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| Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] | |
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Aidan
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| Subject: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sun 12 Dec 2010, 4:55 am | |
| Basic Information: Name: Aidan Kasui Secondary Title: Ai Age: 15 Gender: Male Physical Appearance: - Spoiler:
Aidan has white, spiky hair that doesn't appear to move a lot like he has gel put in it. White is not the natural color of his hair, which is black but he died it white. He has light blue eyes and usually has a bored look on his face. He has a necklace like accessory that keeps his whole torso on his body and without it, the torso would fall apart. He has a thick green belt made of cloth that is folded where it hangs in the middle of his legs. Then for his lower half he has grey baggy pants that are tucked in at the bottom into his black and white boots. He is quite built up which is shown from his torso, he is about six foot tall and weighs about one seventy.
Aidan is about six foot one, one might not notice his height if he was sitting down because he has a habit to slouch down when he is sitting. Aidan does not care what other people think about him even though some others like to pick on him but it isn't really something he can't fix, but they pick on him because of the way all of his clothes are wrinkles most of the time. He also has a earring on his left ear which gives him that punk look. Aidan also is very tan, it appears that he has a grey skin tone but is more of an outside tanning grey then a indoors freakish grey tone. Also he has a pair of black wristbands with the Kumogakure symbol on them. Aidan has razor sharp teeth in his mouth which could harm someone if he bit them, it would hurt enough that it could make them scream.
It is ususally overooked buy Aidan has a small white ponytail in the back of his head, it is spiky like the rest of his hair but it is unknown because Aidan usually has it tucked inside his sash but sometimes it will accidently fly out of it, Aidan wants to get it cut but never has the time.
Personality:
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Aidan likes to have fun despite this he has a bored look on his face. He tries to keep all of his energetic and hyper feelings bottled inside so that he doesn't get out of control which he usually does when he doesn't bottle it all inside. But occasionally he lets it all slip out of his bottle and loses control. When he is on a mission or in a fight he likes to be cautious for his surroundings and relies on his senses for his fighting. Aidan does not care what people think about him, there is a small part of him that really gets annoyed by the comments people call him which mostly range from ‘ The Grim Reaper’ because of his skin color ‘ ‘ Shark Boy ‘ because of his razor sharp teeth etc. Aidan tries his best to not care what they call him but sometimes he just can’t take it and starts to shout and go insane on them.
He always tries to keep his cool no matter where he is. When he is around someone he finds attractive or something of that sort he tries to show off but not to make it to obvious. He is quite proud of his powers and doesn't shun himself. He doesn’t like seeing others shun themselves either and tries to cheer them up. The reason Aidan doesn’t like for anybody to shun themselves it because Aidan believes that everybody was put into this world for a specific reason, and they will be taken out of this world for a specific reason.
Catch Phrase: None really Clan: http://www.ultimateshinobi.com/t540-kasui-clan
Rank Information: Rank: Genin Village Affiliation: Kumogakure
Special Information: Character Speciality: Main: Ninjutsu Sub: Elemental Affinity: Main: Raiton Sub: Doton Special Characteristics:
Eidetic memory Aidan has a advanced memory in several fields. Aidan can easily remember and then recall on images, sounds, and or objects in memory. Aidan could speed through a long scroll and when he is done recite the whole scroll perfectly in one try, just like he could remember the sound of a animal or words of a shinobi, also if he saw a weapon in battle he could then describe the weapon in detail to someone else.
Chakra Manipulation Because of his clan's larger chakra pool, Aidan can pull off more techniques then other people his rank. Not only does he have a larger chakra pool but he has excellent chakra, and shape control. These special characteristics of his easily allow him to create techniques and learn new techniques quicker then the average shinobi would.
Skill Information:
Jutsu Template: Academy Jutsus
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Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: This jutsu lets the user quickly switch places with another nearby object, such as a plant (normally a section of a log), an animal, or even another person within reach, leaving the opponent open to a counter-attack. Explosive tags can be attached to the replacement for an added surprise. Fundamentally, all ninja know this technique.
