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Hyuuga, Hodaka.

THE INFO.

Name:Hyuuga, Hodaka
Nickname:Hoda, Hod
Age:18
Gender:Male
Appearance: Hodaka’s presences is  one that emanates an intensity and focus, at least at first glance. Despite his rather handsome features, most people that look upon him see him as austere, ethereal and quite cold when they first look upon him. Ice white eyes draw you in, threatening to compromise the sanctity of your thoughts, holding you steadfast in their penetrating shimmer as if they could discern your entire being. Long raven black hair, which hangs loosely, falls just below his shoulder blades and frames a rather youthful face that shows the slightest hints of stress underneath the eyes.  Standing at approximately 5’6” (177cm) and weighing in at 164 lbs. (74kg), he isn’t physically intimidating, but he remains formidable even if not in stature.  His muscularity is rather lean with his legs being just slightly thicker than his upper body.  
His civilian clothing varies from day to day, but he can usually be found in a pair of jeans and a V neck tee shirt in any variety of colors, much like the young man himself, his clothing choices are always minimalist, with a touch of class and thought, however he has an impeccable black three piece suit with a deep crimson necktie for more decadent affairs.  For missions and combat situations near Konoha he wears the traditional Hyuuga attire which consists of a pair of black cargo pants that stop mid-calf and hang loosely, a white gi, a pair of ninja sandals, and a long, thin black cylinder that is fastened to his back. When he is traveling or outside of the village walls, he wears the same outfit fit except that the leather case is in one of his pouches and a beautiful and intricate black scabbard graces his right hip fastend in place and readily removed at a moments notice.
Forehead Protector:Worn on forehead
Personality:

Question everything, except for who you are. Who you are is the only thing you can truly ever know.


Like many teenage males, Hodaka is still developing from a boy into a young man, and as with many adolescents, he goes through bouts of rash child-like thinking and actions, irresponsibility, laziness, intense frustration, and the ever present, priming male libido. Few things keep his attention for more than a few weeks at best; the art of swordsmanship, becoming a more effective ninja, expanding his understanding of Jyuuken and pushing the bounderies of chakra application, these are the constant things that circle Hodaka’s brain constantly, everything else that comes in bounces around for a while before it becomes white noise. This can cause Hodaka to appear aloof and unfocused; when in fact he has devoted his entire effort into mastering these five things. He loves the people that dread him the most, because they have his trust and he trust so very few people.

Being in one of the noble houses of Konoha dictates that a certain standard of conduct is adhered to, so Hodaka can filibuster with the best, even when caught off guard.  Especially with strangers and in the view of the public eye Hodaka is always respectable and quite charming when it suits him.  Adults that meet him believe him to be honest, composed, responsible, and insightful at first blush, easy to get along with and very agreeable, the ideal adolescent. However, the exact same people that think this have no clue whom the young man, and he prefers it that way, for if you can’t see past the mask, he has already deemed you unworthy to get to know him, and he will more than likely not even bother to learn your real name.

To those that know him personally, Hodaka can be a bit hard to deal with, especially from an emotional and stand point. Compassion is not one of his strong suits by far, he is judgmental, hyper critical, demanding, a bit callous when it comes to personal feelings not out of spite or ill intent, but simply because he tries not allow emotional stimuli dictate any of his decisions or reaction. He lives somewhere else despite his actual physical presence on the planet, somewhere in a land of theory where the boundaries are constantly shattering and giving way to possibilities that only he can see and he is forever reaching to attain what is just beyond the walls of his mind and what he knows to be true and he wants to drag you along for the ride, and the ride can be quite ridiculous. If he is training or doing anything to further his passions, you can pretty much forget about communicating with him until it is over, you can either watch or leave.
For how hard and critical he is of others, he is twice as tough on the few people he considers his friends, and infinitely harsher on himself.  Yet despite all these things, and the constant frustrations that come with actually knowing him, there are times when you can be crumpled on the floor crying, and Hodaka will find you, sit down and tell you something about yourself that you yourself may have forgotten, a small detail that seems so insignificant that you expect no one to remember. It makes you feel as though you are the only person he has ever known, and in these moments, when the human being within outshines the genius, this is why you still call him friend. Which he will promptly ruin by telling you to stop crying because he has a theory he wants to bounce off of you, or a movement concept he wants to try on you.

Clan:Hyuuga

Nindō:I will honor my village by protecting its people, I will honor my family and friends by always knowing where my loyalties are. If I can imagine it, then it is possible.

THE NINJA.

