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Wolfy
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| Subject: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Wed 16 Jan 2013, 5:32 am | |
| Name:Kyasuta Hyuuga Nickname:Dark Prince Age:17 Gender:Male Appearance:Kyasuta has short black hair, with a fringe that joins at the center of his face, and parts to the sides, leaving a sort of, "M," shape. He doesn't follow the traditional long hair of the Hyuuga clan, he sees it as a cultural thing and Kyasuta doesn't always follow tradition. His pale skin is milky yet this is normal for a member of the Hyuuga clan.He has sharp pure white eyes, which he uses to intimidate those around him. Kyasuta's eyes seem almost alluring at the same time as menacing, it makes most people rather uncomfortable when staying into the white eyes the Hyuuga have in there genetic code. Kyasuta stands at 6'0" and weights in at 185 lbs. His skin seems fragile, yet incredibly and naturally soft to the touch. Under his clothing, Kyasuta seems skinny and appears to be light on his feet, this gives him a small advantage of being faster then most ninja. His arms oddly are like skin and bone, to the point were if you look hard enough his arms unnaturally show almost all of his veins. This is a rather creepy feature of him and thus he is rejected by most of the opposite sex. Kyasuta dresses himself usually in the traditional black kimono made of fine silk that he bought earlier in his life when he became a genin. Kyasuta's kimonos sleeves reach down to the half way point of his pale forearm. His kimono is well pressed at most times, as he wishes to dress himself in fine clothing and make himself seem of a high class. However unlike other Hyuuga, Kyasuta doesn't have any symbol or marking of his clan because he rather finds that having the Hyuuga's doijutsu of the Byakugan is even to say that he is of the clan. Underneath his black kimono, Kyasuta will usually wear a plain white v-neck that he finds comfortable for his liking of loose clothing. Kyasuta also wears regular black ninja sandals that have provide extra support and comfort for him. Along with that he also wears fine black silk pants that cover his lower half of his body. Forehead Protector:He wears his headband around his pants as a belt, though not visible due to it being under his kimono Personality:Kyasuta is very mellow and doesn't care about anything or anyone. He has no real emotion, he never smiles, Kyasuta never gets lazy and he never gets angry. All he may every feel like is boredom, he tries to find something to do, yet Kyasuta will still find it just plain boring. He is always calm even in the face of death itself. Kyasuta never has to deal with unnecessary drama, because he always know to just avoid it. Kyasuta is the kind a guy who doesn't have social skills seeing as how he hides his self from the public world allot. Kyasuta is not exactly shy, he is more of a observer. He's a guy who devote all his time to his work. He also never entirely trusts anyone. He really has no friends nor aquatints of any kind. Even among his fellow clansmen, Kyasuta is still a mere observer of the clans meetings, and other types of gatherings. He thinks of himself as a high ranking citizen as well as a dangerous ninja, when anyone would doubt his confidence, Kyasuta will merely not care and believe that you are just not worth his time. He finds his time precious and works to make things fast, this including himself and his overall movement speed. He claims to be very important in his clan yet he rarely will ever cares about it. Kyasuta doesn't take prisoners and will show no mercy to those willing to sacrifice themselves for a greater good. Despite having his dead parents wish to lead the clan, Kyasuta wishes to just avoid the whole clan politics area as a whole and live on with the rest of his life. Clan:Hyuuga Nindō:Work for what you need, and take what you want. Origin:Mizu no Kuni Affiliation:Kirigakure Rank:Genin Specialties:Taijutsu | Fuuinjutsu Elemental Affinities:Raiton | Fuuton Combat Style:Gentle Fist Syle | Hit and Run Kyasuta likes to use his Gentle Fist Style as his main offence. However Kyasuta will use his speed to advantage, by striking and backing away. He chooses when to attack his opponent at the right time. Kyasuta considers himself to be a opportunist in combat. With his many years of training he knows what to expect, thus Kyasuta prefers to try not get hit and actually do the hitting which is probably to most other ninja. And for the most part if it means Kyasuta gets in close range of you, you better watch out. People will simply fall in Kyasuta's path as he continues to use the hit and run tactics. Against long ranged opponents, Kyasuta does numerous things, making him hard to predict. Those that hurtle many weapons find themselves chasing a moving target that matches their effort. Those that enjoy using powerful, long ranged jutsu sparingly will be fought at close range no matter the cost to the Hyuuga. His moto is to be able to get close to someone, and implament his gentle fist techniques. Once he is within the right range, he focuses on strike after strike, after strike, until the attacks come at blinding speed and accuracy; both of which are points of focus from within the Hyuuga clan. - Spoiler:
