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Basic Information:

Name: Suzake Tengame

Secondary Title:N/A

Age: 12

Gender: Male

Physical Appearance:
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Suzake has black, spiky hair and pale grey eyes like all of the other Tengame do. Although, his eyes turn white when his Kekkai Genkai is used. Also, his hair turns to a white/silver color when his Kekkai Genkai is used. He is considered to be tall for his age, as he is 5'2. His teammates consider him to be skinny as he only weighs 105, but truthfully that is a healthy weight for his age. Suzake's skin color is slightly pale white. He is ocassionally mistaken to be a 14 or 15 year old.

His apperall is usually his Tengame clan robe. Which contains a space for equipment, and can be worn over stuff like Chuunin/Jonin flack jackets, and light armor. It appears to have a white edge around the lining of the robe making it unique from others. Furthermore, it carries the Tengame clan symbol on the back. Most of the time, he wears black ninja sandals. His headband is carried on his right forearm at the exact place of his tattoo. Suzake carries two sheaths for katanas on his right waist hinting that he is left handed or maybe even ambedextrous. Also, his headband is placed below his right shoulder, and it appears to be unique as it has a white hint of color to it. Finally, Suzake carries his clan tattoo on his left forearm.

When in battle, if he needs he can take the robe off. Under it is a v neck t shirt with baggy black jogging pants. Suzake usually takes his robe off when sweating or tired. When off, he places it on the ground beside him or carries it with him. Which ever is necassary.

Personality: Suzake has a twisted personality, when at home he acts like a baby. When out with his friends, he acts like the coolest kid in the village. Usually, he may be regarded as cocky, selfish, and crazy sometimes. Although, he tries not to act this way. When around girls he gets shy, and around boys he still gets shy. Though, if it is someone that is his friend he is the most talkative person ever.

He thinks he is the most handsome boy in the village, yet he is handsome though noone ever admits it. Suzake likes to play sports, and dislikes school or the ninja academy. He dislikes bullies, and really likes girls as he tries to hit on every one that passes him. Although, it always turns in to a fail, if not that he got pounded by them. Some may consider him as a pervert.

Though on the battlefield he is way more serious. People expect him to be cocky and foolish, but he literally he says nothing. Except for when he is calling upon a jutsu. His dreams are to recover a lost friend and parents that died one day on the battlefield. That is why he is so serious when it comes to this. One thing he may ever say is, "This is for you!"

Further in to his dreams, how he plans on doing that is becoming something important to the world. Something that someone cares about. Whether it is Raikage or a Elite ninja highly dedicated to his village. Suzake must fulfill this no matter what. He insists that he would rather die if it is an impossible task.

Catch Phrase:
"This is for you!"

Clan Information:

Clan Name: Tengame

Clan Location: Kumogakure

Clan Traits:
Black Hair
Pale gray eyes
High Stamina
Excell in Taijutsu
Raiton Affinity
Tattoo on left forearm
Forging and Kenjutsu Skills

Kekkei Genkai:
Me o mekura ken: Each clan member has the latent ability to bend or control light. The eye usually activates around the age of 8, though there have been rare occurences where it activates earlier. Through training a clan member can learn to use its eye to its full potential. Once activated, the eye would turn a pale white. As through training, the eye turns brighter. Tengame clan jutsu revolves around this Kekkai Genkai. When activated, bright lights do not effect you.

Secret Clan Jutsu:

Note: Suzake can only use the secret clan jutsu that are E, D, and C rank.

Name: Me o mekura ken: Release!
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: E
Element: N/A
Description: The key to releasing the clan's dojutsu. Think of something bright, and hope for the rest. If successful you would have unlocked the Dojutsu. When unlocked bright lights do not effect you. Once a clan member turns five they begin to train this, it is released att eight most of the time. This technique requires no chakra. Although, it can only be used three times a day.

Name: Buraitofurasshu
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Element: Lightning
Description: A bright flash would emit from the eye. It's kind of like a flash grenade. So it's basically just a distraction. The light could possibly blind the opponent temporarily except for the one who has perfect 20/20 vision. The range of this would be about 20 meters, and it costs little to none chakra. It lasts for five seconds.

Name: Hikari kuron
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Lightning
Description: A clone like any other one. Except, when you snap your fingers it explodes in a flash of light. The light could possibly blind the opponent temporarily except for the one who has perfect 20/20 vision. The clone can still do the work of a regular clone until the user snaps his/hers fingers. Although, if the clone is defeated before then it also binds in to a flash of light. This only takes the chakra of a regular bunshin. The range of the light would be about five meters, and lasts for about ten seconds.

Name: Raitogon
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Lightning
Description: As you would point your finger at a target. A beam of light would come from it being able to cut through most solid objects. The range is 25 meters. This costs the chakra of a regular C rank jutsu. If the opponent were to be hit by this they could possibly have a cut going straight through their body.

