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Allie
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| Subject: Hyuuga, Tsuoh [Kiri Genin] Sun 24 Mar 2013, 2:46 am | |
| Hyuuga, TsuohTHE INFO. Name: Hyuuga, Tsuoh Nickname: Soh Age: 15 Gender: Female Appearance: Tsuoh has moments of looking younger and older, mostly depending on her varying expressions and numerous stances. Generally, she just looks the part of her age with certain body parts looking more developed then is average. She stands at a total height of 5 feet 2 inches, with a slightly athletic build and creamy, pale skin. Her hair, unlike other Hyuuga, is red in color like her Uzumaki mother. Just like other Uzumaki, however, it has an unnatural growth rate. Currently, it is past her lower back, making it a nuisance despite the fact she adores it. Her solution is to pull it back with a black band and then tie a black ribbon around it. This is worn almost always, no matter the outfit. She inherited her father's creepy stark white eyes and bloodline limit, but she prefers to hide their odd coloring behind crimson hued contacts. It is rare for her to take them out as her kekkai genkai can work just fine with them in. Another thing of note are the various scars on her body from fights and general not caring about being careful. On the left side of her mouth, on the bottom lip, is a tiny cut like scar that is very distinctive. Another note worthy scar is one that is about an inch long on her stomach, just below the belly button. There are numerous scars on the backs of her hands, on her palms and fingers, and knees. On her shoulders and back there are faint burn-like scars.
As far as clothing goes, she usually doesn't dress to suit her age. Not that she cares or tries. Tsuoh prefers to wear her favorite grey-green zip-up jacket that looks a bit too bit for her in the sleeves and shoulders, over a black shirt that does not quite go past her belly button. These are usually worn with her outrageously short jean shorts, which are fur-lined to keep her warm even in the misty chill of Kirigakure. This outfit is usually accompanied with clean white bandages that cover halfway down both forearms to half past her knuckles, allowing her fingers free movement. On her feet she wears black flats that resemble ballerina shoes, but with no frills or see through parts to be had. Another common outfit for Tsuoh is the one she often wears into battle or on colder days oddly enough. It is a red dress that matches the color of her hair; It's sleeveless and comes down to about past her knees in the back. The front skirt, a lighter shade of red with ruffles, only reaches halfway down her thigh, if that. This is generally worn with brown toned leggings and knee high, darker brown leggings on top of this for added protection. The material is light to allow her to move easily despite the extra clothing. On her feet she wears old fashioned, red leather boots that are soft, durable, and extremely flexible for easy movement. Similarly, she wears gloves on her forearms to protect her wrists and the backs of her hands but allows flexibility of the wrists/fingers.
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Forehead Protector: Tied around upper left arm.
Personality: As a whole, Tsuoh's personality is rather confusing at best. She could easily be labeled with the term 'severely bi-polar', with the only difference being she's aware when she changes and it is usually by her own whim to switch. Generally, she gives off a lazy and uninterested feeling to those around her. This can, depending on the situation or person involved, vary from an intense happiness to near chronic depression and/or fiery anger. There are lesser version of the above, usually shown to those she isn't that close to or doesn't trust. It can be said that she is obscenely stubborn and hot headed, not willing to give up or step down from a fight. With that said, she very easily resorts to physical violence instead of waiting to see if it can be talked out, but she rarely picks a fight with someone she has no good reason to want to be bloodied.
Deep down, there is a darker side of Tsuoh that has never been seen by those around her. It can be compared to a loud subconscious voice, whispering evil things in her mind. Over the years it has fed a cruel streak in her, and pushed her to petty acts of stealing, vandalism, and bullying. Being small and light on her feet has allowed her to elude capture, but she never takes much joy or pride in her actions. Neither does she regret them, however. There have been darker suggestions such as things leaning towards torture and murder, but she has thankfully avoided committing these acts. Although, she thinks it really wouldn't effect her so much to actually do it. A part of her is scared that she will lose her humanity to this evil voice, but she wonders how much she actually had to begin with? Not much. She'd seen people murdered in the streets, beaten and bloodied, mobbed, and she just walked home quietly.
Clan: Hyuuga Nindō: "If you never expect anything from anyone, you can never be disappointed." & "If you let others fight your battles for you, you will always misunderstand the lesson to be learned in both defeat and victory."
THE NINJA. Origin: Kirigakure Affiliation: Kirigakure Rank: Genin-C rank Specialties: /[Ninjutsu]//[Kugutsu] Elemental Affinities: /[Katon]//[Fuuton] Combat Style: Tsuoh's style is a mixture of mid to long range Ninjutsu and Puppetry combos depending on her environment, intent, and opponent(s). She prefers to use her enhanced speed to dodge as much as possible, using her size to it's full advantage. Her disadvantage also comes from her size and obvious frailty when faced with physical damage. If she is faced with an attack she can't dodge, she is likely to use her puppet as a sort of sacrifice as her fighting style does not entirely depend on it's existence. It's not unlikely she will use techniques that combine the use of Fuuton to enhance Katon, or use her puppet as a distraction for said techniques and vice versa. It's all about avoidance and heavy distanced retaliation.
