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PostSubject: Unagai Clan [Elemental Weapon Charging] Unagai Clan [Elemental Weapon Charging] EmptySun 26 Feb 2012, 7:13 am

Clan Name: Unagai (Surname with no meaning.)
Location: Any
Signature Traits: Tattoos visible on the hands and at the top of the sternum. As well as this they carry a few seals on the arms containing weapons which are used in tandem with the clan's technique.

The charge technique

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The ranged technique

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The meditative technique

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Kekkei Genkai: The Unagai clan focuses mainly on Fuuinjutsu and weapons. The clan's trademark ability is an attack that charges their weapons with specific elements. This is accomplished through meditation and chakra conversion. The main characteristic of the clan's KKG is a set of five tattoos. The first of these is the central tattoo, applied at birth.

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This seal is known as the Ether or spirit seal. Its main function is to siphon off chakra to feed into the other seals. It is located in the middle of the torso and is the greatest weak point of the user. Any lightning natured attack that contacts this seal will scramble the user's chakra system for one post.

The first of the seals is on the user's chest at the top of the sternum and is called the Earth Seal.

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This seal functions as a filter for the user's chakra, forcing it to change elements to the earth element. This is accomplished through hours of meditation in lower users. The cost of conversion is roughly 50 percent. Meaning for every 1 cp pushed into the seal the user will gain .5 so rounded up the seal will convert two cp's into one of earth chakra. This chakra is then stored in the seal. The earth seal is capable of holding more chakra from the user as the user gains more knowledge in the seal and grows physically and mentally. At it's peak it is capable of holding 25% of the person's total CP as earth element. That's not to say that this seal increases the user's totally chakra though. This seal will only hold the chakra in the system. The chakra in this seal is unusable in most elemental ninjutsu save for the clan's technique.

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This is the second of the four outer seals. The flame seal. This seal functions in the same way as the earth seal but converts the chakra filtered through it into Fire chakra. It is located on the user's belly It is capable of holding 25% of the user's total chakra amount as well.

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The third of these seals is the water seal. It is on the back of the user's right hand. This seal has the same conversion rate of 2 to 1 but unlike the other two seals this one and the air seal, being substantially smaller is only capable of holding 20% of the user's total chakra.

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This seal is the final of the clan's seals and is known as the Air seal and converts to wind chakra. It, like the water seal can only hold 20% of the user's total chakra.

As totals go the amount of chakra a user can hold is listed like this. In this example a Genin's amount is used, 50 cps

Total: 50
Earth seal: 12cp (Actual 12.5 rounded down)
Fire seal: 12cp (Actual 12.5 rounded down)
Water seal: 10cp
Air seal: 10cp
Regular chakra: 6cp


History:

The Unagai clan has origins linked back to a beast of lore and legend. The beasts name was Houkou, a mysterious wolf god with five tails, each controlling a singular element. The beast was worshipped by the clan for being a balance of both life and death as well as being one of the few bodies capable of housing all five of the minor chakra natures. It took decades for the clan to evolve from hunters and ninja into an almost occult type of group.

They suffered persecution in villages for worshipping a deity many considered to be an omen of catastrophe. It was said that at every appearance of the wolf great calamities and catastrophes would occur. The earth would split and shake, great storms would whip up from the lashing of its tails. Great fires would scorch the land from its actions as well. When it could no longer be tolerated anymore it was said that one of the ancestral members of the Unagai clan captured the beast within a seal on his body. Over the years as the clan quieted and stabilized it was said that the beast was passed from clansmen to clansmen down the leader's line until at one point it disappeared completely.

The clan continued to evolve, stabilizing in time into a clan that worshipped the elements in a pure form. Among the clan five men of each generation would learn how to inscribe the seals of the clan onto the children of the families. For every village the clan was based in five of these men would exist, one knowing specifically how each of the elemental seals was formed and how it functioned within the body and this knowledge would be passed to the firstborn of each of the five founders. The ether seal inscriber was considered the founder in each of the villages because only his line had extensive knowledge on how all five of the seals worked. In the event that one of the four inscribers was killed the Ether elder would pick from the clansmen who would take his place and teach them how to perform the ritual required for inscribing the seal upon an infant.

