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Renjiro Senju
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| Subject: Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done Mon 02 Jul 2012, 1:05 am | |
| Senju, Renjiro.THE INFO. Name: Renjiro Senju Nickname: Renji Age: 12 Gender: Male Appearance:
He has bright blue eyes with medium length blonde spiked hair. He usually has his hair spikey so that it can flow through the air and gently massage his scalp. His medium length hair is sometimes left flat and wavy, however this leaves him looking quite emo looking. It looks emo because it flows down his face and covers his left eye which he doesnt like at all. This style of look is mainly only seen in the morning when he wakes up.
His typically clothes are his white judo gi top (with a Senju clan symbol behind the back of the neck) with hakama around his waist. He also wears a black sash (embroided with gold thread senju symbols) tied around his hakamas to keep the hakamas on tight and keep his gi top closed. Renjiro doesn’t have any specific identifiers like scars. This is purely due to the fact that he is vain and is only a genin.
Forehead Protector: Found wrapped around his left bicep Personality: On duty - Stern, harsh and obeys the rules to the letter Off duty - Calm, relaxed, friendly, wise, caring and considerate but always looks out for his team and his village.
He looks at everyone as equals but does look down upon those who don’t conform to the social norms. Also he is usually up beat and happy but always keeps a straight and stern face. However being in Konoha means that a ninja cannot show any emotion as it is a sign of weakness and is likely to get you picked on. Being a Senju brought up with strict guidelines and protocols to follow allow Renjiro to maintain his composed state even if in the most scariest of times and whilst in immense pain.
His eyebrows are normal but when annoyed or angry they furrow extremely. This is because of the constant pressure of being in Konoha and the immense pressure on himself from the Senju clan. Renjiros one and only fear is a member of the Shokobutsukon clan. This is because of the two clans history and differences but mainly due to the fact of they can make a senju lose control over his mokuton jutsus. Renjiro, if crossed, can become a very horrid sight releasing his wood KKG to his fullest power.
Favourite Quote/Saying: Touch my village and feel the force of my wrath Hobby: Teaching, Training and Shogi Favourite Color: Brown Fears: Watching my village be destroyed by the evil which lies beyond its gate’s Goals: To protect all which have the will of fire Clan: Senju Nindō: In life, Pride and honour means everything ...
THE NINJA. Origin: Konoha Affiliation: Konoha Rank: Genin Specialties:
Dominant: Ninjutsu Recessive: Fuuninjutsu Elemental Affinities:
Dominant: Water Recessive: Earth Kekkei Genkei: Wood Combat Style: Ninjutsu - Water, Earth and Mokuton - Long to mid ranged
Renjiro's fighting style is like the Senju ... Mixed, reserved and straight to the point. When in battle Renjiro will tactically think of all the the effects on the situation, evaluate the battlefield and come up with a plan according to those factors. He then uses the best Ninjutsu, Kempo or Fuininjutsu for the situation to achieve victory. He is very unlikely to retreat regardless of the situation (unless ordered to) Special Characteristics:
Name: Clan Prodigy Rank: C Type: Chakra Based Physical Requirements: N/A Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic. Description: A trait given to ninja who posses a innate talent for the manipulation of clan based techniques and has trained thoroughly to improve their skill. Their power over the the clans abilities has become so considerable that the ninja is now considered a young prodigy by the clan elders. Because of this, the user's clan based attacks are 20% more destructive with their increased power and size.
THE BACKGROUND. History:
Pre-Birth Renjiro s mother and father were happily married and had enough financial standing to have a child. The mother was of a small clan with no special abilities however his father was of the Senju clan with it’s wood manipulation. Regardless of this the pair decided they had reached a point in their lives that they should have a child and Renjiros mother fell pregnant. Seven months passed and all was going to plan when Renjiros father fell ill after an S ranked mission. The mission was a success however his opponent had been similar to an aburame but slightly different. The difference being instead of using insects and bug this user used mosquitoes.
