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Senju, Renjiro.

THE INFO.

Name: Renjiro Senju
Nickname: Renji
Age: 12
Gender: Male
Appearance:

He has bright blue eyes with medium length blonde spiked hair. He usually has his hair spikey so that it can flow through the air and gently massage his scalp. His medium length hair is sometimes left flat and wavy, however this leaves him looking quite emo looking. It looks emo because it flows down his face and covers his left eye which he doesnt like at all. This style of look is mainly only seen in the morning when he wakes up.

His typically clothes are his white judo gi top (with a Senju clan symbol behind the back of the neck) with hakama around his waist. He also wears a black sash (embroided with gold thread senju symbols) tied around his hakamas to keep the hakamas on tight and keep his gi top closed. Renjiro doesn’t have any specific identifiers like scars. This is purely due to the fact that he is vain and is only a genin.
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Forehead Protector: Found wrapped around his left bicep
Personality:
On duty - Stern, harsh and obeys the rules to the letter
Off duty - Calm, relaxed, friendly, wise, caring and considerate but always looks out for his team and his village.

He looks at everyone as equals but does look down upon those who don’t conform to the social norms. Also he is usually up beat and happy but always keeps a straight and stern face. However being in Konoha means that a ninja cannot show any emotion as it is a sign of weakness and is likely to get you picked on. Being a Senju brought up with strict guidelines and protocols to follow allow Renjiro to maintain his composed state even if in the most scariest of times and whilst in immense pain.

His eyebrows are normal but when annoyed or angry they furrow extremely. This is because of the constant pressure of being in Konoha and the immense pressure on himself from the Senju clan. Renjiros one and only fear is a member of the Shokobutsukon clan. This is because of the two clans history and differences but mainly due to the fact of they can make a senju lose control over his mokuton jutsus. Renjiro, if crossed, can become a very horrid sight releasing his wood KKG to his fullest power.

    Favourite Quote/Saying: Touch my village and feel the force of my wrath
    Hobby: Teaching, Training and Shogi
    Favourite Color: Brown
    Fears: Watching my village be destroyed by the evil which lies beyond its gate’s
    Goals: To protect all which have the will of fire

Clan: Senju
Nindō: In life, Pride and honour means everything ...

THE NINJA.

Origin: Konoha
Affiliation: Konoha
Rank: Genin
Specialties:
    Dominant: Ninjutsu
    Recessive: Fuuninjutsu

Elemental Affinities:
    Dominant: Water
    Recessive: Earth
    Kekkei Genkei: Wood

Combat Style: Ninjutsu - Water, Earth and Mokuton - Long to mid ranged

Renjiro's fighting style is like the Senju ... Mixed, reserved and straight to the point. When in battle Renjiro will tactically think of all the the effects on the situation, evaluate the battlefield and come up with a plan according to those factors. He then uses the best Ninjutsu, Kempo or Fuininjutsu for the situation to achieve victory. He is very unlikely to retreat regardless of the situation (unless ordered to)
Special Characteristics:

Name: Clan Prodigy
Rank: C
Type: Chakra Based
Physical Requirements: N/A
Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic.
Description: A trait given to ninja who posses a innate talent for the manipulation of clan based techniques and has trained thoroughly to improve their skill. Their power over the the clans abilities has become so considerable that the ninja is now considered a young prodigy by the clan elders. Because of this, the user's clan based attacks are 20% more destructive with their increased power and size.

THE BACKGROUND.

History:

Pre-Birth
Renjiro s mother and father were happily married and had enough financial standing to have a child. The mother was of a small clan with no special abilities however his father was of the Senju clan with it’s wood manipulation. Regardless of this the pair decided they had reached a point in their lives that they should have a child and Renjiros mother fell pregnant. Seven months passed and all was going to plan when Renjiros father fell ill after an S ranked mission. The mission was a success however his opponent had been similar to an aburame but slightly different. The difference being instead of using insects and bug this user used mosquitoes.

Renjiro fathers fever got worse and there was nothing the Konoha medics could do without a direct antidote or a living specimen of the mosquito; neither was found. This meant Renjiros father died 2 months 22 days before Renjiro was born.

