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Name: Kessho, Denaya
Official Grading: 9/20
Unofficial Grading: 5/20
Comments: Alright, look, heres the cheese. You've been RPing here for quite awhile now and have been in quite a few different topics. Regardless, I'm seeing very little improvement or effort in these posts. Yes, your posts are short sweet and to the point, and actually have content as far as action goes. But thats just a skeleton of the post really. It made your character interesting, but unengaging. Potential was lost here. Soul made these good sized posts, and compared to them, yours were scrawny. No offence but I'm wondering if your really trying here. Now, that aside, I'm not dissing you here. As a matter of fact, I think you did good in responding to the environment and what Soul did in the little time you did it. It was good, but it was bare. Your grammar and spelling were pretty good though, and I didn't see many errors, so thats good too. Personally I would give you a lower grade as an incentive to start working harder, but really, I can only knock off so many points because of lack of detail. I seriously hope you pick up the pace before you hit A or S rank though.

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Name: Kinzoku, Ayame
Official Grading: 13/20
Unofficial Grading: 16/20
Comments: Firstly, this was a short topic. This is understandable though considering the actual point of it to begin with. I would like to say good job on responding to Denaya's posts with fleshed out posts that not only responded to what Denaya did, but also including some inflection on Ayame within those responses. You were self-aware, and rather detailed about it. This allowed the reader to really see into Ayame in a way that was good. Back to the point of the topic. This topic really turned into a discussion about Gurentai more than anything else. Your character answered the questions asked rather well, turning the topic into a Q&A of sorts, which provides good information about the group to anyone else reading it. Not only that, but your character responded to the bombardment of questions in a very humanistic and realistic way. Good. Job. However, other than that, the length, while good, could have been better. For what it was however, you did good, I'm proud. Other than that, a few spelling errors here and there as well as punctuation errors were found, but that didn't take away from the topic. I would like to give you a higher score for this, but the points mentioned above, while understandable, have to bring it down a bit. Keep it up!

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