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| ![Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Naoto_10](https://i.servimg.com/u/f70/14/01/81/49/naoto_10.jpg) Unmei.THE INFO.
Name: Unmei [Claims no last name due to not knowing her father's last name]
Nickname:
Age:17
Gender:Female
Appearance:
The Beauty Of The Ice Is Often Overlooked
The appearance of this girl has often been overlooked through the years due to her sheer silence, and due to her preference to neutralized colors that blend in with society. Those who look at her often look at her as a teenage boy due to her voice, her short hair, and her stance of standing. The way this girl stands is very upright and properly a majority of the time, and she tends to allow herself to sit like a boy as well in public, Do to this, she has always seemed like she existed in the background, moving silently the whole time, hardly noticed by those of society as she slinks through the streets silent as the whisper of death. But enough of what the people see. It is time for you to see her through the eyes of those who know her.
With a dark blue hair, it seems to stem from her hat as a bit of a mess, due to personal looks not being high on her list, she cleans it, then often immediately puts her hat on without ever thinking twice that it may ruffle what could be a silky look to her hair. However, if she cared about looking feminine, her hair would be longer, but she doesn't, so her hair remains very short. Next we move to her eyes, dark blue colored eyes that seem to hold no attraction to them, with only dullness reflecting in them save for the moments she is tracking someone she likes.
Her smooth facial features are noted by the small curve of her chin, and smooth face that seems to lack the ways of cheekbones, and a small nose to go with it, makes her look a tad mousy in the combination with her slight ears that she often hides under her hat. With that, we move to her neck. Her neck could be considered of moderate to Med-long length if she ever looked up, but she often stands with her head low, using her periphrial to look about, often hiding her face, and leaving less for people to look at.
Down to her torso she has a slender build due to her relying on her jutsu and weaponry more than her body, and as for the feminine part of her torso, it all but does not exist at a modest AA cup, that even that she suppresses with bandages so that they appear flat underneath her clothing. Moving farther down you would find her smooth body to lack the feminine curve that many girls her age have, her body being much like a washboard.
As for her clothing, it tends to vary from day, however, she normally wears a sleek blue detective like outfit, or, during the summer she wears a pale blue shirt, a yellow tie, and a brown pair of pants. However, she will often wear loafers as opposed to ninja tabi, having kept them in good condition, and her odd talent at never making a sound till she needs to.
Normal Attire
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Hot weather
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Reverse Unmei Attire
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Forehead Protector:Typically under her had that she wears, but in her alternate personality, it is around her neck.
Personality:
Ice Is Both The Killer And Savior Of Many
Personality wise, Unmei is not as complex as many others, for the most part.
Finesse and Grace
As a woman, there is a certain grace to Unmei's footing, her thought and movement swift and precise. Because of this, she has taken to certain activities as dancing alone, and entertaining women at host clubs in order to earn a little extra cash on the side. This being said, Unmei is a quiet refined girl when about public, allowing her thoughts to run before she speaks, most of the time that is, and will take the time to learn of people before deciding whether she likes someone or not.
Stalking As an Artform
To Unmei, Stalking is not anything to be seen as wierd, as she is a ninja. Hiding and following is simply the way of the ninja in her opinion, however, she has been known to take it a tad far, her personality often showing that she has stalked many people she becomes interested in, and once she has attained an interest, she will most likely not stop following, until she loses interest in the said person or thing that she set her sights on.
The Silent Hero
Unmei will often take the time to protect her allies, but will also often aide those in the village without them knowing that she is aiding them. She prefers to be unknown to society, and when she makes contact with people, she will be quietly polite to them. A word for her is shy in this form, in that she hates to be seen, and will go out of her way to hide in crowds, and avoid eye contact with people.
In the Heat of battle
Typically, Unmei is strategic and cunning in battle, often resorting to cheap tricks and allowing her allies the lead, never going into a battle without an ally, preferably of higher strength than herself, seeing herself as more of a support fighter than a all out fighter, refusing to accept a fight in a one on one fight, as it was simply not her style of fighting, preferring to kill in social meetings with enemies, as opposed to actually fighting enemies.
Sometimes The Ice Is As Deadly As it Seems
Insomnia and Terror
The dark side to Unmei, is her twisted side, which some refer to as Iemnu, or Reverse Unmei. This personality stems from an incurable insomnia, and seems to be an alternate personality altogether. The twisted part of this personality is that it acts very little like the other personality, often causing much grief for her other form.
Messy and Unsatisfied
Iemnu is unable to find herself able to stay clean when comfortable in an area, and is significantly more cocky than her other form, being open about herself, and often being very cruel towards people whom she does not enjoy, using simple threats and comments to preferably destroy the self esteem of her opponents and allies alike. She is crude, unruly, and typically not pleasant to be about.
