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PostSubject: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptyWed 10 Aug 2011, 12:41 pm

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TAKAHASHI, GANTA.

THE INFO.

Name: Ganta Takahashi

Nickname: Ganta

Age: 15

Gender: Male

Appearance: Ganta is 6ft, and weighs in at 180lbs. He has black hair shaggy hair which hangs down almost past his eyes. His eyes are black, and right under his right eye is a cut from a falling tree branch. He also has one on the lower left corner of his lips, but is very small and almost invisible. His skin is pretty soft which is unusual for some guys, and is a bit pale. On his back he has a scar which runs from his right shoulder to his left hip. He doesn't even know how he got that one so he thinks it was from when he was younger. He has a number of different clothing that he wears, the most common one being the black shirt with the Uzimaki symbol on the back. Along with black pants, and open toe sandals. He also has a black shirt with just two buttons which he wears with his black pants sometimes to. He sometimes wear's black pants, a grey undershirt with a white jacket over it. The most common way he wears that though is the jacket around his waste. His last suit is a dark green jump suit with black lines on it, and the hidden leaf village symbol on it.

Personality: He is usually calm and silent around others he doesn't know to well. When it's a friend he can become very nice and pretty talkative. He is funny, and especially loves little children. Ganta try's to be a happy person, but doesn't always succeeds at this. At times he can have a very blank expression, like one of someone who doesn't care about anything or anyone. This happens when he see's little kids and their family's together reminding him that he has no real family. In a way you can say he's a bit unstable, but most wouldn't know since he only went off one time in front of everyone. He doesn't go off easily, but when the pressure builds up he has no choice but to explode. This happens when others arn't listening to their superior's, or if someone says the wrong things about him.

Clan: Takahashi Clan

Nindō: Never give up, and use any means to protect what you hold dear.

THE NINJA.

Origin: Hidden Leaf Village.

Affiliation: Hidden Leaf Village.

Rank: Genin

Specialties: Medical Ninja, Taijustu

Elemental Affinities: Lightning, Fire.

Combat Style: Ganta isn't much of a fighter at all, but he is very skilled at it. Taijustu is one of his strong points, and though he is good at it he would rather not fight head to head in a battle. He uses medical justu to try and mess with their movements, and chakra lines. He also uses poison on his weapons, and would rather fight as back up than be the one to be up in the front lines. He would rather fight hiden in an allies ninjustu or his own keeping his movements hidden than to have his movements seen. He hates having to waste to much energy, and chakra in a battle, and likes to end them fast.

Special Characteristics:Speed
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Immunity
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THE BACKGROUND.

History: Ganta is like most other normal teens his age, or almost. He has a job, and he has friends. He has a hobby, and is into the opposite gender. The only thing he doesn't have is memmory's from when he was younger than ten. It was as if his entire first ten years were taken away from him. Most people memory starts around three years old but for him it didn't start when he was ten. Doctor's didn't see why he had no memory from when he was ten and younger they think it was some kind of shutdown and that he didn't want to remember his first couple of years. Three years later he learned he was from the Takahashi Clan when he was in the middle of training, and he pushed himself past his limit. That's when his doujustu activated, and discovered his abilities. He then went to some of the clans members to figure out if they knew why he didn't remember the first ten years of his life. None knew about him or even heard his name mentioned in the clan. He is still trying to figure out his origins, and remember who exactly is he. Lately however he's been starting to care less about who he really is and more about who he will become. The two years following he was more focussed on protecting what he believed in, and becoming strong enough to do that. He wanted to become strong enough to protect the village and the people inside it.

Though he can be calm and nice though, he does happen to have a dark side. It's not entirely easy to anger him, and have him snap in front of people due to him usually holding it in, but his temper is like a gyeser. It builds up until there is to much pressure and it explodes. One time in school when he was angry with the class for them not listening to the teacher and being to loud he heard someone saying the wrong words. They were talking about him behin his back so he snapped. He attacked them, and put them in the hospital for two weeks.