Child-hood
The event of his father’s death meant his mother was a single parent and was left to bring Renjiro up alone. This wasn't a problem as of yet, but this would prove problematic for Renjiro in later life. This would become problematic because his father held the knowledge of the wood manipulation ability that should have been passed down from father to son. This left Renjiro with a vital void of clan knowledge which he would have to make up in his academy days.

During his childhood nothing really happened, he was loved by his mother and Renjiro returned that love with being a good child and loving her with all his heart. However he still felt slightly empty without a father figure there to guide him in the ways of becoming a man.

Academy
Renjiro had turned 11 and was admitted into the Konoha ninja academy. He had passed the entry exams and done so within the top 25% of the entrants, which pleased his mother. However upon entering the academy it was obvious that everyone knew what clan he was from when his name was called and the isolation started. The Senju clan was well known for its Kekkei Genkai but it wasn’t loved nor accepted by most of the ninja families due to jealousy. The children didn't want to be seen familiarising themselves with the likes of Senju clan, however Renjiro knew it wasn’t their fault but it was because of their parents predeceases.

Renjiro spent most of his time self-learning about the academy justus and his clan’s special Justus from books in his father’s old library. Renjiro could escape from the real world and read as much as he liked when he was in the library but the main reason he was in there was to feel as if he was close to his father.

A few months had passed and he can complete all of the essential Justus of the academy with precise and accurate control. However what he never showed anyone was his secret learning of the clans wood manipulation jutsu that could be learnt by an academy student or even as an infant if it had the chakra to do so. Renjiros skills of the wood manipulation jutsu was good for his age however it only resulted in him being able to make small objects like cups or vases. The wood manipulation he was capable of doing was ok at best but it made Renjiro happy and made him feel closer to his father than ever before.

Genin
Renjiro had graduated the academy that year with acceptable grades and honours and now the true test of his will would come into play. He requested that he wouldn't be put into a team and instead would in secret he would be training his own clan’s Justus mastering that at C ranked level one after the other until there was no more left. However Renjiro was clever and realised rather quickly that the skills of his Ninjutsu he had learnt off his sensei could be combined with his own KKG abilities and therefore continued his training from there. Two months had passed and Renjiro was bored after all this training and had put in a request to join a genin team. And this is where we continue.


Roleplay Sample:
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THE ARSENAL.

Academy Jutsus
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Water Jutsus
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Earth Jutsus
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Custom Earth Jutsus
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Clan KKG Jutsus
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Custom KKG Jutsus
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Fuuninjutsus
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Weapons
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FACE CLAIM.

Character Claim: Vongola Primo (Katekyo Hitman Reborn)
Source: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Reborn!
Image URL:http://s3.zerochan.net/Vongola.Primo.Giotto.240.1033125.jpg


Last edited by Renjiro Senju on Tue 03 Jul 2012, 1:22 am; edited 4 times in total
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PostSubject: Re: Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done EmptyMon 02 Jul 2012, 10:29 pm

You're combat style needs much more detail. You are over your 15 starting jutsu limit.

You can have one more specialty and I'd suggest fuuinjutsu or else you can't use it at all.

Add a bit to personality and appearance if possible.

You're pre-birth arc cuts off. Unless you are missing something it doesn't flow properly.

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PostSubject: Re: Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done EmptyMon 02 Jul 2012, 10:30 pm

Cheers for the feedback .... a couple of things I can opbviously see ... the guides aren't very clear but thansk for clearing a couple of points up ... will post again when edits are complete
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Edited ... 15 jutsus (excluding academy jutsus) (assumption of the Fuinjutsu as one due to the natures of the sealing and releasing method being exactly the same)
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PostSubject: Re: Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done Renjiro Senju [Konoha Genin] Done EmptyThu 05 Jul 2012, 2:36 am

Your Fuuinjutsu seems a bit pointless, since we have this skill that does the same thing if I am reading it properly.

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Name: Chozou no Jutsu (Storage Technique)
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed.
Chakra Cost: 1CP to seal, and 1CP to unseal

You need more on appearance and personality. Like more. Buff them up to two solid paragraphs broski.