Renjiro fathers fever got worse and there was nothing the Konoha medics could do without a direct antidote or a living specimen of the mosquito; neither was found. This meant Renjiros father died 2 months 22 days before Renjiro was born.
Child-hood The event of his father’s death meant his mother was a single parent and was left to bring Renjiro up alone. This wasn't a problem as of yet, but this would prove problematic for Renjiro in later life. This would become problematic because his father held the knowledge of the wood manipulation ability that should have been passed down from father to son. This left Renjiro with a vital void of clan knowledge which he would have to make up in his academy days.
During his childhood nothing really happened, he was loved by his mother and Renjiro returned that love with being a good child and loving her with all his heart. However he still felt slightly empty without a father figure there to guide him in the ways of becoming a man.
Academy Renjiro had turned 11 and was admitted into the Konoha ninja academy. He had passed the entry exams and done so within the top 25% of the entrants, which pleased his mother. However upon entering the academy it was obvious that everyone knew what clan he was from when his name was called and the isolation started. The Senju clan was well known for its Kekkei Genkai but it wasn’t loved nor accepted by most of the ninja families due to jealousy. The children didn't want to be seen familiarising themselves with the likes of Senju clan, however Renjiro knew it wasn’t their fault but it was because of their parents predeceases.
Renjiro spent most of his time self-learning about the academy justus and his clan’s special Justus from books in his father’s old library. Renjiro could escape from the real world and read as much as he liked when he was in the library but the main reason he was in there was to feel as if he was close to his father.
A few months had passed and he can complete all of the essential Justus of the academy with precise and accurate control. However what he never showed anyone was his secret learning of the clans wood manipulation jutsu that could be learnt by an academy student or even as an infant if it had the chakra to do so. Renjiros skills of the wood manipulation jutsu was good for his age however it only resulted in him being able to make small objects like cups or vases. The wood manipulation he was capable of doing was ok at best but it made Renjiro happy and made him feel closer to his father than ever before.
Genin Renjiro had graduated the academy that year with acceptable grades and honours and now the true test of his will would come into play. He requested that he wouldn't be put into a team and instead would in secret he would be training his own clan’s Justus mastering that at C ranked level one after the other until there was no more left. However Renjiro was clever and realised rather quickly that the skills of his Ninjutsu he had learnt off his sensei could be combined with his own KKG abilities and therefore continued his training from there. Two months had passed and Renjiro was bored after all this training and had put in a request to join a genin team. And this is where we continue.
Roleplay Sample:
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The day was fine and extremely hot with a lovely free flowing wind. The wind was lovely as it swept across Renjiros face and swept through his long black hair. The breeze was relaxing and calming but the heat that was intense. The heat meant that no training could be done due to the increased risk of heat stroke which annoyed Renjiro but it was nice to take a day off training. He decided to make the most of his day off by going past his ex-boyfriends house to see what he was up to. On his way his mind drifted and went to a time when the pair of them was happy together but shunned by the other shinobi because of their sexuality. It was a shame but a gay couple was a rare sight to see in the ninja world, so it was thrown upon by almost every person in the village. However Renjiro was used to this, his whole family that showed the gum manipulation Kekkei Genkai was frowned upon as if it was un-natural and dirty. However the clan believed quite the opposite, the gum manipulation was on par with the Mokuton manipulation, as gum is a pure and natural substance and its manipulation is going back to being one with nature.
He reached the door and knocked however there was no answer after two minutes of knocking and waiting so he moved on towards his room. However on the way he found his long time friend Ki Lai, a Tai-jutsu specialist, and Renjiro smiled at him. The smile was reciprocated and the pair walked together towards Renjiro room. The conversation on the way was light and funny; it was obvious the pair was quite well suited to be together however they were best of friends and nothing more. The night drew in and the pair had been talking for a period of 5 hours catching up on the stuff they had been doing since they last saw each other and filling the other in on training secrets with each other. Ki Lai yawned and Renjiro waved him goodbye with a long and heartfelt wave.