Roleplay Sample: Ganta sat on the edge of a cliff as the sun began to go down. He was wearing his black shirt with the Uzimaki symbol on the back. He had on his black pants, and open toe sandals with a butt bag filled with standard ninja tools. He also had a Gas Mask sitting on top of his head, and a Buckler Shield on his back. Behind him thirty meters was a forest which lead to the road into the Hidden Leaf village. And below him was the Hidden Leaf Village itself, about two miles away. He had been looking over the village trying to remember who he was, and where he came from. Was he even from this village? And where were his parents? He lived alone so he didn't know anything about his parents. "I should get back to work" he said remembering he was suppose to be on patrol. He pressed the button on his Mic to radio in, and see if anyone had spotted an enemy soldier or found a hurt civilian. "Anything new team three?" he said releasing the button.

No one responded so he tried again "Team three are you there? Respond please." Still no response came. "What's going on..." he stood up, and began to walk into the woods when a kunai suddenly appeared from the woods aimed to hit him in the head. Ganta ducked below it just enough for it to let it pass over his head. He was out in the open and had no where to run and hide. And his opponent was obviously hiding in the tree line watching him. He was certain to be gone, until they enemy felt a bit cocky, and all three of them walked into the open. They had the lightning village symbol on their headbands, and had masks that covered their face. Each of them had a short sword on their back, and looked to be about Chunin ranked. They didn't even say a word, and charged at Ganta without thinking, and giving him a chance to speak.

Ganta formed the correct handseals, and from behind him thousands of crows began to appear multiplying creating even more crows. They all flocked the shinobi blocking their view, and attacking and Ganta hid inside of the flock. 'I'll take out the middle one first' he thought to himself as he charged the middle shinobi. He took off his shield and hit the shinobi hard in the head to knock them out. He then turned around throwing it at the head of the shinobi on the rights head knocking them out to. The shield bounced off, and came back to his hand and Ganta turned around to hit the next shinobi in the head. But this one was wiser, and saw through it blocking with their sword. The crows all poofed into smoke, and Ganta hid in the tree line. The shinobi seemed to know that he hid there, and decided to burn the forest using the Fireball Justu. It had missed, but his cover was slowly being burned away. That's when Ganta took two Kunai with explosive tags attached to it and threw it at him.

He would use the explosion as a smoke screen, and also hope that it would catch the shinobi. The shinobi had used an earth style just Earth Wall to be exact to stop the explosion from reaching them. However their vision was now cut off, and Ganta quickly ran around the wall forming the correct handseals, and slamming their hand on the ground. An electrical current traveled through the ground shocking the shinobi for a brief momment. Ganta then took out a kunai with some wire, and threw it into the wall then ran around the shinobi in circles tieing them up. Not to long after other leaf shinobi appeared after seeing the explosions, smoke, and fire. Along with them came some AnBu shinobi who would then take care of what would happen to these intruders.

THE ARSENAL.


Medical Justu
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Taijustu
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Ninja Kit and Equipment
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Academy Justu
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PostSubject: Re: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptyThu 11 Aug 2011, 4:24 pm

Idk if the medical kit would count as the ninja kit.
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PostSubject: Re: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptyThu 11 Aug 2011, 4:41 pm


Hello Ganta, before this can be accepted a few things just need to be edited first.

Firstly, don't forget to properly title your topic please. It needs to go, First, Last Name [Village Rank]. Also, if the application is still a work in progress, then it will need to have a [WiP] tag written in the title as well. Your nickname, isn't exactly a nickname unfortunately. It's still just your first name, so it's better that you just leave it blank.

Your appearance and personality needs a lot of work placed into it unfortunately, it's current only two or three lines in each and for Genin we expect a minimum of a paragraph each per section. So please expand on your appearance and personality. You could talk about how you wear your clothes, how you body looks, is it tanned etc... For your personality you can expand on if you're a happy person, what makes you upset, is he always looking for a fight etc.. Just be sure to include detail in both please.

You only have one specialty listed and everyone is allowed to have two specialties, thus you are free to choose another. The same applies to your elemental affinities, you only have lightning listed right now and you are allowed a maximum of two to start with. If you only choose one then you'll be quite limited when in battle. Also expand slightly more on your combat style please, it could still use some more work.