Name: Kosen
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Lightning
Description: A beam of light would emit from the eye.Being able to cut through most solid objects. Although, this should be used with discretion. As every time you use it your eyesight is damaged. Though the jutsu is worth that, because most opponents hit by this die 90% of the time, but this costs a pretty good amount of chakra. The range is a well 30 meters.

Name: Issen Konbo
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Element: Lightning
Description: This is translated to flash combo. It's well known as the Tengame Clan's most infamous jutsu. The user would hold both hands out at the target, with four fingers aimed directly at him and the thumb under their palm. Next, the eyes would turn faintly yellow appearing to swirl. After saying the name of the jutsu, beams of light come from the fingers and eyes totaling ten beams of light. The width of all this is ten feet, and the range is ten feet. This requires a substantially large amount of chakra.

Name: Shitabara
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: S
Element: Lightning
Description: The jutsu at its core is defensive. Although, death could be certain if executed. The user starts by saying, "Shitabara!" A dome would surround them capable of blocking most attacks. Next, they would say, "Release!" As it's released the dome launches forward in all directions. This could cut through most solid objects, yet if hit you could be paralyzed. The range of this is twenty feet, and it requires a huge amount of chakra. This can only be used once every three days.

Tengame Taijutsu Skills

Name: Tengame Combo
Type: Taijutsu
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: The user simply charges at his opponent aiming punches and kicks to half of the pressure points. Clan members usually enhance this with a distraction of such. They study pressure points regularly so they are pretty accurate with this. If the opponent is hit they would probably be stunned for a post.

Name: Tengame Taijutsu Critical Finish
Type: Taijutsu
Rank: A
Element: N/A
Description: The user aims jabs, elbows, knees, to all of the pressure points. In a result, killing the opponent. They are pretty swift and accurate with this. This has a drawback to it, when completed you would suffer from exhaustion.

Tengame Kenjutsu Skills

Name: Tengame Kenjutsu Combo
Type: Kenjutsu
Rank: B
Element: N/A
Description: The user swiftly attempts a slice to the opponents hands and feet. They do this by spinning in a 360 degree motion crouching down while they do it. That way the user would charge at the opponent, unsheath the sword aim the slice at the hand, and spiral down to the feet. Note that the user cuts straight through the body to get to the other hand, and the slice at the feet starts at the ankle.

Name: Tengame Kenjutsu Critical Finish
Type: Kenjutsu
Rank: S
Element: N/A
Description: The user would ferociously aim quick, swift slices at whatever he sees that is ungaurded. When this jutsu is performed the user ignores pain. This has a major drawback, as when completed you suffer from exhaustion.

History:
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Little is known about the past of the Tengame clan. One sure fact is that the Tengame clan has been around since the first great ninja war. From old texts that have been found it seems that one night a young man, Jomei Tengame, was exploring the mountains. During his travels he was startled by the howling of the animals. It was at this point that his eyes turned bright white and illuminated the area around him. Startled by this newfound power he kept it a secret until his childs 8th birthday. It was on this day that the second Tengame member was seen. From that day forth all members of the Tengame family possesed this unique eye. The Tengame clan had survived until the Third Great Shinobi war. It was at this time that the members of this very secretive clan began to disappear, along with their secrets. Although, a tablet has been found that could only be read with their dojutsu: Me o Mekura Ken, which contains all of their techniques and style. However, Suzake is known as the last Tengame in existence.

It is known that Tengame members were smart people. They studied the nervous system and all types of other things. Just to improve their arsenal. The clan is told to be very advanced having developed their own style of Taijutsu and Kenjutsu: Tengame Style. Though, Tengame Style itself is not even a style. Moreso, a couple of techniques clan members have put together using their knowledge of the nervous system and how to kill.

Clan Details: Closed

Rank Information:

Rank:Genin

Village Affiliation:Kumogakure no Sato

Special Information:

Character Speciality:
MainnWeaponry (Main: Kenjutsu Sub: N/A)
Sub:Taijutsu
Elemental Affinity:
Main: Raiton
Sub: N/A
Special Characteristics: Suzake has a abnormal endurance level. It is about 25% higher allowing him to take just a bit more punishment than the others. This comes from his will to fulfll his goal to restore his lone friend and walk in his footsteps.

Skill Information:
Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them.

Suzake's Jutsu

Name: Bunshin no Jutsu - Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Bunshin no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. The Bunshin technique creates a copy of the ninja without substance. The copy resembles the ninja in every way. This clone can function as a distraction or as means to confuse one's opponent. As soon the Bunshin gets attacked or comes into contact with an opponent, it will disperse

Name: Henge no Jutsu - Transformation Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents

Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu - Change of Body Stance Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themself with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.

