Yuki, Ryū. [Kumo Genin]

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Yuki, Ryū.

THE INFO.

Name: Yuki, Ryū. [Snow Dragon.]
Nickname: Kumo no Kaijin. [Phantom of the Cloud.] | Kurohoshi. [Black Star.]
Age: 14
Gender: Yuki, Ryū. [Kumo Genin] 18px-Gender_Malesvg

Appearance:

Character Image Here.

Forehead Protector: He wears it around his forehead.
Personality:

Clan: Yuki Clan.
Nindō: "Only the strongest will survive."

THE NINJA.

Origin: Yuki, Ryū. [Kumo Genin] Kirigakure

Affiliation:

Rank: Genin.
Specialties: Ninjutsu - Weaponry [Main: Exotic | Sub: Swords]
Elemental Affinities:

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Combat Style:

Ryū isn't called a 'prodigy' for no reason, and if he is it's because of his mastery over all ranges of combat. His fighting style looks like a mixture of many styles, he confuses his opponent and doesn't leave him the possiblity to read into his movements and analyse his ideas. As soon as you get close doing that, he'll surprise you with a move that you would never expect. His movements and attacks are usually swift and quick, and he counts on his speed and agility instead of brute force. In close range, Ryu will usually engage his opponent in a weapon fight, whether it is his sword or trench knives, and of course he'll use his chakra to enhance the 'deadliness' of his attacks. He will usually also assist his attacks with long range assaults, most of the time a couple of elemental ninjutsu.
Special Characteristics:

Physical Based.

Quote :: Name: Improved Speed
Rank: C
Type: Physical Based
Physical Requirements: N/A
Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic.
Description: The first level in the art of speed accessible to those who have undergone intense training in high speed movement. The possessor of this talent has an increased speed of 20% which makes them slightly faster. They can cross distances quicker than others would expect and outrun others with little effort.

THE BACKGROUND.

History:

Childhood - Academy.

Shit

Academy - Genin.

Roleplay Sample:

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THE ARSENAL.

Academy Jutsu.

Quote :: Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type: Genjutsu
Range: N/A
Medium: Optical
Element: N/A
Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others.
Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones

Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures.
Chakra Cost: 1

Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Element: N/A
Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread.
Chakra Cost: 2

Name: Explosive Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand.
Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)

Name: Kai • Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu.
Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP

Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor.
Chakra Cost: 1

Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: NA
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)

Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)

Ice Mastery.

Quote :: Name: Hyōton Enchou | Ice Dome
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: Hyōton Enchou is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Yuki clan. The user can quickly create an ice dome around their allies and themselves to act as a defense. It is strong enough to withstand the assault of many exploding tags at once, remaining almost undamaged.
Chakra Cost: 6CP

Name: Hyōton Disuku | Ice Disk
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: Hyōton Disuku is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Yuki clan. This jutsu turns the moisture particles in the air into an ice disk. They can be hurled with tremendous force at a target and are hard to dodge because of their transparency. They can also be strung together to spy on areas. They can also be used defensively by being used as a shield to deflect attacks below C-rank and basic thrown weapons.
Chakra Cost: 5CP (per disk)

Name: Hyōton Tsubame Fubuki | Swallow Snow Storm
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: yōton Tsubame Fubuki is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Yuki clan. This jutsu creates a cluster of ice needles in the shape of miniature swallows, which the user then throws at the opponent. These needles can change direction up to 3 times in midair and will maim the opponent with their sharp wings.
Chakra Cost: 5CP (per 3 needles)

Name: Hyōkisōku no Jutsu | Freezing Breath Technique
Rank: D-C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: A simple technique where chakra kneaded inside the body is converted into ice, and expelled from the mouth in a large cloud of freezing ice. The scope of the attack is altered by controlling the volume of chakra that is mustered. The released freezing breath will lower the temperature around their target thus making it freeze over. This technique is great for freezing pools of water and blowing out flames. Depending on how much chakra is flushed into this technique, the user is capable of freezing large objects and slowing them down. In order to freeze a human, however requires a large consumption of air and quite a bit of chakra.
Chakra Cost: D: 3CP | C: 7CP

