Otomichi, Torein [Konoha Jounin]

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Otomichi, Torein [Konoha Jounin] Kidomaru_2_Resized

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You may pick 2 skills: Ninjutsu, Genjutsu, Taijutsu, Kenjutsu, Weaponry, Medical, Puppetry, Fuuinjutsu
Main: Ninjutsu
Sub: Eijutsu (Medical)
Elemental Affinity:
What element(s) your character possesses, no more than two
Main: Raiton
Sub: fuuton
Special Characteristics:
Increased speed/Strength
Torein speed is exceedingly quick. This is due to the fact of him being able to move and use the strength of all eight limbs to support his light weight. Torein strength would be increased also due to the fact he has the strength to six arms supporting and stablizing anything he holds on to. This will also affect his speed just a little.

Animal Empathy
The character exudes a calming influence on animals. This is parshlybecause Torein clan himself looks like animal. Torein being parshly spider has an able ability to feel, sence, and understand animals due to his animal related genetics. He is seldom bitten or snarled at and animals immediately like him. If he abuses an animal, it will act confused before becoming aggressive.

Light Sleeper
The character is very light sleeper. Any noise at all will instantly awaken him to a state of full alert. The character is no easier to sneak up on while asleep than he is when he is awake.

Photographic Memory
Torein has photographic memory, he remembers everything he sees and hears with absolute clarity. To represent this extraordinary gift, the player controlling the character should take copious notes throughout play to represent his character's memory.

Excellent Liar Trait
The character is extremely good at Lying, no one can read him even with the use of special mind probing jutsu or lie detectors. This unique trait is extremely useful. The only way to uproot a lie created is to prove it wrong; and even then the character may simply play the lie even more

Reputation - Underworld
The character is well known to the denizens of the Underground. Provided he does not make trouble, he can generally make his way among the humans and missing ninja tribes that call the tunnels home. Dealing with the feral animals that call the Underground home is an entirely different matter, however.

Lie Detector
The Character has an ability to read opponents, habits, quirks and other things will point the character out as a liar. This is useful in and out of battle, though it will sometimes drive men or women insane hearing their sweethearts lie to their faces.

Enhanced agility
Torein can switch the chakra lines in his body that connect to his muscles. By diverting all the chakra that would normally go useless to his other areas of the body making it useful thus enhancing his agile ability.

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Raiton

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Quote :: Name: Spider Summoning
Rank: A
Type: Contract
Natural Abilities:The basic form of all summoning technique, this jutsu uses a contract, hand seals, and the user's blood to summon an animal or weapon.

Background Information

History:

Quote :: Pre-Academy
Academy Student: Born Genius

There once was a clan in the Konohagakure Village, a clan that was very well known and known as one of the best. Otomichi was the clans’ name and this clan was stationed near the forest. Not many could travel through the village without seeing a member of this clan training. The clan was very prosperous up until the time of the nine tailed attack.

Torein’s mother, father, uncle, aunt and three cousins were the last of the clan. Torein was the last one born and was only an academy student at the time of the attack. After the attack, Torein lost his father. His mother took over his training, but along with the training began more life learning lessons about women. In the first year of his training he learned a lot about the clan. He was taught that the clan was not only very quick learners, but ninjutsu was their strongest skill. The clan learned ninjutsu that was taught specifically to the clan. Each art mimicked a spider in which they controlled when fighting.

Torein was the youngest clan member to be taught the clan's Ninjutsu. His mother had learned the arts and was the holder of the scrolls, in which the clan jutsu secrets were held. By the age of seven, Torein had begun to learn one of the many art forms of the clan. At the age of seven he had joined the Academy. Torein was made fun of because of his inability to really mold chakra too well. This like all things began to pass as he learned to mold chakra. This was something of a shock to his mother, as the clan wasn’t really built to mold chakra. Torein wasn’t the first, but he was the first Genius in the clan that could mold a bit of chakra. His mother couldn’t teach him anything about molding chakra, but that was what the Academy was for and that’s what he used it for mostly. Projectile weapons were a hardship for Torein. Hand held weapons were nothing to him and came almost like second nature.

Torein was ten years old and had already mastered the basic ninjutsi art styles he was taught in three years. This proved to his mother that he was a pure genius. Torein was going to graduate a year early, but he decided against it since he still had trouble with the chakra molding portion of his training. In the next year he had begun training for the next level of ninjutsu art styles he was beginning to learn.

