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PostSubject: Suicide Club Completed Suicide Club Completed EmptyThu 25 Nov 2010, 12:15 am
Character Name: Hougaku, Tensei
Rank: Jounin
Village: Kumo
Mission Link: Suicide Club
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PostSubject: Re: Suicide Club Completed Suicide Club Completed EmptyThu 25 Nov 2010, 8:02 am
Official Grading: 5/5 + 3/5 = 8/10
Unofficial Grading: 18/20
Comments: I found this really entertaining, I liked how you altered the generic objective of the mission into something different and included a strong emotional feel to it in the end. I'd like to see you persist in one or two private roleplays regarding Kira's future as I was really pulled in at the end. I didn't really take much notice to your punctuation, but I couldn't find any flaws in your grammar or spelling, but maybe it's because I was just to pulled into the writing itself. Fantastic work, John. I wish you would roleplay more frequently, it is such a treat to read your work.

Eight Mission Points Credited.
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