Name: Hyōton: Konju Zanshu no Jutsu | Ice Release: Diamond Suicide Decapitation Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: The user creates and vastly expands a sheet of ice underneath the feet of everyone, including themselves. While the user can walk across the ice without difficulty, others cannot; even advanced chakra control seems ineffective. In addition, the user is capable of phasing into this ice and traveling through it nigh-instantaneously, even appearing under the feet of their foe and pulling them down. They do not phase into the ice like the user does, however. They're simply stuck from the neck-up.
Chakra Cost: 6CP

Name: Makyō Hakuhyō | Demonic Thin Ice Mirrors
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: An assassination jutsu, the user creates two ice mirrors, but only one at first that they fall back and disappear into. The second appears behind their victim moments later, whom the user phases out of and silently cuts their throat.
Chakra Cost: 8CP

Name: Kōri Bunshin no Jutsu | Ice Clone Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: An advanced clone technique, created using ice as a solid mass. This makes it nearly impossible for the average shinobi to tell it apart from the real thing. However, should they come into contact with it, the clone will transfer its chakra and elemental nature into the enemy, covering their body with a thin layer of ice and causing chilblains, difficulty breathing, and stiffness in movements.
Chakra Cost: 7CP

Name: Hyōrō no Jutsu | Ice Prison Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: This technique allows the user to infuse their chakra with ice underground and bring it to the surface. The user can then trap their opponent within the ice by controlling its movements and completely surrounding them in the ice. It is strong enough to withstand basic Fire Release techniques, because the ice has already been infused with the user's chakra. This allows to double as a defensive technique, by the user encasing themselves in the ice.
Chakra Cost: 7CP

Name: Ikaku Samui | Intimidating Cold
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: Despite its subtlety, this is one of the most powerful and useful abilities available to those with Hyōton. Once activated, it becomes passive, and anyone within several meters of the user is overcome with a cloying cold that progressively slows their movements and causes intense shivering, making fighting back difficult. This jutsu will last for 2 posts.
Chakra Cost: 6CP

Name: Hissatsu Hyōsō | Shattering Ice Spear
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: This jutsu requires no handseals, the user will gather his chakra then release it causing the ground to break open and stalactites (large spikes) of ice to appear from underneath the ground, these large ice spikes are super hard can be used to impale or skewer a target. Normally the spikes appear from underneath the ground, but it’s possible to cause them to appear from the side of a tree, or from a ceiling. The size and speed of the jutsu depends on amount of chakra used, more chakra, the faster the "tear" will appear, and the stronger it will be. This technique can also be performed this near a body of water, as the user can manipulate any source of water into ice, thus the more water nearby the stronger the jutsu will be.
Chakra Cost: 8CP

Name: Hyōton: Konmuri | Ice Release: Diamond Dust
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: Both a perception and an offensive ninjutsu, this technique manipulates the weather and causes it to snow fiercely. The storm quickly becomes blinding, however the user is able to perfectly navigate the blinding sleet and attack their opponent with impunity. This is Ryu's version of Hidden Mist technique.
Chakra Cost: 4CP

Wind Mastery.

Quote :: Name: Fūton: Shinkūgyoku | Wind Release: Vacuum Sphere
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: Fuuton (Wind)
Description: The user takes a deep breath and then exhales several small blasts of wind chakra in such a manner that they are dispersed over an expansive range, enough to make it difficult to avoid them entirely without taking any damage. Due to the properties of this technique, the expelled blasts are capable of piercing into and potentially through an opponent's flesh when they collide, in a similar manner to how bullets function.
Chakra Cost: 8

Water Mastery.