For your history, I'd like to see at least another few sentences or a second paragraph. If you're struggling for ideas then you can talk about Birth, Academy Years and start of Genin Years. You could also resort to the Time Line method if you so wish, to which you basically bullet points part of your life.

Concerning your techniques, as you have only listed Medical Ninjutsu for your specialties, that means that you are only allowed to gain techniques that are in Medic Ninjutsu. Meaning you need to get rid of any Ninjutsu, Genjutsu, Taijutsu, Fuuinjutsu or Weaponry Jutsu. You may only learn techniques that are within your specialties and of your rank or below. So please make the according edits. You also need to get rid of a lot of those weapons, once again it's all about specialties. Just be aware, if you wish to learn Ninjutsu techniques then you need to special in Ninjutsu.
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PostSubject: Re: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptyThu 11 Aug 2011, 4:48 pm

Oh I see! So later on I can't learn any ninjustu? Also editting now.
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PostSubject: Re: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptyThu 11 Aug 2011, 5:52 pm

Eddited, hope this is better.
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PostSubject: Re: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptyThu 11 Aug 2011, 6:07 pm



Sorry Ganta, it seems that you misunderstood what I was trying to tell you. By changing the topic title, I mean that you need to edit the actual Topic Title, which is currently named 'Ganta'. So please change it to 'Takahashi, Ganta [Konoha Genin]'.

I still feel you could produce a lot more detailed work on your appearance and personality, since I'm looking at your roleplay sample, I've noticed that you've made a really detailed post and your other sections are lacking this detail. Thus, I'd like to see you place at least two or three more sentences on both of the areas before it can be approved.

Same applies to your combat style, just add another sentence or two please. Also your coding is a bit messed up on there as well, since you have a spare [spoiler] tag, so please make the appropriate edit to get rid of that.

For your arsenal, can you fix up some of the techniques and items that have been given the wrong coding. The sections such as 'Name, Rank, Description etc...' need to be highlighted in bold writing, some of them do not. Also please remove the dagger since you do not specialize in weaponry so you will not be able to use it that well. Have you also received permission from the member who created those poisons? Because if you're going to use someone else's work then you need to message the creator and seek permission before it can be approved. Lastly, the site already offers a Medic Kit so please use that one and not a custom one.
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PostSubject: Re: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptyFri 12 Aug 2011, 4:43 pm

Fixed it. If there's anything else I need to fix just tell me please ^_^. And I have permission for poisons.
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PostSubject: Re: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptyFri 12 Aug 2011, 9:31 pm


Just three small things before it can be given the thumbs up.

I've noticed that in your personality you mention a part stating how you hit a child during your Academic years, I'd include this in the history rather then the personality. I'd recommend you mention how at times he can be angered quite easily or how he does actually have a violent side. The other part I wish you to work on is to lengthen your combat style more please, you should be writing up at least two or three lines worth of detail in there. Lastly, you mentioned in your History how you have activated your Doujutsu abilities yet it's not within your Arsenal, so please edit that in please or re - write your history. Just make the according edits please and it looks ready to go.
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PostSubject: Re: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptyFri 12 Aug 2011, 11:40 pm

I looked under the clans justu and it didn't have the Doujustu info under it.
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PostSubject: Re: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptyFri 12 Aug 2011, 11:51 pm


Ah yes my mistake, I recall being told that any seen techniques are most likely custom since none were added from the beginning of the clans creation. Sorry about that.
Alright, assuming you've made the edit to your personality I'll give my approval.

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PostSubject: Re: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptySat 13 Aug 2011, 12:11 am

Ok, edited!
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PostSubject: Re: Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] Takahashi, Ganta [Kohona Genin] EmptySat 13 Aug 2011, 12:08 pm

Simple application, very nice. Look forward to seeing you roleplay. Don't worry about posting in the Claim a Face thread once you're approved, I've already covered your Claim.

2/2 Approval Granted.
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Archived.

Due to inactivity.
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