Torein had grown so much since he was a child; had gotten stronger in his ability to mold chakra and his skills in Weaponry were above the bar for a kid his age. He graduated out of the Academy at the age of eleven. He didn’t get a Genin team until the age of thirteen, by this time Torein had mastered two of the many clan ninjutsu arts.

Genin Ninja: Truly Genius with Ninjutsu

A thirteen year old boy, who up until now had lost his father. He starting training under his mother, learned about his clan, and began to study the clan's ninijutsu. He was revealed to be the first of his clan able to mold chakra at his ability, and is known as a Ninjutsu Genius to many in the village. Torein was the name and he had just joined his Genin team. He has known struggle to show that he is very different from the everyday Genius.

Torein was possibly the strongest on his team in terms of speed, chakra control, and intelligence. These were a couple of the things that he had discovered while training with his team. The first month was very inactive and they spent most of their time training to tune their basic skills. At this time Torein had become something special to his team. He was something of a trapping ninja.

The team developed a strong bond amongst themselves and their sensei. This made them feel like family and their sensei was like a father to them all. Torein had begun to double task between his life at home and his ninja life. Torein was with his team for two years and during this two years time, Torein began to learn more Ninjutsu from his mother. Torein had mastered about five jutsu by the time he had been with his team for three years. In the last year years Torein had relaxed to learning only one style.

In the last year running, the team signed up for the Chuunin Selection Exams. They felt they were ready, although their sensei thought they were ready in the first year. The team had grown so much since they were first a met when the team formed together. Torein had come a long way from being the kid who was born a genius. He was now the strongest of his team and one of the strongest in his genin class.

In the first exam Torein wasn’t hassled to answer the questions, but more not to jeopardize his teams standing. The second exams was more of a game for the team, helping them get some type of live training in before the third exam. They were the fiest team to get to the tower. Even though they were fourth the team was glad to have made it. Having passed the first and second exam, the team began to feel a little confidence within themselves. The third exam proved to be somewhat of challenge. Torein made it to the final round of the tourmanent. He lost more on purpose to prove that winning isn’t everything, to his opponent and his teammates.

Torein was promoted to the rank of Chuunin at the end of the exams. This was something to celebrate he and his mother did just that. She took him and his teammates out to celebrate their promotions.

Chuunin Ninja: Life of a Otomichi

In the first two months of being a Chuunin, Torein had mastered the single art of the Otomichi that he had been training for. He then picked up two more of the clan’s ninjutsu arts. He wasn't one to overload himself with jutsu training but he stayed in the field to keep one step ahead of anything other shinobi.Though he was a hard worker Torein didn't do this to impress anybody but he did to avengre his clan.

Torein decided to stay with his team for the next two years. In that two years Torein had mastered another 3 jutsu, giving him a grand total of 10 jutsu. He was truly a genius and his personality made him a very likable person. He had spent most of his time as a Chuunin doing missions to become a Jounin ranked ninja.

Torein was a Chuunin for two years, and he spent this time training and doing missions. Mastering another three styles and giving him a grand total of thirteen ninjtsu. Torein was the strongest of his clan at his present age of eighteen. Each art he learned was named after an animal and mimicked something about that animal. Torein had begun to invent new styles based on animals.

In his fourth year, Torein was promoted to the rank of Jounin for his dedication to his village. He had completed various missions and was promoted for this. Torein was proving his skills to his mother and the rest of his clan.

Jounin Ninja: The Jounin Life

Torien has been spending most of his time as Jounin training and going on the occasional mission. His motivation is his mother, who inspires him to live for many years and be strong while doing it. Atfer a while he got his own little squad. Not having a Otomichi that he could train on his own for some reason, and this made him just a little angry. He wanted to train some of his family like only he could, but the Otomichi was a dieing clan. He decided to take what he had and make them as good as they could be. He wasnt the gloomy, dead inside person he is now, so he was fun but kept the genin on a good track. They grew fast and Torein went on many missions with them. He grw to love his genin and trained them into the best squad in konoha. Even his ex-squad mates squads envied this squad. They were quite powerful and did very well. The chuunin exams were comming up soon and Torein decided to give them a slight edge. He taught all of them to create shadow clones. The two boys could create two clones safely and the girl was a natural. She created 4 and could have probably gone to 5. They entered the chuunin exams and started the battles. They breezed through the forest area and destroyed two other squads before making it to the checkpoint.

