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Drake
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| Subject: Senju,Toshiro [Kumo Genin] Sat 02 Nov 2013, 11:59 am | |
| - Senju,Toshiro:
Senju, ToshiroTHE INFO. Name: Senju, Toshiro
Nickname: N/A
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Black hair, olive eyes, and fair skin: the one sentence description of Toshiro. Being born into the Senju clan, his appearance need not match that of other Senjus, but he had a striking resemblance to the appearance of his mother and father, which was a pretty normal thing. Compared to his mother and father, he was considered to have superior features than both of them.
He possesses an average height for that of a shinobi, being only 5 feet 8 inches, however that doesn’t demean his confidence in any way. His physique is borderline muscular, and is the reason he’s won himself admirers. His weight is around 160 pounds, which is the proper weight for someone his height. His physical attributes would be considered intimidating, arguably an advantage.
As mentioned before, Toshiro acquired olive green eyes from his parents, something that he didn’t understand as both of them had brown eyes. The perfectly shaped eyebrows were something he had been working on himself. Like a typical Senju, he also had long black hair, something that he surely indifferent to. He always kept his hair messy and never bothered to comb them. They seemed to take care of themselves. His fair complexion was a result of a good interest of maintaining healthy skin. No visible blemishes were present except for a scar just under his lower right eyelid, which was unexplained and caused during a part of his childhood he can't remember. His high cheek bones would make him look handsome and bright, even though it was not something he was trying to get, but beauty had found its way to him.
Despite his complexity, his apparel remained quite simple. White collared shirt, under a dark blue/black vest on days when combat was not required, and dark green collared robe (with Senju clan mark on back) over a black fishnet shirt on the days when battles were deemed likely. His forehead protector would be visible on his forehead anytime he would leave the village for missions.
All in all, Toshiro always considered himself to be partially metrosexual. Meaning he understood the importance of appearance and maintained a good one, but never obsessed over it.
Forehead Protector: On forehead when required.
Personality: There are always two things that make up a personality: the good and the bad.
The Good:
Toshiro is considered to be one of the calmest shinobi in his village. His attitude towards life, people, and combat is always full of patience and understanding. For that reason, he becomes the one people like to confide in. However, he never gets involved with other people’s affairs, and always tries to keep to himself. Toshiro does not allow his understanding nature to be a source of weakness, he observes and forgets. Toshiro likes to keep morals, ethics and values in high regards, and believes that they are the things that truly define a shinobi. They have the ability to guide and assist in times of turmoil and confusion.
Strategy, politics, and teamwork are things that Toshiro believes to be the strongest and most useful. He always strives to acquire more knowledge than he already has, which makes him eager to learn and work. Due to a lack of socializing, Toshiro has been able to spend time acquiring vast knowledge that he likes to apply to situations. The knowledge he has acquired is not always specific.
For battle and life, he possesses a very demanding work ethic. Trying is never a pain for him, but rather a challenge that he wants to overcome. He explains to himself whenever need be, that he is only given life to complete a set of duties, and no matter what happens, he has to complete his duties.
The Bad:
By not meddling with other’s affairs, Toshiro has learnt to become a loner. His socializing skills have always been at a very low level from the start. Rather than spending time with friends and having fun, Toshiro confided in books and knowledge. However, he tries to do his best when striking up conversations. He uses his ability to be patient while talking to others, and seems to be a good listener. This is a bad aspect because when need be, Toshiro sometimes becomes unable to express. This can become harmful.
Toshiro's past has build up an immense anger within him, which he doesn’t like to show but does acknowledge. This anger is what is motivating him to achieve more in the world of shinobi, but also harms him unknowingly.
Control over emotions for Toshiro does not mean not feeling them, but being able to hide them. This is something that he considers a very useful skill, even though others may disagree. He learned that emotions become a gateway to a person's mind. By making a person feel a certain emotion, they can be easily manipulated. To avoid having to face such a situation, Toshiro makes sure his enemies think that he is emotionless, even though in reality he is not.
Toshiro has lost all hope and confidence in family, he doesn't believe it is something that can give a shinobi power and strength, but rather something that holds them back. Despite knowing this, he continues to play his role in his 'family' as a son. But when situations change, and big decisions need to be taken, family is not one of the aspects Toshiro will be taking into consideration.