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THE ARSENAL. Academy Jutsus
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Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique Rank: E Type: Genjutsu Range: N/A Medium: Optical Element: N/A Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others. Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: 10 meters Element: N/A Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread. Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand. Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu. Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: NA Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Water Jutsus
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Name: Mizuame Nabara - Starch Syrup Capture Field Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Suiton (Water) Description: Suiton • Mizuame Nabara is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Water Element. After forming the needed handseals, the user will expel a sticky liquid from his/her gullet. This liquid can cover approximately 20 square meters. If the target runs on top of the liquid, their feet will become glued to its sticky surface. If the ninja focuses chakra to their feet before touching the surface, they can hover above and move over it without hindrance. This allows the user or a comrade to charge and attack without fear of becoming bogged down as well. Chakra Cost: 7
Name: Suirou no Jutsu - Water Prison Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Suiton (Water) Description: Suirou no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that utilizes water to imprison an opponent. The ninja forms the necessary hand seals which causes the water to form around the target into a spherical prison which only allows for limited movement. The ninja must keep their body touching the water prison to maintain its existence. If the contact is broken, the water falls away and their target is released. When combined with a solid bunshin technique, the ninja can imprison their target but still allow for a clone to attack others nearby. Chakra Cost: 9 (2 per post)
Earth Jutsus
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Name: Shinjuu Zanshu no Jutsu - Double Suicide Decapitation Technique Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: Doton • Shinjuu Zanshu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. The ninja will travel through the ground to appear below their target. They will then surprise their target by then pulling them into the ground. Once in the ground their target is thus immobilized. Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Dochuu Senkou - Underground Submarine Voyage Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: Doton • Dochuu Senkou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. After forming the needed hand seals, the user can sink below ground and quickly travel through the earth. Chakra Cost: 6 (2 per post)
Name: Doro Gaeshi - Mud Overturn Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: Doton • Doro Gaeshi is a defensive Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. After striking the ground with their hands, a large wall of earth will rise into place as defense. The defense is not perfect though, a hard or drilling impact can puncture the wall. Chakra Cost: 6
Custom Earth Jutsus
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Name: Earth Release: Mud shot Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: After forming handsigns Renjiro will mould earth chakra and spit out shots of runny but formed mud at his opponent or the floor. The mud is sticky and slimey but also has the ability to blind people if the mud gets into their eyes. Chakra Cost: 5
Clan KKG Jutsus
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Name: Mokuton: Henge | Wood Release: Transformation Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: Mokuton: Henge is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Senju clan. This jutsu is just like any other Transformation Technique. The user performs the necessary hand seals, then wood emerges and covers his entire body and a puff of smoke or chakra covers up the transformation. Once the jutsu is done, the transformation is complete. It acts more like a costume than a transformation, as the user is able to leave it behind if necessary. This transformation is able to withstand a reasonable amount of damage before dispersing. Chakra Cost: 3CP
Name: Mokuton: Semaijurin no Jutsu | Wood Release: Small Forest Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: Mokuton: Daijurin no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Senju clan.A technique that changes one's own arm into big trees. Using chakra, the tissues are transformed into trees at the cellular level. Then, by activating the trees, stimulating them to grow rapidly, they lengthen at high speed and fork into many branches. It is possible to capture the enemy with these branches and at the same time. These branches, though not sharp, are still capable of performing ranged blunt damage and bind the target. Though a powerful technique, it's not capable of destroying a solid surface very easily, and is a beginner's version of Mokuton: Daijurin no Jutsu Chakra Cost: 8CP (2 per post)