Quote :: Name: Haran Banshou - Stormy Upheaval
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: Suiton (Water)
Description: This technique allows the user to summon a large volume of water; roughly the size of a waterfall, crushing it into the opponent. If needed, the user can cancel the technique in just an instant.
Chakra Cost: 8

Name: Mizukiri no Yaiba - Sword of Draining
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Suiton (Water)
Description: A jutsu that utilizes water to create a sword. The sword can be wielded in the normal fashion, allowing the ninja to cut and stab like a normal blade. This sword can also go through most fire jutsu of equal rank and below.
Chakra Cost: 8 (2 per post)

Weapon Mastery.

Quote :: Name: Hien - Flying Swallow
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu - Kenjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Fuuton (Wind)
Description: An addition-line ninjutsu that augments the killing power of a blade — like a kunai or sword — by flowing chakra into it. The materialised chakra is shaped like a blade, cutting up everything it touches. It is also possible to alter the attack range of the weapon by adjusting the amount of chakra put into the blade. Seeing through the movements is said to be very difficult.The density of the chakra is so high it becomes visible. It not only raises the power of the weapon, but simultaneously turns oneself into a blade as well. The chakra-enhanced blades are strong and sharp enough to cut through solid rock and iron. The technique works best with elemental chakra, especially with wind-natured chakra which greatly increases the offensive cutting power.
Chakra Cost: 8CP (2 per post)

Inventory.

Quote :: Name: Tantō
Rank: D
Type: Primary/Melee
Quantity: 1
Description: The tanto is commonly referred to as a knife or dagger. The blade is single edged with a length between 15 and 30 cm (6-12 inches). The tantō was designed primarily as a stabbing weapon, but the edge can be used for slashing as well.[/u][/url]

Name: Chakra Blades - Trench knives
Rank: C
Type: Primary/Melee
Quantity: 2
Description: A highly uniquely-designed trench knife, these blades are worn like brass knuckles, but each one has a sharpened zigzag "tooth" over each knuckle, and a blade coming out of one end. The knives are made from a special metal that can be infused through "chakra flow" with elemental chakra or Yin–Yang chakra to produce added effects. Look here.

Name: Genin Kit
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Quantity: 1
Contents: 10 Kunai, 8 Shuriken, 5 Senbon, 2 Exploding Notes, 1 Exploding Pouch, Five Metres of wire/string, File, 10 Makibishi, 1 Windmill Shuriken, 2 blank small scrolls.

FACE CLAIM.

Character Claim: Black☆Star.
Source: Soul Eater.
Image URL: Here.

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Done and ready for review.

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As sexy as your template may be, in accordance to our rules we ask every member to keep our template the same without altercations as they aren't needed and we want everything on the application as simple to find as possible. Apologies about this, but we'll be forced to ask you to revert your application back to it's original template design.

Ultimate Shinobi's Law wrote:: APPLICATIONS:
Simple enough to understand, all the applications templates were carefully constructed by the staff and for this reason we do not appreciate people altering it or it's coding to make it more their style or add something they believe should be in there. If you are caught doing this you will not be approved until it is returned to the proper format we have provided you, just let it be it won't be the end of the world.

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Blargh. Done.

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Just wanted to say that you have done a wonderful job with this. I enjoyed reading it thoroughly. Now unfortunately we have some issues to discuss...

• Firstly, You tend to change your character's name a few times in your profile.

Ian wrote:: Being a ninja of both genius and aggressive qualities, Kiri will do whatever is necessary to give him the upper hand and will do it with fierce determination.

Who is Kiri? I thought his name was Ryu.

Ian wrote:: Toru memorized the hand sign sequence and tried doing them by himself which was a success!

Again, who is Toru? I thought is name was Ryu.

These were the only two I found but just check to be sure there are no more like this unless there is a reason for the names being different.

• Next thing is regarding your jutsu.

-You have failed to list your academy jutsu. I would appreciate if you put them down for us.