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Name: Wood Meld
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Mokuton (Wood Release)
Clan: Senju
Description: A fairly simple jutsu for any of the Senju clan. Because they are able to change any part of their body into wood at will, they also utilize that ability for this technique. Essentially activating this technique will allow a Senju to “dive” into a tree where he will be hidden and safe from harm. The only way to forcibly expel the Senju from the tree is by killing the tree. The tree will protect the Senju from most harm; however, inside the tree the Senju is only capable of utilizing wood Justus. The user may also “tree hop” meaning he can physically jump out of this tree into another tree. The plus sides of this jutsu is that Taijutsu, water/earth/wind ninjutsu, Genjutsu or fuuinjutsu will not effect the user whilst they are in the tree. The down sides are that fire and lightning ninjutsu is 50% extra effective if the user is still inside the tree.
Chakra Cost: 8CP

First isssue. Wind Jutsu are raw cutting power. So Wind is still effective on the tree. Earth jutsu involves messing with the earth's foundation so it is also still effective on the tree. Further more a strong enough taijutsu user could topple that tree. So if I am reading this jutsu properly. It lets you effectively become one with the tree. Meaning all of these still will effect you. You also would need a chakra up keep since you need to sustain yourself within the tree so you don't just die and become a tree.



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Name: Mokuton: Seed
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Mokuton (Wood Release)
Clan: Senju
Description: Renjiro will produce a seed in the palm of his hand. They are filled with his own chakra and is usually ingested by someone else which allows Renjiro to communicate with them as if he was standing next to them. This seed also allows Renjiro to know exactly what direction and how far they are away from him.
Chakra Cost: 10CP

Unless you're a sensor ninja you can't really use this to track anyone. You also don't explain how you can communicate with them. Over all you'd be better off using the ear piece radio mic in the accessories section. Even if you keep this its chakra cost is more than it should be. Go ahead and fix that.

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Name: Mokuton: Stakes
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Mokuton (Wood Release)
Clan: Senju
Description: Usable with any source of wood that a Senju can get his hands on, whether that be by their own making or having a physical or chakra link with other sourses of wood. The Senju will send a charge of mokuton chakra into the source of wood at which time 10 stakes will shoot from the wood source and at the opponent. The stakes will then act like shrapnel and be able to pierce skin. The stakes are shoot out of the source of wood because of the speed of which the cells within the wood is changed and manipulated creating a lot of kinetic engery in one direction.
Chakra Cost: 6CP

Describe the length and width of these since they can not be too big.



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Name: Wood Release: Body shell
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Mokuton (Wood Release)
Clan: Senju
Description: This technique requires one single snake handsign and using the stratum corneum layer of skin as instantaneous cells to use. The user will manipulate those cells and create a thick layer of wood (aprox 3 inches) all over their body. After the use of this technique the user will reverse the technique and return the wooden cells back into his stratum corneum cells. This technique protects the user against all Taijutsu, weaponary and water ninjutsu techniques B ranked and below. Wind Justus effectiveness is reduced by one rank. Earth Justus (that are not on a form of a weapon) and lightning Justus have the same amount of effectiveness. Fire Justus have one rank higher effectiveness. This technique usually takes 5 seconds to form and can only be used 3 times per topic with a 2 post length between uses.
Chakra Cost: 8CP

Give this an up keep cost.

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Name: Wood Release: Wooden eyes
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Mokuton (Wood Release)
Clan: Senju
Description: This technique creates only one wooden eye with a full 360 degrees view of vision however at any one time the eye can only see 120 degrees of vision. These 120 degrees of vision are shared with only the caster of this technique and not with any other Senju or nature manipulator. The distance of this wooden eye is that of a normal human eye which is roughly 30 meters depending on weather conditions. To do this jutsu the user must clap their hands and the form the snake handsign, after this the user will open up a hand and the eye will form in their palm. This technique can be repeated many times to create a system of eyes to create a 3D image of the surroundings. To repeat this technqiue can produce ONE eye per use of this technqiue. And cannot be further away than 25 meters from the user at any one time. In addition, once the eye has been placed it cannot move on its own accord, it has to be moved by a living thing or moved by nature like the wind or earthquakes etc.
Chakra Cost: 3CP

Despite this just being Gaara's sand eye. You need to up the cost of it and then give it an up keep to keep the connection you have with with it.


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Sorry this will take awhile, works being an arse with the london Olypics shit which means i get up goto work, get in, eat sleep, repeat
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