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Basic Information:

Name: Aburame Junan
Secondary Title: Kashaku
Age: 12
Gender: Male
Physical Appearance:
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Other than obvious, and quite odd, dress of Junan, he really does look average. Mostly. Before he began wearing entirely form shrouding cloth and masks, he actually had a single scar down his cheek where he sliced himself in the academy to see how much it hurt to be cut by a kunai. The slice actually went through his cheek and into his mouth, but it healed nicely other than the scar.

4’11”, 110 lbs, lanky and agile, Junan looks much like your average athletic twelve year old whose muscles are built entirely out of repetitious activities. These activities include such things as running, climbing, swimming, and fighting. Daily training regimens keep him just within fighting shape but a lack of muscle training actually leaves him physically weaker than most shinobi but with a focus on speed the concept of being weaker never really bothered him.

His clothing looks almost like a hermit’s outfit, or even a homeless wander’s clothing style. Large draping cloths, usually ragged, overlaid with layers and layers with a single underlying layer of standard fishnet with metallic plates for armor.

Upon his face is a mask that includes goggles and a mouthpiece. Though they serve no special abilities whatsoever, they do keep his entire face shielded with light armor and conceal his identity behind the black leather pieces that connect the goggles to the mouthpiece.

Personality:
To say that Junan was a cruel and unusual person is an understatement. Sociopathic, sadist, intelligent, these words better describe the boy who was both praised and feared at the academy for Kiri’s future shinobi.

Other than the suffering of others, usually those whom he deems deserve to suffer at that exact moment, he normally enjoys time spent studying or in his workshop. Poetry, Art, Cooking, Weaving, Sewing, classical hobbies that show both refinement and intelligence keep him occupied between lessons on combat and missions for Kirigakure. He loves the rain, the fog, the night, and the cold. Junan actually loves the night so much that he considers himself a nocturnal creature, and those he works with tend to find him sleepy during the day and a bit too energized at night for their comfort.

The heat, the sun, deserts, mountains, happy people, Junan hates it all and really wishes a majority of it would simply disappear. Despite his abilities when it came to politics and social climbing, he still prefers to avoid it at all costs. Idiocy and arrogance are also triggers for his spite, though he is intelligent enough to keep it in check when necessary. Included in the list of things that irk Junan include: Small Children, Girls who try to use seduction as a weapon, happy people, cute and fluffy animals, and old people who need to just roll over and die.

When it comes to combat, a fair fight is a stupid fight. Fight dirty, fight smart, don’t worry about strength. Though he is no coward, if a fight is not going his way he is quick to disengage and run until he can confront the opposition on his own terms and not playing into their strategy. He considers everything a tool and not a single tactic is too dirty for use by Junan.

Catch Phrase: “The most unique bond between people is one of pain.”

Clan Information:

Clan Name: Aburame

Clan Location: Konoha

Clan Traits: The Aburame clan is a clan characterized by their use of insects as weapons. The insects live in symbiosis within the body of the shinobi. At birth, members of this clan are offered to a special breed of insects called destruction bugs as a nest, residing just under their host's skin. The insects can leave and enter through various pores, apparently by eating their way through the skin. They feed on chakra as a food source, making them quite deadly. The relationship between the shinobi and the insects is mutually beneficial. The host grants the bugs shelter and allows them to feed off their chakra, their body becoming a living hive, and in return the bugs do the user's bidding, allowing the shinobi to perform ninjutsu-like techniques without the use of hand seals or chakra conversion.

A female bug can be left on a target, which then can be tracked by smell by the male bug, or scout bugs can be sent out and return to tell the host information about the area. For this reason, Aburame clan members are experts in espionage; they can communicate with the bugs, and the bugs specialize in stealth because they make no noise or motion during combat. In addition to utilizing insects in battle, the Aburame clan also studies insects. They were rivals of the Kamizuru clan, the bee users, until they defeated them in battle. A major defining trait of the Aburame clan is that all of its known members wear dark sunglasses that hide their eyes as well as jackets that cover part of their face.

*Contract with beetles so cannot obtain a summon

Kekkei Genkai: -

Secret Clan Jutsu:

Name: Bug Clone Technique
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: -
Description: Using the Kikaichū bugs living in their body, the user can create a copy of themselves or anyone else they choose. The clone falls apart into its component bugs when struck. Because they're made of bugs, the clones can reform almost instantly.

