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| Subject: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Fri 14 Sep 2012, 4:34 am | |
| Aburame, Shuhei.THE INFO. Name: Aburame, Shuhei Nickname: The Green Lotus Age: 16 Gender: Male Appearance: Shuhei is about the average height for an 16 year old boy. Standing to be about 5’11 and weighing about 140 pounds the young Shuhei is a very attractive looking boy. With mid-long dark blue hair that pours down his ears, the young man is different from the other Aburame clan members. Unlike Aburame clan members Shuhei does not use the signature glasses than the usual average person in the clan as they usually bother his burn marks, often or most of the time also protecting his face and preventing the harsh training methods from getting to him. Though always protecting himself from getting scratches on his face, ironically enough his face is completely burnt, or at least half way. The does not wear his clan goggles that the usual clan possesses to show to the public, only leaving a perfect half burnt face and dense bone structure. With dreamy dark gray eyes the young man keep everyone on a dreamy state when coming to eye contact with him. He has dark eye brows and his village head band protector to cover them. Coming down to his torso the young Aburame clansmen usually wears a simple green t shirt with the Konogakure sign on it colored in black, as a form of representation to any place he goes, along with ankle length white pants.
When on duty the young man wears his mid long dark blue hair slightly the same as a normal occasion as the hair flows willingly as the air hits it and, and a small blue bang coming down his forehead. When on duty he wears a black fish net protector while he also wears a green Konohakure flap jacket and a pair of dark green long pants, and a pair of shinobi sandals, and wears his Konohagakure head band on his forehead. On duty the young man seems to be more mature and older to be exact. Allowing him to even pass as even a chuunin when it comes to looks. Very professional dressed the young man is always very accurate when it comes to his clothing and appearance. Being a Taijutsu user Shuhei has a very well toned body while also having broad shoulders that allow him easy movements along with his strong exercised legs.
Forehead Protector: Shuhei's forehead protector is where is normally placed, on his forehead. He tends to wear his forehead protector on his forehead when going on missions. While when he is off duty he has it stitched to his right sleeve of his shirt.
Personality: Shuhei is slightly shy. But only to those he does not know. He don’t speak much and is always finding a way to avoid talking or having a friend. Because of this he tends to blow away those who try to befriend with him. Not because he doesn’t like them but because he does not thrust them. Although he had somewhat consider some as his friends. These people who have risked their lives to protect him are the ones that he wants as his friends. He is smarter than someone would think. Someone that know him should know that he’s no one to be messing around with. He takes his training very seriously and he never thinks of missing his training. He tends to train lot and more than the average person to be exact. Because of this he is well built and physically strong. In his home with his family he is careful and cares about anyone. Often working and having family reunions together. And the whole clan itself it’s a good clan all together. His whole life itself is a lie though. Ever since an incident at his house he has lost trust towards everyone. Even holding a big grudge against the village.
In battle his personality changes. He tends to move fast as well as act fast. He never likes to stay on one spot and always like to move around his opponent to confuse him. In battle is where his mind most shines. As he tends to show out his true intelligence to other people by performing his moves and actions better than everyone in the field. He likes to show his moves with style aside from all that, and every time he sets his mind on something he does it. Because he has slight more knowledge than most kids at his age, he can perform strategies or find the opponent weaknesses in matter of minutes. And by the middle of the match or before, it most likely that Shuhei has found a weakness.
Clan: Aburame Nindō: ~ The more knowledge you have of your opponent the greater the advantage.
~ You will never catch me with my guard down.
THE NINJA. Origin: Fire Country Affiliation: Konohagakure no Sato Rank: C Rank Specialties: Ninjutsu / Taijutsu Elemental Affinities: Doton / Raiton
Combat Style: Shuhei is a very cautious person when it comes to battling. Meaning Shuhei doesn't approach his opponent without knowing what he is getting into. He likes to study his opponents moves, reactions and even way of speech. Because he is very skilled in the art of Taijutsu in a close range combat his fighting style involves a lot of close range moves, though having his ninjutsu and his kikauchu bugs allow him to fight in both long range and close range combat. Having the Aburame signature control over Kikauchu bugs the young shuhei uses these to scan his surroundings, often caught talking to his precious bugs. His bugs to him can act as a radar around his his surroundings as he can be informed by the bugs are in a stressed situation or if anyone is coming his way. His movements being a taijutsu specialized are with burst but very clean from every angle you look at the young Shuhei. Though Ninjutsu is his strong specialty, he can use his Taijutsu just as effectively and on any ocassion. Having a very calm and cautious approach in battle he likes to also set his opponents in awkward positions in a battle where it gives him an advantage over his opponent. His bugs are clearly a big part of his strategy. Not only can they drain the opponents chakra they also reproduce in large numbers in matters of seconds allowing Shuhei to have almost to unlimited set of kikauchu bugs if female bugs still reside on group.