Origin:Land Of Fire
Affiliation:Konoha
Rank:C
Specialties: Weaponry (Primary- close range/ Secondary- long range), Taijutsu
Elemental Affinities:Raiton, Fuuton
Combat Style:One of the only times he is absolutely present and completely aware and it shows because his focus in battle is palpable even to his adversaries, this is where he feels most at ease and centered. Since he is not particularly strong, he uses speed, reaction, agility, deception, precision and anticipation to defeat enemies. Above all these skills, his offensive imagination is most formidable. His hand to hand fighting style is not particularly aggressive, and he uses this to throw off the timing of others when he uses his highly aggressive sword style, however to date, he has only fought with the blade still within the scabbard which doesn’t kill, but can dislocate joints and break some of the weaker bones in the body. This coupled with his a view of nearly 360 degrees within 50 meters makes him quite the handful.  While his physical ability is outstanding; his mind needs much sharpening and proper guidance in order to truly fulfill his potential.
However, his defense, especially against long range ninjutsu is next to nothing, having only his speed and Hakkesho  Kaiten, which he could only use twice a fight in his current state. If he feels he has the upper hand in a situation, he can become over zealous and start behaving recklessly and making mistakes.  With advancement in both his arts of Taijutsu, swordsmanship he should prove to be a truly formidable ninja in the future.
Special Characteristics:
Physically Based
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Chakra Based
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 13 Jul 2013, 6:57 pm

THE BACKGROUND.

History:
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The First Step Of A Long Journey
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Roleplay Sample: Hoda could tell from her hesitation to come sit down that the young woman was sizing him up, but he paid it no mind as he listened to her speak.

"W-Well... You should know enough about me to deal with me.... I guess I just want people to be straight-up with me. Perfect fallacies don't slide with me. I train myself to my physical brink every day. And... all I want is truth. My goal is clarity."

Hodaka smiled as he made his way towards the bar and picked up a cup and poured sake into it, taking a deep sip. After he placed the cup down he walked back over to his chair and sat down facing the young woman, his white eyes hold her gaze firmly. She was very important to the village, and they valued her as an asset, but Hoda was more concerned with her wellbeing, and the relationship he would have with such a person.
"I can only say I partially understand the life of a host, but the feeling of people never being forward, always trying to use you or hide their agenda's under the cloak of friendship. And no people do it more to you than the ones that are supposed to protect you."  He said rather quietly still holding her gaze firmly with a slight sorrowful undertone in his voice. He sat back in his seat, placing his hands below his chin as he continued speaking, "If I wanted to just deal with you, I would just read your file and send you on missions without ever seeing your face. That it not what I desire, I want to look into your eyes and see you, in all your strength and weaknesses and see if you’re going to help or harm.", Hodaka stood up and walked over towards the door, opening it slightly.

"Sou, clear my schedule for the rest of the day, I have a spar to attend to.", his voice echoed down the hall.

"You can't spar today you have a meeting with the elders.", the woman's voice echoed back.

Hodaka paused as he reflected on the dilemma, after a few seconds he called out again, "Tell them I am sorry and I couldn't make it.", and with that he closed the door and turned back to Kuro.

"I also thirst for truth, but in these days, words that come from a person’s mouth hardly tell you about their intentions or their hearts." he spoke plainly as he took off his Hokage hat and cape, and replaced it with his usual white cloak with lighting down the back. He walked towards the window of his office and opened it, looking out upon the mountain faces of the Hokages that had passed before him.

"Even from a young age I knew I never wanted to be Hokage, to much spotlight, too many people with their eyes on you, waiting for you to lead them.", his whites turned back to Kuro as he smiled slightly, "But my nindo demands that I do whatever is needed for Konoha, and if Konoha needs me to be Hokage, then it is the title I will take, but it is not what I am."
Hodaka moved back towards his desk, and as he did his hair sprayed in the draft of wind that moved through the office, placing his hands upon its edge he spoke.
"Kuro, as much as you can help the village, you could also harm it. I am under no illusion about the power you have, and I am also very aware of how you must feel about the elders that manipulate you, and the small minded villagers that look upon you with disdain.", Hodaka sighed, "The elders actually told me to leave you alone, but I am much to hands on to simply just leave things to chance. I called you here to see if you are going to be a ninja I can depend on that is stable and sane, or be an unstable threat I will have to remove."