Clan: Senju
Nindō: Patience is key.
THE NINJA. Origin: The Lightning Country
Affiliation: Kumogakure
Rank: C
Specialties: Ninjutsu, Genjutsu
Elemental Affinities: Earth, Water
Combat Style:
Toshiro’s personality allows him to be a patient and strategic fighter. He likes to analyze and act. Toshiro is able to perform better than most under pressure, and remains calm and collected even during the toughest of situations.
Toshiro prefers long-range battles and gaining an eagle’s eye view of the battlefield. He is a member of the Senju clan that allows him to create, destroy and manipulate wood. He is also an avid genjutsu user. However his manipulation ability of wood, allows him to defend against short-ranged attacks also.
His strong will, determination, and discipline along with the desire to fulfill his objectives gives him the most extreme form of mental power, which lets him fight with all his will. Though he doesn't know it, that fire is what has given him most of his success in combats. Toshiro believes that impossible tasks do exist, only if they are constricted to a certain period of time. Thus, he allows himself to believe that he knows when to give up.
As for weaknesses, Toshiro considers himself in a great disadvantage during a time when the battlefield consists of no trees or water, that is the time when he has nothing to rely on except his genjutsu.
Since he is only a C ranked shinobi, his chakra capactiy and knowledge of jutsu is still at a low, thus making combat a very risky thing.
Special Characteristics:
- Increased Chakra Capacity:
Name: Increased Chakra Capacity Rank: C Type: Chakra Based Physical Requirements: N/A Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic. Description: Through extensive meditation and physical training the ninja's chakra capacity increases by 20CP.
THE BACKGROUND.
- History:
Toshiro was born into the house of a Senju jounin named Takashi. His wife was Aiden Senju, and they had just given birth to their first child. Takshi Seji was a well known figure in the village.Almost every genin of the village had aspired to become a shinobi having such unquestioned valour. The home village for Toshiro was Kumogakure, located in the lightning country. It is not originally the hometown of the Senju clan, but their ancestors have migrated.
One week after Toshiro was born, Takashi, the father had to leave on a S ranked mission for Kumogakure. Takashi, at the time was considered to be the strongest jounin on Kumogakure. For this reason only, he was chosen. The mission eventually turned out to be unsuccessful, and Takashi had not returned. However, one of his team members, Daichi Uzumaki had returned. Although severely injured, he made sure his first stop was at the house of his former team mate, and best friend. He had come to give news to Aiden that her husband and Toshiro's father had died in battle. Devastated by the news, Aiden decided that her life was no longer meaningful as a mother or wife. She decided to leave Toshiro, who was barely two weeks old at the time, at the doorstep of Daichi Uzumaki, and went on a quest to avenge her fallen husband. Upon departure from the village, she was branded a traitor by the village and by Toshiro.
As far as Toshiro was concerned, Daichi had been his father. As a young boy, he had always kept to himself, and did not socialize. For this reason only he was unaware about his past. As soon as he reached the age of 10 and started to understand the system of clans and kekkai genkai's, Toshiro started to ask questions. Daichi was left with no choice but to reveal the true past of Toshiro, and tell him about his family. However, at the time Toshiro had not taken it as bad as was expected. Ever since he was two weeks old, Daichi had been taking care of him, and for that reason he only considered Daichi to be his real family, even if he was from a different clan.
As an academy student, Toshiro was outstanding. He received compliments from his instructors, and was told that with the work ethic he possessed he could achieve great things. He was considered to be a quick learner, and within no time graduated from the academy to become a true ninja and a genin for Kumo.Being promoted to a genin was not of much significance to Toshiro, this was due to the knowledge he had attained by that time, which surpassed that of an average genin. He knew that becoming a genin was just the stepping stone of his career, and he had a long way to go.
Toshiro's story continues as a genin for Kumogakure, it has been several years since he has learned of his past. What he had went through was not a normal course of events, and for that reason, he could not be just a normal genin.The loss of his mother and father was not a healthy thing, due to that he had never accomplished a sense of being home while at Kumogakure, loyalty was not something he understood.