Custom KKG Jutsus
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Name: Mokuton no jutsu Rank: D-S Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: This jutsu creates a/some pillar/s of pure wood in any dimension the user wants (depends on rank, see below). This wood can emerge anywhere within a 10 meter radius of the user and can manipulated in any way or form. | D | C | B | A | S | Max Number of pillars | 1 | 4 | 9 | 22 | 45 | Max length of each pillar (meters) | 8 | 16 | 32 | 38 | 42 | Chakta Cost | 3 | 7 | 13 | 25 | 40 | Name: Wood Meld Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: A fairly simple jutsu for any of the Senju clan. Because they are able to change any part of their body into wood at will, they also utilize that ability for this technique. Essentially activating this technique will allow a Senju to “dive” into a tree where he will be hidden and safe from harm. The only way to forcibly expel the Senju from the tree is by killing the tree. The tree will protect the Senju from most harm; however, inside the tree the Senju is only capable of utilizing wood Justus. The user may also “tree hop” meaning he can physically jump out of this tree into another tree. The plus sides of this jutsu is that Taijutsu, water/earth/wind ninjutsu, Genjutsu or fuuinjutsu will not effect the user whilst they are in the tree. The down sides are that fire and lightning ninjutsu is 50% extra effective if the user is still inside the tree. Chakra Cost: 8CP Name: Mokuton: Seed Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: Renjiro will produce a seed in the palm of his hand. They are filled with his own chakra and is usually ingested by someone else which allows Renjiro to communicate with them as if he was standing next to them. This seed also allows Renjiro to know exactly what direction and how far they are away from him. Chakra Cost: 10CP Name: Mokuton: Stakes Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: Usable with any source of wood that a Senju can get his hands on, whether that be by their own making or having a physical or chakra link with other sourses of wood. The Senju will send a charge of mokuton chakra into the source of wood at which time 10 stakes will shoot from the wood source and at the opponent. The stakes will then act like shrapnel and be able to pierce skin. The stakes are shoot out of the source of wood because of the speed of which the cells within the wood is changed and manipulated creating a lot of kinetic engery in one direction. Chakra Cost: 6CP Name: Wood Release: Body shell Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: This technique requires one single snake handsign and using the stratum corneum layer of skin as instantaneous cells to use. The user will manipulate those cells and create a thick layer of wood (aprox 3 inches) all over their body. After the use of this technique the user will reverse the technique and return the wooden cells back into his stratum corneum cells. This technique protects the user against all Taijutsu, weaponary and water ninjutsu techniques B ranked and below. Wind Justus effectiveness is reduced by one rank. Earth Justus (that are not on a form of a weapon) and lightning Justus have the same amount of effectiveness. Fire Justus have one rank higher effectiveness. This technique usually takes 5 seconds to form and can only be used 3 times per topic with a 2 post length between uses. Chakra Cost: 8CP Name: Wood Release: Wooden eyes Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: This technique creates only one wooden eye with a full 360 degrees view of vision however at any one time the eye can only see 120 degrees of vision. These 120 degrees of vision are shared with only the caster of this technique and not with any other Senju or nature manipulator. The distance of this wooden eye is that of a normal human eye which is roughly 30 meters depending on weather conditions. To do this jutsu the user must clap their hands and the form the snake handsign, after this the user will open up a hand and the eye will form in their palm. This technique can be repeated many times to create a system of eyes to create a 3D image of the surroundings. To repeat this technqiue can produce ONE eye per use of this technqiue. And cannot be further away than 25 meters from the user at any one time. In addition, once the eye has been placed it cannot move on its own accord, it has to be moved by a living thing or moved by nature like the wind or earthquakes etc. Chakra Cost: 3CP
Fuuninjutsus
