Nara, Shikaiteki [Konoha Genin]

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Nara, Shikaiteki.

THE INFO.

Name: Nara, Shikaiteki (literal combination of Shika(deer) and Kaiteki(pleasant)
Nickname: Shikai, Kai
Age: 13
Gender: male
Appearance:

Appearing in different clothes, Shikaiteki wears a grey T-Shirt and black shorts. The symbol of the Nara clan appears on the back of his T-shirt stitched in. His shorts have two pockets on each side, and he normally wears a pouch full of Shuriken on his right leg. When it's cold out he has a long sleeve version of his shirt and pants that are similar to his shorts.

When his hair is down, it's long and sometimes gets in his face with long bangs that extend to his lower cheek. When his hair is tied, it is still long enough to extend down to his neck. His eyes are brown, his skin color is an average hue, and he isn't very tall at 5'3". He weighs 100 lbs. He has a small built with enough muscle to run as fast as an average shinobi. His body isn't toned, but he isn't fat. He is fairly frail looking to anyone who observes his muscles.

Personality:

Shikaiteki is very timid; he isn't one to speak out without reason. He isn't violent either, making him less likely to spar or show the will to kill. His non violent attitude comes from his father, who was a very lazy person. Although Shikaiteki has similar qualities he is a hard worker when he needs to be. He behaves like most children, with a bright attitude and curiosity to random things. When it comes down to his beliefs his nindo is the best way to explain his siding. He is much more probable to protect a friend than run away. He isn't an energetic person in any way, and he prefers to remain average and normal to people. Shikaiteki is a child hidden in his own secrets; he keeps people at a certain distance from him self. He is very quiet and observing to everything around him; perception is one of his better qualities. Unlike his mother, he is quick to walk away from a fight even a challenge.

shiakiteki sees himself as a normal person with normal goals to possibly rase a family, or possibly be alone all his life. He hasn't thought much of his father's speech to him about what was important, but he considers his friends as the most important things in life. He may appear lazy to other people, but what's happening on the inside is different than what he gives.

Clan: Nara
Nindō:
To do what's right in my own eyes, and to protect others when they need me the most.

THE NINJA.

Origin: Konohagakure no Sato
Affiliation: Konohagakure no Sato
Rank: Genin
Specialties: Ninjutsu, Genjutsu
Elemental Affinities: Wind, Earth
Combat Style:
A basic view of Shiakiteki's combat style is that he stays back while others are infront of him. The point of staying back is to avoid injury aswell as casting genjutsu or clan jutsu on targets his allies are not able to fight. He's laid back while fighting with allies, but in important fights he makes sure to give it his all. His form of fighting can be compared to teh leader position that deals with seeing the bigger picture during the fight aswell as having opertunities to retreat if needed.
Special Characteristics:

Name: Clan Prodigy
Rank: C
Type: Chakra Based
Physical Requirements: N/A
Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic.
Description: A trait given to ninja who posses a innate talent for the manipulation of clan based techniques and has trained thoroughly to improve their skill. Their power over the clans abilities has become so considerable that the ninja is now considered a young prodigy by the clan elders. Because of this, the user's clan based attacks are 20% more destructive with their increased power and size.

THE BACKGROUND.

History:
-Shikaiteki was born into the Nara clan, with no siblings, but only a father and mother. He was taught to learn and think before acting. His parents were his role models especially his father, who he took after most. When he was old enough to talk he preferred his father to tuck him in. In his early years he was more outstanding and outgoing. In those early years, Shikai had was open to the world and in his unmatured eyes, it was an astounding place full of new places to explore.

-When he entered the leaf academy he felt intimidated by the other students.As he learned how to use chakra, the other students would learn faster. Shikaiteki was lazy in his studies, and compared to the other students he was a failure with no life. Shikaiteki's ideas of teh world changed rom there; he wasn't use to other kids his age. he became antisocial, and eventually his personality started to loos the energy he once had as a young child.

-As his years in the academy Passed he started to become less outgoing and felt alone more than before. He had friends, but he kept a distance between them and him. When it came time to graduate from the academy, he passed with one of the lowest grades. Being at the pinicle of un-outgoing personality, He didn't want to make an impression on the world or his fellow shinobi; he didn't care about reputation or titles, to him the world was just a place full of people who cared or didn't care. Nothing mattered at that point.

-As a genin Shikaiteki wasn't placed into a squad, instead he would have to train his techniques -before he would do any good in a team. After a long time, Shikaiteki was use to training alone. It was the best way for him to grow, but he wasn't use to team work. Being on of his major flaws, Shikaiteki seeks to improve himself. His father and mother decisded it was high time Shikaiteki changed his view of people and himself. Forcing to get out of the hosue and train, his father gave him a talk about what really mattered. he hasn't taken it to heart, yet, but Shikai is beginning to understand what is important in his life.

Roleplay Sample:
Bright and cheery the morning air was tinted in the smell of due. Shikaiteki's alarm clock was beeping softly then as he woke up the sound became the dominating noise. His hand reached for the button and when it shut off, his room felt calm. Golden and piercing, the sun like crept through his window filing the room with light. His right leg bent so that his knee was at his chin. He sat up against his leg waiting for the day to turn around so he could sleep further into his calm rest.

"Shikaiteki, are you up?" His mother called from outside his room.

"Yes...." He replied half awake.

"Then get out her and eat your breakfast; it's becoming cold." She slid the door open. "For once your father made it. It's tasty." Shikaiteki stood up and walked in his sleep wear to the smell of food. It does smell tasty. I wonder what the occasion is; Dad never makes food. As he left his room the smell became greater and soon it was all he could smell.

