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MERICER, NÝX.

THE INFO.

Name: Nýx Angèle Mericer
Nickname: Dolly, Angèle, Vixen.
Age: 16.
Gender: Female.
Appearance: Brownish black color, naturally curly, hair napes around Nýx’s neck, and goes slightly more down by an inch or two. Soft and much like silk many could say if they were to get close enough, along with a honey due smell due to the shampoo she uses, it can almost bring a person to feel as if they are in heaven. She also may put her hair into piggy tails, or a pony tail. Depending on the mood that she is in, will be how it’s going to be styled. When she is upset, normally she won’t do a thing with her hair, although if she is in a good or great mood, you’ll see that she is going to do a lot more with it. Some days, Alivyre will place her hair up, with a pink or different colored bow. She also tends to go along with using different types of flower in it, just to make it stand out, or even to make it a mixture of different smells. She also loves to braid her hair at times, although you won’t ever see that happen, or see her walk around with them in, her hair will become even curlier then before.

Nýx has brown eyes, during times, they will look a golden color just a tiny ring around the iris of her eyes. This wont show up during the night, nor mid-day. Only during the morning will it really show up, it’s quiet strange on how this happens, but it is true. Strange enough, the golden ring will become less noticeable during the day, and by night fall, it’s gone. With a porcelain doll look, Nýx’s skin is a pinkish white color, with no marks or blemishes. She almost looks as if she were made in an store or something, but rather, she always had taken care of herself, and made sure there wasn’t going to ever be a scar, blemish, mark, or anything along the lines of that. A delegate height of five feet’ three inches, Nýx is quiet shorter then most.

Although she doesn’t look to weight anything, Nýx weights in around 115 to 120 pounds, of pure women. Although she is skinnier then most, this is because she is sick and also has anorexia. Nýx normally wears whatever she feels like, her style is picked by her, and not by others, one day you’ll find her wearing a tutu with a “Bite Me” t-shirt, or a dress from the 1800th’s. It all depends on what she feels like putting on, and where she is going that day. Nýx has her ears and cartilage pierced. She almost always haves her nails painted.

Etched in a luxurious cursive on the vanilla skin of her left breast, an approximate five inches below her mid-collarbone, is a tattoo filled with the shadowy ink of black, dark enough to blend into night’s eternal ambiance. The inscription reads “Lust”, representing the sin she embodies.
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Personality:
Nýx comes off as perfect, and sweet. She loves to help everyone; she would give you the shirt off her back. Nýx is a straight up bitch, she doesn’t tend to like anyone, other then the male sex, she will flirt with a girls boyfriend, in front of her. She doesn’t care, and will do as she pleases, she will normally hate all females, unless they are able to befriend, which only happens once in a blue moon. Although Nýx doesn’t normally become friends with someone, she does tend to stray from that, and have one or two friends that are female, that she will go shopping with, but these girls are just like her. But due to the fact, not many people would befriend this dolly, she really needs to be able to trust a person, to know that they aren’t what she calls, “Hanse” or “Fakes” Hanse is a word, made up by Nýx herself, so she could be an even bigger bitch then she already is. Because of this, only three people are allowed to use it, unless told by Nýx herself they can.

Another thing about Nýx is that she is a teachers pet, the only time when she pretends to be ‘nice’ is when she is in school, or learning from someone. Because of this, she is able to get whatever she wants. She tends to become shy but that is only an act, that’s right. Nýx here, loves to make people believe she is weak, and cannot do anything for herself, so she will get others to do it for her. She enjoys doing that to people, making them feel as if they are important to her, then turn around and treat them like shit.

Positive Traits
Serious − Although Nýx may tend to joke around with people whom are close to her, she is very serious, and will tell you the up right truth, weather or not you like it. Although you make think she is rude ―Which she is― she really isn’t going to let one walk around like an idiot. Although that’s only one part of being “Serious”, she is always down right being one with not really ever joking, unless she is at a party, or laughing at someone’s pain.

Respectful − Nýx can be respectful, of course… This isn’t just for anyone. They HAVE To be older then herself, or she isn’t going to give a flying fuck about them. She only is respectful to her ‘elders’ and no one, by all means, no one else.

Tasteful − Nýx is all about style, and clothing. If you aren’t dressed right, and you look like an idiot, you’ll get a ring through. You would even call her the, “Faison Police.” ―Haha― But she isn’t one for “Ugly” rather then, if your wearing something out of date, your’ fucked.

Wise − Nýx is wise with making her mind on things, if she knows it’s not right, normally she wouldn’t do it. Unless its’ something such being, like… Kicking someones’ ass, or something like that matter. Then she will do it and not care.