Name: Jūken | Gentle Fist Style Clan: Hyuuga Emphasis: The Jūken emphasizes light high speed attacks that inflicts internal damage and disrupt the body's Chakra Pathway System to ultimately inhibit and an opponent's use of chakra as well as causing severe internal damage. Requirements: Must have the Byakugan (Activated) Description: The Gentle Fist (柔拳, Jūken) or Gentle Fist Style (柔拳法, Jūkenpō) is a form of hand-to-hand combat used by members of the Hyūga clan. It inflicts internal damage and disrupt the body's Chakra Pathway System so as to ultimately inhibit an opponent's use of chakra. To do this, the user surgically injects a small amount of their own chakra into an opponent's chakra pathway system. The infiltrating chakra can then be used to disrupt or divert chakra flow, preventing them from using jutsu.Targeting the Tenketsu can enhance the havoc and control a Jūken user can impose upon an opponent's chakra network. These special nodes, 361 in total, are key gate-keeping interceptions in the chakra circulatory network, thus forcibly opening or sealing them in whatever manner the Jūken-user sees fit is a powerful tactical option to have. Harming the chakra network in this way can directly damage internal organs due to their proximity to the chakra circulatory system. Even the slightest tap can cause severe internal damage, hence the name "gentle" fist. Special Characteristics:- Speed SC:
Name: Improved Speed Rank: C Type: Physical Based Physical Requirements: N/A Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic. Description: The first level in the art of speed accessible to those who have undergone intense training in high speed movement. The possessor of this talent has an increased speed of 20% which makes them slightly faster. They can cross distances quicker than others would expect and outrun others with little effort.
- Clan SC:
Name: Clan Prodigy Rank: C Type: Chakra Based Physical Requirements: N/A Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic. Description: A trait given to ninja who posses a innate talent for the manipulation of clan based techniques and has trained thoroughly to improve their skill. Their power over the the clans abilities has become so considerable that the ninja is now considered a young prodigy by the clan elders. Because of this, the user's clan based attacks are 20% more destructive with their increased power and size.
- Evasion SC:
Name: Evasiveness Rank: C Type: Physical Physical Requirements: None. Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic. Description: The ninja trains their ability in more advanced evasive maneuvers which serves the purpose of avoiding enemy attacks. The survivability of the ninja increases as they are now capable of executing quicker flips and dodging basic forms of physical attacks by reading an enemies movement. History:Through time and time again the world seems to not be just black and white. No,no,no. It seems defined as a world made of grey. There are not just the bad and the good, but those who get lost along the way thinking of doing good. When all it is, it is just turning to evil. Kyasuta was born with the intention of his parents in order to lead the Hyuuga clan. However his father wasn't there when he was born. His father was a explorer and a mercenary, so before Kyasuta's mother could get the chance to tell him that she was with child, he was already gone. It was already to late for Kyasuta to have a normal life. Kyasuta's was left in the care of his single mom, who had to raise him up till he was at the age of 9. However a few months later she was admitted to the hospital for cancer. Once Kyasuta had grown to the age of 9, it was a cold and rainy day when his mother died in the hospital. This left Kyasuta without his last hope of having a normal life, and he took this frustration onto his father that he never got to meet. Kyasuta grew sour and alone up until now. When it came for Kyasuta to become a ninja of the mist, he was already bitter and anti-social. He never wanted to talk in the academy and yet that didn't stop him for graduating top of his class. The graduation he never attended for he honestly never cared about. Infact during all his time in the academy, he never cared about anything. Kyasuta just went on his own away into forest of Kirigakure with a cigarette in his mouth while everyone else attended graduation. He wished to be alone while spending his time else where. He began to train his mind and his thoughts instead of attend a stupid graduation with all of the students that were turning into genin. As he grew older, he also grew wiser, he began to invest into things that would reward him later on immensely. Kyasuta had grown a good mind for money, thinking of trade and the overall economy of Kirigakure. He worked himself as a business man and as a ninja, not having to worry about things like family. It seemed like child's play when Kyasuta later gained a fortune, because his invests did in fact reward him. And yet the money didn't satisfy his lust for power and a normal life. He wished to find his long lost father and pay him back for the trouble he had caused Kyasuta. He would then proceed to train his body into a killing machine, he wished to murder his father. Later down the path of his life, Kyasuta used his money to hire his own band of mercenaries to track down his father. It was a full 2 years of waiting that until Kyasuta was 15 years of age when group of hired