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PostSubject: Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] EmptySat 20 Nov 2010, 2:40 am

Basic Information:

Name:Daosumi, Sora
Secondary Title:
~The Walking Seal
~The Embodiment of Rage
~Hidden Puppeteer

Age:
17
Gender:
male
Physical Appearance:
Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] 300px-Third_Raikage


Sora's hair is not greatly long and is spiked up all into one point at the back of his head where the top meets the back of the head. He does however have some strands that hang of in several different places they go over his face and sometimes around the side. His hair is not over is ear as that would impede hearing which he doesn't want. His eyes are a piercing icy blue colour with no pupil. This is a genetic trait, though it does allow him to see clearly still. The eyes strike fear into others often as they seem to look into the core and send chills down your spine.

His eyebrows are rather thin and have barely any hair to them. they are shaped to a point at one end naturally. They are brown like his hair and add to the somewhat scary appearance of Sora. His nose is rather small and is a missed appearance in his face as no one notices it, not even himself. His lips are very stiff as he barely ever shows emotions on his face and it adds to the fact that he doesn't talk much. they are a very light pinky/peachy colour.

His skin is a very pale white, rather like a ghost. His skin is very toned all around his body as well. His skin can never change colour as for some reason he cannot get a tan, sunburn yes but tan no. this is very odd but true. Sora is a rather social freak due to this and often scares girls he is around. His pale skin is not a genetic trait as he is the only one in the family to have this skin colour.

Sora never wears a shirt. He is always bare chested, sometimes when not fighting he has been known to wear the akatsuki cloak, but he rarely does. If wearing the cloak and he engages in a fight he will either pull it off or unzip it halfway down so he is bare chested. It is unknown why but he just likes to have nothing holding back the force of his punches like a shirt might.

Ranmaru wears some pads that increase the force if a punch over his hand and forearm. They are also used to block incoming attacks if he can react quick enough. These pads are metal and silver colored. They do have the akatsuki cloud sign on the part that covers the back of the hand. He also wears a long red glove that foes up to the forearm but doesn't cover his fingers or thumbs. This is so that the pads don't irritate his arm.

His torso is very ripped and toned. His muscles are very clear through his arms and torso. This is from training some many years ago and gives him a lot of physical strength. He has a six-pack and very muscular abs. Ranmaru is proud of this as it means that punches do somewhat less damage, but still hurt a considerable lot.

Sora has several different pairs of the same baggy trouser bottoms. These are very light so as to not impede his leg speed when kicking they also are specially made to be very flexible so that they don't lessen his kicking power. They are black except for a fire pattern on the right leg that goes up to midway on his thigh. There is also more from flames flowing off it on the thigh in part on his left leg. The trousers do cover about 2 centimeters up on his torso because they are long and are held up by a belt that is thin but strong, it is black with a golden lining on the outsides of it.

Finally, Sora doesn't wear shoes. He wears more pads like the ones he wears on his arm on his shins and the top of his feet. He doesn't wear shoes because he prefers to walk around 'bare' footed to strengthen his feet and the damage his kicks do. The guards on his shins are not seen because they are covered by the bottom of his trousers.

Personality:
Spoiler:

Catch Phrase:
You will be punished by many Seals
Fear my Rage.

Clan: Daosumi Clan

Rank Information:

Rank:Chuunin (John said i could but he wants to check my app)
Village Affiliation:
Kumogakure

Special Information:

Character Speciality:
Main:Fuuinjutsu
Sub:Puppetry
Elemental Affinity:
Main:Wind
Sub:Lightning
Special Characteristics:

Speed Seal: Sora is able to write down seals on anything he wishes at lightning quick speed. This is because of all the seals he has written down on her body for combat, also during combat so he can fight to his full potential. Sora can produce seals roughly three times faster than normal shinobi. Three seals a post.

Background Information

History:
Birth arc

Long ago in a small village on the outskirts of the lightning country, there was a large number of Daosumi memebers, well actually the whole clan was there, and it was their village. They were there to Build an organisation of the clansmen and women on orders of the Raikage. It was to infiltrate the clans and make sure no rebellion or war was being planned so that the country remained peaceful, for doing this they were paid a healthy sum of money. However, nothing was happening and all was peaceful so as told the daosumi constantly reported it was peaceful. The Raikage grew impatient with this as he felt that something must of been happening. After 10 years of this they were eventually banished. Some left but others stayed under alias'.

One group of Daosumi had to be poor beggars, they eventually begged and begged and after some years rose to the height of the social ladder. They went by the last name of Tarok and ended living in a huge mansion living peacefully. When the new Raikage came to power he lifted the ban on the clansmen and women and allowed them to live peacefully as they were once allowed to do. The Tarok family thanked him but still kept the name and be normal citizens. They had many kids 3 boys, then a girl then two more boys. The family was proud of their five 5 sons and their daughter aswell. The third child was Sora Daosumi.