Ian wrote:: Name: Hyōkisōku no Jutsu | Freezing Breath Technique
Rank: D-C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: A simple technique where chakra kneaded inside the body is converted into ice, and expelled from the mouth in a large cloud of freezing ice. The scope of the attack is altered by controlling the volume of chakra that is mustered. The released freezing breath will lower the temperature around their target thus making it freeze over. This technique is great for freezing pools of water and blowing out flames. Depending on how much chakra is flushed into this technique, the user is capable of freezing large objects and slowing them down. In order to freeze a human, however requires a large consumption of air and quite a bit of chakra.
Chakra Cost: D: 3CP | C: 7CP

I want you to be more specific in terms of how long it takes to freeze objects. Give me some values not just words like "large" or "quite a bit". I need actual values and I need time limits as in how many posts the jutsu needs to be sustained and I would like to know if the listed costs are also applied at every post to sustain the expulsion of this ice breath.

Ian wrote:: Name: Hyōton: Konju Zanshu no Jutsu | Ice Release: Diamond Suicide Decapitation Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: The user creates and vastly expands a sheet of ice underneath the feet of everyone, including themselves. While the user can walk across the ice without difficulty, others cannot; even advanced chakra control seems ineffective. In addition, the user is capable of phasing into this ice and traveling through it nigh-instantaneously, even appearing under the feet of their foe and pulling them down. They do not phase into the ice like the user does, however. They're simply stuck from the neck-up.
Chakra Cost: 6CP

I'm gonna say no to this one. There is virtually no way to counter it and it has a huge range and very little chakra cost and you are essentially binding them with no way to get out. Either change it up or forget it or find an admin to approve it.

Ian wrote:: Name: Makyō Hakuhyō | Demonic Thin Ice Mirrors
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: An assassination jutsu, the user creates two ice mirrors, but only one at first that they fall back and disappear into. The second appears behind their victim moments later, whom the user phases out of and silently cuts their throat.
Chakra Cost: 8CP

Seeing as this is basically a variant of the ANBU's Exclusive "Silent Kill" technique mixed with a Shunshin I'm going to say no to this one.

Ian wrote:: Name: Kōri Bunshin no Jutsu | Ice Clone Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: An advanced clone technique, created using ice as a solid mass. This makes it nearly impossible for the average shinobi to tell it apart from the real thing. However, should they come into contact with it, the clone will transfer its chakra and elemental nature into the enemy, covering their body with a thin layer of ice and causing chilblains, difficulty breathing, and stiffness in movements.
Chakra Cost: 7CP

This is not a C rank jutsu.

Ian wrote:: Name: Hyōrō no Jutsu | Ice Prison Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: This technique allows the user to infuse their chakra with ice underground and bring it to the surface. The user can then trap their opponent within the ice by controlling its movements and completely surrounding them in the ice. It is strong enough to withstand basic Fire Release techniques, because the ice has already been infused with the user's chakra. This allows to double as a defensive technique, by the user encasing themselves in the ice.
Chakra Cost: 7CP

I can't say I fully understand this jutsu. Ice is underground and moving around? Is it like water then ice? How does it trap the opponent? What I do understand though is that you are trying to make it ignore fire techniques which at C rank it should not be ignoring fire and the amount of damage the ice can take should be elaborated on. But in all honesty a move that binds your opponent at C rank is a little over powered.

Ian wrote:: Name: Ikaku Samui | Intimidating Cold
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: Despite its subtlety, this is one of the most powerful and useful abilities available to those with Hyōton. Once activated, it becomes passive, and anyone within several meters of the user is overcome with a cloying cold that progressively slows their movements and causes intense shivering, making fighting back difficult.
Chakra Cost: 6CP

So I'd like to see the range reduced on this, and a specified post time that details how long it takes for the cold to reach it's full effect and how long the cold lasts within the topic. You will not be allowed to have a jutsu that lasts the whole topic.

Ian wrote:: Name: Hissatsu Hyōsō | Shattering Ice Spear
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: This jutsu requires no handseals, the user will gather his chakra then release it causing the ground to break open and stalactites (large spikes) of ice to appear from underneath the ground, these large ice spikes are super hard can be used to impale or skewer a target. Normally the spikes appear from underneath the ground, but it’s possible to cause them to appear from the side of a tree, or from a ceiling. The size and speed of the jutsu depends on amount of chakra used, more chakra, the faster the "tear" will appear, and the stronger it will be. This technique can also be performed this near a body of water, as the user can manipulate any source of water into ice, thus the more water nearby the stronger the jutsu will be.
Chakra Cost: 4CP

This is not a D rank jutsu. It is way too strong. It isn't even a C rank. You need to seriously reduce the range and up the chakra cost on this one.