Name: Bug Gathering Technique
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Element: -
Description: By simply touching a surface, the user releases a small web of chakra that draws bugs to their location.

Name: Bug Jar Techniqu
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: -
Description: The user focuses their chakra bugs into a dense swarm which circles their body forming a dome shaped shield that provides protection from a 360 degree angle. They swirl round and round increasing the efficiency of the defense. The dome is penetrable by the usage of a sufficient jutsu.

Name: Human Cocoon Technique
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: -
Description: The user creates a cocoon around themselves most likely to spy or hide from the enemy. The user can also use the cocoon as a "sleeping bag".

Name: Secret Technique: Insect Cocoon
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: -
Description: This unique jutsu is a secret technique that allows the user to increase the speed of insects' development. As the user's body is already a hive of sorts for the insects, the user will encase himself in an actual cocoon to further aid the insects. This is an extremely useful move for Aburame clan members, since their attacks mainly focus on the usage of bugs. However, using this in the midst of a battle can be potentially dangerous as it leaves the user static and vulnerable.

Name: Secret Technique: Insect Sphere
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: -
Description: By using the destruction bugs, members of the Aburame clan surround their opponent with thousands of bugs, making a globe of bugs around the opponent beforehand to completely trap them. Once trapped, the bugs would normally drain the chakra and swallow their victim. The bugs covering the victims body prevent movement, but should they escape the bugs will follow them.

History:
Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Beetle-7-1

Once a small clan, the Aburame grew over the years and can now be seen with signature sunglasses and bulky clothing to hide their clan’s Kekkai Genkai. At birth, the Aburame are introduced and infused with the Kikai, small destructive bugs that feed off Chakra. Covering their bodies to keep their enemies clueless to the bugs, the Aburame can use the Kikai Mushi to attack or track enemies, even steal their Chakra. The clan has been noted for hailing from not only Konohagakure no Sato, but from Sunagakure as well, now, however, they’re a country-wide clan.

The Aburame Are A Cannon Clan

Rank Information:

Rank: Genin
Village Affiliation: Kirigakure

Special Information:

Character Speciality:
Main: Puppetry
Sub: Ninjutsu
Elemental Affinity:
Main: Fuuton
Sub: Suiton
Special Characteristics:
Sadist: Junan is more likely to wound and harm than to aim for instant kills. It is much more his style to bleed an opponent dry after binding them, rather than just stuffing a kunai into their wide open screaming mouths.
Craftsman: Interestingly, Junan designs all of his puppets himself and doesn’t bother buying anything but the supplies necessary to sit in his home and build them.
Intelligent: Studious, Junan is considered quite intelligent though not quite in the genius range.
Morally Grey: Junan has no problems morally dealing with criminal elements. In fact, he seems at home amongst thieves and those who might be considered individuals of ill reputation.
Criminally Active: Though he keeps it quite secret, Junan prefers the criminal elements to the Bureaucracy of the shinobi world. For now, as a genin, he keeps his activities to providing information to certain elements and keeping a ring of pick pockets updating him on the current underworld politics of Kirigakure.

Skill Information:
Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them.

Jutsus:

See Below
Item Template:

Name: Storage Scroll
Rank: E
Type: Scroll
Natural Abilities: It can store puppets. Yay. Puppets. Oh, and Junan has 3 of them.

Background Information

History:

Pre-Academy
Junan has always been the person he is today, though perhaps a bit more innocent as a child with the excuse that he didn’t know what he was doing was incorrect or wrong. Junan was born on a rainy night, one of the coldest winters on record for Kirigakure no Sato, into a family that wanted him more than he wanted them.

Running away from home at such an early age, 6, he was quickly returned to his parents and into the captivity he sought so desperately to escape. Time spent in the swamps and bogs of Kirigakure was much preferred to time spent inside the greenhouses and botany labs that his parents ran.

His parents were both medical sensor ninja’s for Kirigakure for a short number of years before retiring from field assignments and beginning work on studies of botany and entomology that they quietly tried to force into the studious regimen of their oldest son. It was their talent for near pacifism that Junan sought to avoid the most, preferring to feel his hands and soul become filthy with the acts he quickly was told were wrong.

