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(I had to create a new thread for my app, because apparently I reached the size limit for this first post. This will make it impossible to update this app, which I wanted to do because I had to change the SC's a little. This is still here for reference. Nothing was changed (Except a few grammar corrections) and everything was cut and paste right into the new app. A social SC was added, as apparently I'm allowed to start with one of those now. Either way, Please archive this app again! Or delete it. Whichever.)



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Inuzuka Isha

THE INFO.

Name: Inuzuka Isha
Nickname: Kyojin
Age: 14
Gender: Female
Appearance: Isha considers herself as fun to look at as she is to be around, but she is prone to overestimating such things.  There are two things first noticed by those who lay their senses upon Isha, and at whispering distance the first is not her appearance.  Instead it is the aroma of earth which seems to linger upon her, as though a bath was the last thing on her mind.  While she does not exactly stink in any offensive manner, she smells distinctly unclean, as though she was rolling about in some earthly depression filled with age old dust and loose dirt.  Of course any eyes could have assessed this as well, even from a distance.  She is covered from head to toe in smudges of dirt and grass stains both fresh and old and her clothing is in no better condition.  From head to toe, however, she was an interesting girl to get a look at.  

Her eyes are a brilliant green, the color of summer and life, and matched well with her grass tinted hair.  Whether the green is her natural hair color, or a result of actual grass stains is to be debated, however the short and slightly tangled tresses shone with the same green as her eyes.  While it gave some likeness to the flora of the forests, the long and red Inuzuka triangles marking under each eye betray her for something much more bestial.  She is often mistaken for being younger than she is, with no help remedying this illusion coming from the carefree, whimsical, and outright irresponsible demeanor she carries.

The blue tunic might have been her sole possession for how it was ripped, stitched, and ripped again.  It sat upon her like so many tatters of recycled cloth, but it covered her well from shoulders to knees.  It was cinched tighter around her waist with a bit of black cord, nothing special but it certainly did the job.  Atop it was a simple white cloth, a tabbard with no decoration which served only to add white to her front.  As it turned out, white was the real theme behind her appearance, and seeing her without her cape is as rare as seeing her without her hat.

A mask, and not so much a hat, the thing is just worn tucked up on her head more often than not.  Attached to the mask is a long and wide patch of thick white fur, which covers her green hair and gives her the same furry appearance as the very large dog which seems to loom near by with great consistency.  The mask atop her head bears a pair of polished and fire hardened ears perked up like a jackal's and help to add to her canine facade.  Over her shoulders hangs her cape, matched in the same fur as her mane and hanging in thick fur and tough leather just past her knees.  It was a short cape, considering the girl's small size, but it did help her match her companion.  Mask and cape aside, Isha's appearance is quite distinctive, but dressed as she is she is completely unforgettable.

Her approach to life is no easier to dismiss from mind, and every bit as visual.  Isha wears her heart on her sleeve, and her every emotion can seen pouring through in almost any casual situation.  Her eyes are always alight with mirth and curiosity, peering through shadows and at strangers with no hint of aggression.  Instead she seems much as a puppy might, dirty and adorable, and for the most part harmless.  Another illusion, or delusion for those who know Inuzuka mentality.  Still, the vibrant zeal with which Isha lives her life gives her a radiance of positive energy.  Care free happiness pours off her whenever there is not a fight to win.  When there is a fight to win, the care free goes out the window and and only the happiness remains.

There is no doubt why, even a first glance at her smile can spy the sharp inuzuka canines in her mouth.  Her hands are obvious as well, her fingernails each an inch long and drawn out naturally to jagged but razor sharp points.  If not for soft leather boots even her toenails would seem no less intimidating, but the simple shoes on her feet spare the casual observer from such a sight.  Instead they see only her natural weapons, laid paradoxically beside a genuine mirth and endless amount of cheer and excitement.
Forehead Protector: Worn on her forehead, though often concealed by her mask.

Personality:  Isha is certianly an odd duck when it comes to fitting in with civilized society, however she's not put off by that fact.  Instead she seems to revel in her uniqueness, and is more than pleased to explain to anyone who wants to challenge her why the woods are way better than the city.  In spite of her persistent lack of manners and protocol and generally talking way to much, Isha still manages to upset some of the more demanding people out there.  While she does host an impressive array of character flaws, the general consensus regarding Isha is still quite positive.  Her opinion on outsiders leads her to enjoy the company of just about anyone, although sometimes such enjoyment comes at the cost of constantly pestering and testing the temper limitations of angry jounin.