Cute and Cuddly
Iemnu between the personality compared to Unmei, is very cuddly towards the people she likes, and will often "snuggle" them and show affection for them so she often is clinging to her sister. The terrifying part of this side of her, is that she will gladly destroy anyone that harms the ones she loves in a discreet manner, a trait, she shares with her other side, and her sister.
In the Fire of Combat
In the heat of combat, Iemnu is a trickster and a killer, willing to fight people, but only on unfair ground where she will rarely lose, choosing lake sides, or having allies hidden near her. She will break tree limbs, use dust cover, and freeze sweat on people's skin to grasp any advantage she can. Even going so far as to put her allies between her and enemies.
Clan:Yuki, however, due to her heritage, she is unaware that this is where her frosted Chakra seems to stem from.
Nindō:"The darkest night is nothing to those who look" This is her nindo, to her it means that she will always look on into the future with hope, with eyes that never blink, and with a heart that keeps on beating.
THE NINJA.
Origin:Kaminari no Kuni
Affiliation:Konoha no Sato
Rank:C (Genin)
Specialties:Ninjutsu,Genjutsu
Elemental Affinities:
Fuuton
Suiton
Hyōton
Combat Style:
The combat style of Unmei is very sneaky. Prefering no particular way of battle over the other, she adapts her styles, and "cheats" exploiting the points in others battle styles, and uses it against them. However, if she has the choice, she will give a simple assassination on the enemy in order to avoid confrontation. This often gets people to be annoyed by her as a team member, as she never participates in one man spars, finding it annoying to have to fight on even ground as an opponent. Unmei, never being one to fight the same way twice tends to be an unpredictable opponent, especially due to her alternate personality. However, there is a method to her alternate personality. It is wild, violent, and fights much in the animistic way that it has been known to temp enemies to something, and then strike them down when they attempted to take the bait. A side note to this, is that Her largest strength and weakness in battle, is her split personality complex. This complex will often surprise opponents and throw them for a loop, when the calm and calculative opponent, suddenly becomes what looks to be a wild and insane style fighter that seems to take no greater joy, than in killing her opponents. The weakness to this, is that on occasion, Unmei needs someone taken alive, or needs to be in her calm state of mind, but Iemnu comes out and will often make a mess of things.
Special Characteristics:
- Stealth:
Name: Advanced Stealth
Rank: C
Type: Physical
Physical Requirements: N/A
Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic.
Description: A skill gained by ninja who have begun to specialize in the art of stealth. The ninja becomes very light and quick on their feet. Their movements no longer create sound and they now gain a natural skill for hiding and camouflage.
- One-Handed Seals:
Name: One-Handed Seals
Rank: C
Type: Physical
Physical Requirements: N/A
Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic.
Description: the ninja discovers a unique talent which allows them to mix chakra by performing seals with only one hand. With an ability such as this the ninja can fight while also performing jutsu, delivering surprise attacks to their enemies. Since those who can perform one-handed seals are naturally good at what their talents, they are even capable of performing hand seals behind themselves, leaving the enemy oblivious to the ninja's next attack.
- Advanced Chakra Control:
Name: Advanced Chakra Control.
Rank: D-S.
Type: Chakra Based.
Physical Requirements: Must specialize in Medical Ninjutsu or Genjutsu, and must not have an Increased Chakra Capacity or Bijuu.
Training Requirements: 700.
Description: An exceptional attribution that one is innately born with and further invokes during the course of their training. Chakra Control is key to preserving your stamina which will increase your vitality and enable you to use techniques to it's fullest capacity. It is essential for nearly all specialties of Ninjutsu but is heavily coveted in the areas of Medical Ninjutsu and Genjutsu which require good chakra in order to perform their techniques proficiently. Those with Advanced Chakra Control however are able to take it to the next step and preserve more noticeable chakra from their standard pool. Depending on the rank of the technique, a small quantity of chakra is preserved within the body when executed the Jutsu, which ultimately lowers the cost of your techniques. Furthermore because your Chakra Control is so flawless and exceptional, your Surface Walking and Water Walking techniques no longer cost chakra because you can now perform them effortlessly. This technique does not lower the cost chakra points going towards maintaining a jutsu, only creating them.
D Rank Jutsu - Costs are reduced by 1 CP.
C Rank Jutsu - Costs are reduced by 2 CP.
B Rank Jutsu - Costs are reduced by 4 CP.
A Rank Jutsu - Costs are reduced by 8 CP.
S Rank Jutsu - Costs are reduced by 12 CP.
- Master Chef:
Name: Master Chef
Rank: C
Type: Social Based
Prerequisites: -
Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic.
Description: Master Chef is the ability to create food for either traveling or serving their villages. Now being classified under the "Cooking-Nin" profession, labeling the ninja as now being an exceptional cook! They can whip up dishes of all kinds and provide satisfactory meals for their customers or companions. When out in the field the cooking ninja can use their surroundings to make food for their teammates or themselves. Because of their skill Cooking Nin tend to work at restaurants in the villages which gives them a steady income of Ryo and reputation amongst their villagers, especially Akimichi.
