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kucarugi minaru
Posts : 99
| Subject: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Thu 27 May 2010, 4:40 pm | |
| Basic Information: Name: Kucarugi minaru
Secondary Title: Goonjimbo Age: 16
Gender: male
Physical Appearance: Tall, and a big robe type thing, that is covered with sand gords(not a dress theres a difference)that has the clound of the uchiha clan, and he has long white hair, he has one red, and one blue eye.he is fairly pale aswell. One eye he is blinf out of, and the other makes up for the loss.he always has bones pertruting from his arms resembaling kinfes.
Personality: Gets angry easily, not to friendly at his best hes can control his temper, and at his worst he is ready to fight with any one, even his own teamates.he was ready to fight at any time given the reason, but some times he did it anyway...though he was violent he could protect if needed. he doesnt like many people anly who he finds worthy. He was clever, and he fought well, he didnt sleep that much, and when he did he had nightmare of his past. his past is one reason why he is angry...
Catch Phrase:
Clan Information: Clan Name: ゴブリンを怒った(translate in japanese)
Clan Location: hidden sand
Clan Traits: has the natural ability to create special sand sing chakra, such as what gaara does Kekkei Genkai: sand coffin . Secret Clan Jutsu: Sand Minipulation...morph sand into anything you want
History: As he grew up he bagain to get mor, and more angry and eventualy he murdered his family, but is saddened because of it now. he had no other famil but his parents...so he eventualy went to the hidden mist but he grew up in the hidden leaf...as he grew stronger he learned to use his knives as a strong weapon. He never officialy hade a master because he traveled, but because of that he became dtronger, and learned about more techniques to defeat his opponents...but he never controled his anger, and he learned to use it to his advantage...after making it to the hidden mist he decided to only fight when needed, however he would still do the missions set out for him...but eventualy he made a clan of his own
it originated in the sand village and never moved Clan Details: it's open to who ever wants to join...and the where straw hats, and they must have the power to control the sand...or they will have to go through extensive learning
Rank Information: Rank: gennin
Village Affiliation: used to be in the sand but decided to make one of his oun after learning his special power
Special Information: Character Speciality:
Main:Ninjutsu Sub:Genjutsu Elemental Affinity:Sand Main: Sand Sub: Rock Special Characteristics: he has black wrighting on his head that says this...ゴブリンを怒った
Skill Information: . Jutsu Template:
- Quote :
- Name: [Name of jutsu]
Type: [nin, and genjutsu] Rank: [C] Element: [Wind, Earth] Description: [his jutsu dont cost but a tiny bit of mana, but when he uses his kekigenkia he is stalled(he may still use his sand defense for 5 minutes.]
Link: [Template] Medical use/Bastardized use: Weapon Template:
- Quote :
- Name: [dont have a weapon i use only sasnd chjakra]
Quantity: [.] Rank: [N/A] Appearance: [N/A.) Special Abilities/Characteristics: [N/A.] Origin: [N/A.] Item Template:
- Quote :
- Name: [Chakra relaif]
Rank: [S] Type: [medicine.] Natural Abilities: [my item unparalizes my character after using my keki genkia]
Background Information History: it was made in my village, and it is only seen there, to stop the set back
Role-Play Sample:
Last edited by kucarugi minaru on Sat 29 May 2010, 6:10 pm; edited 7 times in total |
| | | WeaponX
Age : 30 Posts : 66
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Thu 27 May 2010, 5:29 pm | |
| do you have permission for Chuunin? |
| | | kucarugi minaru
Posts : 99
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Thu 27 May 2010, 5:39 pm | |
| now i'm genin |
| | | WeaponX
Age : 30 Posts : 66
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Thu 27 May 2010, 9:17 pm | |
| your clan is the canon Sabure clan. Please just copy+paste that and place it in here. Remove any descriptions that were originally in the character template, so that it is easier to read. Please and thank you. |
| | | Caranore
Age : 35 Posts : 1492
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Thu 27 May 2010, 9:34 pm | |
| You need a village affiliation, we do not allow own villages or missing nin at this time. Personality needs to be 2 paragraphs minimum, as does physical appearance. You need t put any jutsu, items, weapons, etc that you lan on using at the time of approval in this application. Rock is not an element, earth is.