Special Characteristics: High IQ - Spoiler:
Name: High IQ Rank: C Type: Mental Based Physical Requirements: N/A Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic. Description: The ninja innately possesses a high IQ which gives them great practical and analytical prowess. They have vast knowledge in nearly all forms of combat giving them a upper hand when faced with nearly any attack with being able to execute split second counters. With their high IQ the user can determine weak spots in attacks and defenses and can overcome nearly any obstacle. Like the obvious benefits of being very smart, the ninja is well regarded for their great mathematical and thinking abilities.
THE BACKGROUND. History: Past Arc: Shuhei was born in the hidden leaf village in one of the coldest days that have ever happened. By two poor shinobis that lived there. Both poor, but still did everything to get Shuhei what he needed to be as healthy as a pineapple. Like many Aburame clansmen he was born on the fire country. A sudden burst of tears came upon Shuhei's mother. She screamed in pain as she hold on to her stomach. His father knew that she had to deliver the baby safely therefore he took her to the nearest village. The hidden leaf village. There she was taken and cared for. She delivered Shuhei and they both stayed there as that was the village that Shuhei had been born at. Although they wanted him to be born in a better village, it was not be helped that Shuhei was born in the Leaf.
As Shuhe grew bigger, he was tarined by his mother and father at the same time. They knew that they had to train him well if he wanted to survive in this terrible village too. And them both being former Jounins of Konohagakure it would be a great training for him to start off with. As he reached the age of 6 he already had learneed a few jutsu of his own. Although he tended not to talk much, as he was raised somewhat and sometimes treated badly. Both his parents were pretty strict and when he did something wrong he would pay with his blood. Let alone the marks of burn marks he covers up with his clothing. His knuckle marks show great and hard work. But this had somewhat traumatized him in the past few years. Although he has been stopped being treated badly. He still thinks of the horror nights he went through, although he knew that this was just for the best. Till this day forward he barely speaks or make an emotion.
As he reached the age of 10 with endless training, he had already had a chakra control of a genin. Or even a better chakra manipulation, with his bugs. He had already started using his bugs therefore he himself along with his father and mother’s permission enlisted himself in the academy. And yet he has seen a toy or a smile from nobody in the leaf village but his mothers. His mother was great women, although sometimes she took training too seriously ending the situation with a smack on Shuhei's face.
Academy Arc: As he reached the academy arc, as expected he confronted many problems as he walked along the road of a ninja. Although as expected he would clear them up by either fighting or just ignoring the problem. At this point of age he had received the same rage his parents had and showed towards him. As when he had the opportunity to kill someone he would do it no matter what has happened. He shows no respect but only to his elders and upper level ninja. Although it doesnt mean he would go along carrying stuff for them when they want to.
After three long years of pain and struggles he finally graduated form the academy school. At this point he had made himself stronger physically and mentally. And when fighting he always had a strategy to get himself out of the situation or to end it. And as he finally turned genin he began to think of the team he would have and the jounin itself.
Burnout Arc: After just weeks of graduating from the academy had begun to train even harder. Though at one point he got home and decided to take some rest, though this was the day when it would change his life completely. Upon the cold dark night an unexpected fire engulfed the whole building where his family resided at along with him. Slowly but at a steady pace the fire began to block all entrances of the housing area leaving no place for the family to escape from. This was rare as fires just don't pop out of nowhere at night. Shuhei struggled to get out and after sometime he managed to get himself out but no luck for his parents. He remained in a comma, with 80% his body severely burned his mind began to think of the possibilities of how the fire even started. And the young man only came to one conclusion, the village had started it. Ever since that day, his loyalty, or even thrust had gone to hell. His life was completely hopeful and without a purpose. For the now being he would only become a genin and let destiny make his desicions.