- RP Sample:
The rain continued to pour down on the village of Kirigakure. Kira liked to think of it as a way the heavens would repent for their mistakes. Their mistakes mainly being: taking the lives of the innocent and leaving the dreadful on the Earth. It would seem that they have finally realized that their decisions will only cause more pain and suffering to others. Thus, they cry. Crying would be a symbol of asking for forgiveness, hoping the people don’t lose their faith in them, hoping they also do not become the ones to start causing pain. But again, this was only the boy’s opinion, he had many more like these, but he never shared for the fear of people talking about him in a negative manner. That was always something he could never learn to let go, at least not yet. The general desire to be liked by everyone was something Kira considered as a weakness.
cold water would keep falling endlessly on to the ground , by this time 3-4 centimeters of rainfall would have accumulated, and the rain was still strong. His shoes would only cover a third of his bare feet, meaning his feet would be going a little numb now from the coldness. Just so he could deal with it, he would bring up his feet and sit on the bench crisscrossed. He hoped that the girl wouldn’t feel comfortable, however the bench was big enough so it shouldn’t be much of a problem. He then takes a quick glance at the girl who would appear to be doing something eccentric. Curiosity would get the best of him, as he would then ask her what she was doing. “What was that?”, he would ask with a genuine look of curiosity that could be read from his tensed face.
Though it didn’t seem like she would answer his question, she would turn to him with a bright soft smile on her face. He listened as the girl would tell him to respect his elders, and that he would need to pay up first. But the truth was, there was no payment, there were probably no drugs. But they both insisted on continuing the topic the same way they had started. He would look away for a moment and stare at the streets next to the park. He followed its path to see it lead to some shops. It was quite obvious that a park would be located at such a place. However, the evidence of life would start to deteriorate as the rain would start falling harder by the second.
“I don’t respect the elders that ask for respect. Especially when they are selling drugs to minors.”, he would say with a serious face. The girl didn’t seem to be much older than the girl, maybe a matter of few years..but he could never be sure. “You can either show me the package, take the money and leave..or I shall find a different vendor.”, he made sure to bite the inside of his cheek to make sure he wouldn’t burst out in laughter. Things would be getting more amusing now.
THE ARSENAL. Equipment:
- Genin Kit:
Name: Genin Kit Rank: C Quantity: 1 Contents: 6 Kunai [6], 10 Shuriken [5], 9 Senbon [3], 10 Makibishi [2], 4 Exploding Notes [4], 3 Exploding Pouches [1], 3 Smoke Pellets [1], 12m String [4], 1 Windmill Shuriken [5], 1 File & Scissor [1].
Jutsu:
- Academy Jutsu:
Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique Rank: E Type: Genjutsu Range: N/A Medium: Optical Element: N/A Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others. Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: 10 meters Element: N/A Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread. Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand. Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu. Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Chozou no Jutsu • Storage Technique Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed. Chakra Cost: 1 to seal; 1 to unseal.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: NA Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
- Clan Ninjutsu(4):
Name: Mokuton: Henge | Wood Release: Transformation Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Description: Mokuton: Henge is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Senju clan. This jutsu is just like any other Transformation Technique. The user performs the necessary hand seals, then wood emerges and covers his entire body and a puff of smoke or chakra covers up the transformation. Once the jutsu is done, the transformation is complete. It acts more like a costume than a transformation, as the user is able to leave it behind if necessary. This transformation is able to withstand a reasonable amount of damage before dispersing. Chakra Cost: 3CP
Name: Mokuton: Gosunkugi Enjin | Wood Release: Wood Spike Ring Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Description: Mokuton: Gosunkugi Enjin is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Senju clan. In order for this technique to work the user must have their target surrounded in wood. The user forms spikes on their wood which surrounds their target in a spiked rings, preventing them from making sudden movements or even performing a substitution escape mechanic. Chakra Cost: 4CP