"AYEEEEEE!" A burst of fire went off in the kitchen. Shikai wasn't surprised it would happen; his father was often the kind of man that wasn't able to do anything without it catching fire. Shikai's head turned to peek in the kitchen. The stove was on fire with his parents tending to it with the sink being rushed with cup being filed to pour on the flame. "WATCH WHAT YOU'RE COOKING, HONEY!"

"SORRY DEAR, IT'S JUST THAT I'VE NEVER COOKED BEFORE!" the both of them carried on a conversation with bickering and complain about the other's duties. Shikaiteki walked away from the kitchen and into the living room. He sat on the couch half awake and waited for the sound of yelling to stop. Mom's a lion, Dad's a chew toy.

THE ARSENAL.

Jutsu, Weaponry, Items etc.
Basic Jutsu

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Clan Jutsu

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Genjutsu

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Ninjustu

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Okay, first of all, your history needs work. Luckily there's a new system where you can write your history in point form, so in about 2-4 sentences, write out the important parts of your character's background. I suggest looking at other profiles first to get some examples.

For personality and appearance, again I suggest looking at approved applications and making the appropriate adjustments.

I notice you have no jutsu outside the basic stuff and the clan jutsu. You can create your own so long as they follow the proper guidelines set up by the forum, or look up other canon jutsu you can use so long as they fall under your specialties/elements/level, etc.

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Hey Deadalus, I changed those things you asked me to from the chat box.

Age : 31 Posts : 208

Quote :: wears a pouch full of Shuriken on her right leg

Though I'm not too nitpicky about grammar, this was sort of confusing at first so please edit.

Even though you did jot down important parts of your character's life, there's very little detail in any of them so you need to add more depth to them.

Quote :: Name: Small Break through
Rank: D
Type: ninjutsu
Range: 5m
Element: wind
Description: the user flashes wind chakra at their feet and projects them self up into the air about 5 feet to avoid a melee attack. This ill through a foe back if he or she is within 5 feet of the user. This takes three hand seals.
Chakra Cost: 7

In order to generate enough Fuuton to support the human body like that, you'd need at least a C rank amount of chakra for this jutsu

Quote :: Name: Projectile Assistance technique
Rank: D
Type:ninjutsu
Range: 10m
Element: wind
Description: This technique allows the user to throw a group of projectiles all at once. The user may use several kunai instead of a normal three or four. This takes three hand seals.
Chakra Cost: 7

I fail to see what this jutsu has to do with Fuuton at all.

Quote :: Name: Emotion Manipulation genjutsu
Rank: C
Type: genjutsu
Range: 20m
Element: N/A
Description: This creates the feeling of guilt in the target. That guilt is enough to bring back old memories and emotionally stun people. Criminals are easy to affect because the genjutsu has alot of mental material to manipulate. Getting over that guilt isn't exactly easy, once the emotion starts it infects the mind like poison bringing back thoughts without mercy. This stuns a target for a post and the target cannot injure the user because the emotion of guilt will make them second guess for that post. Eye contact must be made. This takes five hand seals.
Chakra Cost: 8

From what Im reading from this jutsu, the basis works that the target will feel guilty for whatever reason and will be stunned and won't attack the user. My question is that how Genjutsu in itself would effect something like guilt if Genjutsu focuses around the 5 senses (Sight, Hearing, Taste, Touch, & Smell)?

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Jutsu have been edited, the genjutsu I removed, although a small argument can take place for emotional genjutu. For example the anime encounter of Sai and Sasuke where genjutsu alone intimidate Sai to fell fear. I don't want to go into that and I'd prefer to get my character done as fast as I can so that I may roleplay here.

For history, my lack of skill in writing back story shows. I have added more personal detail into Shikaiteki's personality in his history, I hope that "adds more depth to them."

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Projectile Assistance technique ~ Something I forgot to mention but how exactly does the jutsu work? I mean what makes it function to the point of allowing additional projectiles to be thrown

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aAright it exlains it out.

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Projectile Assistance technique ~ I suggest you make a fuuton[Wind] technique and put in the description that the user expels a few wind projectiles in the form of kunai/shurikens etc. Otherwise the jutsu will seem like a weaponry technique and you don't have the specialty or will seem rathers weird that you carry several tiny tiny kunai in your mouth. .-.

As for appearance, I suggest you add at least one more paragraphs. Same for personality.

Combat Style: The same, give at least a good paragraph as to how your character fights in RP.

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._. is that anywhere near what you're asking?

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Your picture poor, it shows two characters and assuming you're the one of the right, you can do heaps better with finding an image, especially considering its a Bleach character.

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No, I cannot; young Byakuya isn't anywhere and I suppose I should specify it is Byakuya.

Age : 28 Posts : 173

* So, you're the one on the left? In which case, Google Images can help you find a LOT of younger looking pictures for specific anime characters, which might help you.

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this any better?

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You have eighteen jutsu, as a Genin we only permit fifteen to start, this doesn't count Academy Jutsu, but even in saying this all your Academy and Clan Jutsu are not coded properly, certain things need to be bolded, this is why we have them in coding format, please fix this.

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back down to 15 and coding fixed

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- Sorry, but just with your wind projectile technique if you could outline how many projectiles you can create per post of this technique (I would say around 3) then you are done.

1/2

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ok. 3 wind projectiles

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2/2 Approved

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Archived.