Your history for a Genin needs to be atleast 5 paragraphs long, 2 for child birth, 2 for academy, one for Genin. You also need an RP sample. |
| | | kucarugi minaru
Posts : 99
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Thu 27 May 2010, 11:25 pm | |
| i havent RPed, and i dont even kow what else to add to his history |
| | | Travis
Posts : 414
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Thu 27 May 2010, 11:30 pm | |
| - kucarugi minaru wrote:
Basic Information: Name: Kucarugi minaru Your Characters Full Name. It should be Japanese, and not English. Secondary Title: Goonjimbo Do your friends call you anything specific, or are you known and feared by many with a certain name? Age: 16 How old is your character? Gender: male Are you male or female? Physical Appearance: Tall, and a big robe type thing, that is covered with sand gords(not a dress theres a difference)that has the clound of the uchiha clan, and he has long white hair, he has one red, and one blue eye.he is fairly pale aswell. One eye he is blinf out of, and the other makes up for the loss.he always has bones pertruting from his arms resembaling kinfes.
Personality: Gets angry easily, not to friendly at his best hes can control his temper, and at his worst he is ready to fight with any one, even his own teamates.he was ready to fight at any time given the reason, but some times he did it anyway...though he was violent he could protect if needed. he doesnt like many people anly who he finds worthy. He was clever, and he fought well, he didnt sleep that much, and when he did he had nightmare of his past. his past is one reason why he is angry...
Catch Phrase: may get one, but not at this point...not a catch phrase
Clan Information: Clan Name: ゴブリンを怒った(translate in japanese)
What is the name of your clan? Clan Location: hidden sand
What village or area is your clan located in? Clan Traits: has the natural ability to create special sand sing chakra, such as what gaara does Kekkei Genkai: sand coffin . Secret Clan Jutsu: Sand Minipulation...morph sand into anything you want
History: As he grew up he bagain to get mor, and more angry and eventualy he murdered his family, but is saddened because of it now. he had no other famil but his parents...so he eventualy went to the hidden mist but he grew up in the hidden leaf...as he grew stronger he learned to use his knives as a strong weapon. He never officialy hade a master because he traveled, but because of that he became dtronger, and learned about more techniques to defeat his opponents...but he never controled his anger, and he learned to use it to his advantage...after making it to the hidden mist he decided to only fight when needed, however he would still do the missions set out for him...but eventualy he made a clan of his own
it originated in the sand village and never moved Clan Details: it's open to who ever wants to join...and the where straw hats, and they must have the power to control the sand...or they will have to go through extensive learning
Rank Information: Rank: gennin
Village Affiliation: used to be in the sand but decided to make one of his oun after learning his special power
Special Information: Character Speciality: You may pick 2 skills:ninjutsu, genjutsu Main:Ninjutsu Sub:Genjutsu Elemental Affinity:Sand Main: Sand Sub: Rock Special Characteristics: he has black wrighting on his head that says this...ゴブリンを怒った
Skill Information: Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them.
Jutsu Template:
- Quote :
- Name: [Name of jutsu]
Type: [nin, and genjutsu] Rank: [S] Element: [Wind, Earth] Description: [his jutsu dont cost but a tiny bit of mana, but when he uses his kekigenkia he is stalled(he may still use his sand defense for 5 minutes.]
Link: [Template] Medical use/Bastardized use: Weapon Template:
- Quote :
- Name: [dont have a weapon i use only sasnd chjakra]
Quantity: [.] Rank: [N/A] Appearance: [N/A.) Special Abilities/Characteristics: [N/A.] Origin: [N/A.] Item Template:
- Quote :
- Name: [Chakra relaif]
Rank: [S] Type: [medicine.] Natural Abilities: [my item unparalizes my character after using my keki genkia]
Background Information History: it was made in my village, and it is only seen there, to stop the set back
Role-Play Sample: How do you RP? Please give us your normal, because we will hold you to the quality you show. Remove all the red parts. I suggest reading over the other applications to get an idea of what to do, I'll have to go through 15 posts to explain what to do.. |
| | | kucarugi minaru
Posts : 99
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Fri 28 May 2010, 12:04 am | |
| ok, i will do that |
| | | Caranore
Age : 35 Posts : 1492
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Fri 28 May 2010, 1:54 am | |
| Sample, history, persoality, appearance all need to be fixed as specified. Your clan is the Sabure clan, and you were told to copy and paste the code. Go to character creations, canon clans, and scroll to the bottom looking for Sabure clan.
the character creation guide has a list of basic academy jutsu, the clan guide has clan techniques.
A genin cannot have S-Rank techniques.
If you do not have a weapon, remove the section, dont quote it.
I would HIGHLY reccomend you read the Character creation Guide before coming back and saying this application is done, as well as looka t the other approved applications. |
| | | kucarugi minaru
Posts : 99
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Sat 29 May 2010, 6:12 pm | |
| - kucarugi minaru wrote:
Basic Information: Name: Kucarugi minaru
Secondary Title: Goonjimbo Age: 16
Gender: male
Physical Appearance: Tall, and a big robe type thing, that is covered with sand gords(not a dress theres a difference)that has the clound of the uchiha clan, and he has long white hair, he has one red, and one blue eye.he is fairly pale aswell. One eye he is blinf out of, and the other makes up for the loss.he always has bones pertruting from his arms resembaling kinfes.