Name: Mokuton: Semaijurin no Jutsu | Wood Release: Small Forest Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Description: Mokuton: Daijurin no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Senju clan.A technique that changes one's own arm into big trees. Using chakra, the tissues are transformed into trees at the cellular level. Then, by activating the trees, stimulating them to grow rapidly, they lengthen at high speed and fork into many branches. It is possible to capture the enemy with these branches and at the same time, these branches, though not sharp, are still capable of performing ranged blunt damage. Though a powerful technique, it's not capable of destroying a solid surface very easily, and is a beginner's version of Mokuton: Daijurin no Jutsu Chakra Cost: 8CP (2 per post)
Name: Mokuton: Shichūrō no Jutsu | Wood Release: Four Pillars Prison Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m ~ 5m) Element: Mokuton (Wood Release) Description: Mokuton: Shichūrō no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique used by the members of the Senju clan. This technique lets the user summon a tree around their opponent to bind them. The user changes chakra into timber under the ground and makes it grow rapidly, while forming it into a wooden prison. The size of the prison is five meters in each side, making it capable of containing multiple individuals if used in one spot. The timber itself is treated with a chakra coating, making its destruction extremely difficult. During war, it has the great ability to detain prisoners, but it can also be used as a disciplinary measure for quarreling subordinates. Chakra Cost: 8CP
- Elemental Ninjutsu(5):
Name: Shinjuu Zanshu no Jutsu - Double Suicide Decapitation Technique Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: Doton • Shinjuu Zanshu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. The ninja will travel through the ground to appear below their target. They will then surprise their target by then pulling them into the ground. Once in the ground their target is thus immobilized. Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Dochuu Senkou - Underground Submarine Voyage Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: Doton • Dochuu Senkou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. After forming the needed hand seals, the user can sink below ground and quickly travel through the earth. Chakra Cost: 6 (2 per post)
Name: Doryuusou - Earthen Rising Spears Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Doton (Earth) Description: This technique lets the user condense mud or stone, from the ground, and shape them into spikes that will protrude from the ground in order to skewer the target. The spikes are brittle, and can be broken with a strong blow or tough defense. Chakra Cost: 7
Name: Mizuame Nabara - Starch Syrup Capture Field Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Suiton (Water) Description: Suiton • Mizuame Nabara is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Water Element. After forming the needed handseals, the user will expel a sticky liquid from his/her gullet. This liquid can cover approximately 20 square meters. If the target runs on top of the liquid, their feet will become glued to its sticky surface. If the ninja focuses chakra to their feet before touching the surface, they can hover above and move over it without hindrance. This allows the user or a comrade to charge and attack without fear of becoming bogged down as well. Chakra Cost: 7
Name: Suirou no Jutsu - Water Prison Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Suiton (Water) Description: Suirou no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that utilizes water to imprison an opponent. The ninja forms the necessary hand seals which causes the water to form around the target into a spherical prison which only allows for limited movement. The ninja must keep their body touching the water prison to maintain its existence. If the contact is broken, the water falls away and their target is released. When combined with a solid bunshin technique, the ninja can imprison their target but still allow for a clone to attack others nearby. Chakra Cost: 9 (2 per post)
- Genjutsu(3):
Name: Kasumi Juusha no Jutsu - Mist Servant Technique Rank: D Type: Genjutsu Medium: Optical Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: - Description: Kasumi Juusha no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique that creates up to 5 false attackers to delay and confuse the enemy. Though these servants are not real, the actual ninja is able to remain hidden and throw kunai and shuriken matching the movements of the servants. This makes it appear the false servants are capable of attacking. When the enemy attempts to attack the servant, they will merely disrupt the servants illusion body but not destroy it. If these clones leave 5m radius of the caster, they will disappear. Chakra Cost: 4 (1 per post)
Name: Kokohi no Jutsu - False Place Technique Rank: D Type: Genjutsu Medium: Optical Range: Far (0m - 20m) Element: - Description: Kokohi no Jutsu is a simple Genjutsu technique which changes the appearance of a nearby object. The object must be within 20m of the user. Chakra Cost: 4 (1 per post)