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Name: Sealing Style: Element Sealed Scroll Release Rank: D - S Element: N/A Description: Renjiro takes a previously used scroll, from within his Senju robe, that was used to seal any element previous water or earth jutsu within it using the Sealing Style: Written Water or Earth Sealing Scroll Activate Jutsu. He then un-rolls it so the huge Kanji in the centre of the scroll faces the enemy(s). He then forms 4 handsigns Snake, Monkey, Tiger and Snake. When he forms the last handsign the huge Kanji in the middle of the scroll rotates and then changes to RELEASE. When the Kanji changes all the ink on the scroll glows red and from the centre of the scroll the sealed jutsu is released. After the jutsu is release the RELEASE Kanji disappears however the surrounding kanji remains making the scroll useable again. All that needs to be done to reuse this scroll is to re-write the kanji SEAL again in fresh ink. To release this seal it requires the user to release one rank below its intended jutsus use of chakra. Aka if the sealed jutsu was a C ranked water jutsu it would require a D rank amount of chakra to unseal. This is because there was already a chakra cost to seal the jutsus in the first place. Empty/plain scroll ↑↑ Element Sealed Scroll Release ↑↑ Name: Sealing Style: Written Water Sealing Scroll Activate Rank: D - S Element: N/A Description: After writing the scroll with fresh ink (considering you dont have a pre-written scoll on you, otherwise just unroll your prewritten out) Renjiro will then thrusts the scroll into the air and then he forms 3 handsigns Snake, Monkey and Dragon. When he does this the ink turns red and the huge Kanji which reads SEALING in the centre of the scroll spins in the centre as a huge amount of smoke is produced and sent out at the jutsu and absorbs it/part of it. When the sealing jutsu has finished then kanji changes to WATER. Renjiro then rolls the scroll up and places it where he got the scroll originally. The chakra used to seal the oncoming jutsu must be the same as the jutsu itself aka sealing a c ranked water jutsu would take a c ranked amount of chakra. Sealing Scroll Activate ↑↑ Sealing Scroll Activate - With Water kanji ↑↑ Name: Sealing Style: Written Earth Sealing Scroll Activate Rank: D - S Element: N/A Description: After writing the scroll with fresh ink (considering you dont have a pre-written scoll on you, otherwise just unroll your prewritten out) Renjiro will then thrusts the scroll into the air and then he forms 3 handsigns Snake, Monkey and Dragon. When he does this the ink turns red and the huge Kanji which reads SEALING in the centre of the scroll spins in the centre as a huge amount of smoke is produced and sent out at the jutsu and absorbs it/part of it. When the sealing jutsu has finished then kanji changes to EARTH. Renjiro then rolls the scroll up and places it where he got the scroll originally. The chakra used to seal the oncoming jutsu must be the same as the jutsu itself aka sealing a c ranked earth jutsu would take a c ranked amount of chakra. Sealing Scroll Activate ↑↑ Sealing Scroll Activate - With Earth kanji ↑↑
Weapons
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Name: Genin Kit Rank: C Type: Supplementary Quantity: 1 Contents: 10 Kunai, 8 Shuriken, 5 Senbon, 2 Exploding Notes, 1 Exploding Pouch, Five Metres of wire/string, File, 10 Makibishi, 1 Windmill Shuriken, 2 blank small scrolls.
Name: Blank Ninja Scroll: Medium Rank: E Type: Supplementary Quantity: 4
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| | | Kiseki
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| Subject: Re: Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done Mon 02 Jul 2012, 10:29 pm | |
| You're combat style needs much more detail. You are over your 15 starting jutsu limit.
You can have one more specialty and I'd suggest fuuinjutsu or else you can't use it at all.
Add a bit to personality and appearance if possible.
You're pre-birth arc cuts off. Unless you are missing something it doesn't flow properly.
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| | | Renjiro Senju
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| Subject: Re: Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done Mon 02 Jul 2012, 10:30 pm | |
| Cheers for the feedback .... a couple of things I can opbviously see ... the guides aren't very clear but thansk for clearing a couple of points up ... will post again when edits are complete |
| | | Renjiro Senju
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| Subject: Re: Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done Tue 03 Jul 2012, 1:24 am | |
| Edited ... 15 jutsus (excluding academy jutsus) (assumption of the Fuinjutsu as one due to the natures of the sealing and releasing method being exactly the same) |
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| Subject: Re: Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done Thu 05 Jul 2012, 2:27 am | |
| Bump |
| | | Kiseki
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| Subject: Re: Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done Thu 05 Jul 2012, 2:36 am | |
| Your Fuuinjutsu seems a bit pointless, since we have this skill that does the same thing if I am reading it properly.
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Name: Chozou no Jutsu (Storage Technique) Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed. Chakra Cost: 1CP to seal, and 1CP to unseal
You need more on appearance and personality. Like more. Buff them up to two solid paragraphs broski.