Roleplay Sample: A rather small yawn could be heard across the hall as the sun began to rise against the horizon. The young male getting up from his bed as he looked around at his small but comfortable room. It was true what they say about the Moon country, just the glamour, and fresh air somehow put the village of Konoha to shame. Just the smell of the salty water traveled for miles into the city from the very docks where it had al started. It all seemed just the day before that the young man had arrived on a boat form konoha. He was actually terrified of even getting in the boat, but if he was about to watch the now famous Moon Country Tournament he would have to get in it. It was a rough trip, and Sensato would most likely agree that he would not get on a boat once more. He wasn’t too fund standing on top of a wooden boat, nor the less in the middle of the ocean where no one can set up a rescue?
With all thoughts aside the young man headed to a small restroom where he cleaned his face, mouth and soaked his blue long hair that lay down his spine. Picking up a small towel as he began to walk out of the room, shirtless the young man began to walk across the hallway down to the small hot spring of what it seemed more like a giant hot tub to his understanding. Shaking his long hair, releasing any excessive water form it, the young man with much elegance began to dry his hair, more like one of those head and shoulder commercials. “I need to relax.” The young man said to himself as a big smile came across from ear to ear as he dropped his towel in the middle of the hall and stood in front of the door that lead to the hot springs.
The young man as he began to open the door began to remember past battles in the tournament. He had come here for one thing, not to join the tournament but to watch the tournament and its genin candidate. It was clear that he was not in shape for such thing; first he would need training, lots of training before he can take on such challenge. Though with the mind of possibly even a Chuunin, the young man was not physically prepared for such event. He was there for a simple reason, to analyze and even target potential genin, either for a team or even a rival.
The thoughts were then erased as he slid the decorated door, as a cloud of vapor hit his body causing him to smell the fresh air inside the place. Just the aroma of the place made his body relax even more. The smell and area just carried his body inside with ease, his body somewhat giving up to the place as he watched his surroundings. From the hot springs to even bamboo trees placed in several locations around him making this place the most relaxing and close to nature as it can be. A large sigh of relief would escape the young man’s mouth as he headed down the small pathway of rocks down to the water. Looking around he would see another person, most likely a genin as he had seen him wandering around the tournament area as well. Long blonde hair, and actually from his looks to be about 11 years of age, though his name did not come to his mind as he took a glance at anything else that would remember him from the village. The young boy hesitated as he tried to enter the hot tub with this man on it first.
“Mind If I join you?” Sensato said as he sat in top of one of the large rocks, as his foot relaxed at the surface of the water. With short white trunks the young man was ready to get in, and though like most occasions he would get in even if the other didn’t like it, today was different and was all about relaxation and maybe have a word with this interesting young man.
FACE CLAIM. Character Claim: Shuhei Source: Drawn by Jellybeanbeam Image URL: http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/289/f/6/shuhei_without_hadband_by_nekoaixxoxo-d5i1rwe.png
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| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Sat 15 Sep 2012, 3:19 am | |
| THE ARSENAL.
- Academy Techniques:
Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique Rank: E Type: Genjutsu Range: N/A Medium: Optical Element: N/A Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others. Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: 10 meters Element: N/A Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread. Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand. Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes halfthe chakra cost of the Genjutsu. Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosentheir bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Chozou no Jutsu • Storage Technique Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed. Chakra Cost: 1 to seal; 1 to unseal.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. Ifnot enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
- Taijutsu:
