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PostSubject: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyMon 22 Mar 2010, 9:31 am

Name: Kayden Khyakhi
Age: 14
Gender: Male

Physical Appearance: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Darkleather
Looks: 2Paragraph
Personality: 2Paragraph
Rank: Genin
Village: Konoha

Specialty: Ninjutsu, Genjutsu
Main: Fire
Sub: Wind

Background:
(Write about your character the higher the rank the more you should write)
Childhood arc- When Kayden was just four, he, his parents, and two of his three sibilings moved from the hidden waterfall village to their ally country, the hidden leaf. Kayden didn't understand why they moved from their peaceful home, but he seemed to like it here more. He made new friends, and enjoyed his life at the Hidden Leaf.


Academy arc- Just two years after they moved to the hidden leaf, Kayden's parents enrolled him into the hidden leaf's academy. However, that's when things started to go bad. A week in, he overheard his parents talking about a 'morgue' for his 16 year-old brother, Kyadiatt-Howl. He learned later that Howl had lost his life on an S-ranked mission. Kayden then went a week without going to the place he loved so much. He finally decided to go back so he could possibly be the top student to graduate. They had to either perfect the subsitution jutsu or shadow-clone jutsu. He chose the subsitution jutsu. He could not get it right, and ended up failing. A week into his second try to graduate, he heard that his second oldest brother, Natukei , 13 (while Kayden was 12), had been killed on a missoin when he was climbing a mountain and had been crushed by a rock avalanche. Kayden still could not perfect the sub. jutsu, and failed again. A week into his third year, his sister, Laiena, had been killed...but no one ever found out how she died. This year the finals was a written exam. He had never experienced a written exam, never learned to write, so he failed again. His fourth time was a charm. He passed with ease, becoming a genin.


Rp Sample: (this is actually from a site where i am a missing-nin, so it doesnt follow my character's storyline)
Ian waited, knowing that the man would find him. Suddenly, Ian saw a kunai flying towards the man. It went straight through the man, killing him. Someone walked up to the man and knelt. He said something Ian couldn't hear, then turned and stared straight at Ian. You're next, he whispered. Ian stood up and fled.

The next night: Ian heard someone. He turned around only to see the man he saw die the day before. Along with him...was the man that had killed him.


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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyMon 22 Mar 2010, 9:47 am

Kayden's Jutsus

Spoiler:

Academy Jutsus

Spoiler:


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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyMon 22 Mar 2010, 1:32 pm

You need 3 History Arcs.

You can't have B Rank jutsu.

Your RP Sample is below the rank minimum, correct that.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyWed 24 Mar 2010, 1:04 am

Ok the deflecter is supposed to be c rank a typo probaly mistake on me but it won't let me change it cuz I'm on my iPod and it won't let me scroll down on posts so I can't change it.

What is the third arc I need?

I will try to fix those and my rp sample if I can get on my friends laptop idk
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Kayden
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyWed 24 Mar 2010, 1:20 am

Is this good?

Rp Sample:(this is from another site, therefore does not interfere with Kayden) Ian waited, knowing that the man would find him. Suddenly, Ian saw a kunai flying towards the man. It went straight through the man, killing him. Someone walked up to the man and knelt. He said something Ian couldn't hear, then turned and stared straight at Ian. You're next, he whispered. Ian stood up and fled.

The next night:


Ian heard someone. He turned around only to see the man he saw die the day before. Along with him...was the man that had killed him. Ian quickly pulled two kunai out, and threw them at the dead man. They just fell to the side when they clashed, like he was steel. Then, he flew at Ian at incredible speed. Ian pulled out a paper bomb and attached it to the dead man. It blew up, and the man was unscaved. Ian used up all of his chakra on the dead man, forgetting the killer was there. They put him in a corner. A corner he had never been in, with no chakra left...
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyWed 24 Mar 2010, 1:50 am

Edit the application with the RP sample, dont double post.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyWed 24 Mar 2010, 6:09 am

Kayden_0044 wrote:
it won't let me change it cuz I'm on my iPod and it won't let me scroll down on posts so I can't change it.

and sorry I thought I was allowed to double post in here sorry
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyWed 24 Mar 2010, 6:25 am

Two paragraphs for both personality and physical appearance please.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyThu 25 Mar 2010, 9:12 am

Kayden_0044 wrote:


Name: Dark Aura
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: This jutsu is a barrier-type of jutsu that protects you from attacks up to C Rank (when Genin use it). What you do is concentrate your chakra around your body in a circular motion. If done right, there will be a dark purple aura surrounding you.


What does this have to do with Fire?
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 03 Apr 2010, 7:00 am

Sorry i meant wind for that xD it doesn't really have o do with any of them, except for a little bit of wind and fire. sorry about that.
Oh, and when I was on my ipod, the width of the site was distorted, so it made it look like i had ALOT more written than what i did, and it also lookd like i had it in paragraphs.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 03 Apr 2010, 7:43 am

So, will you be able to edit anything on your app that needs to be fixed or do you need someone else to do so?
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyFri 16 Apr 2010, 11:48 pm

i will try to in time but because of activity issues i am unable to get on very much so again i will try but please dont put this in historical archives.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyFri 21 May 2010, 12:51 pm

More for history: 2 paragraphs per arc

Your RP sample is far below the minimum for genin ( Just restating this)

Once you correct that then we'll get jutsu
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyFri 28 May 2010, 1:33 am

Yeah I know. I am rarely active though, maybe once or twice a month, and in the last month or so, I haven't been able to get on, hence why I haven't worked on this.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 29 May 2010, 12:09 am

Would you like us to archive just for now seeing as your not going to work on it that much? When you're done with it or more active we could move it back.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyTue 01 Jun 2010, 5:25 am

Just wondering, how long shoud my rp sample be?
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyTue 01 Jun 2010, 5:53 am

Genin has a 150 word minimum for the sample. So the entire sample is up to you, but it should be an average representation of your posts. No lower than the minimum.
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Kayden
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyTue 01 Jun 2010, 4:59 pm

My RP Sample is long enough then. I used the word calculator. It's 173 words.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyTue 01 Jun 2010, 10:52 pm

Your rp sample may be long enough, but you have yet to edit the problems with your app.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyWed 02 Jun 2010, 12:47 am

personality and appearance need to be longer, 2 paragraphs each

Again, you have other things that still need fixing
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Kayden
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyFri 04 Jun 2010, 3:32 am

I'm not tying to br arrogant, but I know this. Honestly, repeating it isn't helping.
By the way, I deleted my looks and personality. I'm gonna re-do that.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 12 Jun 2010, 9:52 am

I'm surprised none of you pulled him up on the fact that he isn't using our template. Please fix that Kayden.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyTue 15 Jun 2010, 8:20 pm

Oops...sorry Adam. I will fix that but I'm on my iPod right now so I can't.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyMon 21 Jun 2010, 7:16 am

Sorry for the double post.

If it is okay, can someone archieve this? I have it saved in microsoft word and will work on it there.
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PostSubject: Re: Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] Khyakhi, Kayden [Konoha Genin] EmptyTue 22 Jun 2010, 12:54 am

Archived.
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