Ian wrote:: Name: Hyōton: Konmuri | Ice Release: Diamond Dust
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Clan: Yuki
Description: Both a perception and an offensive ninjutsu, this technique manipulates the weather and causes it to snow fiercely. The storm quickly becomes blinding, however the user is able to perfectly navigate the blinding sleet and attack their opponent with impunity. This is Ryu's version of Hidden Mist technique.
Chakra Cost: 4CP

So this one is fine but what I need you to do is detail how long it takes for the storm to reach a point of being blinding and I need you to put on a sustaining cost. Meaning the amount of chakra you pay each turn to keep this going.

Ian wrote:: Name: Fūton: Shinkūgyoku | Wind Release: Vacuum Sphere
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: Fuuton (Wind)
Description: The user takes a deep breath and then exhales several small blasts of wind chakra in such a manner that they are dispersed over an expansive range, enough to make it difficult to avoid them entirely without taking any damage. Due to the properties of this technique, the expelled blasts are capable of piercing into and potentially through an opponent's flesh when they collide, in a similar manner to how bullets function.
Chakra Cost: 8

This one is okay for the most part but you need to remove the part about the projectiles piercing flesh. At C rank your techniques can't be fatal. They can have concussive properties but not piercing.

Ian wrote:: Name: Hien - Flying Swallow
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu - Kenjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Fuuton (Wind)
Description: An addition-line ninjutsu that augments the killing power of a blade — like a kunai or sword — by flowing chakra into it. The materialised chakra is shaped like a blade, cutting up everything it touches. It is also possible to alter the attack range of the weapon by adjusting the amount of chakra put into the blade. Seeing through the movements is said to be very difficult.The density of the chakra is so high it becomes visible. It not only raises the power of the weapon, but simultaneously turns oneself into a blade as well. The chakra-enhanced blades are strong and sharp enough to cut through solid rock and iron. The technique works best with elemental chakra, especially with wind-natured chakra which greatly increases the offensive cutting power.
Chakra Cost: 8CP (2 per post)

Canonically this is a B rank jutsu and the destructive power of this jutsu would also rate it at least a B rank on this site, so I'm sorry but you don't have access to it yet.

•Now for the weapons section.

As a genin weapon spec you are only allowed one C rank weapon at all times. That means that you can't have all 3 you listed. Now the Ninjato is actually listed here on the site as a C rank weapon. The chakra blades, or in fact any weapon with chakra conducting properties is at least a B rank. So that means out of the three you listed you can only pick ONE of the two that aren't the chakra blades.

Please make the following changes then give this another bump. Thank you.

If you have any questions please post them here so we can discuss.

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Quote :: I want you to be more specific in terms of how long it takes to freeze objects. Give me some values not just words like "large" or "quite a bit". I need actual values and I need time limits as in how many posts the jutsu needs to be sustained and I would like to know if the listed costs are also applied at every post to sustain the expulsion of this ice breath.

It's a freezing breath, so virtually "any" object that makes contact with it will be freezed nigh instantaneously. As for the values you're asking for, they are placed in the chakra cost field, with D cost is the regular one and C is what I called "large" or "quite a bit". Once they are freezed they stay that way until somehow released.

Quote :: I'm gonna say no to this one. There is virtually no way to counter it and it has a huge range and very little chakra cost and you are essentially binding them with no way to get out. Either change it up or forget it or find an admin to approve it.

This is basically a variation of Kakashi's D-Rank Doton jutsu: http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Earth_Release:_Double_Suicide_Decapitation_Technique

Quote :: Seeing as this is basically a variant of the ANBU's Exclusive "Silent Kill" technique mixed with a Shunshin I'm going to say no to this one.