When he was born he had to follow the same daily routine of training and learning just as the others did. He was brought home and had the seal placed onto his toungue, its was a quick and painless ritual of the Daosumi. Sora grew up in the magical world of luxury.

Academy arc

At the ripe old age of 10 Sora joined the academy. He already knew a few of his clan jutsu which were all really defensive as he was taught fuuinjutsu is the greatest defense in this world, and he strongly believed in that. So he made his way through the academy written papers and their fighting tasks rather easily as he didn't get touched due to his fuuinjutsu masterclass. Sora was not the strongest considering he only had defensive jutsu and had to get up close and personal with people to win and fight it out. He wasn't very gifted with weapons either like every other member in the clan.

Soras life was rather difficult as he couldn't use weaponry like everyone else in the clan so he could only use fuuinjutu, for this he was considered a disgrace. Someone who wasn't worthy to even be in the clan, someone not gifted at all as they only had one specialty. He found it rather hard to win fights with no offensive jutsu but he managed. Sora was the smartest by far but the fighting he lacked, he was bullied for a year and then he just gave the bullies a good hiding as he got annoyed with it.

About one month before the genin exams Sora still couldn't do anything offensive so he would fail the exams, his team was also pissed as it made missions much harder when they had to defeat a weak bandit or something similar. Sora picked up a puppet and began to move it, the puppet wasn't his but it was his sensei's. His sensei let him borrow it for a day to practice as he saw this would be his offense. Sora ran home that day to show his parents he wasn't useless, but they found it worse of that he could use puppets instead of the clans fabled weaponary skills paired with their fuuinjutsu dominance.

His sensei allowed him to use the puppet for the exams, with using the puppet coupled with his fuuinjutsu skills Soar flew through the exams with ease and made it to a genin on top of the class. Sora was pleased with his own achievements but his parents wasn't. He was now a genin.

Genin arc

A few days after the exams Sora heard his parents talking about something, he couldn't quite make out the works but he figured it was serious as his parents didn't normally seclude themselves to chat to each other, last time it was a baby coming and the two times before that, something very serious indeed. The next day Sora came home to an empty house, he was confused by saw there was a reason.

A few hours later his parents, bothers and sister cam home carrying a huge bag. He figured it wasn't his as he wasn't there and that was because they saw him as a disgrace, however his father took out the bag and there was a big rectangular box his father presented it to him and told him to open it. Sora did as he was told and inside was a puppet, Soras very own. He was so pleased with it, and his parents told him it was alright he was a puppeteer they were still pleased with him. Sora named the puppet rage, it was awesome and he loved it, if it ever broke he immediately stopped the fight and repaired it. It had only ever broke once however in a fight with his puppeteer sensei who was showing him what it was like to be a puppeteer with jutsu and also teaching him some, Sora got more skills and eventually was able to control it with jutsu the one finger, but he prefered unsing his ten as it was more control.

Sora and his sensei grew close as they were one in the same, both were outcasts in their family for not being able to do what everyone else could but both had an extraordinary power in what they could do. And again both puppets they held were gifts. Sora enjoyed the company of his sensei and was pleased he found someone to help him out on his journey as a true puppeteer.

Role-Play Sample:
Spoiler:


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Skill Information:

Academy Jutsu
Spoiler:

Fuuinjutsu

Spoiler:

Puppetry Jutsu
Spoiler:


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PostSubject: Re: Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] EmptySat 20 Nov 2010, 2:41 am

Name:Rage
Rank:B
Description: The puppet is made of wood. It has spiky hair in all directions that is uncontrolled. It has one huge eye in the middle and a large mouth. The puppet has 4 arms. It wears the same clothing as Sora.The eye is a red colour and the colour of the wood is a dark black. The hair is yellow,
Body Slots:
Slot 1: Katana x 2 (explained V)
Slot 2: kunai x10
Slot 3: Three bladed Scythe x 2
Slot 4: poison smoke gas (explained V)
Slot 5: poison smoke gas
Slot 6: flashbomb x 2 (explaned V)
Slot 7: Kama x 4
Slot 8: kusarigama x2
Slot 9: 'bullets' (explained V)
Slot 10: Axe x 2 (explained)
History: Sora was given this puppet when his family finally got over the fact he could not use weapons just like everyone else in the family and that he was gifted with puppets, not weapons. It was mainly to show Sora that they realised this and didn't mind it, they still loved him for who he was and did not think he was a disgrace. Sora cherishes this puppet with his life, if it were to ever break he would be overly raged.

Name: Katana
Rank:B
Element:can have elements channeled through them
Description: The Katanas has only one abilitiy, it cannot break.

Name:Poison smoke gas
Rank: B
Element: None
Description:It is inhaled. The puppets hand folds out showing a hole which is able to shoot out a poison gas, the poison gas has three stages, the first is fits of coughing (if the poison connects for a post, lasts 2 post then the second stage starts), the second stage a mild pain throughout the body(if the poison connects for 4 posts, it stacks, lasts 3 posts then next). The final stage is death if the poison has connected for 9 posts then they die instantly.