Once finished with that they began the tournament section of the chuunin exams. There were 16 genin in this tournament and it started off well the squad defeated their first two opponents easily, but there were other powerful genin in this tournament. Both boys were eliminated in the semi-finals and one was beat by his own clan member. The lone girl faced down a crazy looking genin from the cloud village. He had a wide variety of strange lightning jutsu. She got cornered at the end of the match but surprised everyone when she made 2 shadow clones and defeated the cloud genin while he was still surprised that the clones accually had substance. She won the chuunin exams and the whole squad was promoted to chuunin together.

Turning Point
Torein was given the title of "The Silver Arachnoid" at the age of 20. He didn’t really want to be though, and abandoned his squad for another squad. Torein started to his study, experiment, and test new jutsu’s and toxins. However he was using people as test subjects instead of animals. Noises of death and suffering sounded from his home and not before long people began to investigate, the Council of Konohagakure found him guilty of torture and homicide. Torein refused to move, and so they decided on one thing. Kill him. After several failed assassination attempts, they swarmed him from his home when he went out to shop. Leaving some of his things at the doorway for him to keep everything else was gone.

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- Two paragraphs for looks and personality at least (they are good length though ^^)

- Whats the situation with clan? is it spider based? If so then the jutsu etc would make sense. If not, then they would all have to come under a clan ability.

- Please change rank to either konoha or kiri, they need more genin positions.

Quote :: Torein is the spider-like member of the Chaotic Three; he possesses four extra arms, has the ability to make webs, and even possesses a third eye. This eye improves the accuracy of his attacks to the point of being almost unavoidable. It also is used to slighly slow down the speed of faster shinobi. Torien's webbing is made of a special type of liquid that is created by infusing body liquid with chakra, making it as strong as steel. The more basic form of this webbing is excreted from his mouth, and he spits it directly from there during combat to capture opponents. Torein can create a stronger, golden webbing called Spider Sticky Gold that hardens upon contact with oxygen to metal-like quality. Because of the solid nature of this webbing, Torein can shape it into armor or weapons to aid him in battle.

Chaotic Three? Also, if you are having this only as a special characteristic then it will need to be edited into a clan ability. Have a spider hybrid character would warrant a KKG.

Web Balls - How many can be produced per psot, and what is their relative size?

Ninja Laws Spider Chain - You can create metal from your skin? I dont think so. Please remove or edit. Also, edit it from any other jutsu that it has that skill with as well. Creating metal is a seperate skill/KKG.

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Hold on a second.

Is this a new character you're making? Because if so, then we need to know so we may move your previous character application into the Archives.

Edit; Situation has been resolved.

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ImaNewbie wrote:

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Kekkei Genkai needs to be filled in. Infusing body liquid with chakra, making web is certainly Kekkei Genkai material.

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The clan will need to undergo separate approval if it is not already approved.

Age : 30 Posts : 1701

Fix everything that others have stated first.

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Aries. wrote:: Physical Appearance:
Torein has spider-like traits meant to be main aspects of his character. As such, Torein possesses six arms and a third eye. Torein has straight black hair on the top of his head, however towards the back it divulges in a pony-tail, the hair on this part of the head is spiked, jagged and unkempt. He wears the standard Konoha village head band a purple piece of fabric with a piece of metal, the usual musical note encased upon it. His seems well polished, it almost always shines. His skin is tanner than most, stretching across his entire body. In addition to this he has six, well tanned arms. It appears he has no pupils for his eyes are entirely black. On each of his wrists he has a large black piece of cylindrical fabric that stretches over them. He wears the standard Konoha village uniform, a tan piece of clothing which ends in a small rectangular flap over which is the yin-yang symbol. Underneath which is a black shirt and short black pants. He also wears a piece of purple cloth that encases his entire body, around his waist and ending in a knot in the back. Behind the villages symbol on his forehead Torein hides his third eye and only uses it when he desperatly need to. His shin tone is an unusual darker color of other, Torein takes on a tan, brownish compleshion. Torein is a evil-natured, quiet, and eager shinobi, believing that a person becomes truly strong when they have something truly important to fight for.Torein fully takes advantage of his talent for battle and incredible abilities, he applies these talents where ever possible, using his chakra and abilties for the smallest of tasks. When forced to face an opponent, Torein does all that he can to inflicting great harm, though he would rather make the battle last longer by using smaller, weaker jutsus and attacks to harm. He will only use his more powerful jutsu's when in a tight situation or if he is out matched.

