Custom Aburame Techniques

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Name: Kyodai na bagu no kobushi - Giant Bug Fist
Rank: C (can change dependant upon size)
Element: N/A
Description: Forming many Screw-Worm Flies into one to form a huge bug fist. Law then commands the fist on where and how to strike its oppenent! depending upon the size of the fist depends on the amount of chakra that is drained upon creation

Name: Bagudorein - Bug Drain
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: Law starts by releasing specific Female bugs to swarm its enemy, upon overwhelming its oppenent an them not knowing the female bug will Dive into an open flesh wound hatching other female eggs it is carry which then burrow into the enemies Chakra nodes! upon arival at the chakra node its target will start to lose chakra an will become weaker as time goes by damaging the chakra nodes from with-in the body!

Name: Niku no kyōen - Flesh Feast
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: Law starts by releasing specific Female bugs to swarm its enemy, upon overwhelming its opponent an them not knowing the female bug will Dive into an open flesh wound hatching male eggs inside of the would which then feast upon the flesh of its oppenent within. although this move is not highly damaging to start, it causes problems for its target as movements start to hurt them from damage to muscles an tissue, and if not treated within over a week could cause permanent damage aswell as death!

Name: Bagu-gun - Bug Swarm
Rank: D
Element: N/A
Description: Law commands his Bugs to fly into a massive swarm and Due to the sound from the huge swarm hearing is Disturbed, the Smell from the bug that have feasted up the flesh of people causes a a disgusting smell in the air stoping all chance of smelling, and the shear massive number of insects causes all vision to be reduced massively, and upon messing up all sense makes it easy for Law to esacape a arqued situation without being tracked or do what ever is needed at the time of use!

Name: Rabu-ha - Larve wave
Rank: C (can change dependant upon size)
Element: N/A
Description: Open Vomiting a Numerous amount of Larve Stage Screw-worms from his mouth they begin to build into a large wave infront of the user, which will then collapse an go rushing towards its oppenent with a high Force an rate of speed. Upon on contact with the oppenent the wave will either overwhelm the oppenent or just start by knocking them from there feet before they covering them.

Name: Gyakuryū san ōto - Regurgitated Acid Vomit
Rank: D
Element: Water
Description: Law begins coughing an then releases a spurt of regurgitated vomit from his mouth hitting whatever is within the close vercinity of Law this vomit will then slowly begin to dissolve whatever it touchs, if used on a person, it will slowly burn the skin it touchs. If it lands on a item for example a sword it will slowly burn away weakening the blade and eventually leaving no trace that the blade exsisted

let me know of anything that would need changing... Smile

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Law wrote:: Name: Kyodai na bagu no kobushi - Giant Bug Fist
Rank: C (can change dependant upon size)
Element: N/A
Description: Forming many Screw-Worm Flies into one to form a huge bug fist. Law then commands the fist on where and how to strike its oppenent! depending upon the size of the fist depends on the amount of chakra that is drained upon creation

Instead of stating it can change depending on size, you need to specify what rank it can go too. Example C-A. Then in your description you need to specify how large each rank can do, but at Genin you will not be able to go past C rank.

Law wrote:: Name: Bagudorein - Bug Drain
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: Law starts by releasing specific Female bugs to swarm its enemy, upon overwhelming its oppenent an them not knowing the female bug will Dive into an open flesh wound hatching other female eggs it is carry which then burrow into the enemies Chakra nodes! upon arrival at the chakra node its target will start to lose chakra an will become weaker as time goes by damaging the chakra nodes from with-in the body!

Please state how many posts it takes for the eggs to hatch and how many eggs each female insect can lay.

Law wrote:: Name: Niku no kyōen - Flesh Feast
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: Law starts by releasing specific Female bugs to swarm its enemy, upon overwhelming its opponent an them not knowing the female bug will Dive into an open flesh wound hatching male eggs inside of the would which then feast upon the flesh of its oppenent within. although this move is not highly damaging to start, it causes problems for its target as movements start to hurt them from damage to muscles an tissue, and if not treated within over a week could cause permanent damage aswell as death!

Please state how many posts it takes for the eggs to hatch and how many eggs each female insect can lay and how much damage can occur per post/day.

Law wrote:: Name: Bagu-gun - Bug Swarm
Rank: D
Element: N/A
Description: Law commands his Bugs to fly into a massive swarm and Due to the sound from the huge swarm hearing is Disturbed, the Smell from the bug that have feasted up the flesh of people causes a a disgusting smell in the air stoping all chance of smelling, and the shear massive number of insects causes all vision to be reduced massively, and upon messing up all sense makes it easy for Law to escape a arqued situation without being tracked or do what ever is needed at the time of use!

Please note that considering it's only a D-ranked it will not be able to make you undetectable with advanced sensory jutsu or doujutsu. To be honest, I'd suggest you remove this Jutsu.

Law wrote:: Name: Rabu-ha - Larve wave
Rank: C (can change dependant upon size)
Element: N/A
Description: Open Vomiting a Numerous amount of Larve Stage Screw-worms from his mouth they begin to build into a large wave infront of the user, which will then collapse an go rushing towards its oppenent with a high Force an rate of speed. Upon on contact with the oppenent the wave will either overwhelm the oppenent or just start by knocking them from there feet before they covering them.

Instead of stating it can change depending on size, you need to specify what rank it can go too. Example C-A. Then in your description you need to specify how large each rank can do, but at Genin you will not be able to go past C rank. Also, you wouldn't be vomiting up bugs, they can exit via holes in your body, little holes, such as ones on your neck designed for the bugs to enter and exit. Also, the idea of making a massive pile of them only to collapse on your opponent is a bad idea, you would be vulnerable for a long time, while you built up this hill pile of bugs and then as they collapsed, you'd have to note that a shinobi isn't going to stand there with their finger up their nose while you prepare a jutsu that would take about 4 posts. I'd suggest removing this too.

Law wrote:: Name: Gyakuryū san ōto - Regurgitated Acid Vomit
Rank: D
Element: Water
Description: Law begins coughing an then releases a spurt of regurgitated vomit from his mouth hitting whatever is within the close vercinity of Law this vomit will then slowly begin to dissolve whatever it touchs, if used on a person, it will slowly burn the skin it touchs. If it lands on a item for example a sword it will slowly burn away weakening the blade and eventually leaving no trace that the blade exsisted

This sounds like Acid Mist, an ability used by the Canon Mizukage, I suggest moving it.

~Please fix all the spelling mistakes because it makes it difficult to understand some of the descriptions. Try correcting the grammar too and implementing capital letters where they are needed.

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Are you going to finish this and edit? If not, I must archive this.