Name: Konoha Reppuu - Leaf Violent Wind Rank: D Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: The move here is a simple rear spinning low kick, but a strong enough user can send a large adult flying as if they weighed nothing. The goal is to throw the enemy off balance, and deal damage to the lower half of their body. Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Konoha Kage Buyou - Leaf Shadow Dance Rank: D Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: Konoha Kage Buyou is a Taijutsu technique that is used to position a ninja's opponent into a vulnerable aerial position. The ninja will first quickly appear below their opponent, then with a switch upper kick they will launch their target into the air. The ninja will then jump into the air to "shadow" the target with the target's back to their chest. This move is used before preforming "Omote Renge - Front Lotus" or "Shishi Rendan - Lion Combo". Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Konoha Dai Senkou - Leaf Great Light Rotation Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: The user charges at their opponent and unleashes a powerful lateral kick aiming at the head that will spin his or her opponent away. This technique can certainly cause a head ache . Chakra Cost: 8
Name: Konoha Dai Senpuu - Leaf Great Whirlwind Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: A series of kicking attacks, starting from a low kick and linking into a middle kick and high kick then finishing off with a heel drop. As the rotation speed picks up the user gains buoyancy, which they use to shift into gradually higher attacks. Chakra Cost: 5
Name: Konoha Raiken - Leaf Thunder Fist Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: The user will spin to gain momentum and then lay a powerful strike into his or her opponent via punch. Chakra Cost: 6
Name: Konoha Shoufuu - Leaf Rising Wind Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: This jump uses the entire body as a spring by amassing power in the legs before kicking upwards. Because the power of the kick from the ground is instantly converted into a blow, the enemy hit with this attack will be launched high into the sky. Chakra Cost: 5
Name: Shishi Rendan - Lion Combo Rank: C Type: Taijutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: The user first uses the "Konoha Kage Buyou - Leaf Shadow Dance" to manuever his/her opponent in a vulnerable aerial position. While shadowing his/her opponent, the user will attempt to strike them from a vulnerable angle. If he/she is unable to make a clean strike, he/she will strike anyway as a feint, to draw his/her target's attention and defense to one area. The user can then strike the undefended area and begin knocking them downwards towards the ground. As the enemy falls back to the earth, the user will deftly rotate his/her body around to deliver a full force kick to their chest. Chakra Cost: 7
- Elemental.Doton:
Name: Shinjuu Zanshu no Jutsu - Double Suicide Decapitation Technique Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: Doton • Shinjuu Zanshu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. The ninja will travel through the ground to appear below their target. They will then surprise their target by then pulling them into the ground. Once in the ground their target is thus immobilized. Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Doro Gaeshi - Mud Overturn Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: Doton • Doro Gaeshi is a defensive Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. After striking the ground with their hands, a large wall of earth will rise into place as defense. The defense is not perfect though, a hard or drilling impact can puncture the wall. Chakra Cost: 6
Name: Doryuusou - Earthen Rising Spears Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: This technique lets the user condense mud or stone, from the ground, and shape them into spikes that will protrude from the ground in order to skewer the target. The spikes are brittle, and can be broken with a strong blow or tough defense. Chakra Cost: 7
Name: Iwa no Ken . Fists of Rock Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu-Tai Range: Close Element: Doton Description: A jutsu not really requiring the needed handsigns, but instead the simple touch of the palm against earth, and the jutsu will begin once chakra is implanted onto the earthy surface. A layer of hard rock will quickly surround the hands of the user in the form of rocky gloves. 2 CP to keep it activated per post. Chakra Cost:5
Name: Retsudo Tenshou - Revolving Split Earth Palm Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: Doton • Retsudo Tenshou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. This technique allows the ninja to control nearby stone and rock. When the ninja forms the needed handseals and slams their palm to the ground, surrounding rock will begin to churn and twist up crushing all those trapped within it. Chakra Cost: 9
- Elemental.Raiton:
Name: Senkou Ban ( Flash Bang ) Rank: D Rank Type: Ninjutsu Range: Mid Element: Raiton Description: Without the use of hand signs the user will clap both their hands together as a bright white light will blind anyone within 7 meters of distance. The blinding will last for about 1 post before anyone within reach can regain their vision. The technique is used for escaping purposes or to gain a small opening to attack the opponent while he is blinded by the light. Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Seiteki Rasshou ( Static Rush ) Rank: D Rank Type: Ninjutsu Range: Self Element: Raiton Description: By manipulating raiton chakra the user will charge his nervous system with tiny shocks of electricity, allowing him to increase his speed, thus boosting him about 5% faster and able to react to sudden movements when needed. This is all only for a sudden quick movement. The effect fades out few seconds after the jutsu was activated. Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Dendou Touza ( Electric Current ) Rank: C Rank Type: Ninjutsi Range: Close-Mid Element: Raiton Description: A lightning Ninjutsu technique. After performing the necessary hand signs. The user will create a negative charge of electricity to be charged around the hands. By placing the hands on a water source the user can use the water as a conductor and shock anything that is below it or in top of the water. Paralyzing the opponent for 1 post. Only objects that are down below 15 feet in range gets shocked. If the user were to be in the body of water, the shock will travel to his body too therefore shocking both. Chakra Cost: 8