Name: Kori Shinchuu no Jutsu - Sly Mind Affect Technique Rank: C Type: Genjutsu Medium: Multi-Target Range: Far (0m - 25m) Element: - Description: Kori Shinchuu no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique which causes the target to travel around in circles. If the ninja is unable to detect the illusion very quickly, they can become exhausted mentally and physically when they are unable to reach their desired target by traveling along the same path over and over. The caster must remain in the shadows, or within 25m of the targets to maintain this Genjutsu. Only 3 people may be influenced by this Genjutsu at one time. Chakra Cost: 7 (2 per post)
- Kumogakure Specific(3):
Name: Kumogakure no Jutsu - Hidden Cloud Technique Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0 - 5m), Med (5 - 10m) Element: - Description: Kumogakure no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique utilizing no element. A technique that imitates that of the Kirigakure no Jutsu, once the user has performed the required handseals they will be able to call upon a thick and heavy cloud that will appear almost out of nowhere. The cloud will be able to cover a ten metre radius around the user and only the user is able to sense where others lurk within the cloud. Those with doujutsu or chakra sensing techniques are also able to see through this thick cloud but without any aid, then you'll be blind within the cloud. If a C - Rank or above fuuton technique is activated, then the cloud will be blown away. Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Kumo Bo - Cloud Tomb Rank: D Type: Genjutsu Medium: Single-Target Range: Close (0 - 5m) Element: - Description: Kumo Bo is a genjutsu technique. Once the user has performed the required hand seals and is standing within a ten metre radius of the opponent, they will be able to call upon clouds from the air to suddenly drop from the sky and encase their opponent. The illusionary clouds will make the target feel as if they are tapped within them and will struggle to break free, the only way to break free from the technique is through the usual process of using 'Kai' or inflicting self pain. Chakra Cost: 4 [1]
Name: Konkorudo no Hikō - Flight of the Concorde Rank: C Type: Genjutsu Medium: Single-Target Range: Close (0 - 5m), Med (5 - 10m), Far (10m+) Element: - Description: Konkorudo no Hikō is a genjutsu technique. After performing the required handseals and the opponent has maintained eye contact with the users body, the user will be able to call upon a flock of eagles that appear from a cloud surrounding the user within a two metre radius. The group of five average sized bald eagles will fly out of the cloud and at the opponent, to then attack them with their vicious claws or with the use of their sharp beaks. The technique is commonly used to scare opponents away or to distract them enough for a follow - up attack. Chakra Cost: 7 [2]
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| | | MsMoney
Age : 37 Posts : 2201
| Subject: Re: Senju,Toshiro [Kumo Genin] Sat 02 Nov 2013, 3:34 pm | |
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- The image at the top of the app isn't working.
- Could you add a bit to your appearance, personality and combat style? Like 200 words to each would be great, since you are applying for a clan I just need to see a tiny bit more effort.
What is your character's weakness in combat?
- You can't start with a custom kit. This is the kit you can start with:
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[b]Name:[/b] Genin Kit [b]Rank:[/b] C [b]Quantity:[/b] 1 [b]Contents:[/b] 6 Kunai [6], 10 Shuriken [5], 9 Senbon [3], 10 Makibishi [2], 4 Exploding Notes [4], 3 Exploding Pouches [1], 3 Smoke Pellets [1], 12m String [4], 1 Windmill Shuriken [5], 1 File & Scissor [1]. - Scrolls don't need to be a part of a kit, so just have them separately.
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| | | Drake
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| Subject: Re: Senju,Toshiro [Kumo Genin] Sat 02 Nov 2013, 4:44 pm | |
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- Extended Appearance, Personality and Combat Style. All of them exceed 200 words.
- Replaced genin kit with standardized one.
- Fixed image problem.
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| | | MsMoney
Age : 37 Posts : 2201
| Subject: Re: Senju,Toshiro [Kumo Genin] Sat 02 Nov 2013, 5:29 pm | |
| 1/2 approved. |
| | | Keos
Age : 29 Posts : 1585
| Subject: Re: Senju,Toshiro [Kumo Genin] Sun 03 Nov 2013, 1:04 am | |
| Pretty standard and neat application.
I would like you to expand your History into a more detailed one. I like short and easy to read Histories, but I believe you can do better and provide us with a longer one.
Apart from that, everything else seems fine to me. |
| | | Drake
Age : 28 Posts : 223
| Subject: Re: Senju,Toshiro [Kumo Genin] Sun 03 Nov 2013, 5:21 am | |
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| Subject: Re: Senju,Toshiro [Kumo Genin] Sun 03 Nov 2013, 7:17 pm | |
| Character Approved (2/2)
Make sure to create an account here. |
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| Subject: Re: Senju,Toshiro [Kumo Genin] Sun 05 Jan 2014, 9:35 pm | |
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