As the clan spread out, becoming rooted in each of the major villages the main branch became nestled in Konohagakure. Recently though a scroll was discovered nestled within the clan's main house. In a renovation the scroll had been knocked free from a hidden compartment in a central beam of the house and when it was examined it was found to contain only a few letters on it, spelling simply; Houkou.

The Ether elder of Konoha decided to keep it a secret until his son came of age to have the deity sealed within him. It was at that point that his son, Sousuke was marked to be the wolf's next host.

Clan Jutsu:


The charge technique

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The ranged technique

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The meditative technique

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Could you please put every Jutsu in a spoiler please?

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Name: Seishou Sendan ~ Lit. “Energy Shear”
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Water seal chakra: This type of chakra is also discharged through the weapon hitting its mark. It causes mainly water and cold damage to its target. Not visibly through ice and the like but through numbness in a struck bodypart for one post. This can be used on the user to help ease pain and keep him running.

How exactly does this help ease pain and assist with running?

Also, I'd like you to add in a one post delay between the user beginning the 'filtering' of their chakra and the changing of the chakra's elemental nature.

Furthermore, I'd like you to separate the supplementary and ranged aspects of this into two Separate Jutsu with the ranged one being a C Rank. The reason for this is that in it's current state, your technique feels like it's trying to do too much in one go. I understand that these are fairly large nerfs so I'm willing to let you up the power on the ranged Jutsu to compensate.

Overall though, a very interesting idea and one of the more original clan's I've seen Smile
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Shinji wrote:

Could you please put every Jutsu in a spoiler please?

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Name: Seishou Sendan ~ Lit. “Energy Shear”
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Water seal chakra: This type of chakra is also discharged through the weapon hitting its mark. It causes mainly water and cold damage to its target. Not visibly through ice and the like but through numbness in a struck bodypart for one post. This can be used on the user to help ease pain and keep him running.

How exactly does this help ease pain and assist with running?

Also, I'd like you to add in a one post delay between the user beginning the 'filtering' of their chakra and the changing of the chakra's elemental nature.

Furthermore, I'd like you to separate the supplementary and ranged aspects of this into two Separate Jutsu with the ranged one being a C Rank. The reason for this is that in it's current state, your technique feels like it's trying to do too much in one go. I understand that these are fairly large nerfs so I'm willing to let you up the power on the ranged Jutsu to compensate.

Overall though, a very interesting idea and one of the more original clan's I've seen Smile

The running is not meant as literal running it's meant as a temporary painkiller to help with cuts to the arms and legs and such. It is meant to be stated as "Helps the user remain active through pain" I'll edit this in soon.

In the filtering state I'll register another jutsu for the meditative state and it is not meant to be done in battle. The filtering itself usually requires a second topic but I'll edit that detail into the trance state.

Also I kinda figured there was too much going on with the energy shear technique and I was prepared to break it into separate techniques for each viable element if necessary, would you prefer I did this instead?
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Updated with requested changes ~
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The temperatures on your fire related techniques are too high given their ranks. It's important to remember that at 200 degrees the blood starts boiling. Considering your figures, even exposure to your flaming weapon for a few seconds would likely kill the wielder. Take that even further with your ranged abilities and the user would probably pass out before the projectile even traveled any distance. Please reduce these numbers as they are too high for the context of their use as well as their rank.

Also, could you please elaborate on exactly how powerful the wind projectile is?

Finally, could you post in this topic instead of bumping in future?
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Updated with the requested changes. Also, sorry I didn't realize there was an actual bump thread. x.x
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Looks good to me.

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k I tried bumping this in the thread and it's been at least a week. So I'm bumping it here in hopes that a mod will see it.
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I see nothing wrong with this. Wonder why it wasn't approved earlier.

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