Name: Henge no Jutsu Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: This jutsu allows the user to assume the appearance of another person, animal, or object. This is one of the basic jutsu taught at the Konoha Ninja Academy. Fundamentally, all ninja know this jutsu. The transformation jutsu is considered to be among the more difficult E-ranked techniques, since it requires constant emission of chakra while mentally maintaining the form. On top of that, the user would be, most likely, interacting with the environment. This puts much mental strain on the inexperienced ninja.
Name: Bunshin no Jutsu Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: This technique creates intangible copies of the user. The clones are simply illusions and will dissipate when they come into contact with something. The illusions can be seen through by the Byakugan and the Sharingan. A person with normal eyes can also distinguish the clones from the original, since the clones will not disrupt the area around themselves with their movement (won't kick up dust, crush grass, etc.). Name: Genjutsu Kai Rank: E-S Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.
Name: Shunshin no Jutsu Rank: D-S Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: This jutsu is a high-speed movement technique, allowing a ninja to move short to long distances at an almost untraceable speed. To an observer, it appears as if the user has teleported. A puff of smoke is occasionally used to disguise the user's movements. It is accomplished by using chakra to temporarily boost the user's reflexes. The amount of chakra required depends on the overall distance between the user and their intended destination.
Name: Kinobori no Waza - Act of Tree Climbing Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu/Chakra Control Element: N/A Description: Kinobori no Waza, the art of tree climbing serves a dual purpose. Taking part in Kinobori Shugyou (Tree Climbing Training) helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza - Act of Water Surface Walking Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu/Chakra Control Element: N/A Description: A variation on the Kinobori no Waza (Act of Tree Climbing), the art of water surface walking allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water.
Name: Ayatsuito no Jutsu - String Reeling Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: Ayatsuito no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing wire. This string can be used in rappeling, or as a method to tie down and restrict the movement of an opponent. The Uchiha clan also utilizes the wire in their Sharingan Soufuusha Sannotachi technique. The wire allows the clan member to pin down an opponent, and then unleash a torrent of fire upon them.
Name: Bikou Ninjutsu - Shadowing Stealth Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: Bikou Ninjutsu is the technique ninjas use to follow their targets covertly. The manner in which the ninja shadows their target can differ, from the basic hiding under a nearby object, to using a jutsu to turn oneself invisible.
Raiton Release
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Name: Lightning Clone Rank: D-S Element: Raiton Description: The user creates a clone made of lightning by using the tiger, ram, and dragon hand seals. The clone is made of lightning chakra which shocks the opponent after having physical contact. The clone can move at extreme speed and can only attack by physical contact like a punch for example.
Name: Lightning Arrow Rank: C Element: Raiton Description: The user channels his/her lightning chakra into a arrow shape that automatically lunges at the enemy at a fast speed, making a great, fast offesive move and or a great distraction. Multiples arrows can be fired if the users chakra pool permits. Every arrow shot cost a C Rank chakra amount thus drastically draining a Genin.
Name: Spark Tip Finger Rank: D Element: Raiton Description: The user creates a spark around his fingertips and shoots the spark at the enemy once. The spark isn't very powerful, it can stun an opponent for about two seconds.
Doton Release
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Name: Earth Release: Double Suicide Decapitation Technique Rank: D Element: Doton Description: A ninjutsu where the user conceals themselves underground and drags the object of their attack down into the earth, robbing them of their freedom. In addition, they can start another attack. This technique was originally used for torture, by cutting into the enemy's neck.
Name: Earth Release: Slab of Crust Rank: C Element: Doton Description: Earth Release: Slab of Crust is a basic defensive Doton release move. The user doesn't need to do any hand seals for this technique, the user just forces his chakra to force a single peice of rock slab shoots up and guards the user, or a teammate.
Name: Earth Release: Mud Pit Rank: C Element: Doton Description: The User does a few hand seals and then a large hole forms in the ground making anyone standing on the previous ground fall into the pit. The pit is filled with mud. The technique is usually used to give the user time for an attack or something of that sort. The hole is about five feet wide and ten feet deep.