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Name: Wood Meld Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: A fairly simple jutsu for any of the Senju clan. Because they are able to change any part of their body into wood at will, they also utilize that ability for this technique. Essentially activating this technique will allow a Senju to “dive” into a tree where he will be hidden and safe from harm. The only way to forcibly expel the Senju from the tree is by killing the tree. The tree will protect the Senju from most harm; however, inside the tree the Senju is only capable of utilizing wood Justus. The user may also “tree hop” meaning he can physically jump out of this tree into another tree. The plus sides of this jutsu is that Taijutsu, water/earth/wind ninjutsu, Genjutsu or fuuinjutsu will not effect the user whilst they are in the tree. The down sides are that fire and lightning ninjutsu is 50% extra effective if the user is still inside the tree. Chakra Cost: 8CP
First isssue. Wind Jutsu are raw cutting power. So Wind is still effective on the tree. Earth jutsu involves messing with the earth's foundation so it is also still effective on the tree. Further more a strong enough taijutsu user could topple that tree. So if I am reading this jutsu properly. It lets you effectively become one with the tree. Meaning all of these still will effect you. You also would need a chakra up keep since you need to sustain yourself within the tree so you don't just die and become a tree.
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- Name: Mokuton: Seed
Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: Renjiro will produce a seed in the palm of his hand. They are filled with his own chakra and is usually ingested by someone else which allows Renjiro to communicate with them as if he was standing next to them. This seed also allows Renjiro to know exactly what direction and how far they are away from him. Chakra Cost: 10CP Unless you're a sensor ninja you can't really use this to track anyone. You also don't explain how you can communicate with them. Over all you'd be better off using the ear piece radio mic in the accessories section. Even if you keep this its chakra cost is more than it should be. Go ahead and fix that.
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Name: Mokuton: Stakes Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: Usable with any source of wood that a Senju can get his hands on, whether that be by their own making or having a physical or chakra link with other sourses of wood. The Senju will send a charge of mokuton chakra into the source of wood at which time 10 stakes will shoot from the wood source and at the opponent. The stakes will then act like shrapnel and be able to pierce skin. The stakes are shoot out of the source of wood because of the speed of which the cells within the wood is changed and manipulated creating a lot of kinetic engery in one direction. Chakra Cost: 6CP
Describe the length and width of these since they can not be too big.
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Name: Wood Release: Body shell Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: This technique requires one single snake handsign and using the stratum corneum layer of skin as instantaneous cells to use. The user will manipulate those cells and create a thick layer of wood (aprox 3 inches) all over their body. After the use of this technique the user will reverse the technique and return the wooden cells back into his stratum corneum cells. This technique protects the user against all Taijutsu, weaponary and water ninjutsu techniques B ranked and below. Wind Justus effectiveness is reduced by one rank. Earth Justus (that are not on a form of a weapon) and lightning Justus have the same amount of effectiveness. Fire Justus have one rank higher effectiveness. This technique usually takes 5 seconds to form and can only be used 3 times per topic with a 2 post length between uses. Chakra Cost: 8CP
Give this an up keep cost.
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- Name: Wood Release: Wooden eyes
Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Clan: Senju Description: This technique creates only one wooden eye with a full 360 degrees view of vision however at any one time the eye can only see 120 degrees of vision. These 120 degrees of vision are shared with only the caster of this technique and not with any other Senju or nature manipulator. The distance of this wooden eye is that of a normal human eye which is roughly 30 meters depending on weather conditions. To do this jutsu the user must clap their hands and the form the snake handsign, after this the user will open up a hand and the eye will form in their palm. This technique can be repeated many times to create a system of eyes to create a 3D image of the surroundings. To repeat this technqiue can produce ONE eye per use of this technqiue. And cannot be further away than 25 meters from the user at any one time. In addition, once the eye has been placed it cannot move on its own accord, it has to be moved by a living thing or moved by nature like the wind or earthquakes etc. Chakra Cost: 3CP Despite this just being Gaara's sand eye. You need to up the cost of it and then give it an up keep to keep the connection you have with with it.
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