THE BACKGROUND. History:
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-Born to her mother, unknowing of her father, her mother dies giving birth.(Birth)
-Is raised by eight year old older sister, and seems to have already taken to a cold stance.
-Insomnia seems to strike the girl, as a harsh cold chakra seems to activate in her body(1)
-The girl takes her first steps after only being One and a half years old, and clings greatly to her sister at all times.
-Unmei retains what seems to be a split personality disorder from an early age, making her a difficulty to raise(3)
-Enrolled into the academy at the age of six, Unmei seems to not fit with other students very well, due to her quiet attitude, and her split personality causing her to attack the other students when they make her mad.(6)
-Unmei goes through training with her sensei to contain her alternate personality better(6)
-Unmei begins experimenting with ice jutsu while still an academy student, and also seems to take an interest in the genjutsu her sister uses(7)
-Unmei learns that combining ice jutsu and genjutsu creates much fun. However, it makes her Sensei nervous.
-Unmei's Alternate personality causes the death of a sensei that attempted to capture Unmei and steal her away, The sensei had simply restrqained her with common binds, which thanks to Unmei's diligent training had been no problem for her. The sensei, female, noticed this and simply smiled. She said "You are coming away with me, to be with those you belong with" The woman kissed her due to everyone mistaking Unmei as a boy, and unmei took the opportunity , and gave her the kiss of death. While her sensei struggled for air, surprised by the Genin's trick, Unmei took a simple kunai as the chuunin struggled to understand what was going on, and tossed the kunai into her throat. But that was not the end of it. The stress got to be too much, and Iemnu revealed herself, giggling over the dying chuunin. Iemnu took the kunai, and stabbed the chuunin over and over again. When they found Unmei who when they found her was back to her normal self, the Chuunin was almost unrecognizable.
-Unmei Restrains a fellow student when they start attacking other students by freezing him(9)
-Unmei trains with other students for the first time and finds that she hates it.
-Unmei's alternate personality comes out during an argument with another student, and she nearly freezes him to death without realizing it.(10)
-Unmei battles with another student in a mock battle, and has to be wrenched from her opponent due to the child insulting her mother.(11)
-Unmei spends two years training water walking and tree walking jutsu to perfection, along with the ice variation in an attempt to get ahead of the other students.(13)
-Unmei, at the age of 15 passes the academy exams and surpasses many of the other genin in terms of ability and skill. Manages to go through the entire academy years without revealing that she is female, and is presumed male the entire time.
Roleplay Sample:
The day was soft, and began like any other, the irritatingly bright sun shining in through his window, down into the red haired Uzumaki's clear blue eyes, and he simply rolled over. The sun shining in through his window meant it was about three in the afternoon, as he lived on the other side of the house. He liked sleeping in after all. You see, of all the Uzumaki, Amon, the name of the boy you are about to experience, is a tad off from others. Amon awoke, naked in his bed, the sheets covering as he stared out the window finally.*"Da*n sun.....why do you insist on ruining my sleep you piece of sh*t"* He shook his head as he stood up calmly from his bed, and simply picked up his jeans from the floor, along with a pair of boxer briefs, and pulled them onto his own, medium built body. for his shirt, he tossed on a tropical looking short with a old oriental tree styled onto the back of it. He didn't bother to button, simply because he didn't give enough of a dam* to do so.
He walked downstairs from his room, and seeing no one was there, for him to trick into making him food, he rummaged through the refrigerator for something to eat, producing what looked to be a plate of cooked ham saran wrapped to keep it fresh, and some orange juice piqued his interest as he took the contents of his desire from the fridge. Simply taking the few pieces of ham cold and quickly eating them as he tossed them into his mouth, downing them with orange juice as he drank straight from the jug, something he perfected as he waterfalled the juice, so as not to backwash. He would then after leaving his breakfast on the table for someone else to clean up, walked to the bathroom.
He looked in the mirror and stared at his hair, red, as it always was, needed some combing, as he had a bed head, but he decided not to bother with it. Instead, he picked up a toothbrush, and put toothpaste on it quite calmly, brushing his teeth quickly, before realizing the taste of mint and orange juice was mixing in his mouth, a revolting flavor, as he quickly spat the toothpaste out, and rinsed his mouth out with water straight from the sink, not bothering to find a cup. With that business done, he grabbed a pair of combat boots, and some socks, putting the socks on first of course, followed by the boots, which had a steel toe to them.
He finally after having this done and lacing his shoes, walked out the door of his home, and locked it behind him, before walking past the people of the city, not caring a lick for any of them, occasionally yelling at someone with heavy sarcasm when they tried to get in his way. This was close to how Amon started each of his every days.
