Denied. This is gravity manipulation among others such as telepathy. 'Push' is basically any powerful wind ninjutsu; 'pull' can be considered god modding since you force the target toward a certain direction against their will; 'lift' is gravity manipulation as well as god modding as again you're forcing the character to do something. Those three techniques are auto-denied. Also; you state that the element is 'force', when you don't even describe the A.) Elemental combination for it in the Kekkei Genkai section, and B.) don't describe the uniqueness of this force.

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Lightning Saber

Don't understand why this is a clan-only technique. Anyone could theoretically do that with their chakra. This would also be considered a 'only weaponry' technique, as it requires coating the blade in chakra; which is a weaponry only ability. Let's also remember you'd need to be B-rank to coat stuff in chakra to begin with. Finally; the power and energy of the energy blade is way too powerful. Minor burns should be C-rank, Stone cutting should be B-rank and harming metals would be A-rank. The technique is also ethereal, and thus passes through matter (it is energy after all). Thus, you could cut someone without them being to defend themselves through any means such as blocking. This is a rather overpowered ability on its own. Finally: being able to 'cut' jutsu is a definite no. It's not even explained why it can cut jutsu. As for absorbing Raiton, this would be rather cheating; as it makes your character completely immune to a single element for no explainable purpose. On a footnote; your B-rank chakra supply is a little short. It would have to be 4/post.

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Takahane Mind Trick

This is way too powerful for a C-rank Genjutsu (would be closer to A or S-rank if anything) and is borderline god modding. You're telling the person how to RP their character, by making them act on commands given to them by your character. It's basically character manipulation. I think you're also confusing what genjutsu really does. It fools one into believing something through some explained means. Your Genjutsu just makes them believe it for no reason. Whole point of deception is to trick. There is also no way for someone to know that it is a deception; a genjutsu, because you're forcing the character into thinking a certain way. Basically, it's god mod. Not Genjutsu, sorry but denied as well.

Overall, it seems like you were trying to bring Star Wars into Naruto. Sorry but the two universes are infinitely different from one another, and such a parallel would need a lot more describing and detail.

Before I begin to dissect the clan again, I do wish to mention that I don't often deny a clan. Rather, I usually work it out with the member. However, the way your clan was presented was a gravity manipulation clan, which is actually a tabooed ability on most RP forums. For that reason it was auto-denied. However, I will review the clan without this factor, as your gravity manipulating techniques cannot all be performed at once.

Okay first, I suggest adding more to the signature traits; as this area is greatly lacking. Signature traits are basically things that all clan members share in common. Whether it be traditions, intelligence, hair color, muscular build, height, etc. Prime examples are the Uchiha's militancy and their naturally dark hair colors, or Hyuuga's branch system and their naturally white eyes (Among other features like dark hair and their special clothing/fighting style). Though it's not absolutely necessary, it helps make the clan look nicer and more unique.

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However, it should be noted that many

Um.. You never actually finished this sentence.. Do you wish to add more to the Kekkei Genkai?

Now, for the three Force jutsu. Their abilities seem very exaggerated. First of all, your units are off. 1 tonne is 1,000kg; not 2,000lbs (It's actually closer to 2,200lbs). Please fix it so that it says kilograms and not pounds. After all, it's the global unit of measurement. It helps those non-Americans out with general ideas of mass. Metric is also preferred on this site. Now as for the actual jutsu: I'd like it if your Push was the same as your pull. In that, they're both capped at 5 tonnes. You have to remember things such as cars don't exist in Naruto. Finding something more than 5 tonnes is going to be difficult, unless you find a boulder the size of a house. Thus moving 5 tonnes is more than plenty for an S-rank technique; especially since I cannot imagine someone flinging around that much mass with such ease.

There is one other thing about these jutsu that I don't understand. How do the heavier objects move faster? It requires far more force to push something weighing 1T than it does to push something weighing 25kg. How come the object with more mass travels farther? You have to remember that Earth has gravitational and static forces. I suggest adjusting the distances to remain within 15m at most. 30m is a very long distance. Most fights take place within 10m. You'll rarely find yourself having to push something that far, and even then it's still unrealistic to be able to push a boulder farther than a pencil.

