pet ferret, Adiv. But only if the mission isn't too dangerous. Occasionally, she will also wear a gold head band across her forehead to signify that she is apart of the Nela Clan. (All of the Nela Clan members have a different item, being something that they can wear, with their clan symbol on it.). She also carries a small pouch around with her hung across her shoulder, where she carries here most prized weapon; her silver dagger.

Seiki's most distinguishing feature is probably her hair. It stands out and reflects her personality, which is different from many others. Unlike the other members in her clan, she has blue hair. Everyone else in her clan has hair as black as coal. When she was born, Seiki's parent's were confused at why her hair was a different color than everyone else. At first, they thought that maybe her hair would change color as she got older. They soon found out, however, that her hair color was permanent. But instead of thinking of this as a bad thing, they thought of it as a good thing that set Seiki apart from others and made her even more unique.

Personality: Seiki is a very outgoing person. She has a very bubbly personality, and she is usually fun to be around. When she is around her friends, she likes to fool around and have fun. While traveling on a mission, however, she is on-alert and very aware of everything around her. When she gets angry or upset, she doesn't really pay much attention to the things happening around her. Some of Seiki's favorite things include wandering around early in the morning, and the late at the night. She also likes to spend most of her free time with her friends and family to get her mind off of things. One of Seiki's favorite things to do is to get up during the night time hours and lay down in the cool, cold grass and look up at the sky and the stars. This relaxes her and makes her feel like she is safe, even when she is on a dangerous mission. It also helps her to think when she is in a tough situation. Occassionally, she will also bring someone with her to share the beautiful night and all it's glory. As I said, she is a very deep person. Seiki also likes to daydream a lot.
Catch Phrase:
~ Oh, I'm sorry...did you say something? ~

Pet Application

Name: Adiv
Age: 4
Type: Ferret
Element: Earth
Appearance:

Description: Adiv is a wide-eyed, brown and white-striped ferret. He is usually very playful, but when Seiki lets him tag along on a mission, he is on alert and ready to go. Although he may be smaller than most other companions, he is certainly reliable. He is extremely good at getting into smaller spaces that other people might not be able to get into, and he proves to be a good fighter when the time comes. Adiv likes to fight, but he knows when enough is enough, and he knows when to call it quits. To Seiki, he is sort of like her good luck charm. She usually wins a battle with him around, but not always.

Clan Information:

Clan Name:
The Nela Clan
Clan Location:
Certain spots in Konoha and Kiri
Clan Traits:
All of the Nela clan members possess the power to talk to animals and 'see' their thoughts that are going through their heads. However, they must make contact with the animal in order to do so.
Secret Clan Jutsu: N/A

History: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Jin_tattoo


The Nela clan is very different from other clans. Unlike most people, everyone in the clan has their own animal symbol that they can transform into. They can speak to all animals, but only when they make contact. However, they can only transform into their own animal symbol. Unlike most other clans, the Nela clan prefers to sleep in during the day, and travel at night. They feel that this is more efficient and easier. They also think that they are less likely to be attacked, captured, etc. Sometimes, the clan will run into another cln that also likes to travel at night, and they might strike up a conversation or two. However, you will rarely see the Nela clan 'setting up camp' with another clan. They don't like to spend the night- er - day with another clan, just incase they might be attacked, stolen from, etc. The Nela clan will travel during the day at times, but usually only if it is absolutely neccessary. Otherwise, they will travel at night. When the clan travels, they might split up into groups, depending on the age, for safety. For example, they might split up a group of younger ninjas and elders and put them together, so that the younger ninjas might be safer. Also, whenever ayounger ninja goes on a mission or out somewhere, an elder usually follows them closely, watching them in case they get attacked at any point.

Kekkei Genkai:
Spoiler:

Rank Information:

Rank:
Genin
Village Affiliation:
Kiri

Special Information:

Character Specialty:
Main: Ninjutsu
Sub: Genjutsu

Elemental Affinity:
Main:Water
Sub: Wind

Special Characteristics: --



Skill Information:

Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them.
Jutsu Template:

Basic:
Spoiler:

Genjutsu:

Spoiler:


Quote:
Name:シルバーダガー [Silver Daggers]
Quantity: 3
Rank: D

Appearance: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Thumb_op_04266

Seiki's silver daggers resemble small knives. However, it is much more dangerous. It has a very sharp edge with a curve to it towards the end. It's handle is made from the bark of a Birchwood tree. It's very quick and easy to use, therefore it is very deadly. She has three different types of daggers; a cutting blade, a carving blade, and a dull blade. The cutting blade is the sharpest out of all of them. It is used in times of great danger, when extreme measures are to be taken. The carving blade is used in simple battles, to simply stun the opponent for a moment or two while the user recovers or attacks again with something more powerful.

Special Abilities/Characteristics: The user of the daggers can quickly and easily switch between the different kinds of blades, depending on the situation it is needed in.

