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PostSubject: The Masks of Power (FINISHED) The Masks of Power (FINISHED) EmptyTue 23 Feb 2010, 12:31 am


A few things to note.

1. Ok, I would advise people to notice the extreme costs that come with these items, as the chakra cost is high for any ninja of any rank, even the masks whose powers are not that great. I would ask the Nazi staff memebrs such as adam (still love ya but its true) to either not even look at this, or keep the extreme costs and stipulations that go along with these masks in mind when modding them.
2. Hisotry is not required for this app, though I know most mods, and I agree, will need some history behind it. I daresay this will be explained in the training topic which is going to add up to more then 10,000 words.
3. These things are chakra whores

Commandments of the Masks.

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Shizu's Set (Lee)

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Kou's Set (Caranore)

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Kajis Set (Kaji)


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Chishio's Mask (Allie)

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Taku's List (Senkou)

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PostSubject: Re: The Masks of Power (FINISHED) The Masks of Power (FINISHED) EmptyTue 23 Feb 2010, 2:36 pm

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PostSubject: Re: The Masks of Power (FINISHED) The Masks of Power (FINISHED) EmptyTue 23 Feb 2010, 10:26 pm

I had my review of this topic up but it got wiped, so I'll have to retype all of that expansive post. Your 'Nazi' review is under way.
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PostSubject: Re: The Masks of Power (FINISHED) The Masks of Power (FINISHED) EmptySat 27 Feb 2010, 7:51 pm

Your commandments are confusing, to say the least, and could be better expressed in paragraphs with a coherent flow, as is its very difficult to read and understand especially since you repeat information, elaborate and previous information in other steps, or just plain backtrack to something you mentioned already. Coherency is a nifty feature.

Also, no to the one rank higher or masks, there is no reason whatsoever, remove that.

Kakama+Pakari: Way too much of an increase, 2.5x anything isn't very likely to be approved. Especially at its rank, there is no way that I could approve this as it is without some serious nerfing or unless I missed something severe.

Huna: I'm going to have to ask for a rank increase, because Camoflauge Concealment is A Rank and does the same thing except you've added to this mask the ability to remove the sound of foosteps. First off, you need a method, how does it do this? Second off, you need to spend more chakra on it because the jutsu that does this is A Rank.

Calix: 'Physical fatigue' does not include chakra, correct?

Getaka: This cannot be used on NPC's, nor may it 'overcap' someone's chakra, please be aware of this limitations and write them into the mask accordingly so they are clearly understood.

Rau: Decoding is a no, thats way OP to just decode somebody's hard work with a D Rank mask, no way. Also, spoken code would be included in that and that makes it even more OP so that effect has to be completely removed. Talking to animals is more of a KKG thing so that has to go as well. Basically I can allow you interpret other languages, even though this will rarely occur, but everything else is a no go so its probably best to just remove this completely.

Elda: Its just OP, like period. You can't hide from it, it covers 100m area, its C Rank, and it lasts for 10 posts. Denied.

Arthron: D Rank drain per post and I'll approve of this.

Pehkui: I could go into details for two paragraphs about why this is OP but I'll summarize it as impossible to refine without breaking the initial purpose, thus this mask is denied. If you're really curious I'll detail it but I don't want to waste time explaining if its not needed.

Shelek: You meant 'silence' right? You typo'd 'scilence' up there, should fix that...anyhow, this is OP, you look at them and they're deaf and mute. Seriously, I shouldn't have to say anything else on it...

Sanok: Sounds way to usable for godmodding, I want some restrictions placed on this thing about how well you can aim it because as it is, this is just OP for the fact that its very likely for godmod.

Asva: When I first checked this I had three paragraphs about this mask, now I don't feel like rewriting it. Its OP, re-read your description and maybe you'll catch some of the OP-ness oozing off this mask. Denied.

Hazumi: How does this work? Because gravity manipulation is a no, and kinetic energy is already taken, so how do you cause projectiles to rebound? Also, you cannot repel everything with this mask, that makes it super da' frickin' duper OP, some serious limits are needed.

Butai: You say you cant use KKG elements and then say you can use Sand? No, thats a contradiction of terms and this mask in of itself is already questionably OP. I would allow base elements to be reduced, but I would not permit advanced elements or KKG elements of any sort, so thats going to have to be remove regardless. Also, how does it reduce cost?

Miru: Levitation is a KKG ability for a current clan up for approval, denied.

Suletu: If someone doesn't want to hear you, can they tune you out? If so, how?

Komaru: Mind control is Yamanaka, denied.

Matatu: More suited to a KKG, also denied.

Kinen: Needs more limits and details, I will not have you abusing this mask because certain scenarios arent expressly covered so cover them all as best you can if you want this to be approved.

Iden: How fast do you move?

Kualsi: Bar this from use in any combat topic, I don't want somebody running in with this mask, grabbing a combatant, and then running off. Thats completely unfair to the other fighter and OP.

Pouk: You can't use jutsu you're not physically capable of using, edit that in.

Douka: If you want this mask you're going to have to invest TONS more detail into this to match my specifications and I really don't believe you want to devote all that time to this mask. I would just remove it unless you're willing to add and explain everything I detail to my satisfaction.

Ignika + Tryna: I'll take these to the Staff room, they're more appropriate to be looked at there due to their effects.
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