Amon finally made it to a small coffee shop where he sat at one of the outside tables, preferring the outside, as he grabbed one of the many poetry books they had at the shop for a light read as he stopped to read. He took his coffee you see, as he puts it gray. He liked a type of black bean coffee whose beans made the coffee black, but added enough sugar to make the coffee turn a grayish color. He simply sat at the outside table sipping coffee as he enjoyed the works of a rather dark author, nothing was better than this to him. For unlike other ninja, he did not revel in sparring, he enjoyed his solitude, he was only a ninja because it made his parent's happy. For now, he simply sat in the shade of his table umbrella, which was striped blue and gold, and read his book, but also watched passerby's for anything that might remotely pique his interests.
THE ARSENAL.
- Custom Jutsu:
Name:Ice Melding Jutsu
Rank:D
Type:Ninjutsu
Range:0~5 meters
Element:Hyoton
Description:This jutsu allows the user to do minor alterations to the shape of a ice jutsu in order to throw off opponents, or to alter the defence of a jutsu her controls, or the offence of a jutsu. This is purely a utility jutsu and only affects ice within five meters of him. This jutsu only allows the user to change the simply shapes of ice in order for them to better suit his needs. This jutsu only affects C rank to lower ice jutsu. (For example this jutsu could be used to spike the ice dome, and that would be treated as a single alteration.
Chakra Cost:3 per alteration
Name:Kiss of death
Rank:C-B
Type:Ninjutsu
Range:Close(Kissing)
Element:Hyoton
Description:This jutsu is a simple jutsu that allows the user to kiss a opponent softly, and breath into their mouth. When the breath into their mouth, their chakra travels down the victims esophagus , and the chakra chills the moisture in their neck and lungs, causing their lungs to be made difficult to breath with , and being something close to haveing the lungs collapsed for a short time. At B rank however, this jutsu becomes much more deadly, freezing the moisture, and solidifying the lungs of her victim. When this happens, the blood vessels in the lungs freeze and burst, causing a clot in the blood, thus disrupting the blood flow to the heart, resulting in a heart attack.
Chakra Cost:8
Name:Hug of Frozen Love
Rank:C-B
Type:Ninjutsu
Range:Close(Grappling)
Element:Hyoton
Description:This jutsu allows the user to put their victim or ally in a cryogenic state, and cause them to be frozen in the user's grasp after two posts of being held. While they are like this they are in a ice shell that preserves them and slows their systems to barely living conditions so that they can survive 6 days without food or drink. At B rank this jutsu takes 1 full post of hold in order to freeze their target. If her target is awake for this jutsu, they can break out of it by using chakra equal to what she used at any time. This jutsu can be used on a willing or incapacitated target, if a target struggles, the jutsu would requires a 4 post grapple at C rank, and a 3 rank grapple at B rank.
Chakra Cost:9/13
Name:Thin Ice Run
Rank:D
Type:Ninjutsu
Range:Self
Element:Hyoton
Description: After using the Tiger hand seal, the user uses a jutsu much like water walking jutsu, this jutsu allows the user to charge chakra to the bottom of their feet, and allow the water/ moisture under their feed to freeze and create stand-able circles of ice around their feet. This was developed by Unmei as a more simple form of tree running or water walking, however, it leaves a trail of ice patches when she uses this. This being both good and bad, as people can slip on the ice patches much to her amusement.(Side note This jutsu is more or less Water walking or Tree walking jutsu, it simple causes slight slush where the user had walked when on a tree, and thin sections of ice where she was on the water)
Chakra Cost:1 per post.
Name:Chilled Liquid Jutsu
Rank:D
Type:Ninjutsu
Range:Touch
Element:Hyoton
Description:This jutsu infuses a small container of liquid with hyoton chakra, and causes the liquid that is, and was in the container when the jutsu was used on it, to freeze after one post. This jutsu can only work on small amounts of water such as puddles, glasses of liquids, ect. The reason for this is because the jutsu does not freeze anything that is running with chakra already inside it., aside from the users.
Chakra Cost:5
Name: Flash Freeze Burst
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0-1m)
Element: Hyoton
Description: This Hyoton jutsu exclusive to unmei allowers her to thrust chakra into water or ice she has already used for jutsu to instantly freeze the water, and then cause it to shatter. This jutsu has to be used on a source of water or ice effected by the user, and cannot randomly affect a source that the user has not even touched, making this jutsu have a high offensive utility use, but requires the user already be prepared for an attack. The method in which this is done is that the user thrust a burst of chakra through the target source, and then has it burst out. When the burst activates, the burst activates one meter from the users palm, and this jutsu always explodes outward from the user.
Chakra Cost: 7
Name: I’m Afraid You Missed
Rank: C/A
Type: Genjutsu
Medium: Optical
Range: Sight (0~20m)
Element:
Description:Unmei creates the illusion that she is exactly 3 meters, in two places away from where she actually is. This is an image displacement not a clone technique any blows that should hit where Unmei appears to be will simply pass through. She can make it appear that she is anywhere that is exactly 3 meters away from her as long as it doesn't cause her to appear to phase through the environment. Should her actual body be struck with enough force her concentration will break and the illusion will end. Her true body can be seen, untill A rank. The A rank variant requires Yin Release, and the main body vanishes, and three illusions of herself appear.