Name: Seiteki Jiyuu ( Static Freedom ) Rank: C Rank Type: Ninjutsu Range: Self Element: Raiton Description: Without the use of hand signs and only the manipulation of raiton chakra the user will create a large current electricity formed inside with his muscles creating shocking pain to the user. This is used to break out of genjutsu of the same or below their own rank. As a result after breaking free of the genjutsu, the user will feel minor numbness on their body. Making it slightly difficult to move like before. Chakra Cost: 6
- Aburame.Techniques:
Name: Mushi Seichuu| Insect Control Rank: C-A Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Description: Mushi Seichuu is a technique used by the members of the Aburame clan. Clan members are able to product a special species of insects from their bodies called kikaichū which are able to attack and devour the chakra of their victims. This is a basic technique which allows the Aburame to call forth their inherit insects to allow them to move, shape, and perform any act they see fit. The amount of insects one is able to produce and manipulate is relatively the size of a human. C-Ranked Aburame cancontrol kakaichu within close range, B-Ranked at Mid range, and finally A-Ranked can manipulate their bugs up to 30m away. When their bugs come in contact with a target, they are able to consume their chakra and cause physical harm from their bites. For each attack from this technique, the target's chakra is reduced by 4. Chakra Cost: C-rank: 5 (2 per post) B-rank: 10 (3 per post) A-rank: 20 (4 per post)
Name: Hijutsu: Mushiyose | Secret Technique: Insect Gathering Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m ~ 5m) Description: Hijutsu: Mushiyose is a technique used by the members of the Aburame clan. By simply touching a surface with their palm and fingers, the user releases a small web of chakra that draws bugs to that location. Chakra Cost: 2CP
Name: Hyu-man Hyou no Jutsu | Human Cocoon Technique Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m) Description: Hyu-man Hyou no Jutsu is a technique used by the members of the Aburame clan. The user creates a waterproof cocoonaround themselves most likely to spy or hide from the enemy. The user can also use the cocoon as a "sleeping bag". Chakra Cost: 3CP
Name: Fists of Bugs Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu-Tai Range: Close Element: N/A Description: An Aburame technique, by controling kikauchu bugs the user will surround their fists in a layer of bugs until it has the appearance of a pair of gloves. These can be used as a Taijutsu weapon. By coming into contact with the opponent, the Kikauchu bugs will also use their own abilities and suck 2CP everytime a hit is connected. 2 CP for every post with the gloves is needed to be used to keep the technique activated. Chakra Cost:5
Name: Mushi Kame no Jutsu | Insect Jar Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m ~ 5m) Description: Mushi Kame no Jutsu is a technique used by the members of the Aburame clan. This jutsu uses the Kikaichū bugs living in the user's body as a shield by having them fly in a dome shape at high speed. The dome is strong enough to destroy incoming attacks, but can be disrupted with sufficient explosive force. In addition, the Kikaichū bugs are able to feed on the chakra of any being they comes in contact with their dome, destroying 5CP in the process. Opposing forces above C-rank that come in contact with this dome will break through it. Chakra Cost: 7CP [2 per post](Additional 3CP to reform)
Name: Tsumu Hensei | Spindle Formation Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m) Description: Tsumu Hensei is a technique used by the members of the Aburame clan. The user has their Kikaichū bugs attack the target in a spiralling motionto confuse the target as well as drain their chakra. Those who fall victim to this technique loses 5CP. Chakra Cost: 6
Equipment
- Spoiler:
Name: Genin Kit Rank: C Quantity: 1 Contents: 6 Kunai [6], 10 Shuriken [5], 9 Senbon [3], 10 Makibishi [2], 4 Exploding Notes [4], 3 Exploding Pouches [1], 3 Smoke Pellets [1], 12m String [4], 1 Windmill Shuriken [5], 1 File & Scissor [1].
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| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Sat 15 Sep 2012, 4:51 am | |
| Completion Bump |
| | | Chris
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| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Sat 15 Sep 2012, 4:35 pm | |
| Please expand the Combat Style and Appearance.