Personality: Gets angry easily, not to friendly at his best hes can control his temper, and at his worst he is ready to fight with any one, even his own teamates.he was ready to fight at any time given the reason, but some times he did it anyway...though he was violent he could protect if needed. he doesnt like many people anly who he finds worthy. He was clever, and he fought well, he didnt sleep that much, and when he did he had nightmare of his past. his past is one reason why he is angry...
Catch Phrase:
Clan Information: Clan Name: ゴブリンを怒った(Ragers)
Clan Location: hidden sand
Clan Traits: has the natural ability to create special sand sing chakra, such as what gaara does Kekkei Genkai: sand coffin . Secret Clan Jutsu: Sand Minipulation...morph sand into anything you want
History: As he grew up he bagain to get mor, and more angry and eventualy he murdered his family, but is saddened because of it now. he had no other famil but his parents...so he eventualy went to the hidden mist but he grew up in the hidden leaf...as he grew stronger he learned to use his knives as a strong weapon. He never officialy hade a master because he traveled, but because of that he became dtronger, and learned about more techniques to defeat his opponents...but he never controled his anger, and he learned to use it to his advantage...after making it to the hidden mist he decided to only fight when needed, however he would still do the missions set out for him...but eventualy he made a clan of his own
it originated in the sand village and never moved Clan Details: it's open to who ever wants to join...and the where straw hats, and they must have the power to control the sand...or they will have to go through extensive learning
Rank Information: Rank: gennin
Village Affiliation: used to be in the sand but decided to make one of his oun after learning his special power
Special Information: Character Speciality:
Main:Ninjutsu Sub:Genjutsu Elemental Affinity:Sand Main: Sand Sub: Rock Special Characteristics: he has black wrighting on his head that says this...ゴブリンを怒った
Skill Information: . Jutsu Template:
- Quote :
- Name: [Name of jutsu]
Type: [nin, and genjutsu] Rank: [C] Element: [Wind, Earth] Description: [his jutsu dont cost but a tiny bit of mana, but when he uses his kekigenkia he is stalled(he may still use his sand defense for 5 minutes.]
Link: [Template] Medical use/Bastardized use: Weapon Template:
- Quote :
- Name: [dont have a weapon i use only sasnd chjakra]
Quantity: [.] Rank: [N/A] Appearance: [N/A.) Special Abilities/Characteristics: [N/A.] Origin: [N/A.] Item Template:
- Quote :
- Name: [Chakra relaif]
Rank: [C] Type: [medicine.] Natural Abilities: [my item unparalizes my character after using my keki genkia]
Background Information History: it was made in my village, and it is only seen there, to stop the set back
Role-Play Sample: |
| | | kucarugi minaru
Posts : 99
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Sat 29 May 2010, 6:13 pm | |
| m'hm so what about know i made all of my custiom jutsu Rank-C, and my clan is translated... |
| | | Travis
Posts : 414
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Sun 30 May 2010, 4:54 pm | |
| Ok, you haven't done one thing any of us have asked, except change to Genin. |
| | | Caranore
Age : 35 Posts : 1492
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Sun 30 May 2010, 4:59 pm | |
| - Caranore wrote:
- Sample, history, persoality, appearance all need to be fixed as specified. Your clan is the Sabure clan, and you were told to copy and paste the code. Go to character creations, canon clans, and scroll to the bottom looking for Sabure clan.[b]
[b]The character creation guide has a list of basic academy jutsu, the clan guide has clan techniques.
A genin cannot have S-Rank techniques.
If you do not have a weapon, remove the section, dont quote it.
I would HIGHLY reccomend you read the Character creation Guide before coming back and saying this application is done, as well as looka t the other approved applications. Everything in bold still needs to be fixed. You quite obviously didnt read anything we have said. I told you where to go specifically to get the Ultimate Shinobi Version of your clan. I told you to remove things, and add on to other sections. I also told you to look at the character creation duie, and get the basic academy Jutsu from there.
The only thing you did was change the one... thing for lack of a better term, from S to C. Not only that, but I can barely read it because you left the help text in there. |
| | | kucarugi minaru
Posts : 99
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Mon 31 May 2010, 7:08 pm | |
| OK, now i do see i havenmt done the Sample,. i will give you that but i thi9k i have a lot of the rest how much do you expect me to wright for the things.... |
| | | CYANIDE CANDY
Posts : 1084
| Subject: Re: Minaru, Kucarugi [Genin] Tue 01 Jun 2010, 10:51 pm | |
| Appearance and Personality needs to be about a paragraph longer.