Their attempts at teaching him botany did not end in vain however, each time the subject was approached allowed Junan another chance to learn about poisons, cures, and other poultices that would one day become useful to him as he learned the art of puppetry and combat poisons.

Before school, he was often found running with the academy students through various simple training exercises such as running in formation and hurling practice kunai at targets set up in the mist soaked forests of Kiri. He considered picking fist fights a hobby and collecting bugs training.

To say he was obsessed with the bugs that arrived first at the scene of death would be an understatement, Junan keeping a private collection of bugs attracted to carrion in the greenhouses of his parents for him to play with and interact with his own personal beetles.

Academy:
Neither sticking out, nor fitting in, most of Junan’s graduating class from the academy wouldn’t recognize him or even bother remembering him. He carefully allowed himself to fade into the background of any situation. Holding back just enough to stay out of the top of his class and keep him safe from notoriety as part of the bottom of the class.

Quick to cheat on tests with bugs, the one time he was caught his sensei was actually happy to find a student so able to gather information disceretely, he actually learned more from cheating off of others than he did listening to his class teacher. In classes, his best subjects were easily manipulating the machinations of puppets and the furthering of his already considerable ability in the realm of ninjutsu.

Both enthralled and obsessed with the pain he can cause himself and others, he kept his joys of pain and torment quite secretive with only a handful of students ever seeing exactly how harsh he could be to those that he considered beneath him. Hands always ready to clench into fists, bugs always ready to suck the chakra right out of his opponent’s before breaking their will and bones with puppetry that made others his age seem just a bit unsettled.

Genin:

As a genin, he has yet to be officially placed on a team, leaving him with much free time and solo responsibilities. Though his responsibilities usually have him tutoring genin struggling with their basic classes or interested in the area of puppetry. His free time has been spent with far less recommended company. As of late, Junan seems to have been connecting with the criminal elements of Kirigakure. Particularly a small group of pick pockets, there are many unconfirmed reports of Junan offering information for a price to those willing to lend an ear. Perhaps that is why it has been such a long wait to be assigned a team to participate on.

Role-Play Sample:
Junan sat with his arms folded beneath his cloak and an annoyed look hidden behind a mask. It wasn’t often he was called out to watch academy students practice, and here he had thought that he would never visit the dull life of the academy ever again after his graduation. But here he was, feet shifting uneasily in the sand and the academy students going through their taijutsu exercises with each other while the Aburame Genin looked on for a teacher who was in a meeting with the Mizukage. The whirring of something metallic cutting through the air quickly alerted Junan to the unsafe nature of his current positioning and his fingers twitched beneath his cloak.

The jitte wielding arm of his Reikoku puppet burst free from his cloak and quickly blocked the oncoming shuriken with a metallic clang as it was deflected over his shoulder and buried itself firmly into the wall. The average academy student didn’t throw things that accurately, or with that much power behind them. A quick scan of the school yard quickly found the culprits as a pair of older academy students laughing to themselves about the near hit of their current chaperone.

With a subtle glance directed at them behind his goggles, the Kikaichu quickly evacuated his form and took to the grass as covert scouts sent o ambush. Like an unseen and unheard plague, they quickly surge through the grass towards the unsuspecting pair who are just now returning to their taijutsu practice. In a few moments their practice would be over and the other kids would enjoy a rousing game of “Ninja” while these three were too tired to carry on with the game the rest of their class would be enjoying.

Poor poor deluded academy students, not yet thinking that they have to pay for the actions they take as their own. Junan had learned that lesson early, and now he would teach it in his own subtle way. Whistling to get the attention of the other students, Junan walked toward the shed where they kept the faux ninja gear for the game while two young men slumped to the ground rather exhausted for some… unknown reason.