Good work so far though Looks very approval. |
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| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Sat 15 Sep 2012, 6:28 pm | |
| Sorry mate. No sharingan for the aburame
- Quote :
- Shuhei is a very cautious person when it comes to battling. Meaning Shuhei doesn't approach his opponent without knowing what he is getting into. He likes to study his opponents moves, reactions and even way of speech. Because he is very skilled in the art of weaponry such with katana and other sharp objects used in close range combat his fighting style involves a lot of close range moves, though having his ninjutsu and his kikauchu bugs allow him to fight in both long range and close range combat.
Baad Baaadd. You can't be skilled in weaponry if you have taijutsu silly. You need to either edit that out of switch tai for weaponry. Also beneath the mask you gotta look like young obito since ya'know. You are 16. I'm also not so sure on the current face claim since he was minato's height. A grown man's. Which we still haven't specified if that was obito or Madara but either way he was a giant. I doubt that you could be a giant. You also need to list your height and weight in appearance.
You can only have 15 jutsu excluding academy techniques. Meaning you gotta reduce the number of taijutsu, doton jutsu, and clan jutsu to a total of 15
- Quote :
- Nindō: "Never thrust anyone, make them believe thatstrike they have your thrust"
Idon'teven. Reword this or clarify it please.
Your appearance and personality is fine. Feel no pressure to increase the length.
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Character Claim: Tobi/Obito Uchiha Source: Naruto Image URL: http://th08.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2012/040/0/c/tobi_by_sargentolimon-d4p5txx.png - Quote :
You got a broken link attached to your face claim. |
| | | Ace
Age : 31 Posts : 1036
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Sat 15 Sep 2012, 7:39 pm | |
| Yes I guess he would look like young Obito. But with burn marks around where he got them grown up that he got crushed.
Besides its just a pic with a mask, it could be a whole different look beneath it. Doesn't exactly have to be like him . But yeah he kinda does. The current pic claim is fine. Its just a picture I am using. Its not like I'm using the actual Canon Obito.
And who said I had sharingan? O.o
The link also seems to work fine.
Sorry about the weaponry thing. I was gonna make him weaponry but then changed my mind.
I will be taking out some of the jutsu later on. Lil busy over here |
| | | Kiseki
Posts : 1216
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Sat 15 Sep 2012, 7:53 pm | |
| No um.
Character Claim: Tobi/Obito Uchiha Source: Naruto Image URL: http://th08.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2012/040/0/c/tobi_by_sargentolimon-d4p5txx.png[quote]
This. I can't quote it or else it auto fixes. But yeah. That is broken.
Anyways the sharingan thing was a joke since your picture shows the sharingan. |
| | | Ace
Age : 31 Posts : 1036
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Sun 16 Sep 2012, 1:54 am | |
| - Everything fixed. |
| | | Kiseki
Posts : 1216
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Sun 16 Sep 2012, 6:46 pm | |
| - Quote :
- Nindō: "Never thrust anyone, make others believe that they have your thrust"
You mean trust no?
- Quote :
- Combat Style: Shuhei is a very cautious person when it comes to battling. Meaning Shuhei doesn't approach his opponent without knowing what he is getting into. He likes to study his opponents moves, reactions and even way of speech. Because he is very skilled in the art of Taijutsu in a close range combat his fighting style involves a lot of close range moves, though having his ninjutsu and his kikauchu bugs allow him to fight in both long range and close range combat. Having the Aburame signature control over Kikauchu bugs the young shuhei uses these to scan his surroundings, often caught talking to his precious bugs. His bugs to him can act as a 360 degree vision around his his surroundings as he can feel if the bugs are in a stressed situation or if anyone is coming his way.
Expand a bit please. |
| | | Ace
Age : 31 Posts : 1036
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Sun 16 Sep 2012, 6:59 pm | |
| Right
Anyways added a few more sentences to style. |
| | | Enzo
Age : 29 Posts : 1797
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Sun 16 Sep 2012, 9:49 pm | |
| Would you care to resize your face claim image please? It's stretching the screen and the board to the right. - Code:
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<img src="URL TO IMAGE" height="PIXELS" width="PIXELS"> |
| | | Ace
Age : 31 Posts : 1036
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Sun 16 Sep 2012, 9:58 pm | |
| Done please approve
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| | | Kite
Age : 34 Posts : 1209
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Tue 18 Sep 2012, 8:56 am | |
| So I have to ask, is English your primary language? In any case, this application has many silly grammatical errors that could be alleviated if you were to go and proof read your app a few times. I'm not going to bother pointing out every mistake as there are a lot, nor am I going to hold you back on the basis of grammatical errors simply due to the fact that I doubt you'll do as I ask in regards to proof reading.