mercenaries had finally tracked down and captured Kyasuta's father. As the mercenaries brought his father up to him, Kyasuta was disgusted to see his father was old and a heavy drinker based that his father wasn't even sober. It only made Kyasuta spit more venom in his face as Kyasuta expressed all of his rage and emotions that he had held back. And before the sun set on that fateful day, Kyasuta beat his father to death and made himself hallow inside. He was never the same after that day, as he left himself empty inside. Roleplay Sample:As rain fell down in Kirigakure, smoke puffed out from Kyasuta's mouth. His nice outfit was soaking in the rain, but Kyasuta couldn't care less. He was bored and needed to find something to do. Kyasuta sighed releasing another puff of smoke from his lit cigarette. "This is so ****ing boring." He said. He smoked out the rest of his cigarette, then flicked to ground while it was still burning. He assumed that the rain would take care of it. He sighed once again and walked back to his apartment "What a drag." He said as his wet black hair fell over one of his eyes. He walked slowly through the streets in his normal black kimono, that was now soaked and being weighted heavier then earlier. He noticed the extra weight and proceeded to sigh heavily, almost as heavy as the kimono was now feeling. He stopped in the middle of the abandoned street, noticing that everyone was most likely inside, all nice and dry. Kyasuta shifted his loose kimono and stripped it off, showing his white v-neck t-shirt. The air was cold, yet bearable for Kyasuta, after being born and raised in Kirigakure, he was used to this kind of weather. As he folded up his soaked black kimono he carried it in his arms. "So damn boring." He muttered under his breath as he continued on his way back to his apartment. He approached the door along the white painted with the number that read 420. That was his door number, as he held his dripping wet black kimono with one pale arm, he dug into his right pocket in search of his keys to his apartment. After grasping it, he inserted the small silver key into the door. As he turned the key a loud click emitted from the door knob and Kyasute walked into his home. As Kyasuta entered the main room, it was rather large, a open floor plan. The main room had all he needed, a leather black couch and widescreen TV in the living room. His kitchen standard, and all hard wood floors. He stripped off his cloths and dumped his wet clothing into the nearby hamper. Kyasuta brushed his wet hair out of his face and proceeded into his bedroom in search of some fresh cloths. As he entered his bedroom, he turned on his heel towards his dresser, Kyasuta sighed and rummaged through and plucked out a fresh change of cloths. Despite that, Kyasuta was now to lazy to go find something to do. He flopped onto his soft bed and shifted into the sheets. Shutting his eyes he mumbled out "****ing waste of time." he then slowly feel into a peaceful sleep after wasting part of his day. - Academy Jutsu:
Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique Rank: E Type: Genjutsu Range: N/A Medium: Optical Element: N/A Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others. Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: 10 meters Element: N/A Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread. Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand. Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu. Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Chozou no Jutsu • Storage Technique Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed. Chakra Cost: 1 to seal; 1 to unseal.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: NA Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
- Hyuuga Clan Jutsu:
Name: Byakugan (Activation) Rank: E-S Type: Bloodline - Doujutsu Range: Description Clan: Hyuuga Description: Byakugan "White Eye" is a dōjutsu kekkei genkai of the Hyūga clan. This technique is the activation of the ability from the eyes previous dormant state. When activated the users lavender eyes become more focused, their pupils become more distinct, and the veins near their temples bulge. Byakugan gives the user a near 360º field of vision, except for one small blind spot at the back of the neck above the third thoracic vertebra. The second ability is being able to see through solid objects, and can use a degree of telescopic sight. The user is able to see into vasts distances in which a regular eye cannot behold. They are capable of seeing insects behind trees with distinct perception and look behind wall with the Byakugan's ability. The third and one of the greatest uses of the Byakugan is the ability to see chakra, chakra flow as well as the chakra circulation system inside the body with great detail. It is from this particular ability that they are able to employ their ultimate attack style: Gentle Fist. It was also noted that the Byakugan can also discern a transformation and a real person using the eye's ability to see chakra, as well as barriers. The distance and the degree of telescopic sight varies from member to member. [C-Ranked] activation is able to see 50m in radius. [B-Ranked] activation is able to see 150m in radius. [A-Ranked] is able to extend 400m in radius. And finally [S-Ranked] is able to extend 900m in radius. Chakra Cost: 3CP per Post; A-rank 4CP per post; S-rank 5CP per post.