Brilliant − When Nýx went to school, she was the most brilliant girl there, her brains are as or more then her strength. That’s another thing Alivyre is great a doing, is math, English and all that.

Faithful − Although you could say, she doesn’t often show it, but Nýx is a faithful person, she believes in many different gods, some may say it’s crazy, but she doesn’t believe this, in her eyes… Her faith and beliefs are her own, and that’s the way it will stay.


Negative Traits
Hardheaded – A bittersweet mannerism, once she settles on any particular act or idea, Nýx’s tumultuous determination will see to the action or idea being followed through at any cost. Her word is also affected by this, as she dislikes breaking her word.

Deceiving – Terribly much so. Nýx is, by nature, deceitful; though, her Sin of Lust is to blame on the concrete adamancy of it. The girl is a flawless liar and trickster. Most actions of fraudulence are done subconsciously, which dents her personality. Oh well.

Carelessness – Nýx tends to be hot-blooded (metaphorically), and often operates on her temper before she thinks situations wholly through. Though she can be lethal in dire situations of strategy, on typical days, basically every single feat is rooted from impulse. Not only does her carelessness run through her physique, it also courses through her mind and speech; it seems that her thought-to-speech filter broke at some point. Maybe it was her no longer giving a shit.

Envious – Another personality chink introduced by Envy itself, her enviousness for others and their joy is something slightly disturbing. Only practiced whilst in extreme highs of emotion, Alivyre will become hell-bent on mutilating and crushing what happiness, love, and joy someone held; through Hell’s fire and back, Alivyre will make damn sure they do not continue living happily or anything of the sort. This bout of emotion is erratic and cannot be patterned, however.

Selfish − Once again, this chink would be the worst of them all when it comes to this vixen. Selfish is something that could be the worst part of Nýx; her mind is always about herself and no one, by all means, NO one else. Of course, Nýx will tend to stray and pretend to care about someone for a certain moment.
Likes:
Alcohol − The bitter sweet taste of alcohol is one Nýx enjoys so very much, although many may say she is a ‘drunk’ this isn’t true, Nýx never drinks enough to even be thought off as that. [Note, she sneaks it]
Cold weather − The chills against skin, and the smell of hot coco can be found with this; the only reason why Nýx would even think of enjoying the cold weather around the year.
Green apples − Green apples, the best tasting of them all, in Nýx’s opinion, she could live off of them, of course not really because that doesn’t give you all you need. But you get where she’s going at.
Rain − Who doesn’t like the rain? The small drops of water patting onto the ground like tiny soldiers getting ready to go to war. Due to this, Nýx LOVES rain, dancing, singing in it, all of that. Of course, she would only ever do this outside of her home in the back yard.
Winter − Comes along with ‘Cold Weather’, winter is the best time of the year, with the feeling of the snow under either her feet, her small body moving along it. She can’t believe that something so small, can with stand so much… Just like her.
The color red and pink − The two favorite colors of this vixen, she loves them more then a fat kid loves cake! {Not really… That’s just rude!... Hahaha} But really, her room looks like a pink and red candy cane back in her parents home, they have been, and always will be her favorite colors.
Intelligence
A challenge − A challenge in strength, wisdom, whatever. She loves a ‘challenge’ when it comes to just about everything around there. Although her favorite is do with the mind and body, she wont ever let one go.


Dislikes:
Hot weather − Hot weather is the worst, the way it makes one sweat, it nasty. She hates the hotness, cannot stand it worth anything!
Humidity − Comes with the hotness of course, this is one thing, she can’t stand worth anything other then being awoken or losing a bet…
Being awoken − Go a head… Try to wake her up… You’ll loose a head! No really, she will chew your head off, sleep is something everyone needs, even more for Nýx, because if she doesn’t get her sleep, watch your ass.
Losing a bet − A challenge is always to be won, as is a bet. With hating to lose to anything and anyone, this is one this she hates.. Something she wouldn’t put up with, why? Because she is a person, that is like a perfectionist, everything HAS TO BE perfect, if not, it aint’ going to work out. She needs to always win, and never lose.

Clan: N/A
Nindō: “Live life to no end, party at hearts content, and act as if no one is watching…”

THE NINJA.