Origin: When Seiki was younger, she went out hunting with her dad one night. He showed her how to make quick weapons in case she ever needed to have a quick source of protection in an emergency. That is why the daggers are so special and mean a lot to her, her past, and her childhood. Seiki used it for the first time on the day that her and her father were attacked by the Leaf ninjas. [-Read Academy Arc-]


Item Template:

Name: Kunai
Rank: E
Type: Weapon
Natural Abilities: A kunai is a dagger that all ninjas use. It is multi-purpose and can be used as a throwing knife and/or to stab at opponents.

Name: Smoke Ball
Rank: D
Type: Other
Description: A smoke ball is a small, colorful sphere that sprays a strong jet of smoke for about 10 to 15 seconds. This is very useful for many things, such as a quick escape.

Background Information



Birth Arc:
"I have something to tell you, Haru," Aiko said, looking down at her feet.
"What is it, Aiko?" Haru answered with worry in his voice.
"I...Honey, I'm pregnant," She said, smiling ever so slightly.
Haru just stood there for a moment. He was at loss for words. He was happy for his wife, but he just didn't know how to answer her.
"Why, honey. That's...that's great," he said. He smiled softly for emphasis.
"You really think so honey?" Aiko said softly. "I thought you might be upset..."
"How would I be upset with such great news?"
Aiko smiled softly. She leaned up and kissed her husband softly on the cheek. "I love you, Haru.
Haru smiled. "I love you, too."

Nine months later, Haru sat by his wife's side. The rest of the family waited outside the tent, listening closely. They knew that another member of the Nela clan would be joining them very soon.
A few moments later, there was a soft crying sound coming from the tent. They knew that a new clan member had been born. The rest of the family flooded into the tent cautiosly.
"Oh, honey. She's beautiful," Haru said softly. "She's got your eyes."
Aiko smiled softly. "But I'm certain that she will grow up to be just like you."
Haru leaned down to kiss his wife gently on the lips. "I love you, Aiko," he said.
She answered, "I love you, too, Haru."
Aiko soon fell into a deep, exhausted sleep.
Pre-Academy Arc:
When Seiki was about three years old, her parents decided to tell and teach her about their past and family (clan) history. They also warned her about the Leaf ninjas that could strike at any time, any place.
"But...why do they want to hurt us, mommy?" She had asked at the time.
"Because, honey," her mother replied softly. "They are bad people. And, long ago, your great great grandfather attacked them, thinking that they were going to try and attack and kill some of our clan."
"Is that how grandpa died?" Seiki asked.
After a long pause, her father Haru replied, "Yes. That's...that's how he died. It was all a misunderstanding, you see."
"But I thought that they were the bad people?"
Aiko sighed. "Well...they are to us. They want something called revenge. It means that they want to hurt us... because we tried to hurt them."
As Seiki tried to understand this, Aiko thought back to that day. Then, flashbacks started playing like a movie in her head. Back to that dreadful day, when it all went wrong.
*
Academy Arc:
Seiki grew up moving from place to place just about every year due to her family's problem with the Leaf ninjas. Her only permanent friends were her family, her best friend Kira and her childhood pet ferret, Adiv. However, she didn't think of moving around so much as a bad thing. She thought of it more as a privilage. To be able to move all around, see new places, meet new people. She found everything about it so exciting. At a young age, Seiki's father started to teach her how to hunt and how to protect herself from attacks. She learned quickly and became a skilled ninja. One day while she was out hunting with her Kira, they got attacked by Leaf ninjas. Seiki's father tried to protect her from the other ninjas, but failed. He was badly wounded during the fight, and he died in the hospital a few days later. From that day on, Seiki has never forgivin those Leaf ninjas. And she swore that she never would.~

Role-Play Sample:
Spoiler:
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I'm not a monster... I'm just misunderstood.


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Last edited by Seiki Nela on Thu 17 Jun 2010, 10:45 pm; edited 121 times in total (Reason for editing : Fixing and Editing)
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Seiki Nela
Seiki Nela

Age : 27
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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyThu 27 May 2010, 11:56 pm

Almost done! ....Sort of....Razz
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Seiki Nela
Seiki Nela

Age : 27
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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyMon 31 May 2010, 4:10 am

Finally done!!!! Yayyyy!!!!!!! Smile
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Seiki Nela
Seiki Nela

Age : 27
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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyMon 31 May 2010, 4:11 am

Hmmm....What village should I join? :/


Hmmmmmmmm.............................................. think think think....
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CYANIDE CANDY
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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyMon 31 May 2010, 5:46 am

Personality needs to be about five-six more sentences long.

Seiki Nela wrote:

Rank:
Fresh Meat

The rank 'Fresh Meat' isn't an actual rank your character can be. It's a silly joke for when new members join this site. I highly suggest applying for the 'Genin' rank.