Chakra Cost: 8 CP (2 CP per post)/ 24cp(2 per post)
- Approved Jutsu:
Name: Hyōton Enchou | Ice Dome
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Description: Hyōton Enchou is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Yuki clan. The user can quickly create an ice dome around their allies and themselves to act as a defense. It is strong enough to withstand the assault of many exploding tags at once, remaining almost undamaged.
Chakra Cost: 6CP
Name: Kumogakure no Jutsu - Hidden Cloud Technique
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0 - 5m), Med (5 - 10m)
Element: -
Village: Kumogakure
Description: This jutsu is developed and trained within Kumogakure as a village specific jutsu. After forming the needed hand seal, the user will place their hand over their head and cause a large amount of cloud to gather. This cloud is extremely difficult to see through from someone not of Kumogakure, who are used to looking through heavy clouds, and are more able to do combat while within said cloud. The jutsu involves kneading chakra into the cloud, allowing the user to create extremely thick or thin levels of cloud. Those with doujutsu or chakra sensing techniques are also able to see through this thick cloud but without any aid, then you'll be blind within the cloud. A C-Rank Fuuton Jutsu can blow the clouds away.
Chakra Cost: 4 (2CP)
Name: Suirou no Jutsu - Water Prison Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Suiton (Water)
Description: Suirou no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that utilizes water to imprison an opponent. The ninja forms the necessary hand seals which causes the water to form around the target into a spherical prison which only allows for limited movement. The ninja must keep their body touching the water prison to maintain its existence. If the contact is broken, the water falls away and their target is released. When combined with a solid bunshin technique, the ninja can imprison their target but still allow for a clone to attack others nearby.
Chakra Cost: 9 (2 per post)
Name: Water Release: Water Drowning Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: Suiton (Water)
Description: The ninja first does a string of hand seals, which causes a column of water to rise from a nearby water source. It can be guided to strike a target in a number of angles.
Chakra Cost: 5 (1 per post)
Name: Kami Oroshi - Godly Wind from the Mountains
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: Fuuton (Wind)
Description: The user will generate a whirling vortex of wind which he or she can send snaking towards his or her target. This wind can be used to help cause an explosive blaze when used with certain fire and earth techniques.
Chakra Cost: 7 (2 per post)
Name: Hyōton Disuku | Ice Disk
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Description: Hyōton Disuku is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Yuki clan. This jutsu turns the moisture particles in the air into an ice disk. They can be hurled with tremendous force at a target and are hard to dodge because of their transparency. They can also be strung together to spy on areas. They can also be used defensively by being used as a shield to deflect attacks below C-rank and basic thrown weapons.
Chakra Cost: 5CP (per disk)
Name: Hyōton Tsubame Fubuki | Swallow Snow Storm
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: Hyōton (Ice Release)
Description: Hyōton Tsubame Fubuki is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Yuki clan. This jutsu creates a cluster of ice needles in the shape of miniature swallows, which the user then throws at the opponent. These needles can change direction up to 3 times in midair and will maim the opponent with their sharp wings.
Chakra Cost: 5CP (per 3 needles)
Name: Kori Shinchuu no Jutsu - Sly Mind Affect Technique
Rank: C
Type: Genjutsu
Medium: Multi-Target
Range: Far (0m - 25m)
Element: -
Description: Kori Shinchuu no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique which causes the target to travel around in circles. If the ninja is unable to detect the illusion very quickly, they can become exhausted mentally and physically when they are unable to reach their desired target by traveling along the same path over and over. The caster must remain in the shadows, or within 25m of the targets to maintain this Genjutsu. Only 3 people may be influenced by this Genjutsu at one time.
Chakra Cost: 7 (2 per post)
Name: Kokohi no Jutsu - False Place Technique
Rank: D
Type: Genjutsu
Medium: Optical
Range: Far (0m - 20m)
Element: -
Description: Kokohi no Jutsu is a simple Genjutsu technique which changes the appearance of a nearby object. The object must be within 20m of the user.
Chakra Cost: 4 (1 per post)
- Spoiler:
Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type: Genjutsu
Range: N/A
Medium: Optical
Element: N/A
Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others.
Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Element: N/A
Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread.
Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand.
Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu.
Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Chozou no Jutsu • Storage Technique
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed.
Chakra Cost: 1 to seal; 1 to unseal.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: NA
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Genin Kit
Rank: C
Quantity: 1
Contents: 6 Kunai [6], 10 Shuriken [5], 9 Senbon [3], 10 Makibishi [2], 4 Exploding Notes [4], 3 Exploding Pouches [1], 3 Smoke Pellets [1], 12m String [4], 1 Windmill Shuriken [5], 1 File & Scissor [1].