And this is basically a miniature version of the Demonic Ice Crystal Mirrors jutsu placed right here: http://www.ultimateshinobi.org/t3155-yuki-clan

Quote :: This is not a C rank jutsu.

I don't see how, please explain. All I know is that all elemental clone are C-Rank.

Quote :: I can't say I fully understand this jutsu. Ice is underground and moving around? Is it like water then ice? How does it trap the opponent? What I do understand though is that you are trying to make it ignore fire techniques which at C rank it should not be ignoring fire and the amount of damage the ice can take should be elaborated on. But in all honesty a move that binds your opponent at C rank is a little over powered.

He just control the already existing ice to form a prison around the opponent, it is immune to basic fire techniques since it's not only chakra infused but also an advanced element with water as one of its composent which is strong against fire.

Quote :: This is not a D rank jutsu. It is way too strong. It isn't even a C rank. You need to seriously reduce the range and up the chakra cost on this one.

Bumped to C-Rank with 8 CP, it was used by Haku when he was a child so I guess it can be used by a genin.

Quote :: So this one is fine but what I need you to do is detail how long it takes for the storm to reach a point of being blinding and I need you to put on a sustaining cost. Meaning the amount of chakra you pay each turn to keep this going.

It doesn't have a specific time, it's just similar to the Kumogakure no Jutsu you have here, so I don't know it lasts the same duration as that jutsu.

Quote :: This one is okay for the most part but you need to remove the part about the projectiles piercing flesh. At C rank your techniques can't be fatal. They can have concussive properties but not piercing.

Even a kunai can pierce flesh, by piercing I mean penetrating the body an causing wounds.

Quote :: Canonically this is a B rank jutsu and the destructive power of this jutsu would also rate it at least a B rank on this site, so I'm sorry but you don't have access to it yet.

Well then its destructive power will be of a C-Rank jutsu? Just maybe..

As for the weapons, I now have one C-Rank and one D-Rank weapon. And in the system it clearly says:

Quote :: - Weapons can be described via their rank. Please be aware that your weapon CANNOT use chakra without being B Rank or higher. You may use jutsu WITH it, but it cannot use jutsu by ITSELF.

And I'm just using jutsu WITH it.

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Ian wrote:: It's a freezing breath, so virtually "any" object that makes contact with it will be freezed nigh instantaneously. As for the values you're asking for, they are placed in the chakra cost field, with D cost is the regular one and C is what I called "large" or "quite a bit". Once they are freezed they stay that way until somehow released.

I see, well in that case I don't think I can let you have this technique. From my understanding it is basically you breathing on someone and them being frozen solid.

Ian wrote:: This is basically a variation of Kakashi's D-Rank Doton jutsu: http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Earth_Release:_Double_Suicide_Decapitation_Technique

And so it is. But here's the issue. From the description you are creating a sheet of ice that you are melding into. That is fine if you are a yuki but what happens when you try to pull others into your ice? Also why can't others walk across your ice? What effect does that have on the battle? Are they pretty much immobilized and sitting ducks for you to come and take them? And how do they get out of being dragged in? I mean you are dragging them into pretty much a two dimensional thing so it's not like they can struggle to get free or get dug out or something....

Ian wrote:: And this is basically a miniature version of the Demonic Ice Crystal Mirrors jutsu placed right here: http://www.ultimateshinobi.org/t3155-yuki-clan

I gathered that from the name of the jutsu but there is a distinct difference. Demon Ice Mirrors sets up an area around which the mirrors are place. A mirror doesn't just form directly behind someone where you can appear and slit their throat. Also in demon ice mirrors the user must move from mirror to mirror. He cannot say, vanish from one mirror and appear in another. So you falling back into your first mirror only to reappear behind your target in the second mirror is basically a Shunshin type move which is an ANBU exclusive move. Then your ability to slit their throat in "moments" is basically akin to the ANBU exclusive move "Silent Kill". The name is similar but I'm not seeing too many parallels between the two jutsu other than the name and the use of mirrors. I'm sorry.