One last thing I have an issue with. It's your "lift" technique. This is gravity manipulation at its finest. First of all, shouldn't you be lifting a lot less than you can push and pull? After all, the gravitational pull of the Earth is much greater than any static force that keeps an object from being dragged. Pushing against the Earth's gravity is a lot harder than pushing along it. Secondly, this can be abused to incredible proportions. You state in the jutsu itself that one can simply lift the object and move it around. Why would someone use "Push" instead of this? It's the same chakra cost, except it gives you more versatility. Whether it be defense or offense. Third: You can lift the object upwards of 30m, that's incredibly high. That's a several story building. That's higher than most members that have some flying technique are able to go. I suggest lowering it to 20m at the most. Even then, that seems excessive. Finally there's the issue of levitation. This is where I see it being abused the most. One could just stand on top of a wooden plank; and at B-rank levitate this plank AND the character up and about. Best of all, since the range of the technique coincides with the location of the character, and since the character is always on top of the plank. You can both levitate yourself upwards infinitely, and move yourself around at undefined speeds way above other's reach. It's almost as versatile as the Shichibi's passive ability, and costs almost as little chakra wise. My main issue lies with this one lifting technique, because in my eyes, it's defying gravity to extents that are considered over powered.

I don't really see anything else wrong with this clan.

That is all for now.

Tsukare wrote:

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There is one other thing about these jutsu that I don't understand. How do the heavier objects move faster?

I believe you misread the Jutsu.

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Lighter Objects require less force, thus if an S rank Push was used on a 25 lbs. object that object would travel at a substantial speed for a substantial distance, with lethal effect on impact.

The example given is the MOST powerful push used against a light object. At that same rank, as it's currently written, a 10 ton object would move 5m, and at a significantly lower velocity.

I think I meant farther, but either way I understand now. I was assuming you moved the object of severe mass that far.

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Also the way I was seeing it Lift is not based on the users location but the object's location. So no mater how close the object is he wouldn't be able to lift that object above a certain height (force is a physical force, and thus requires a constant push of energy to remain even, therefore it would reach a point where the chakra used to lift the object would equal the force of gravity pulling down on it, creating a balance between the two and resulting in a capped height). Also by standing on that plank of wood he'd be adding his weight onto it, meaning that at the bare minimum he'd need a B rank to levitate this way. And he'd only be able to float at most 8m above the ground.

While your science is correct, what you're saying is kind of contradictory. The force wouldn't slow as it neared a certain height. Gravity is a constant; it's constantly pushing down at 9.8m/s. In fact, the farther from Earth you get, the lighter this gravitational force is (but only by a fraction of a unit). Either way, logically speaking, you'd be able to lift the object up an indefinite distance, because you're pushing up at Xm/s; while gravity is pushing down at Ym/s. You'd never reach a leveling point, because neither one is losing acceleration; nor is the other gaining it. The reason I figured you'd have to stop at a certain point, was because eventually your reach would become too far. Eventually it'd just get so far that sustaining it became a hassle and consumed more chakra to maintain; which was outside the limits of the jutsu. If however, you're standing on this object, the object is at your feet. You're not longer limited by general distance. As such, you could levitate yourself an infinite distance from the ground. --I hope this makes sense.

Onto the "You have to be B-rank" ideal, yes, I knew that. I even mentioned it in my post. But for a measly cost you could fly very high. Though I have noticed that you reduce the distance for all of the techniques, so I can't really complain too much anymore (besides the logic issue I stated above). Only thing I'd like to see is a set movement speed set. Oh, and you still haven't addressed the need for force push. It's basically a weaker version of force lift. Unless of course you add speeds to these techniques, in which case all will be fixed. If you wish to discuss this with me on skype, simply add me: 'demonoreo'

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Eventually it'd just get so far that sustaining it became a hassle and consumed more chakra to maintain

Exactly. ^_^ My point is that it requires a certain amount of force to press an object upwards, with more force required to reach greater heights, with height being relative to the object and not the user. Science science science, blah blah blah. Point is I'm gonna add a speed limit.

I believe we're confusing each other here. My quote was meant for levitating the object from the ground. Realistically, you could only levitate it 20m or so from the ground, because it's farther away from your character. However, if your character is right on top of it, the limit ceases to exist. The higher you go, the lower the air density is and the weaker the gravity. Therefore you can push it up faster and farther. That was my main problem with the technique.

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Basically Force Push is going to have much more velocity than force lift. While you can move things with Lift, you do so slowly (taking the flying example, you'd be moving about as fast as the average person could jog, which I imagine is just around 15 kph (9-10 mph) so not that fast at all. However that's at B-rank, of course higher levels of Lift would allow greater velocities, but probably no greater than around 65 kmh (40 mph). Push on the other hand gives greater velocity especially at when used against lighter objects.

Fair enough.

The levitation bit is the only thing that bothers me.

Sorry for the delay. Everything looks good now! Thanks for editing appropriately.