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BUG JUTSU
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Academy
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Water Jutsu
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Wind Jutsu
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Non-Elemental Jutsu
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Puppeteer Gear

Koumuru, D rank
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Genshou the Puppet
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Reikoku
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Demonic Discipline
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptyTue 31 Aug 2010, 1:04 am

a) Skill Information: Take out the unnecessary jutsu template.

b) Academy Jutsus: The coding for the last two jutsus are messy, clean it up, please.
c) Suiton Jutsus: Are you sure you don't want anymore suiton jutsus?
d) Fuuton Jutsus: You don't have wind as your element; remove.
e) Raiton Jutsus: Your second element is raiton [lightning]. Are you sure you don't want to add any raiton jutsus?

f) Koumuru [Slot 4]: Decrease the number of kunai to 10, and exploding tags to 5.
g) Koumuru [Slot 5+6]: Decrease the number of senbonsto 100.
h) Koumuru [Slot 7]: How long is the opponent blind for? When does this wear off?

i) Genshou; The image is cut off there.
j) Genshou [Slot 1]: Decrease the number of senbons to 100.
k) Genshou [Slot 2]: Remove the rest of the effects of the flash bomb [loss of sight, blurry vision, etc].

l) Reikoku [Slot 3]: How long is this wire?
m) Reikoku [Slot 6]: How long is this wire?
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptyTue 31 Aug 2010, 1:49 am

My puppets were pre-approved
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptyTue 31 Aug 2010, 1:58 am

Oh okay, my mistake. Continue your editing~
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptySun 05 Sep 2010, 8:37 pm

Alrighty, since you havent edited the first portion of what Lexi said:


Quote :
a) Skill Information: Take out the unnecessary jutsu template.

b) Academy Jutsus: The coding for the last two jutsus are messy, clean it up, please.
c) Suiton Jutsus: Are you sure you don't want anymore suiton jutsus?
d) Fuuton Jutsus: You don't have wind as your element; remove.
e) Raiton Jutsus: Your second element is raiton [lightning]. Are you sure you don't want to add any raiton jutsus?

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Wanizame wrote:
My puppets were pre-approved


Even if they are, that doesn't make them un-questionable. Concerns shouldn't be dismissed by the phrase 'pre-approved'. Lexi brought up some good points about your puppets and as a mod checking your app your obligated to offer an explanation or fix them.
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptyWed 24 Nov 2010, 4:34 am

Bumpity.
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptyWed 24 Nov 2010, 8:50 am

• Add a few sentences to your appearance, please.

Wanizame wrote:

Name: Bikou Ninjutsu - Shadowing Stealth Technique
[b]Rank: E
[b]Type: Ninjutsu
[b]Element: N/A
[b]Description: Bikou Ninjutsu is the technique ninjas use to follow their targets covertly. The manner in which the ninja shadows their target can differ, from the basic hiding under a nearby object, to using a jutsu to turn oneself invisible.

• Fix the coding, please.


Wanizame wrote:
[b]Name: Kirigakure no Jutsu - Hidden Mist Technique
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Element: None
Description: Kirigakure no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilized by Hidden Mist ninja. The ninja causes the area surrounding their target to be covered in fog. The low visibility allows the ninja to silently and secretly assassinate their target.

Name: Mist Clone
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: None
Description: Utilizing surronding mist, a ninja is able to form a clone out of the mist. The clone, once hit, reveals its gaseous nature and then reverts back to mist. This jutsu has a lower chakra cost than more solid clones, enabling more uses of it over a tougher version such as Water Clone.

• Both of these are Suiton (Water) techniques. Their is also a coding error.

Z wrote:
Even if they are, that doesn't make them un-questionable. Concerns shouldn't be dismissed by the phrase 'pre-approved'. Lexi brought up some good points about your puppets and as a mod checking your app your obligated to offer an explanation or fix them.

• I believe Z makes a valid point. Lexi's original post did have some of the exact some concerns I had dealing with your puppets. Because of this, I'd like you to refer to it and edit the things she stated.