FACE CLAIM.
Character Claim:Shirogane, Naoto
Source:Persona 4
Image URL:
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Wed 06 Mar 2013, 1:00 pm | |
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| | | | Kite
Age : 34
Posts : 1209
| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Wed 06 Mar 2013, 3:51 pm | |
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- Your nicknames, I'm not really seeing how your character would have acquired some of these. "The Daughter of Ice" and "The Prodigy of Assassination" don't seem to fit here. Keep in mind that nicknames are not self proclaimed titles, but rather names or titles given to your character by others. Pet names such as "Pup" need no explanation, but more impressive sounding titles like "The Prodigy of Assassination" need to be explained a bit in the history section of your application. Please do so or remove them, as it would be very rare for anyone to give a genin a title such as "Prodigy of Assassination" or even "The Daughter of Ice" if she herself is unaware of her Yuki heritage (I am assuming that if she is unaware of her heritage then her entire family is as well, if I am mistaken please let me know).
- Please link the Yuki clan page to your clan section where you have typed "Yuki" so that people can quickly access the clan page from your profile.
- You will need to expand your combat style to at least a good sized paragraph. It is far too short as it is now.
- There is a coding error between your "Special Characteristics" section and your "Background" section that causes the heading for your "Background" section to appear within the spoiler of your "Special Characteristics" section. Fix this please.
- I would personally like you to elaborate more on how your character killed her sensai. This is not a common thing for genin to do and is worth a bit more explanation.
- "Kiss of Death" is too powerful as it is. At C rank no ability has the potential to instantly kill a person, even if you managed to get close enough to kiss them. At C rank you can irritate their throat enough to cause them to have trouble breathing for about 2 posts, nothing more extreme than that. Change it or remove it.
- Hug of Frozen Love is a bit too powerful for my liking for C rank. I am okay with her using it on allies who consent to this but for enemies who you grapple the freezing will be incomplete, or at least it should be and rather than paralysis and complete cryogenic freezing, you'd see more of a slowing down and numbing effect for a few posts. Just tone it down somehow.
- It seems the entry for" Thin Ice Run" is incomplete. Also the chakra cost is too small, it needs to be increased to correspond with the D rank of jutsu on this site.
- The genjutsu "Care For A Glass?" does not work here for several reason. I would suggest reading our current genjutsu guide given here for more clarification.
- Once again, "Warmth of a Woman's Touch" does not meet the standards for our genjutsu and I urge you to read the guide to figure out why.
- Frozen Ghast Grandiur needs some work. It corresponds better with our system than your previous two genjutsu techniques but it still falls a bit short. One major issue is that you do not get to decide the kai cost or how one breaks out due to it already being detailed in the genjutsu guide. Also you do not get to state you retain your chakra in a technique if you initiate it then decide to cancel it. You will lose all your chakra unless for some reason the technique was not/could not be used.
- Demon Windmill Blizzard is a bit hard for me to understand. I don't understand how suspending the fuuma shuriken above your head would serve to generate ice particles around you. The other issue I have is that it takes a great deal of chakra control to maintain a weapon over your head in a suspended manor, especially for someone who's not a weapon or a puppetry user. The next issue is that this jutsu needs to have an upkeep cost if you had intended to keep this weapon over your head for several posts, but honestly I am going to deny this one just on the basis of you not being a weapons user or a puppetry user while trying to manipulate a weapon in such an unnatural way. Remove it.
- For the genjutsu I'm Afraid You Missed, I'd have to say no due to the description leading me to believe that you are somehow masking the true position of your body. Essentially you seem to be somehow camouflaging yourself in battle while projecting another image away from your body, which is too advanced for a C rank jutsu. Remove or alter it.
Let me know when you fixed everything addressed here. Thank you.
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| | | | Remain
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Wed 06 Mar 2013, 7:03 pm | |
| 1. Fixed 
2. Fixed
3.Added some more
4.Fixed
5.Added more to that story
6&7 Nerfed~
8 Edited ice run a bit, if I need to I can up the cost, but its really just a fancy water walking XD the idea of someone actually slipping on the tiny bit of slush is low
9&10 Removed the genjutsu, and swapped them with Sly mind and False place techniques
11 Edited and removed the chakra gain
12 I figured that one was a stretch XD, Replaced it with Ice Dome
13 I am Afraid you missed is a bit of a signature move of herself and her sister, and was already approved as a c rank for her sister, but if you like, I can make a slightly toned down version of it that has both of the bodies around, and gives her attackers the chance to attack one or the other |
| | | | Kite
Age : 34
Posts : 1209
| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Thu 07 Mar 2013, 7:36 pm | |
| Alright, it's all looking a lot better. Thanks for making the changes and such.