There are a good deal of contradictions at work which define different aspects of Isha's personality.  Her positive outlook on life allows her to take absolute pleasure in many of the simplest things in life, among the simplest things she takes advantage of is a good nap.  At almost any hour Isha can be found basking on the branches of some tree, well asleep and just living her life in the dream world.  Even when there's 'work' to be done, Isha has no qualms about settling down with a yawn and just napping away a few hours.  This leads many to see her as lazy, but that is not necessarily true.  As often as she can be found napping, she can also be found avoiding her duties just to climb buildings and trees, or run around chasing her dog all over the woods.  While this might lead some to believe she is made of boundless energy, that is also not quite true.

In truth, Isha is just a girl of impulse, and does preciously what she wants to do at any given moment of life.  This might lead people to believe she is some manner of riotous criminal, but in fact that is also far from the truth.  Inuzuka Loyalty runs through her as thick as her canine campanion.  Betrayal is something she could never willingly commit, and when it comes to friends and family Isha is willing to dedicate herself to their cause with an endless spirit of enthusiastic fanaticism.   Of course, this is because on the inside Isha is just a two legged dog, and this is the single truth which ties her together a bit more.  It's her sense of Loyalty which rule over almost every aspect of her life.  Isha doesn't really have many motivations of her own, no real ambition.  Instead Isha exists only to see her friends get what they want, and to be a major factor in helping them achieve it.

Her sense of loyalty is only a piece of her canine mentality, the rest comes with the tree climbing, the running, and the napping.  These are the things she does when her friends don't need her, when no one is depending on her getting the job done.  Meaningless missions are, unsurprisingly, meaningless to Isha, and when tasked with something unimportant to the village, she tends to just let it pass by the waysides.  Many a cat has remained missing when Isha had no personal tie to the owner of the cat, but none of her friends cats remain missing for more than an hour.  While it may seem like she might not care about her village, that is also far from the truth.  Important missions involving rescuing citizens, or protecting the public bring out Isha's inner beast, and she takes to them with the same glee that she does when battling enemies of her family.

Clan: Inuzuka

Nindo: Survive at all costs, unless a friend is in danger.  Isha is not shy about fleeing for her life, but when family or friends are placed in danger, Isha becomes a calculating killer with only a mind for assisting her pack.

THE NINJA.

Origin: Fire Country
Affiliation: Konoha
Rank: Genin
Specialities: Taijutsu/Ninjutsu
Elemental Affinities: Doton/Fuuton
Combat Style: Isha's combat style is as brutal as it needs to be to win, and as subtle as it needs to be to succeed.  She has a varied and mixed approach to a fight, but almost always starts off by testing her opponents limitations.  She is fearless and will launch rapid but light assaults at her opponent, forcing them to expose some of their fighting style, so that Isha can think up a sure fire assault to finish things.  This means in one instant Isha may seem a wild monster attacking haphazardly, but in the next she will fall still and cunning, and bait her enemies into a trap.  This predatory instinct for assessing one's prey before bringing them down makes her highly effective in a fight, while her array of fighting tools makes her just as effective in winning them.  Highly skilled in the Taijutsu of her family, she uses tooth and nail to devastating effect in tearing through exposed flesh.  She is no slouch at a distance, able to manifest her elements in an attempt to batter down opponents with gusts of wind, or crush them beneath crumbling spires of stone and dirt.

When a fight first starts, Isha will almost always keep her mask on for fear of poisons or other dangerous gasses which may assault her senses.  Instead of relying directly on the Inuzuka teachings of her past, she uses a kunai to keep her opponents on their toes while she and her canine companion test the waters of her opponents defenses, and offenses.  She makes fast probing attacks to her enemies flanks while Gizmo plays the part of distraction, each time together working to wear her opponents down.  She fatigues much less slowly than other shinobi, and so a battle of attrition will almost always go in her favor.  Like a dog she will pick at her opponents legs and sides before a frontal assault is considered.. but when it is possible Isha strikes hard and fast.  Casting aside her kunai, Isha can snap into her Four Legs style in an instant, and turn herself into the savage predator she loves.

Her overwhelming speed can sometimes make her a handful for even higher ranked shinobi.  She pairs this speed with her fast moving Inuzuka techniques to strike from unexpected angles and then be far enough away the next instant to mitigate any incoming counter attacks.  These strikes, though light in strength, use the sharpness of her claws to tear through her opponents flesh none the less.  Her jaws are even more terrifying, capable of tearing mouthfuls of flesh from bone as easily as any true predator might to their prey, though the difficulty in biting someone in combat makes them much less of a threat than her sharp claws.  Paired with Gizmo forcing opponents to turn their back on Isha, the Inuzuka approach to combat is never to be underestimated.

It is not flawless, of course, and when it comes to distance Isha is quick to switch things up.  Wind and Earth, she thinks, are a perfect combination of elements, one ephemeral and one corporeal.  Wind is her favorite for ranged attacks, though those are quite rare.  Earth is a much more common choice for her, as it lets her take full advantage of the fact that she can not fly.  Instead she swims as needed, and summons her walls when convenient.  While these are viable options for her, it is clear in her fighting style that only as a last resort will Isha resort to ranged combat, and she almost always looks for the fastest line into her opponent, for close quarters combat.