That whole red bit is more like personality than appearance. Remove or put it in personality.

Aries. wrote:: Chakra Manipulation Jutsu
Name: Yari no Chakra
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: S
Description:
The user will gather chakra into their hands and once they have enough, they will form it into a rather large spear. This spear is completely made of chakra and as such, has the ability to cut through just about anything. The spear itself is very dangerous, even to hold and as such, it must be used rather quickly, usually within 2-5 seconds after making it (1 post afterward at the most). The spears greatest ability is that once it is stabbed into the enemy, it will explode into a massive amount of microscopic blades that will cut the enemy on a cellular level, causing damage to even the chakra points. Unfortunately, it has not yet been perfected, so it causes similar damage to the users arm, rendering the user unable to use handseals after continued usage. One cannot fire more than one a day unless able to do so through special means such as chakra boosts that are well over average. This technique is uncopyable by even the sharingan, making it nearly impossible to be seen in battle.

Jounin aren't allowed 'S' rank jutsu.

Aries. wrote:

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Subject: Re: Otomichi, Torein [Konoha Jounin] Mon 29 Mar 2010, 8:22 pm

Insane Speed/Strength
-Ok first off, i get its probably jsut a way to describe it which is fine but keep in mind that your character should not display "insane" speed or strength IC wise. Please give us a description of just how fast he can go at his max.

High Chakra Control
- Either remove or give a more adequate reasoning. All jounins go through many years of training. I see not why this would give you better control then average. More Detail please. Id also very much consider removing this as you have a clan with a kkg and this trait isnt KKG related at all. Typically this trait is awarded to those wtih kkgs who relate to this or to those with out a kkg.

animal empathy
- why?

Wind arrow
-C rank

Wind needles
-again, C ranke

Wind Drill
- this seems to be even more effective and devestating then Wind blade which is A ranked, make this A ranked as well please.

Wind Blade
- there is a canon tech that creates blades out of wind, it is used by Baki, it is A ranked. Even if this is just a varriant, its still going to have to be A ranked.

Age : 36 Posts : 1004

Bam!!!!!!!! complete

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You have a sub in puppetry, but you have no actual puppets in your app. I'm just curious as to why that is.

Age : 36 Posts : 1004

I was told by Hugh and Adam(I think it was Adam) that puppets were like equiptment and i can make them after this app is approved.

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Alright then...

What about your sub with Doton? You don't have any Doton jutsu on your app. Do you want to add any?

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

You may want to make atleast one puppet anyways, just to have it. You may be told that you need to train any puppets you make after this is approved before being able to use them.

Age : 36 Posts : 1004

ok cara.....But about the doton I don't want any I want to train for those jutsu

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Well, if you plan on having a puppet in the future, you should know this jutsu. It's non-elemental.

Quote :: Name: Kugutsu no Jutsu - [Puppetry Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: Kugutsu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to use a puppet to attack from afar. Using their body's chakra, the ninja emits strings of chakra that run from their fingers to the puppet. The puppet itself can be loaded with many weapons and tools, allowing the puppet master to remain hidden while the puppet moves and attacks the target.

Age : 36 Posts : 1004

ok puppets complete

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

Where? I mean, I cant read spoilers on this computer, but I can see the titles above them. There are no puppets on this app like I suggested.

Age : 36 Posts : 1004

puppets posted

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

You cant have S-Rank as a Jounin.

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Your puppets are posted incorrectly, each weapon uses the provided template, the slots just show where the weapons are, so please edit your puppet(s) accordingly.

Age : 36 Posts : 1004

done changed pupperty to kenjutsu

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

Read the weaponry guide. Weaponry encompasses Kenutsu and alows you to have a sub weapon specialty.

Age : 36 Posts : 1004

Don't want sub

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

Doesnt matter. You still need to put weaponry, with Kenjutsu. Kenjutsu is not an applicable specialty, as its a division of weaponry.

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