Ian wrote:: I don't see how, please explain. All I know is that all elemental clone are C-Rank.

That is false, at least on this site. The only elemental clone that is C rank on this site is the water clone. This is due to the fact that the water clone can't go too far away from the original creator nor can it use chakra or jutsu. Now you didn't state that your clone can't use jutsu nor did you state a range the clone must stay in. Also there's the fact that you gave your clone an ability to harm others who destroy the clone. So judging from these two things I can tell you this: A shadow clone is a B rank on this site due to its ability to use jutsu. A lightning clone on this site is an A rank due to its ability to use jutsu and its ability to inflict damage to those who destroy it. From the description you gave the clone can seem to do both of these things. So it is not a C rank jutsu. It is closer to an A rank in my book.

Ian wrote:: He just control the already existing ice to form a prison around the opponent, it is immune to basic fire techniques since it's not only chakra infused but also an advanced element with water as one of its composent which is strong against fire.

So if there is no ice in the ground he can't use this technique? Is he putting ice in the ground? Also how does the prison form? Is it like sheets of ice sliding out of the ground to form a box? Is it a liquid type ice forming some sort of dome? I'm just over all confused as to how this technique works. Also, even B rank ice techniques (Demon Ice Mirror) can be melted with a fire tech of the same rank or several fire techs from one rank below. So when you say "resistant to basic fire techniques" you have to be specific of the rank. Because from the standard set on this site, a single C rank should be able to melt this ice.

Ian wrote:: Bumped to C-Rank with 8 CP, it was used by Haku when he was a child so I guess it can be used by a genin.

The show is not a good guide to use for this site. Naruto could use Shadow Clone as a genin but that is a B rank on this site and no genin is able to use a B rank right off the bat. Just because Haku used something like this doesn't make it okay. It's good you upped the rank and the chakra but I want that range reduced. We have a similar tech on the site with a range of only up

Ian wrote:: It doesn't have a specific time, it's just similar to the Kumogakure no Jutsu you have here, so I don't know it lasts the same duration as that jutsu.

Okay that's fine then but you still need to pay a maintenance fee in terms of chakra. The Mist jutsu we have here requires one as well.

Ian wrote:: Even a kunai can pierce flesh, by piercing I mean penetrating the body an causing wounds.

You are correct, Kunai can pierce flesh but kunai don't break into a shotgun effect as this jutsu seems to do. Since the number of projectiles isn't elaborated you could easily spam this and have several peircing projectiles. We have a jutsu like this but it's an A rank. It's the shuriken kage bunshin jutsu. Basically what I'm saying is, the piercing effect plus multiple projectiles isn't good. Even a genin only is allowed 10 kunai, 8 shuriken, and 5 senbon and he's not going to be able to throw them all at once...

Ian wrote:: Well then its destructive power will be of a C-Rank jutsu? Just maybe..

I don't understand what you are trying to say...

If you want an ability to augment your sword then change the name as I believe giving it the same name would be misleading, and dial down the power. You can say you use the wind to make it sharper and give an example as in it can cut stone (not metal). Based on that we can see what we can do. Obviously the effect on the user isn't there and the strike would only be sustained for one strike at C rank.

Ian wrote:

As for the weapons, I now have one C-Rank and one D-Rank weapon. And in the system it clearly says:

Quote :: - Weapons can be described via their rank. Please be aware that your weapon CANNOT use chakra without being B Rank or higher. You may use jutsu WITH it, but it cannot use jutsu by ITSELF.

And I'm just using jutsu WITH it.

Look at the description of the chakra blades. It is made with a special metal that allows elemental chakra to be infused through it. Hence being made of that metal, by definition of this site, means that you can't have it yet as it is a B rank weapon. I understand what it is saying but the weapon can't me made from chakra conductive material at C rank. Sorry.

Quote :: B Rank: Chakra conductive and semi-magical affects + the above

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