Origin: Fire Country
Affiliation: Konohagakure
Rank: Genin
Specialties: Ninjutsu and Fuuinjutsu.
Elemental Affinities: Fire and Earth.
Combat Style:
Nýx doesn't fully do face-to-face combat... Rather then mind games, she loves to mess with people to the point where they become so confused. And unknown what to do, although Nýx does do combat, she is very, very violent, and dirty. Although Nýx is much smaller then most people, she still is able to fight like anyone else is able to, of course, unless they cannot fight... And that would just be oh-so-sad. But without the mind games, she couldn't really be able to do the fighting, because she needs them not to be thinking about the fight, unless she has the upper hand in the matter, then she'll just skip that part, and fight. But this rarely happens.
Special Characteristics:
Spoiler:
THE BACKGROUND.

History:
It was a dark cold night on June the first, the very night a baby girl, named ‘Nýx Angèle Mericer’ was born into a family of eight, with her being the only female beside her dearest mother, Nýx from a small age was treated like she could get everything and anything from anyone. Why? Because her brothers spoiled her, as did her parents. Although Nýx never meant any other males other then her brothers, for a very long time, she didn’t truly care. She always got to go out in a carriage, with four pure white horses. Due to her family being one of the richest families around the area she lived, which made for the best life while she lived there. Up until her sixteenth birthday, Nýx’s life was the greatest; she was happy, one of the happiest girls you would ever meet.

After her sixteenth birthday, life became harder for her, and that’s when she left, because she wanted to stay the way she was, and didn’t want to change she managed to get her own house, which her parents paid for, and keep paying for everything, when she sends a letter, or gives them a call, {Really… She lives beside them}, she always gets money. Although many think of Alivyre as a bitch, and not want anything to do with her, she has managed to find a few people to call her ‘best’ friends. After finding them, Nýx became what she is today, although she was already like that, it became worst, she still have that little tiny part of her that is kind… But only around children.

Nýx had always had a dream to have a child of her own, and she had tried, but so far, nothing, so she put herself into work, she learned out to cook, and bake. Unlike no other person could, she also learned how to draw, and sing, and dance. Although not many people see this as a good thing, she really could care less. She's now trying to open her own bakery, and hoping to teach others what she knows.
Roleplay Sample:
Spoiler:

THE ARSENAL.

Jutsu, Weaponry, Items etc.
Jutsu's
Academy:

C-Rank:
FACE CLAIM.

Source: Cannot Say. .w.
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PostSubject: Re: Mericer, Nýx, Angèle. [Konoha Genin] Mericer, Nýx, Angèle. [Konoha Genin] EmptySun 28 Aug 2011, 1:08 am

Once again welcome to the site Nyx, hope you have fun here.

So the app looks great, but there are a few things.

First of all, the age limit for genin is 16 so please change that. That also means that you can't legally drink Alcohol, so either you can remove it or just make it so that you sneak out and drink where no one can see you.

For your Origin, it should be a country - the Fire Country for example.

You need a combat style. At least 4-5 lines please.

You can't have Ice as an element unless you are part of the clan - Yuki. If you change that, you must have Water and Wind. Otherwise, you need to choose something else.

Also you can only have one starting Special Characteristic.

The jutsu limit is 15, which doesn't include the Academy Techniques which means that you add 14 techniques to your list. I would advise that you add some more.

And please put your Roleplay Sample in a spoiler.
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PostSubject: Re: Mericer, Nýx, Angèle. [Konoha Genin] Mericer, Nýx, Angèle. [Konoha Genin] EmptySun 28 Aug 2011, 1:30 am



*Huffs.* Fixed.

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PostSubject: Re: Mericer, Nýx, Angèle. [Konoha Genin] Mericer, Nýx, Angèle. [Konoha Genin] EmptySun 28 Aug 2011, 1:44 am

You didn't change your Age or your Alcohol drinking habit ^_^

Also, Genin are only allowed to use C rank jutsu. Please remove any jutsu that are above C rank.

And another thing, could you expand on your history and combat style?

Otherwise everything is fine.
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*Huffs.* Fixed. Again. .w.

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PostSubject: Re: Mericer, Nýx, Angèle. [Konoha Genin] Mericer, Nýx, Angèle. [Konoha Genin] EmptyMon 29 Aug 2011, 12:34 am


Hello Nyx, just a few things need to be edited about first.

Make sure you're using the proper title for your character, you are currently lacking the [Konoha Genin] indication in there, so have that quickly edited in please. I'd also like you do expand more on your Combat Style, it's currently one line and so many words. Given how well made your appearance and personality is, your combat style will let you down. I ask that you increase to around four or five sentences please. You could also increase your history a bit as well, the third paragraph is quite small and needs to be increased upon. Lastly, have your techniques split apart please instead of them all being bunched together into one massive pile. It's hard to read through them all.
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*Huffs.* Is that better? .w.

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Much better thanks.

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