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- Quote :
- Shuhei wears his long forgotten about headband around his waist. The konoha symbol long ago scratched out as Shuhei is now a Missing Ninja.
Uh no, you aren't a missing ninja, please fix this. No village ninja would be walking around the village with a scratched out headband anyway so this needs to be changed.
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- Quote :
- Ever since an incident at his house he has lost thrust towards everyone.
As I said earlier, I'm not going to point out every mistake but seeing as Kiseki pointed out a similar error earlier in the process, I thought this one was worth mentioning. It is near the bottom of the first paragraph in your personality section.
- Please link your clan section to your clan page (Aburame page)
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- Quote :
- His bugs to him can act as a 360 degree vision around his his surroundings as he can feel if the bugs are in a stressed situation or if anyone is coming his way.
Your bugs do not grant you 360 vision. Your bugs aren't linked to your sense in that way. It is fair to say your bugs can act as scouts who can go out and gather information and come back and tell you but as far as I know there is no sharing of senses between an Aburame and his insects so you are not able to feel/see what they do, you can only be told by them when they come back.
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- Quote :
- And yet he has seen a toy or a smile from nobody in the mist village but his mothers
First of all this sentence makes absolutely no sense and secondly, why the hell are you talking about the mist village? You are in Konoha and you stated that both of your parents were former jounin from konoha earlier in your history. I don't see where the mist village comes into play here...
- Since you have taken the liberty of placing your arsenal on a seperate post, I would like you tp remove the "Arsenal" title from the first post and relocate it to the second post so that it looks more appropriate.
Fix these and I'll look this over again.
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| | | Ace
Age : 31 Posts : 1036
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Tue 18 Sep 2012, 3:23 pm | |
| No its not my primary language. Between, this was a rushed application,I can really do way better if I desired.
But I just want to get this over with and begin to Rp.
Also this is a character I had incomplete around my documents and decided to work on it and use it here. Which is why the history had that little village mistake there. I was maybe going for that village on another place.
Also I was thinking of making this character a Nuke here but noticed I would have to join a village and then leave so yeah.
And, I am really not trying to proof read and fix every simple mistake. -.- I just rushed this, I can assure you my post are not the name. |
| | | Kite
Age : 34 Posts : 1209
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Tue 18 Sep 2012, 5:36 pm | |
| Alright, you have a broken center tag right after the "Face Claim" heading. Can you please fix that? You also didn't put the "Arsenal" heading on the second post like I asked. I saw you removed it from the first post, but I want it in the second post above your arsenal. Once you do thse two things I will give you my approval as there doesn't seem to be anything wrong.
You also realize that because you are a tai user, you can't really use those chains, right? |
| | | Ace
Age : 31 Posts : 1036
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Wed 19 Sep 2012, 2:02 am | |
| Edited. |
| | | Kite
Age : 34 Posts : 1209
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Wed 19 Sep 2012, 2:09 am | |
| Alright then, I see no real issues anymore.
Approved 1/2 |
| | | Chris
Age : 28 Posts : 3145
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Thu 20 Sep 2012, 11:05 pm | |
| Mmm I'm not liking how far this is going into Obito territory D:
Anyways, two things: - Expand Appearance - Expand Personality
Two paragraphs is what we usually require and I know you're capable of doing that with ease, which will help and hopefully, make your RP experience more exciting, since your partner will be able to visualise and understand Shuhei better and Shuhei himself will gain more depth and be, overall, a more interesting character. So please, fatten them up a little.
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| | | Ace
Age : 31 Posts : 1036
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Fri 21 Sep 2012, 7:08 am | |
| -.-
I have really lost interest on getting this approved. >_> |
| | | Chris
Age : 28 Posts : 3145
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Fri 21 Sep 2012, 6:43 pm | |
| -_-
That's a bad attitude to have, but it's your own funeral. Seeing as I know you to be a good RPer, I will let this slide. Hopefully, you'll come back to this App in the future.
Approved 2/2
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| | | Guest
| Subject: Re: Aburame, Shuhei [Konoha] Tue 11 Dec 2012, 3:00 pm | |
| Archived Due to Character Death.
Yeah, Darius. I beat you to it, you monster. |
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