Other commonly known Techniques

Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza - Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: E
Type: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: A variation on the Kinobori no Waza (Act of Tree Climbing), the art of water surface walking allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water

Name: Kinobori no Waza - Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: E
Type: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: Kinobori no Waza, the art of tree climbing serves a dual purpose. Taking part in Kinobori Shugyou (Tree Climbing Training) helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed

Name: Explosion Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The user will activate an explosion tag. Normally, the tag will be placed by them, so they know where it is and can easily activate it.

Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu - Escaping Skill
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: A very basic technique that allows a ninja to escape from rope binds.

Name: Kai - Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.

Name: Shunshin no Jutsu - Body Flicker Technique
Rank: D
Element: N/A
Description: Shunshin no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. The ninja will appear and disappear in an instant, allowing them to retreat or attack suddenly. To facilitate the movement the ninja will often use nearby elements such as mist, sand or leaves to mask their appearance or disappearance.

Name: Tengame Style: Breakdown
Type: Taijutsu
Rank: D
Element: N/A
Description: This begins with a kick which would send the opponent about five feet in the air. Meanwhile, jumping in the air the user would aim punches to all of the main pressure points.

Name: Tengame Style: Ultra Breakdown
Type: Taijutsu
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: This is literally a continuation from Tengame Style: Breakdown. After targeting the main pressure points the Tengame get out of their comfor zone. They attempt punches to the nose and neck aiming to cut off breathing. If necassary a knee to the stomach would be added in.

Name: Tengame Style: Half Slash
Type: Kenjutsu
Rank: D
Element: N/A
Description: Simple, the user would attempt a katana slash starting from the head all the way through the body. It is likely to be dodged without a distraction of such. Also, the katana would get stuck halfway thrue the body, but this is used to an advantage as pulling the katana out is much gruesome.

Name: X
Type: Kenjutsu
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: This is a move created by Suzake himself. He would start by taking his two katana and hold them in an X formation. Once the opponent reaches Suzake he would unleash this which is aimed as a slash upon the chest. If executed correctly the opponent would have an X over his chest. This could possibly make the opponent bleed severely if not killing them.

Suzake's Weapons

Name: Tengame Katana [The name of your weapon. If the names Japanese please write the english name with it]
Quantity: 2
Rank: D
Appearance:
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The katana given to Tengame members when they graduate from the Academy. Nothing is special about it. Although, it is shown as an all black katana. Black sheath, blade, hilt, handle, everything.
Special Abilities/Characteristics:N/A
Origin: Suzake bought this weapon as by reading the Tengame tablet, it was a tradition. Though this is not authentic Tengame Katanas, as he bought two replicass from a shop as he could not forge such a thing yet.

Background Information

History:
Birth Arc

Suzake's parents were two 25 year old, Kumogakure Jonin who held their village in high respects as well as their clan. Their names were Kemaru and Akira Tengame. Both were respected Kumo Jonin that had respective skills. Kemaru was a member of the Flash Force of some time and Akira was a Kumo Genin Mentor. One day, they decided they wanted to spread out the Tengame clan as they were the only two left in existence.

They were going to give Kumogakure a taste of one of the oldest clans their and one of the founding clans of Kumo. All were expecting an Tengame prodigy to be born as well as the parents. The day had came, a Tengame boy had been born, and his name was Suzake Tengame. They were going to take care of him and be the best parent figures they could be.

Quickly, they taught him the basics to learning the bloodline of the Tengame. To do this, they decided to stay active in the village, but take a backseat. Meaning that they dropped their jobs as a Flash Force and Kumo Genin Mentor. This went on until Suzake turned six, where they decided to send him to the Ninja Academy.

Academy Arc

Suzake was rather happy when he enrolled in the ninja academy. He started to see a path to what everyone was talking about. He saw how he was going to be or live up to be the prodigy everyone was talking about. Suzake loved to go to the academy, and was eager to learn new techniques. Often, he could be seen nagging the teacher to teach him one more technique. Although, he still made friends and enjoyed his time their.

Two years in to the academy, he was still enjoying it. By now, he had known all of the techniques the academy should have known. He could have graduated, but he wanted to stay in school while he learned his bloodline abilities. One day, he was sitting in class when he met one of the most important things in his life. A best friend, his name was Kenta and he was a foster child expected to be nothing but a failure.

Kids quickly picked on Kenta knowing that he would not do anything. Seeing this, Suzake went over to talk to him. He asked to be friends, but Kenta arrogantly challenged him to a fight. Suzake lost devastatingly. You would think he had a bloodline, jutsu, or something. In fact, he had nothing but Taijutsu and Kenjutsu skills and he was only six. Suzake became jealous and trained even harder while at thhe academy.