Hodaka moved towards the liquor once more and polished of his cup of sake, and poured another, "You are a person, and right now I wish to simply get to know you as much as I can so that I may trust you, and i wish for you to get to know me, so that you may put you trust in me as well. And seeing that within these walls nothing but formalities and hidden agendas pour out, I would like to fight you, nothing too serious of course. To me there is no better way to read and get to know a person than when your wills are put against each other’s.” ~End of Sample~

THE ARSENAL.
Equipment:
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Weapons:
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Martial Style:
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Academy Jutsu:
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Taijutsu:
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Weaponry Jutsu:

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Secret Clan Jutsu
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FACE CLAIM.
Character Claim:Hyuuga, Neji
Source:Naruto Shippuden
Image URL:Photo


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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 13 Jul 2013, 8:32 pm

Well, to start things off, I am going to ask that you reduce the size of your image at the top, it is stretching the page. So once you get that done, I will started on the application itself.
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 13 Jul 2013, 8:39 pm

Corrected
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 13 Jul 2013, 9:14 pm

Hoda wrote:

The next morning Yasu’s father went to the village elders to discuss what he had just found out about his son.


I'm assuming you meant to take out Yasu and place the name Hoda there. If so, I would like you to change it so that a future mod does not get confused.

Also, if it isn't too much trouble, I would like for you to space your history out. As in, space your paragraphs. It is difficult to read and would clean the app up.

Everything looks fine. I'm going to go over your arsenal once more when you can get these things done. Hopefully I can stamp a 1/2 on and you can be one step closer to approval. Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 13 Jul 2013, 9:24 pm

Indeed I did mean to take that out, your corrections have been made and are appreciated. Thanks for checking the app!
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 13 Jul 2013, 9:36 pm

Alright, so as far as your jutsu goes, you only have 11/15 that you are able to start with. Is this on purpose or did you just not notice that you had 4 more slots available?


Other than these little gripes, I can't really see anything stopping this from getting my 1/2
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 13 Jul 2013, 9:44 pm

Gratis, and yes I know I only have 11, this was done on purpose.
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySat 13 Jul 2013, 9:49 pm

1/2 approved then.

Goodluck and look forward to seeing you start roleplaying soon. Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySun 14 Jul 2013, 3:56 am



  • Please have your History seperated in spoilers, as you have already centered it and it's hard for me to read it like that. You could have every part in a spoiler and give the Spoiler its title. However, if you don't like spoilers, you can keep that like it stands at the moment.

  • I would also like to see the "Hyuuga" text in your clan section to link to the clan page itself.

  • Why don't you fill in your 4 slots? Those ones will no longer be free for you after your character is approved. Expanding your Arsenal is never a bad thing. You could include Shadow Shuriken and Shadow Senbon or any Konoha specific Taijutsu from the Encyclopedia. There are some interesting ones in there.



Other than that, I can't find any error.
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySun 14 Jul 2013, 5:27 am

Thanks for the reveiw...all the corrections asked for were made.
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySun 14 Jul 2013, 3:15 pm

Jumping in here before this gets the last approval.

Quote :
Name: Iaigiri (Iaido Beheading)
I normally see this jutsu as a B ranked jutsu. However, it looks fine as a C ranked jutsu so I'll let you keep it. I only wish that you specify the speed of the strike. I'd hate to see anything close to the same level of mastery as someone of a higher rank, such as Mifune or Sasuke (though he does not use this style directly, he's been seen using similar variations). So, I dont mind if you make this a ranging jutsu, with numerous ranks, but I'd like it to be obvious that the user (at C rank) cannot produce anything that is unable to be dodged; also, I know that this is not what you're going for, but in the hands of someone else, it could be abused. Might as well just right that wrong from the get-go. Thank you, Hoda!

After that, I'll give the 2/2 unless someone beats me to it.
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptySun 14 Jul 2013, 3:26 pm

...It can't be the at the level of Mifune's , its C-ranked for a reason... "beheading" is in reference to the path of the sword.

"The most widely recognized attack of Iaido style, the user draws their sword at a very quick speed, making a powerful horizontal slash in tandem with the draw. This technique is dependent on the user's overall reaction speed and perception as it is only used when an opening presents itself or when the user needs to draw their sword quickly. This move can cause deep wounds and cut muscles and ligaments but it won’t cut through bone, death only occurs if more substantial damage is done, or opponent bleeds out."
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PostSubject: Re: Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] Hyuuga, Hodaka [Konoha Genin] EmptyMon 15 Jul 2013, 1:18 am

I suppose I was just wanting you to specify how fast the sword draw was, seeing as you say that it was fast. However, upon closer inspection, it's probably fine. If issues arise with it later, we can always take another look, though I doubt they will. Sorry about the inconvenience.

Approved 2/2.

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