Seiki Nela wrote:

Elemental Affinity:
Main:Water
Sub: Ice

The ice element is a combination of both Water and Wind.

Seiki Nela wrote:

Jutsu Template:

Name: Transformation Jutsu
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: E
Element: [Lightning, Wind, Earth, Water, Fire]
Description: This is a pretty basic and simple jutsu. It allows a ninja to transform into another animal, object, or person. It's range is about

It appears you already have this jutsu on your app. Please remove this.

Seiki Nela wrote:

Name: Henge no Jutsu-Transformation Technique
Rank:
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This is another basic type of jutsu that one would learn at Ninja Academy. It allows the user to transform into any animal, person, or object. This jutsu is used a lot and it comes in handy during a battle when there is no other way out of the situation.

This jutsu is 'E' ranked. You need to put that in the Rank section.

Seiki Nela wrote:

Quote:
Name:
Rank: E
Type: Medicine
Natural Abilities: This medicine heals any small wounds. does your Item do? what are the effects? how long does it last?]

It doesn't appear that you finished filling this out. If you do not want this unfinished item then please remove this.




You are also missing these jutsu which are very basic. Please add them to your app.

Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Kawarimi no Jutsu - Change of Body Stance Technique
[b]Rank:[/b] E
[b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Element:[/b] N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themself with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.

[b]Name:[/b] Suimen Hokou no Waza - Act of Water Surface Walking
[b]Rank:[/b] E
[b]Type:[/b] N/A
[b]Element:[/b] N/A
[b]Description:[/b] A variation on the Kinobori no Waza (Act of Tree Climbing), the art of water surface walking allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water

[b]Name:[/b] Kinobori no Waza - Act of Tree Climbing
[b]Rank:[/b] E
[b]Type:[/b] N/A
[b]Element:[/b] N/A
[b]Description:[/b] Kinobori no Waza, the art of tree climbing serves a dual purpose. Taking part in Kinobori Shugyou (Tree Climbing Training) helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed

[b]Name:[/b] Explosion Tag: Activate
[b]Rank:[/b] E
[b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Element:[/b] N/A
[b]Description:[/b] The user will activate an explosion tag. Normally, the tag will be placed by them, so they know where it is and can easily activate it.

[b]Name:[/b] Nawanuke no Jutsu - Escaping Skill
[b]Rank:[/b] E
[b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Element:[/b] N/A
[b]Description:[/b] A very basic technique that allows a ninja to escape from rope binds.

[b]Name:[/b] Kai - Release
[b]Rank:[/b] D
[b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Element:[/b] N/A
[b]Description:[/b] Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.




Your history needs to be longer. Try to make them in complete paragraphs instead of broken up sentences.

Finally, your rp sample is 919 words long. If you do not plan on typing at least 800-1000 words when you rp, then you need to greatly decrease your sample.
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Seiki Nela
Seiki Nela

Age : 27
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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyMon 31 May 2010, 4:17 pm

Fixing my profile...:/ lol
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Seiki Nela
Seiki Nela

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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyTue 01 Jun 2010, 2:03 am

Edited!~
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Seiki Nela
Seiki Nela

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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyTue 01 Jun 2010, 3:25 am

I think I'm done now....:/
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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyTue 01 Jun 2010, 3:58 pm

Is your clan approved or at least posted up in the Clan Creation section? You need to expand upon your kekkei genkai more, elaborate and go into very specific details. Make it so that even idiots can understand what it means.

Weaponry in itself is not the whole specialty, from choosing weaponry you also choose which two types of weapons you specialize in.

https://ultimateshinobi.darkbb.com/equipment-applications-f14/weaponry-guide-t804.htm Go there for weaponry stuff.
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Seiki Nela
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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyWed 02 Jun 2010, 2:56 am

Okay I think I fixed it....I added my clan application to get approved... and changed weaponry to something else. :/
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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyFri 04 Jun 2010, 4:55 am

You will not be able to be approved until your clan is approved. From what I saw, a mod has checked it and is awaiting for you to edit any problems that were in your clan application.
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Seiki Nela

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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyFri 04 Jun 2010, 5:24 am

Alright~
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PostSubject: Re: Nela, Seiki (Done~) Nela, Seiki (Done~) EmptyFri 04 Jun 2010, 7:47 pm

What you have in the Special Characteristics section would better fit into personality the way it is formated right now. S.C should be like this:

(Name of Characteristic)

(Paragraph and what it is and how it was developed.)


Some of your jutsu are missing 'Type' in the template.

Code:

[b]Type:[/b] [Ninjutsu, Weaponry, Puppetry, Genjutsu, Kenjutsu, Taijutsu]



How many daggers do you have? Sometimes you say dagger and sometimes you say daggers.


Each history arc needs to be at least 2 full paragraphs.
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