He picked up on the techniques Kenta used after seeing them millions of times by watching him train. By this time, they were great friends and his parents had took him in as an foster child. Kenta graduated from the academy in one year overshadowing Suzake as an prodigy. Suzake was now ten and Kenta was seven. After this, Suzake went on to study completing some of his bloodline abilities.

Academy Graduation Arc

Two years later, Suzake graduates from the academy, it was expexted to be a joyus day. Everyones parents were there including his. The proctor stepped on to the stage with a stash of new, black, Kumogakure headbands. He got everyone's attention and started to call out the names. The proctor called the names out in alphabetical order. Suzake knew it would take long considering that his last name started with a T. Yet, he was still nervous and excited to finally graduate.

Suddenly, a Chuunin gaurd ninja came rushing in vivaciously warning everyone saying, "The meteorite is coming!" All parents that were ninjas left quickly to help the villagers evacuate, this included Suzake's parents. When he looked at the gaurd he realized that it was Kenta! Wow, he thought, but the moment was still going as Suzake had a flashback reminising the times at the Academy. Suddenly, the proctor led them to a route hoping to evacuate. That night turned from the best night of his life to the worst night of his life. He went to sleep after five hours wondering if everything is ok.

When he woke up, everyone else was wide awake talking, "Is everything okay, What happened?"

The proctor said shakily, "Certain death, we were the lucky ones being able to escape, as of the ninja called to help died".

Suzake quickly changed his mind, that was the worst day of his life. His best friend and parents had died. From that day on he promised to fight for his friend and family that were all dead. From that day on, he vowed to "fulfill" his colleagues footsteps.

Role-Play Sample:
It was a scorching hot summer day in Kumogakure no Sato. Suzake was out in the training fields beside the academy. He sat down and looked around and saw the new kid sitting and being picked on. He raised his eyebrow in suprisement that the kids would do such a thing and that the kid had not said anything back.

Suzake thought to himself, "This dude needs a friend."

Quickly he walked over to where he was and asked, "Hello, my name is Suzake, yours?"

He said, "Let's fight, then I will tell you my fucking name."

The dude unsheathed his kunai on his back. Now, Suzake had no idea whether to fight him, or not. He decided by getting in his fighting stance. Next, the kid charged at him aiming a slice to his left forearm. Suzake knew what to do as he sidestepped to the right. Seeing this, the kid extended his right leg in an attempt to trip Suzake. Suzake fell for it being on the ground. Meanwhile, the kid attempts to get on his back holding the kunai at his neck. The kid had won in an quick manner.

Suzake was astonished, surprised, pissed, that he lost this way. He looked back and saw the boy walking towards him. When he reached Suzake he extended his arm for a handshake. Both boys were sweaty and thirsty from the fight. Suzake quickly got up.

Once he got up, Suzake asked, "Who in the world are you?"

The boy said, "Im Kenta, care to be friends?"

Sighing Suzake says, "Sure".


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PostSubject: Re: Tengame, Suzake [Kumo Genin] (Complete) Tengame, Suzake [Kumo Genin] (Complete) EmptyThu 10 Jun 2010, 7:56 am

Please, remove all descriptions i.e.

Basic Information:


Name: Suzake Tengame
Your Characters Full Name. It should be Japanese, and not English.
Secondary Title:N/A
Do your friends call you anything specific, or are you known and feared by many with a certain name?
Age: 12
How old is your character?
Gender: Male
Are you male or female?

All the red parts THROUGHOUT the application, i.e. in clans, jutsu, history, RP sample.
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No problem, sure. It has been successfully edited.
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PostSubject: Re: Tengame, Suzake [Kumo Genin] (Complete) Tengame, Suzake [Kumo Genin] (Complete) EmptyThu 10 Jun 2010, 5:50 pm

Bravo, your the first person I think to have gotten it all on one shot.

Quote :
Special Characteristics:Suzake has a abnormal endurance level. This comes from his will to fulfll his goal to restore his lone friend and walk in his footsteps.

Explain the abnormal endurance.

You might want to add your Taijutsu and Kenjutsu moves to your jutsu's as well. Just being in the Clan Jutsu doesn't mean you have them.

Your RP is a bit choppy, but it comes with practice, some tips for it though, learn to describe motions more, and make it flow.
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Cool, I myself is new to this. So alright, let me do that, it's done.
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Appearance and personality need to be a little longer.

Also, Kenjutsu is considered a sub-category or Weaponry. So, please replace Kenjutsu with Weapnry. Afterwards, you may put down your main sub-category and your sub sub-category. Example --

Main: Weaponry [Main: Kenjutsu - Sub: Ranged]
Sub: Taijutsu

To see the various types of sub-categories for Weaponry, go look at the weaponry guide in the Equipment section.
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Ok Smile Edited
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You need to post your clan in the clan section.

Also, please try to add more to your weapon description. Like, the length of the blade, what it can cut through, how heavy it is, any special paint or trinkets on it, ect...
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