Name: Flashbombs
Rank: C
Element:none
Description:Blinds the foe for a post.

Name: Bullets
Rank: B
Element: none
Description:The bullets are shot out of the puppets mouth. Can pierce rock.

Name:Axe, Scythe
Rank: C
Element: none
Description:The axe/Scythe is a very heavy weapon requiring great strength to wield it, it can deliver powerful strikes that are lethal. Can cut off limbs cleanly.


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PostSubject: Re: Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] EmptySat 27 Nov 2010, 9:20 pm

Sealed Scribing my 2 uses

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PostSubject: Re: Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] EmptyMon 29 Nov 2010, 5:37 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] EmptyWed 01 Dec 2010, 6:59 am

First of all the image is clealy a man who is 80+ in age and you are 14. Please edit and find a sufficient picture. (Unless there is a physical condition that I am aware of that makes him look crazy old?)

- Chuunin are at least 17+. Please edit.

Quote :
Speed Seal: Sora is able to write down seals on anything she wishes at lightning quick speed. This is because of all the seals he has written down on her body for combat, also during combat so he can fight to his full potential.
There are some gender changes in here that need to be fixed. Also, detail how fast he is compared to a normal ninja e.g how many seals can he produce per post.

Quote :
Name: Sealing Pot
Rank: B-S
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Element: none
Description: Using the seal Sora carries around with him at all times he takes it off his back and is able to capture a jutsu the same rank as however much chakra is needed, for example if a S-rank jutsu is shot a S-ranks amount of chakra is needed to capture it. Once captured the jutsu is nullified. The pot is also able to capture people costing an A-ranks amount of chakra for Chuunin and down and an S-rank for above chuunins. To do this the pot must be placed on the targets head and dragged down his body.
Remove this.

Quote :
Name: Painful sealing
Rank: B-S
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Element: lightning
Description: Sora writes a seal on the limb of an opponent much like tenketsu sealing only this is different. It attacks the nervous system of the limb and causes major pain until medical attention is gained or Sora stops the seal.
B-rank:the area does the opposite of whats meant to happen. eg if meant to go left it goes right. sharp pain.
A-rank:hard to move on a whole a lot of pain
S-rank:no movement at all. Severe pain
There are a couple of confusions within this jutsu also some grammar. There is no occurance of signal distruption in the description but then there is on B-rank. It is really messy.

- A B-ranked puppet would not be completely made of steel please edit it to be made of wood.

Quote :
Name: Katana
Rank:B
Element:can have elements channeled through them
Description: The Katanas has only 2 abilities, one it can have chakra channeled through it and two it cannot break.
I don't think so, they will be plain basic katana.

- With your poison smoke gas a B-rank poison would not create severe pain, please give a more detailed description of the pain and make it less, to a confined area.

Quote :
Name: Bullets
Rank: B
Element: none
Description:The bullets are shot out of the puppets mouth. They can have chakra channeled through them and can pierce rock.

Name:Axe, Scythe
Rank: B
Element: none
Description:The axe/Scythe is a very heavy weapon requiring great strength to wield, it can deliver powerful strikes that are lethal, can cut off limbs cleanly, the abilities are it can have chakra channeled through it and can easily slice through steel
NO chakra channelling and no cutting through steel!

Conclusion:
To be honest this doesn't look like a chuunin ranked application to me. There are some obvious mistakes and mishaps throughout. Also, the grammar and spelling is particularly bad. Have you heard of using a capital letter?
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PostSubject: Re: Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] EmptyThu 02 Dec 2010, 4:03 am

edited.

Truth be told i didn't think it would be great, I've been out of rping for 3-5 months.

Todd please don't be 'rude'/offensive by saying things like: Have you heard of a capital letter? I find it offensive and no im not trying to piss you off

(Did this on Wii was so annoying)
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PostSubject: Re: Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] EmptyThu 02 Dec 2010, 4:29 am

Quote :
edited.

Truth be told i didn't think it would be great, I've been out of rping for 3-5 months.

Todd please don't be 'rude'/offensive by saying things like: Have you heard of a capital letter? I find it offensive and no im not trying to piss you off
Well I wasn't trying to be offensive, I was just merely asking a question.

There are still things you did not edit e.g

- the image/picture
- katana's (they are not unbreakable)
- B-rank poison would not kill a person (edit)
- bullet strength (piercing rock?)

- Also, what are the two images "fear" and "anger" supposed to mean? please describe this some more instead of just placing the pictures.

- Can you please edit this application down to a genin leveled character also. Sorry, but it wasn't quite to the standard of chuunin.
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PostSubject: Re: Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] EmptyThu 02 Dec 2010, 7:59 pm

if its genin i have to make a new char -.- so might aswell archive this...
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PostSubject: Re: Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] Daosumi, Sora [Kumo Chuunin] EmptySat 04 Dec 2010, 2:18 am

No you don't. All you have to do is edit your history and get rid of B-rank jutsu?
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