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Background Information History: Aidan Kasui was born to his warm and caring parents Zao Kasui and Yumi Kasui. The two were excellent shinobi in their time. He was born into the Kasui clan of Kumogakure no Sato. He had to live in the hospital for a little while longer than the average baby. The Average weight time for a single birth is about two days but Aidan had to stay in the hospital for four days. The reason was Aidan wasn’t breathing right the first day but they weren’t sure if he was going to be able to go home the next day which is when he was supposed to. Aidan ended up still having breathing problems the next day which worried his parents. It was both of theirs first baby but they weren’t even married yet. Aidan’s father was more worried, he had always wanted a great ninja of a son and he was worried he would die. The two parents had recently been fighting and the next day Aidan’s father ran away. Aidan’s mother cried the whole next day and that made Aidan cry. He already loved his mother and felt her pain. Aidan went home the next day after they put enough air into his lungs and he could breathe properly.
Aidan learned to survive without a father figure; he also learned to appreciate what he had. Aidan grew up wanting to be a ninja and be the best ninja he could be. Aidan’s mother bought him dull kunais so he could practice with them before he could join the academy. Aidan learned to aim weapons accordingly so that he wouldn’t make a mistake in battle at age seven. Aidan’s mother was a former Jounin but retired after her husband left her. Yumi started to teach Aidan a few academy jutsus but he never could perform them right.
Aidan was an excellent student at the Ninja Academy. He obeyed all the rules to make sure he wouldn’t get in trouble and get expelled. Fortunately Aidan didn’t get in any trouble at home and or at school. When the students started to train their basic ninja abilities such as Substitute Jutsu Aidan already had a basic understanding so he learned them easier. The only jutsu he had a problem with is Clone Jutsu. His clones always ended up perfect in appearance but unable to move which made the technique worthless. Aidan was mad with his disability to perform the jutsu and dropped out of school.
Aidan practiced the jutsus for the next few years so he would be an expert in those jutsus. Aidan later joined the academy after he mastered the technique. Aidan didn’t feel like going the whole semester while he knew he would pass it with ease. Aidan asked the instructors if he could just take the test the first day. They agreed and Aidan passed the test. They handed him his headband and Aidan walked off proud to be a genin that day.
Role-Play Sample:
This is a mininum of how I rp by myself in alone topics Aidan was in one of the many training fields. Aidan threw a kunai at a tree where Aidan had pulled the bark off so he had a specific target. Aidan ran over to the tree and then pulled it out, and leaped backwards. Aidan dropped the kunai to the ground so he would pick it up later. Aidan pulled out three shuriken and hit three logs. Aidan darted over to the first log, yanked the shuriken out and then did the same process with the other logs. Aidan jogged backwards and then slid into a stance planting his feet beneath the ground. Aidan looked at the shuriken in his hands; Aidan put one of them in his right hand and then put the two others in his left hand.
Aidan slid the shuriken in his weapon holder but he dropped one making a clanging sound when it landed on the kunai that was laid down. That reminded him that he needed to pick the kunai up too. Aidan bent down and picked the weapons up and put them in his weapon holder with the rest of the shuriken. Aidan leaped backwards putting more space in-between the training log and him. Aidan made a tiger seal and then said, ‘Water Release: Bullet! ‘A dense water ball shot out and then gravity made it stronger; when it hit the log it snapped it in half. Aidan slid to the right so he was perfectly aligned with another log. Aidan made the following hand signs to prepare for a Fire Release jutsu, Snake, Ram, Monkey, Boar, Horse, and Tiger. Aidan made a ring with his thumb and index finger and blew out thus creating a orb of fire. The orb of fire hit the log and Aidan watched it burn to ashes. ‘Alright that is pretty much mastering those two techniques, now for the others. Aidan put his hands out facing two other logs, he made a few hand signs and then two gusts of wind go toward the logs in such strength that they are split into two logs, thus having four logs laying on the ground. Aidan took a sidestep and focused on the next log, he made another chain of hand signs and then the ground surrounding the log spiraled in on itself and the ground swallowed the log and buried it underground. Aidan focused energy inside his body, in his lungs and then condensed it into water and shot it out in the form of a dense water ball, the water ball shot at such speed that it completely destroyed the log. ‘ Alright that raps up all of the jutsus that I know! ‘
Then a small messenger dragon came flying by. Aidan immediately knew what this was… a dragon sent from his uncle Ichiro! The dragon dove onto a tree and then dropped two scrolls. The scrolls landed and one dropped and exploded in smoke, but it didn’t explode but it opened automatically after the smoke cleared. That meant to read that one first, Aidan walked over to the scroll and picked it up from the top to begin to reading it. Aidan read aloud, ‘ Dear nephew Aidan, how is it going in Konohagakure. It is going good here in Kumogakure, I just wanted to keep in touch with you. And if you are wondering what this other scroll is, then here is your answer Part 1 of the scroll is telling you how to learn a technique called Rasengan and the second is a summoning contract. Message me back! ‘ Aidan smiled and then thought about his family! Aidan gulped, he had to talk to his father through mediation..