- As for "Thin Ice Run" I can let that slide now that you explained it, just keep it the way it is now and it's fine, thank you.
- On "Frozen Ghast of Grandeur" I want you to state that it can only effect one person per mirror. Other than that it is looking better and once you add that I'll be willing to accept it.
- Is there any way you can give me your character's sister's name or their profile and account link so I can look over the application? I really do have issue with a genjutsu that can make a replica and make you vanish all in one move. The reason I have issue with this move is the fact that it does two things at once, and one of those effects being a complete vanishing act when a similar jutsu that just allows a user to be invisible is, on this site, an A rank:
- USAdmin wrote:
- Name: Meisai Gakure no Jutsu - Camouflage Concealment Technique
Rank: A
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This is a ninja escape technique that allows the user to control how light is reflected around their body with chakra inflections. The technique also erases the user's and shadow, and is usable on any terrain. Perceiving the user's position is possible only for ninja with the ability to sense chakra and/or those who have incredibly good sense of hearing and smell.
Chakra Cost: 22 (5 per post)
In any case the profile is looking a lot better. A personal note though: when you are linking your profile to your clan, might I suggest you do it this way? [URL=]Yuki[/URL] so you don't just have a raw link in your profile. You don't need to do this but I find it looks better. Anyway good job so far.
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| | | | Remain
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Thu 07 Mar 2013, 8:24 pm | |
| 1.Thanks you
2. Edited
3. Aaaah, I apologize, I didn't realize that existed on here, you see this was a jutsu of my design originally XD so I had no idea. But since it is as visibility thing I'd like to request it make 2 false versions, and the real still be visible, and that at A rank, it makes the falsehoods and the real one vanishes, however, to learn the A rank version, one must have yin release
4. Thank you for that |
| | | | Kite
Age : 34
Posts : 1209
| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Thu 07 Mar 2013, 10:31 pm | |
| It's all looking pretty good, the only thing that is of real contention is the "I'm Afraid You Missed" genjutsu. I have no problem with you saying it makes 2 false images, though I'd like to remind you that your basic bunshin would do the same thing. As for the A rank variant, just make a separate jutsu when you reach A rank access since you'd have to purchase the A rank variant separately anyway since scaling jutsu aren't given all at once. For instance if you had a jutsu that went from C to A you'd have to buy each level separately as you ranked up. So having it on your sheet that a jutsu has C to A doesn't mean you automatically get those levels upon rank up. |
| | | | Remain
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Thu 07 Mar 2013, 11:29 pm | |
| | Edited |
| | | | Kite
Age : 34
Posts : 1209
| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Fri 08 Mar 2013, 6:15 pm | |
| Approved
1/2
Now all you need to do is wait for Clever to give you your second approval since he specifically requested to give the final approval on this app. Good luck out there. |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29
Posts : 1688
| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Sun 10 Mar 2013, 11:30 pm | |
| Alright, let's get started. - Quote :
- Name:Kiss of death
I dont have much of a problem with this at C rank. At B rank, does this actually kill the target? As I see it, someone could still breathe with their lungs in a state of being somewhat frozen, seeing as they could still hold air and oxygen. How long does this frozen state last? I'd say not long. This is a B rank we're talking about here, keep that in mind. - Quote :
- Name:Hug of Frozen Love
Explain the "If her target is away for this jutsu..." seeing as that does not make much sense. If her target is "away," as in... not in the grasp, then the jutsu does not work in the first place, seeing as she has to hug them to get them there. If this is saying that the victim can break out by paying that chakra at any point, then that's fine, and that's what it should be. - Quote :
- Name:Chilled Liquid Jutsu
What happens when you touch someone's face with this? Why is it that it only works on a container of water? What happens when you touch someone's stomach with this. Nothing? Can it not permeate other living chakras, and thus only the plastic of containers? You need to specify that, because this looks lethal otherwise. - Quote :
- Name: Frozen Ghast of Grandure
So basically what you have here is an auto hit paralysis genjutsu. You're going to need to use hand seals, which is something you neglected to mention in any of your custom jutsu. I need to know how long it takes for the ice mirror to be created, and the focus should only get them when it's fully created. But that's not even the real issue; this genjutsu is much to complex and potent for that of a C rank genjutsu. What's more, nothing changes between C rank and S rank, effectively making me believe that there should not be such range, if nothing is changing. A C rank genjutsu that puts the target under a visual stimulus, basically blinds them, paralyses them, and makes them forget they're in battle. Not gunna happen, and I think you should be able to understand my reasoning. This sounds much more like an A rank genjutsu, seeing as you have all of those qualities mixed in there. I dont want to see you, at a higher rank, spamming ten mirrors instantly (seeing as you dont need hand seals - change that) and trapping ten people in a genjutsu that you basically specified they cannot know that they're in, seeing as they forget their previous moments and context for what's happening. Too powerful and too much sway on the mind for a C rank. Nope. For jutsu that should need hand seals, please specify that. If you were thinking that none of those jutsu need hand seals, please specify that so that we can know and for clarity. Thanks. I'll look back here when that all is done.