- kucarugi minaru wrote:
Clan Information: Clan Name: ゴブリンを怒った(translate in japanese)
Clan Location: hidden sand
Clan Traits: has the natural ability to create special sand sing chakra, such as what gaara does Kekkei Genkai: sand coffin . Secret Clan Jutsu: Sand Minipulation...morph sand into anything you want
History: As he grew up he bagain to get mor, and more angry and eventualy he murdered his family, but is saddened because of it now. he had no other famil but his parents...so he eventualy went to the hidden mist but he grew up in the hidden leaf...as he grew stronger he learned to use his knives as a strong weapon. He never officialy hade a master because he traveled, but because of that he became dtronger, and learned about more techniques to defeat his opponents...but he never controled his anger, and he learned to use it to his advantage...after making it to the hidden mist he decided to only fight when needed, however he would still do the missions set out for him...but eventualy he made a clan of his own
it originated in the sand village and never moved Clan Details: it's open to who ever wants to join...and the where straw hats, and they must have the power to control the sand...or they will have to go through extensive learning Their is a clan already here than manipulates sand. That'd be the Sabure clan. You're either with them or choose a different clan. Although, you don't have to be a clan.
- kucarugi minaru wrote:
- Village Affiliation:
used to be in the sand but decided to make one of his oun after learning his special power Their is no way you can have your own village. No way. If your a genin, you're either in Suna, Kiri, or Konoha. Kumo genin rank is full.
- kucarugi minaru wrote:
- Name: [dont have a weapon i use only sasnd chjakra]
Quantity: [.] Rank: [N/A] Appearance: [N/A.) Special Abilities/Characteristics: [N/A.] Origin: [N/A.] If you don't have a weapon then take this template out.
- kucarugi minaru wrote:
- ]Name: [Chakra relaif]
Rank: [S] Type: [medicine.] Natural Abilities: [my item unparalizes my character after using my keki genkia] Their is no way a genin can have an S ranked medicine.
History needs to be much longer. Rp Sample needs to be at least 150 words long.
Also, you need these basic jutsu.
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[b]The 3 Basic Academy Jutsu[/b]
[b]Name:[/b] Bunshin no Jutsu - Clone Technique [b]Rank:[/b] E [b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu [b]Element:[/b] N/A [b]Description:[/b] Bunshin no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. The Bunshin technique creates a copy of the ninja without substance. The copy resembles the ninja in every way. This clone can function as a distraction or as means to confuse one's opponent. As soon the Bunshin gets attacked or comes into contact with an opponent, it will disperse
[b]Name:[/b] Henge no Jutsu - Transformation Technique [b]Rank:[/b] E [b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu [b]Element:[/b] N/A Description: Henge no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents
[b]Name:[/b] Kawarimi no Jutsu - Change of Body Stance Technique [b]Rank:[/b] E [b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu [b]Element:[/b] N/A Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themself with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
[b]Other commonly known Techniques[/b]
[b]Name:[/b] Suimen Hokou no Waza - Act of Water Surface Walking [b]Rank:[/b] E [b]Type:[/b] N/A [b]Element:[/b] N/A [b]Description:[/b] A variation on the Kinobori no Waza (Act of Tree Climbing), the art of water surface walking allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water
[b]Name:[/b] Kinobori no Waza - Act of Tree Climbing [b]Rank:[/b] E [b]Type:[/b] N/A [b]Element:[/b] N/A [b]Description:[/b] Kinobori no Waza, the art of tree climbing serves a dual purpose. Taking part in Kinobori Shugyou (Tree Climbing Training) helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed
[b]Name:[/b] Explosion Tag: Activate [b]Rank:[/b] E [b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu [b]Element:[/b] N/A [b]Description:[/b] The user will activate an explosion tag. Normally, the tag will be placed by them, so they know where it is and can easily activate it.
[b]Name:[/b] Nawanuke no Jutsu - Escaping Skill [b]Rank:[/b] E [b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu [b]Element:[/b] N/A [b]Description:[/b] A very basic technique that allows a ninja to escape from rope binds.
[b]Name:[/b] Kai - Release [b]Rank:[/b] D [b]Type:[/b] Ninjutsu [b]Element:[/b] N/A [b]Description:[/b] Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.
[b]Name:[/b] Shunshin no Jutsu - Body Flicker Technique [b]Rank:[/b] D [b]Element:[/b] N/A Description: Shunshin no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. The ninja will appear and disappear in an instant, allowing them to retreat or attack suddenly. To facilitate the movement the ninja will often use nearby elements such as mist, sand or leaves to mask their appearance or disappearance. |
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