Rant - oppinions needed

Age : 32 Posts : 787

Ok so this dumb fuck, who ive met twice and lives three states away, one of the times we got drunk together, dude is like 21 or 22, hell dude might only b 20 IDC. Anyway so he finds it fitting to go off on some fuckin BS rant about life and lecture me cuz i said the next six months are gona roll by slow as shit. Im at a certain place in my life, where im sick of being lectured, and least of all by some one who knows nothing bout my shit outside of what i tell him which is very selective, aint much older then me, and ive gotten drunk with. Sorry dude, not exactly someone I think i need to shut up and listen to and bow before his teachings, im not the mindless fuck who followed you in your dumb ass cults way back in the day. So aight i was overly pissed cuz he got all offeneded when i told him i honestly didnt care to listen about the fuck ups he and his friends made adn the regrets they have now and an argument ensued and he basically pulled some stiupid shit. Well i was pissed and i just started writing and it just started coming out as a rap. Ya i know nerdy whitey rapping LAME, whatever, it happened, and now I havent reread it or anything, i just want to know if its any good by yalls standards so just some feedback would be cool and neat to see aight so here it is.

Quote :: What you think you need to give advice to me.
Maybe first you can explain why it burns so bad when you pee.
I dont care if your my sneer faced cousin.
You dont know nothing about the situation Im in.
Not to say this shit is neccessarily as bad
as it gets
or that I blame anyone for the place that Im at
not throwin a fit
i just know that im fuckin sick
of havin to explain my shit and then stand by it
no matter how small the decsion
or how little it affects you or how little you know from sparse txt message
ill tear through you all in a second
whether your family or once was a friend
ive successfully destroyed every relationship that ive been in
whether that be romantical or personal
or even educational or coworkacal
this shouldnt be an interrogatoin session
no matter how blunt i put it
you assholes do not get the lesson
i could write it in big fuckin white letters
on a green chalk board so you can read better
i got a stitch in my side
im gettin some gloat in my stride
my heads gettin swelled
cuz im all by myself
it seems that way at least
oh what you fucker flipped cuz im not nice im a beast
and you just fuckin figured that out
didnt you
so go sit and you cry and you pout
wouldnt you
im not gona fuckin say it again
this is the last straw
the mother fuckin end
so get out of my way or come one more time
but either way
better recognize the sign
that im absolutely fed up
with all of this shit its just messed up
speak to me lecutring "oh we did this we did that"
"i regret what i didnt, i wish id just could go back"
sorry it wont happen
by sitting and stabbin
all your expierince into my brain
it wont make up for your shame
or of that of your group
that you grew up with back in the school
cant come to terms your a high and mighty tool
just get the fuck
off your pedestal
before you come up and you say you wana talk
man we got drunk
now im supposed to think that your spunk
that your some kind of guru
whos only defense is that IM the immature one in this equation
like some how you know every situation
some universal truth that doesnt exist
man if i could id answer by jamin my fist
down your throat to the center of your mother fuckin ego
you need to fuck off and just let go
so until that day comes just walk by aaand go
to the next mother fucker who chances a listen
the next mother fucker who mistakens your bitchin
maybe that doodie wont have nothing better to do with his time
but as of now your nothin but a waste of mine
id be better off high
so take a rain check asshole and good bye

Thanks for any and all comments.

Age : 31 Posts : 2547

Raps suck. A well worded 2 paragraph speech would probably be better at getting your point across.

Age : 32 Posts : 787

Lol, the rap wasnt meant to get my point across, im not gona like take it to the dude and be like what. I was just venting. I was just curious if it turned out aight at all. If you dont like rap at all, kind of pointless to make a comment on it. But thanks for the input all the same.

Age : 31 Posts : 2547

It wasn't pointless when I posted it, considering you never mentioned that you weren't going to send it to him. Anyway, I guess it's not bad all things considered. Not particularly intelligent, but I think that about most rap. I guess this post is just as irrelevant as the first, huh? Razz

Posts : 2032

Talking it over is for the ladies. Scrap the guy.

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