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Mon 11 Mar 2013, 12:08 am | |
| Most is discussed in skypes save for the last bit.
I can adjust the frozen ghast to where they still remember the battle from C-B rank, and if they kai it, it will be as though it never happened, I can make the Ice mirror a 1 post cast time at C rank, and I will add seals to the jutsu I feel should require it. |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29
Posts : 1688
| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Mon 11 Mar 2013, 1:18 am | |
| | You cannot use focus genjutsu until you're B rank. |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29
Posts : 1688
| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Mon 11 Mar 2013, 1:25 am | |
| Name: I’m Afraid You Missed
Rank: C/A
Type: Genjutsu
Medium: Optical
Range: Sight (0~20m)
Element:
Description:Unmei creates the illusion that she is exactly 3 meters, in two places away from where she actually is. This is an image displacement not a clone technique any blows that should hit where Unmei appears to be will simply pass through. She can make it appear that she is anywhere that is exactly 3 meters away from her as long as it doesn't cause her to appear to phase through the environment. Should her actual body be struck with enough force her concentration will break and the illusion will end. Her true body can be seen, untill A rank. The A rank variant requires Yin Release, and the main body vanishes, and three illusions of herself appear.
Chakra Cost: 8 CP (2 CP per post)/ 24cp(2 per post)
This is not pre approved. It is a custom jutsu that you changed slightly from someone else's app, yet you put it in the middle of your pre approved jutsu. Do not try sneaking things in there, Velo. I will find them <.< |
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Mon 11 Mar 2013, 1:51 am | |
| | I created that jutsu anyway XD |
| | | | Sloth
Age : 31
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Mon 11 Mar 2013, 6:30 am | |
| - CleverYamanaka wrote:
- Name: I’m Afraid You Missed
Rank: C/A
Type: Genjutsu
Medium: Optical
Range: Sight (0~20m)
Element:
Description:Unmei creates the illusion that she is exactly 3 meters, in two places away from where she actually is. This is an image displacement not a clone technique any blows that should hit where Unmei appears to be will simply pass through. She can make it appear that she is anywhere that is exactly 3 meters away from her as long as it doesn't cause her to appear to phase through the environment. Should her actual body be struck with enough force her concentration will break and the illusion will end. Her true body can be seen, untill A rank. The A rank variant requires Yin Release, and the main body vanishes, and three illusions of herself appear.
Chakra Cost: 8 CP (2 CP per post)/ 24cp(2 per post)
This is not pre approved. It is a custom jutsu that you changed slightly from someone else's app, yet you put it in the middle of your pre approved jutsu. Do not try sneaking things in there, Velo. I will find them <.<
I really hate to post on an app like this, but he had it there in it's approved form but TOPKite made him change it, maybe you should read what the other mod did before you accuse him of stuff. |
| | | | MsMoney
Age : 37
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Wed 13 Mar 2013, 3:04 am | |
| Kyle, you know you shouldn't post on applications. *scolds* But I hear you got scolded enough already so I'm just gonna focus on the task at hand.
Only problem I have with this application is that I'd like to ask you to put your rank to Genin. I feel a bit bad for asking only for that haha, but I shall give you the approval as soon as that is done.
Reason I am asking, is because Genin and Exp Genin both belong to the rank C. It's better to have things completely clear. |
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Wed 13 Mar 2013, 8:01 am | |
| | Done XD |
| | | | MsMoney
Age : 37
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Wed 13 Mar 2013, 5:55 pm | |
| (2/2) approved.
Now you can go make your account here. |
| | | | Adam
Age : 30
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Sun 16 Jun 2013, 5:16 pm | |
| Archived. Due to user inactivity. |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29
Posts : 1688
| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Thu 06 Feb 2014, 12:14 pm | |
| Unarchived at user request.
Awaiting edits, according to owner, and a completion bump. |
| | | | Remain
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Thu 06 Feb 2014, 12:39 pm | |
| | Edited to fit Konoha, Added in my one social SC I'm allowed, and chose master Chef |
| | | | MsMoney
Age : 37
Posts : 2201
| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Fri 07 Feb 2014, 3:23 am | |
| | There seem to be some coding issues on your app, could you please fix that up? In the custom jutsu and at the bottom where the FC is and around there. |
| | | | Remain
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Fri 07 Feb 2014, 3:29 am | |
| | should be all fixed now~ |
| | | | MsMoney
Age : 37
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Fri 07 Feb 2014, 3:32 am | |
| | Approved again, seeing as there were no major edits I don't think 2 approvals are required. |
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| | Subject: Re: Yuri, Unmei [Konoha Genin] Tue 22 Jul 2014, 3:51 am | |
| Archived due to inactivity and failure to complete the activity check..
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