Special Characteristics:
Improved Speed
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Master Chef
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THE BACKGROUND.

History:
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Roleplay Sample:
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THE ARSENAL.

Jutsu, Weaponry, Items etc.
Academy Jutsu:
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Inuzuka Jutsu:
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Taijutsu:
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Non-Elemental Ninjutsu:
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Doton Jutsu:
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Fuuton Jutsu:
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Equipment
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Pet: Gizmo
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FACE CLAIM.

Character Claim: San
Source: Princess Mononoke
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PostSubject: Re: Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! EmptyThu 01 Aug 2013, 6:53 pm

Your personality is too short. Please expand to be at least 3 solid paragraphs.

Please change the way you categorize your techniques by adding a seperate spoiler for your Clan Jutsu.

Also, your image is streching the whole page of the forum so please resize it to a smaller width.
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PostSubject: Re: Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! EmptyFri 02 Aug 2013, 10:08 am

No idea how my personality didn't copy over right.  anyway, that's fixed.  Moved Jutsu around, fixed up my image and sig, and even added my RP sample.  So yeah, balls back in your court. =P

PS, I'm working on a section for Gizmo, but there's no template to work off of, so I'm just winging it. It will be added soon.
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PostSubject: Re: Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! EmptyFri 02 Aug 2013, 5:12 pm

Edits were made:

Stone Claws: Please edit it so that it is only Earth Chakra covering your fingers and claws, much like the earth spear technique that can make the skin and claws durable but weak to Lightning based techniques. Reduce the area to only fingers and claws and not the whole hand as the is a difference between slicing and punching.

Bloody Unheaval: Sounds interesting but an "eathquake" a ten meter diameter around the user is extremely powerful. Please edit the range to a radius of Close (0m - 5m) Range and tone down the effects. I know there are Canon thechniques that are way too powerfull but this is too much to pass through. You also need to edit the chakra cost to at least 8 CP.

Wind Razor Wall: I also need you to change this one's range to Close (0m - 5m) Range radius, not diameter, meaning that the wall is created around the user and extends 2,5 meters on every side. This one also needs its chakra cost changed to 8 CP and with a 2 CP per post upkeeep. You have to state the the wall is able to block incoming low rank projectiles but will be a weak and harmfull technique against a katon based jutsu as it will make you catch fire. As for the way it works, you have to change the activation and upkeep to a blowing manner and spinning motion or something that can suppport the idea of the spinning motion of the wind.

Baby Bear Warmask: How can a D ranked mask protect from any C ranked air born poison? Please edit to C rank. I will also ask another staff member about this.
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PostSubject: Re: Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! EmptyFri 02 Aug 2013, 10:33 pm

Stone Claws: Please edit it so that it is only Earth Chakra covering your fingers and claws, much like the earth spear technique that can make the skin and claws durable but weak to Lightning based techniques. Reduce the area to only fingers and claws and not the whole hand as the is a difference between slicing and punching.

I had not intended to ban punching from this technique, the name is only claws because an Inuzuka made it up.  Why shouldn't I be able to punch with it?  I don't think that really needs to be edited, but I'm willing to listen to why you think it should be.  I added a note that Raiton defeats it, however I thought that was implied in it being an earth jutsu. =P  Let me know what you think.

Bloody Unheaval: Sounds interesting but an "eathquake" a ten meter diameter around the user is extremely powerful. Please edit the range to a radius of Close (0m - 5m) Range and tone down the effects. I know there are Canon thechniques that are way too powerfull but this is too much to pass through. You also need to edit the chakra cost to at least 8 CP.

You're right on the size I had only wanted a 10m radius, I edited that, however it doesn't strike me as particularly expensive jutsu.  If it did more damage to people standing on the surface I would be more inclined to agree, but as it stands it only is really useful against people who happen to be underground.  Being that unless you can actually see through the ground, which Isha can not, this jutsu is very hit or miss.  Why do you think this jutsu needs to be so expensive?

Wind Razor Wall: I also need you to change this one's range to Close (0m - 5m) Range radius, not diameter, meaning that the wall is created around the user and extends 2,5 meters on every side. This one also needs its chakra cost changed to 8 CP and with a 2 CP per post upkeeep. You have to state the the wall is able to block incoming low rank projectiles but will be a weak and harmfull technique against a katon based jutsu as it will make you catch fire. As for the way it works, you have to change the activation and upkeep to a blowing manner and spinning motion or something that can suppport the idea of the spinning motion of the wind.