Name: Gentle Fist Rank: E-S Type: Taijutsu Description: This is the base fighting style the Hyuuga learns at an early age, which emphasis the abilities of their Byakugan which allows them to see chakra networks. This is an advanced fighting style which is difficult to learn and requires much practice and dedication to master. This technique allows the user to passively seal a persons Tenki points upon physical contact, thus slowly depleting their chakra in the process. 3CP will be depleted with each successful attack from the user, no matter how minimal it is. Because the chakra network and human system are so aligned, while depleting a persons tenki points the user also causes severe internal pain upon the contacted area. Technique does not apply to jutsu.
Name: Hiratehi-ru Dageki | Palm Heel Strike Rank: D Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m) Element: - Description: Hiratehi-ru Dageki is a very base technique performed by the members of the Hyuuga Clan. This attack consists of a quick, precise thrust of the users' palm to an opponent's body. If the jutsu strikes at dead center, it may can thrust the enemy back a couple of meters. Chakra Cost: 3CP
Name: Hakke Kūshō | Eight Trigrams Empty Palm Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: - Description: Hakke Kūshō is a technique performed by members of the Hyuuga Clan. This technique is similar in practice to Eight Trigrams Palms Heavenly Spin, but has a specific target rather than a general area. To perform it, the user precisely pinpoints the enemy's vital points with the Byakugan and releases a high-speed palm thrust. A "vacuum shell" compressed using the Gentle Fist is formed to violently push the opponent away a few meters. Chakra Cost: 7CP
Name: Hakkeshō Kaiten | Eight Trigrams Palms Heavenly Spin Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m ~ 5m) Element: - Description: Hakkeshō Kaiten is a technique performed by members of the Hyuuga Clan. A Taijutsu technique unique to the Hyuuga bloodline using the Jyuuken. Kaiten is a special technique passed down through the main family line. Kaiten takes advantage of several of the unique abilities of the Byakugan eye. Byakugan gives the clan member an almost complete 360 degree view of their surroundings. This allows the member to see all angles of attack. If an attack is near, the clan member will release a large of amount of chakra from their tenketsu. The member then begins to spin like a top, creating a whirling vortex that can nullify almost any attack. Chakra Cost: 8CP
Name: Hakke Sanjūni Shō | Eight Trigrams Thirty-Two Palms Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: - Description: Eight Trigrams Thrity-Two Palms is a technique performed by the members of the Hyuuga Clan. When an opponent is within the clan members divination field of attack, they can quickly begin their assault. The technique allows the clan member to use the Byakugan eye to see the inner chakra coils system. Using the Jyuuken style, they can force their chakra through their hands into the tenketsu of the opponent's body through 32 strikes. First the clan member will strike 2 times, then 4, 8, 16, and finally 32. This damage forcibly closes 32 tenketsu, slowing the chakra flow of the opponent. Those who fall victim of this technique will consume 25% more chakra per jutsu for 2 posts. C-ranked ninja may find it difficult to avoid this attack, though higher ranked ninja may interrupt it by evading if skillful enough. Chakra Cost: 8CP
- Taijutsu:
Name: Kurotchishotto - Crotch Shot Rank: D Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m) Element: - Description: Kurotchishotto is a humiliating taijutsu technique. By appearing in front of the opponent, the user will charge a small amount of chakra towards their dominant leg. Performing an upward kick at the opponents crotch area, they will be able to force them up into the air by a metre where a second attack could take place. If the victim was a male, a great deal of pain will be dealt after the kick has been made. Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Dynamic • Action (Dainamikku • Akushon) Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: The user flips towards the opponent and attacks with a series of punches and kicks. Chakra Cost: 8