Aidan sat down and closed his eyes, he was a little frightened about meeting his father for the first time. Aidan fell in peace as he heard a woman scream, most likely from being killed or unwanted sex. Aidan fell in peace because of his father being the bijuu of evil and all things frightening pretty much. Everything went black and then Aidan was in front of an extra large jail cell. Aidan felt intimidated by the cell and he felt tons of evil from the cell. ‘ Father it is I Aidan! ‘ Aidan bowed to the cell knowing his father was in there. Aidan looked up and then he saw sixteen crimson snake like eyes looking down on Aidan. ‘ Son it is I Yamata no Orochi. It has been a while, you have grown like your mother. She always grew up fast. So I noticed that you were growing strong in power and I felt that you were with another demon child. Who was it.. ‘ Yamata said with a scowl ‘ It was Keitaro Uchia, son of Kyubbi father. ‘ Aidan said looking down in shame. ‘ A Kyubbi child! He was the only one who defeated me way back then, is he stronger then you son? ‘ Aidan looked back up and said, ‘ Not last time we trained together, he is on my squad but he could have gained another tail to make him equal with me. ‘ Aidan said with another sad look upon his face.
Yamata make a siiss sound like a snake naturally does, ‘Well he will not from now on son. I am transferring some of my power to you to give you more power and another tail. Well stay in touch with me son. Tell me how your training does, I hope to see you again son. Just to let you know, even though I am all that is evil in our world I have a heart and I love you son. ‘With that Aidan opened his eyes and he was back in the shinobi world. Aidan already felt even more powerful. He realized that the second scroll was still laying on the ground. He went over to pick it up and then he rolled the first scroll up and returned to the village. ‘ Well maybe father isn’t as intimidating as I thought. ‘
Last edited by Aidan Hougaku on Mon 20 Dec 2010, 5:14 am; edited 23 times in total |
| | | Vegapunk
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Mon 13 Dec 2010, 10:03 am | |
| From what I see here this isn't a Jounin level application. Though the RP sample is adequite the actual application itself is at least genin level as of now.
- Appearance to short - Personality to short - Still have filler text on application - Next to no jutsu other than academy - History is very brief - Clan isn't very well created.
Sorry but denied for Jounin in Kumo. Though you can either try for another village or rank yourself down accordingly.
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| | | Aidan
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Mon 13 Dec 2010, 11:49 pm | |
| Haha Alright, I felt lazy so can I try again or I start all over? |
| | | Vegapunk
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Tue 14 Dec 2010, 2:16 am | |
| Sure, you can start over again if you like. But make sure it is your best work from now on! Up & up from here! ^^ |
| | | Aidan
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 3:03 am | |
| Finish Bump |
| | | John
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 4:15 am | |
| EDIT:
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- Name: Lightning Arrow
Rank: D Element: Raiton Description: The user channels his/her lightning chakra into a arrow shape that automatically lunges at the enemy in a extreme speed, making a great, fast offesive move and or a great distraction. Multiples arrows can be fired if the users chakra pool permits. Up this to C rank and remove 'extreme' speed. It's not going to be extremely fast at such a low rank. Also, add in that each time a new arrow is shot, it takes another C rank amount of chakra. Therefore using this technique too many times would drastically drain a Genin's chakra.