I did not edit this jutsu yet, but I am willing to make it close range..  however, it's something of god mode at that point.  Right now the gap between user and jutsu serves as a balancing weakness which allows people to still attack her.  If she were able to just create a sharp damaging, projectile blocking aura around her which emanated out for 5 meters, the jutsu would be much, much stronger.  Take that into concideration.  If you still want me to edit it down to 5m, I'm more than happy too.


Baby Bear Warmask: How can a D ranked mask protect from any C ranked air born poison? Please edit to C rank. I will also ask another staff member about this.

So noted.  C rank it is.
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PostSubject: Re: Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! EmptySat 03 Aug 2013, 12:22 pm

First of all, the chakra cost standard for a C Rank technique is 5 - 9. All three of your techniques are low priced, but that can happen only with the simplest and those are not simple at all. I want you to change your Wind Razor Wall to 8 CP (2), your Bloody Upheaval to 7 and your Stone Claws to 6 (2).

Stone Claws: There is already a B Rank technique that allows the user to take the advantage of their Doton Chakra and harden their skin in order for it to acquire hard stone properties. I can't allow you to use the benefits of a B Rank technique in a C Rank one without any reason like a clan KKG. You have two options, either make it the whole hand but weaken the properties or have it cover only the fingers and claws and make it hard and solid like stone.

You wrote:
While this has little more than an unbalancing effect for foes on the surface within range, those unfortunate enough to be caught within 5 meters of the user will find tremendous waves of shock and violence tearing all through them and the ground all around them.

You also wrote:
If it did more damage to people standing on the surface I would be more inclined to agree, but as it stands it only is really useful against people who happen to be underground.

So, which of the two? Edit your tecnhique so that it can only unbalance the ones caught on the surface of the crater, but not immobilize of course. You can keep the underground effect, but turning solid pressured earth into stones and pebbles requires you to send out a pulse of chakra, and that's expensive.

Wind Razor Wall: To be honest, I don't really like the idea of even keeping this. I can give you the option of the user blowing a weak air current while spinning around themselves, thus being able to block small projectiles and cause minor cuts to the ones caught close to the user (5 meters). I can't allow it to be like the Hyuuga technique though, or like ten meters.
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PostSubject: Re: Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! EmptySun 04 Aug 2013, 12:31 am

I find all your terms agreeable.

Stone Claws: Edited. Being able to block with only fingers is somewhat useless, so I went for a compromise and set it so they could block with their fingers and their palm. I think that's fair? I am aware there's a jutsu for hardening the body in defensive situations, but that B rank jutsu allows for much more hardening, and much more protection. Instead of just standing there with stone flesh, you still have to actively block incoming weapons. I do intend on progressing this jutsu in the same direction as the stone flesh, however after C rank it will diverge into 2 different jutsu. Adjusted Chakra cost per your recommendation.

Wind Razor Wall: Rewrote jutsu. I think it's pretty fair now, let me know what you think. Chakra cost adjusted per your recommendation.

Bloody Upheaval: Wow, it's amazing how missing just one word can make a jutsu very unbalanced. The jutsu was only supposed to be damaging to people underground, and I've added that single word to represent that fact. Also increased chakra cost as you suggested.

Let me know what you think of the changes.
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PostSubject: Re: Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! EmptySun 04 Aug 2013, 4:01 pm

Wind Razor Wall: Looks good now!

Bloody Upheaval: Alright, it's fine since you made that clear.

Stone Claws wrote:
After forming a tiger seal the user of this techniques places their hands against the ground and absorbs the earth there.  Dirt and stone both stick to the users hands and compress against the skin into a second coating of hardened and very dense stone.  While dense, a constant supply of earth chakra keeps the stone hands able to still move and grab, but turns physical attacks with the stone hands into devastatingly crushing assaults which deal 20% more damage than un-enhanced attacks. Of course, such solid weapons at the end of the arms comes with other advantages as well.
I am still not sure about this.
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While the wording may seem dramatic, I assure you 20% isn't too bad. it's a 1/5th increase, and pretty standard for a C rank jutsu. For all the pretty words, it just means if I've hit you 5 times, it feels like I've hit you 6 times.
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PostSubject: Re: Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! EmptyMon 05 Aug 2013, 1:43 am

Well, I guess I can approve your character. Maybe make the boost lower. I know hardened fists and claws will deal significant damage but the percentage boosts are a recent issue among staff.

Character Approved! [1/2]

If another staff member believes that Stone Claws should be changed in any way, please mention it.
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To make things easier, I removed the +% damage, and just mentioned that it makes them as sturdy and sharp as a steel blade might be.
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Fine by me. Just read again your customs carefully to correct some grammar errors.
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PostSubject: Re: Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! Inuzuka Isha [Konoha Genin] To Be Archived! EmptyTue 06 Aug 2013, 4:13 am

Alright, touched up a couple jutsu. Someone give me the other 1/2! ^-^
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    Unarchived as per user request.
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