Name: Konoha Dai Senkou - Leaf Great Light Rotation Rank: C Type:Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: The user charges at their opponent and unleashes a powerful lateral kick aiming at the head that will spin his or her opponent away. This technique can certainly cause a head ache. Chakra Cost:8
Name: Konoha Kage Buyou - Leaf Shadow Dance Rank: D Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: Konoha Kage Buyou is a Taijutsu technique that is used to position a ninja's opponent into a vulnerable aerial position. The ninja will first quickly appear below their opponent, then with a switch upper kick they will launch their target into the air. The ninja will then jump into the air to "shadow" the target with the target's back to their chest. This move is used before preforming "Omote Renge - Front Lotus" or "Shishi Rendan - Lion Combo". Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Konoha Raiken - Leaf Thunder Fist Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: The user will spin to gain momentum and then lay a powerful strike into his or her opponent via punch. Chakra Cost: 6
Name: Shishi Rendan - Lion Combo Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: The user first uses the "Konoha Kage Buyou - Leaf Shadow Dance" to manuever his/her opponent in a vulnerable aerial position. While shadowing his/her opponent, the user will attempt to strike them from a vulnerable angle. If he/she is unable to make a clean strike, he/she will strike anyway as a feint, to draw his/her target's attention and defense to one area. The user can then strike the undefended area and begin knocking them downwards towards the ground. As the enemy falls back to the earth, the user will deftly rotate his/her body around to deliver a full force kick to their chest. Chakra Cost: 7
Name: Konoha Shoufuu - Leaf Rising Wind Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: This jump uses the entire body as a spring by amassing power in the legs before kicking upwards. Because the power of the kick from the ground is instantly converted into a blow, the enemy hit with this attack will be launched high into the sky. Chakra Cost: 5
Name: Konoha Reppuu - Leaf Violent Wind Rank: D Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: The move here is a simple rear spinning low kick, but a strong enough user can send a large adult flying as if they weighed nothing. The goal is to throw the enemy off balance, and deal damage to the lower half of their body. Chakra Cost: 3
- Fuuinjutsu:
Name: Shikoku Fuuin - Finger Engraving Seal Rank: C Type: Fuuinjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: The user concentrates chakra into their finger and using the heat from that can apply writing on whatever they want. This allows them to write on the skin of animals, iron plates, or a wide range of things. Must be delicate with chakra control when using this technique. If used on flesh; will scar. Chakra Cost: 6 (2 per post)
- Ninja Kit:
Name: Sealing Art Kit Rank: C Quantity: 1 Contents: 5 Small Scrolls [10], 4 Medium Scrolls [16], 10cm Ink Capsule [1], 500mL Paint Canister [1], 1 Journal [1], 2 Tipped Pens [1], 1 Brush [1], 3 Ink Pens [3]. Character Claim:Hibari Kyoya Source:Katekyo Hitman REBORN! Manga/TV Series Image URL:Link
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| | | Kiseki
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Wed 16 Jan 2013, 7:16 am | |
| You need more
- Appearance
- Personality
- History
- Combat Style
I've never had to say this but you need a bigger Roleplay sample.
You need to change your nindo.
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- Also known as a Ninja Way, Nndō is a rule and/or motto an particular shinobi will live by. A ninja's nindō can be anything no matter how immoral their personal point of view is. Naruto's Nindō was "I'm not gonna run away. I never go back on my word, that is my Nindō! My ninja way!" The main point of this would be that he will never go back on his word. Your characters Nindō will be how he or she lives their life and should reflect on their personality. Think very carefully about your Ninja Way and consider your affiliations, if your associated with a village, it would not be wise to have your Ninja Way to exact revenge on that nation.
It is a motto or a rule of your life. Not your dream of what you want to be.