Lady A. wrote:

f) Koumuru [Slot 4]: Decrease the number of kunai to 10, and exploding tags to 5.
g) Koumuru [Slot 5+6]: Decrease the number of senbonsto 100.
h) Koumuru [Slot 7]: How long is the opponent blind for? When does this wear off?

i) Genshou; The image is cut off there.
j) Genshou [Slot 1]: Decrease the number of senbons to 100.
k) Genshou [Slot 2]: Remove the rest of the effects of the flash bomb [loss of sight, blurry vision, etc].

l) Reikoku [Slot 3]: How long is this wire?
m) Reikoku [Slot 6]: How long is this wire?
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptyThu 25 Nov 2010, 8:42 am

-grumble grumble grumble- I fixed most of what Lady A asked for, I argue the rest. It is nerfing the puppet to practical uselessness.
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptyThu 25 Nov 2010, 4:12 pm

Post what you argue and what you fixed so we know what to debate over.
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptyFri 26 Nov 2010, 9:26 am

Well, the fact that I fixed half of the stuff listed and it isn't even noticeable.... proves my point exactly. If you can't tell the difference at a glance and nothing sticks out... why should it be changed?
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptyFri 26 Nov 2010, 5:01 pm

Don't get sassy with me.

I didn't even look because I don't really feel that I should have to scroll back and forth just to check what you did and didn't do when you could just post them and make this a heck of a lot easier.
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptySat 27 Nov 2010, 9:43 am

A) I wasn't being sassy but now I will be.
B) If you are too lazy to check yourself, then I could just say "There, it is done." So..... there I changed it and it is absolutely perfect.
C) I'm not here to make your job hard, but if it is too monotonous or too tough to check an app to see if it is all up to snuff instead of just chiming in with "Yeah, I agree with her.... but I'm not actually gonna check any of it or put in my own opinions." then maybe you need to step your game up when it comes to checking apps? (Though I am sure with inspiration like this you're going to be as hard as possible on my app in which case I will get notoriously lazy with the app since it will feel like someone is trying to oppress me for speaking the truth and getting under some skin. Prove me wrong on this minor addition to point C, I beg you)
D) If this site is set on standards, which from what I've seen it is supposed to be, then shouldn't you trust your fellow mods if they've approved a set of puppets? I mean... you all should be able to trust your fellow staff. If you can't trust them, then why are they on staff in the first place? "Thanks for your opinion... but it's wrong. But we are gonna let you keep giving your opinion, even though it is wrong."
E) Now I am being snappy, sassy, and a jerk. Seriously.... you people are quick to jump on a fellow who is making a good point. I had assumed, since it is your job to do so, that you had actually reviewed my app and were unable to see what was and wasn't fixed. In such a scenario, would you not also assume that it is all fine?
F) This is just so I have an F. Seriously, I'm batguano crazy. This character is a POS that I built in a couple hours. It's not like I was doing something crazy, it's not something amazing, heck it's not even close to being broken for a Genin Puppeteer. So yup.... judge it as you will.... but this process is beginning to wear my patience.
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptySat 27 Nov 2010, 4:11 pm

Locked for 24 hours. I would of taken a simple apology.

I spare no expense for app checking, you should know that since you are some what of a veteran. Your argument at it's base is very flawed. You said I didn't notice when I didn't look and now your acting like I don't plan on looking when that is why I'm here. You say your not here to make my job hard and I can agree with that, but your certainly not here to make it any easier now are you? I'm not trying to oppress anyone in any way, but since you decided to leave that small statement to expand on in some later argument I guess you can add whatever opinion you have of me onto there. As for your mod trust thing, everyone is wrong sometimes, thats that.

So your telling me that your making a good point? Bravo, you proved that I can't tell the difference in an app without reading it. You've proven I'm not a magician. Now what will I tell all of my friends D:?!
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PostSubject: Re: Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] Aburame, Junan [Kiri Genin] EmptyMon 06 Dec 2010, 9:33 am

Firstly, please edit out the clan information section and add a little clan bit under the catch phrases and just add "The Aburame Clan." there, it's a minor change to the character template but one that should be done none the less.

-Bug Gathering Technique; minor coding error. Please Fix.
-Insect Bullet; needs a much better description or a removal.
-Shadow Stealth Technique; Lauren pointed it out another coding error, please fix.
-You only have one Suiton, do you wish to add more, likewise with your Fuuton?
-Mist Clone; this isn't the correct name for this technique and it is actually a Genjutsu, please remove.
-Koumuru [Slots 5+6]; Decrease the number of senbon to 100.
-Koumuru [Slot 7]; How long is the opponent blind for? When does this wear off?
-Genshou [Slot 1]; Decrease the number of senbons to 150, please.
-Reikoku [Slots 3+6]: How long is these wires?
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