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- Name: Spark Tip Finger
Rank: D Element: Raiton Description: The user creates sparks around his fingertips and shoots them rapidly at the enemy. The sparks are quite powerful for a D Rank but can easily be showed up also. The sparks can be shot more then once per time it is used, for a regular use it can be shot twice before using the technique again.
What do you mean when you say the sparks are quite powerful? For D rank, it would have to be a really small stun for a second or two, not enough to really damage the opponent, but rather disorient them for a moment.
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- Name: Static Box
Rank: D Element: Raiton Description: The user makes a lightning tainted box in his/her hand, it will be thrown and grow bigger in size. The box is like a cage but the metal is lightning and if hit directly could do some fatal damage to the enemy. Again, too overpowered for a Genin. I'd say this technique would be about B rank, not D. Please remove. |
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 5:24 am | |
| Fixed |
| | | John
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 5:35 am | |
| - Quote :
- Name: Earth Release: Slab of Crust
Rank: D Element: Doton Description: Earth Release: Slab of Crust is a basic defensive Doton release move. The user doesn't need to do any hand seals for this technique, the user just forces his chakra to force a single peice of rock slab shoots up and guards the user, or a teammate. Make this C-rank.
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- Name: Earth Release: Mud Pit
Rank: D Element: Doton Description: The User does a few hand seals and then a large hole forms in the ground making anyone standing on the previous ground fall into the pit. The pit is filled with mud. The technique is usually used to give the user time for an attack or something of that sort. How wide/deep is the hole exactly?
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 5:39 am | |
| * Fixed
About Five Feet Wide and Ten Feet Deep, I just edited it into it. |
| | | John
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 5:41 am | |
| I'm gonna say make Mud Pit C rank too. & you realize that at ten feet deep, any ninja could probably jump right out of it no problem? lol... |
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 5:48 am | |
| Yea and Fixed |
| | | John
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 5:52 am | |
| Take out 'can do damage' and replace it with, 'can stun an opponent for about two seconds' for Spark Tip Finger. |
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 5:54 am | |
| lol Yea Fixed and I must seem like an newb. |
| | | John
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 6:04 am | |
| - Quote :
- Name: Spark Tip Finger
Rank: D Element: Raiton Description: The user creates sparks around his fingertips and shoots them rapidly at the enemy. The sparks aren't very powerful can stun an opponent for about two seconds. The sparks can be shot more then once per time it is used, for a regular use it can be shot twice before using the technique again. Remove the bolded part. Edit it so he can only shoot one spark at time. Each spark will take a D rank amount of chakra so this technique isn't overused. |
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 6:08 am | |
| Fixed |
| | | John
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 6:29 am | |
| You still didn't edit it to say he can only shoot one spark. |
| | | Aidan
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 6:35 am | |
| Fixed |
| | | John
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 7:23 am | |
| Not from what I can see...? It's exactly the same as before. |
| | | Aidan
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 3:41 pm | |
| - Quote :
- Name: Spark Tip Finger
Rank: D Element: Raiton Description: The user creates sparks around his fingertips and shoots the sparks at the enemy once. The sparks aren't very powerful can stun an opponent for about two seconds. Thats what I see. |
| | | John
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Sat 18 Dec 2010, 8:49 pm | |
| Um... exactly. It still says 'the user creates sparks around his fingertips and shoots the sparks at the enemy once' I see that you added in 'once' but you still have 'sparks' which is plural. Change this to 'the user creates a spark around his fingertips and shoots the spark at the enemy. This spark isn't very powerful, but can stun an opponent for about one or two seconds'. |
| | | Aidan
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Mon 20 Dec 2010, 5:15 am | |
| Oh sorry my thought was that one spark wouldn't be strong enough but I fixed it. |
| | | John
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Mon 20 Dec 2010, 5:25 am | |
| I suppose I find this satisfactory now.
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| Subject: Re: Kasui, Aidan [Kumo Genin] Wed 19 Jan 2011, 4:13 am | |
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