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| | | Wolfy
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Wed 16 Jan 2013, 8:08 am | |
| Edited. Completion Bump. |
| | | Kiseki
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Wed 16 Jan 2013, 8:18 am | |
| - Kiseki wrote:
You need more
- Appearance
- Personality
- History
- Combat Style
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| | | Wolfy
Age : 27 Posts : 45
| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Wed 16 Jan 2013, 9:46 am | |
| Edited Again. |
| | | Kiseki
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Wed 16 Jan 2013, 11:43 pm | |
| Origin is a country not a village.
You need more appearance and personality as they require two solid paragraphs.
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- All he may every feel like is being bored
Might wanna fix that.
You are also 6'1 and weigh 202 lbs. You are 16. The youngest football player in highschool I know is 17 and he is those measurements. Yet he doesn't have, - Quote :
- His Bicep and triceps muscles are rather bony
Overall Hibari Kyoya From Hitman reborn is skinny and not in the slightest like that. Either A change your appearance or B change your face claim. |
| | | Wolfy
Age : 27 Posts : 45
| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Thu 17 Jan 2013, 3:21 am | |
| Edited once again. |
| | | lifeanddeath
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Sat 19 Jan 2013, 3:40 pm | |
| Just a few things of note :
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- How does your character like to fight? Hit and run tactics, a fearless tank on the battlefield or do you lurk in the shadows and kill silently. There are many different tactics and here is where you can write a brief description of the combat style in which encapsulates your character. This in some regards can be seen as a characters 'Combat Nindō'. Include such things as your strengths/weaknesses, the range in which your character likes to fight, any martial or other styles they have learn't, and your 'trump card' or otherwise known as 'Signature Jutsu'.
Whilst the Gentle Fist is the taijutsu style you use in combat, it does not encompass your entire combat stlye as a whole, merely describing one aspect. See the above quoted section from the Character Creation Template Guide for further details on what the combat style section should describe.
- Im only counting 13 out of the 15 Jutsu you can have at start (considering you have the Gentle Fist listed twice) also, your one Fuuinjutsu technique is technically part of the Academy list, there I would advice you to move it up there.
- Fūin sa reta pawā - Sealed Power: Given the current SC system, I dont believe such a technique would be deemed allowable. Firstly there is no explanation how the simple input of chakra into limbs increases your speed. Secondly the speed increases are drastic in comparison to the already increased speed SC.
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| | | Wolfy
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Sat 19 Jan 2013, 11:28 pm | |
| Bump. |
| | | CleverYamanaka
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Sat 19 Jan 2013, 11:59 pm | |
| - Quote :
- Combat Style:
Gentle Fist Syle | Hit and Run This is still going to have to be longer. This is supposed to outline of how your character fights, what strategies they employ, how they think, what tactics they use. Are they a front and forward fighter, or do they hide behind genjutsu, that kind of thing. You need to talk about what exactly your character does in different instances, as well as what his possible strengths and weaknesses are. Those are just some ideas, but I hope that helps. Other then that, from what I saw, the app looks clean and nice. |
| | | Wolfy
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Mon 21 Jan 2013, 3:18 am | |
| Bump. |
| | | CleverYamanaka
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Mon 21 Jan 2013, 3:28 am | |
| Your combat style is still a little short. Just add a little bit more, and I think you'll be fine. Sorry for the inconvenience. You're so close! |
| | | Wolfy
Age : 27 Posts : 45
| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Mon 21 Jan 2013, 3:35 am | |
| Edited. |
| | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29 Posts : 1688
| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Mon 21 Jan 2013, 3:37 am | |
| I only count 14 out of the 15 jutsu you can have on a genin app. Although it is not NEEDED, I suggest you give yourself one more jutsu! After that, I'll look again |
| | | Wolfy
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Mon 21 Jan 2013, 3:43 am | |
| Edited Again. |
| | | CleverYamanaka
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| | | | Setsugekka
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Mon 21 Jan 2013, 7:03 am | |
| Well done - Approved! (2/2) Please make an account here. |
| | | Cookie Monster
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Kyasuta [Kiri Genin] Sun 16 Jun 2013, 5:08 pm | |
| Archived. Due to inactivity.
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