Special Characteristics: Speed
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Name: Improved Speed Rank: C Type: Physical Based Physical Requirements: N/A Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic. Description: The first level in the art of speed accessible to those who have undergone intense training in high speed movement. The possessor of this talent has an increased speed of 20% which makes them slightly faster. They can cross distances quicker than others would expect and outrun others with little effort.
One-Handed Seals
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Name: One-Handed Seals Rank: C Type: Physical Physical Requirements: N/A Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic. Description: the ninja discovers a unique talent which allows them to mix chakra by performing seals with only one hand. With an ability such as this the ninja can fight while also performing jutsu, delivering surprise attacks to their enemies. Since those who can perform one-handed seals are naturally good at what their talents, they are even capable of performing hand seals behind themselves, leaving the enemy oblivious to the ninja's next attack.
Evasiveness
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Name: Evasiveness Rank: C Type: Physical Physical Requirements: None. Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic. Description: The ninja trains their ability in more advanced evasive maneuvers which serves the purpose of avoiding enemy attacks. The survivability of the ninja increases as they are now capable of executing quicker flips and dodging basic forms of physical attacks by reading an enemies movement.
THE BACKGROUND. History: The girl was born in the outskirts of Kirigakure, into the impoverished underbelly of the village where the criminals and refugees normally resided. This was mainly due to her Konoha-borne mother who had been exiled from her homeland for a certain amount of time for a crime Tsuoh had never been told. Her mother was always a shady subject. Her father was a pure-blooded Hyuuga man whose clan genes were apparently much stronger then her mother's seeing as she gained everything but his black hair. Due to genocide and mass race cleansing of those with kekkai genkai, her father wore contacts at all times and the entire family stayed locked up in their home often. There was a system where families would switch houses for some nights at a time to avoid being tracked easily by the Kirigakure enforcers.
It was sometime in the later years of this that her mother suddenly disappeared. Her father explained to her that despite her mother's happiness in having a child and a husband, she missed her home too much to stay away, but knew they would not be able to get into Konoha easily as a family of refugees. So, she left them the moment her exile was up and never returned. She left behind many cruel lies and broken promises and Tsuoh realized that her family was just something to kill her mother's boredom while she was exiled. She had never intended to stay. The young girl became very focused on her training to protect herself, and her father became estranged and moody. He took up drinking and would come home later and later, until one night he didn't come home at all. She assumed the police had caught him, and never went looking. Another drop in the bucket of life.
She grew cold and untrusting, realizing she could never depend on her own kind for anything. They were too quick to break their word and do what makes themselves happy before placing their well being above the wellness of those around them. Survival on her own came more easily at this older age after mostly taking care of herself at an increasing rate with just her father around. Tsuoh applied what her father had taught her about the ninja arts to steal what she needed and escape persecution by the enforcers. When the new Kage came in to play, it didn't make much difference to her. The air was considerably more breathable without all the tension, but she was still alone. She was still fighting for herself. Being an official genin now, it still didn't change much except she occasionally fought for someone else.
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“Ouch! Stop it!”
Tsuki pushed away her brother’s hand and pulled her wrist close to her chest, cradling it gently. Again, she had gotten into trouble, despite her brother’s constant warnings and chidings. She always found a reason to hit someone. The black haired boy frowned down at her as she avoided his gaze, her face contorted in a defiant sneer. Then he smiled to her and bent down on one knee in front of her. She looked at him with curiosity in her dark gold eyes before huffing and looking away again. He laughed softly and spoke low and reassuring, trying to coax some sort of positive response from her.
“It will never get better unless you let me help you, Tsu. I’ve told you a million times to stop fighting, but if you insist on it, then you should at least let me patch you up afterwards.”
She pursed her lips and stared at the pasty white wall behind him, studying the half-open window in its center. Through it she saw a black bird fly by and into a large tree that leaned over they’re house. The house meant for four, but only held two now. Not wanting to give him more trouble, she held her wrist out to him. A long cut from her wrist to almost her elbow glistened blood. He made a sound in the back of his throat and sighed, pressing his fingers to his temples as he thought over hat supplies they had left. Standing up to look down at her, he regained his cheerful smile. His gold eyes glittering as he brushed ebony bangs from her face. Her brother left the room, and then his voice rang out from the next room.
“What was it this time? Why’d you attack Nanika? I thought she was your friend?”
Tsu walked over to the window, pressing her fingers to the sill and her forehead to the top part of the window which remained closed. It was always the same reason. And he knew it well. So why ask something you already knew about even if every time you asked it felt like reopening an old wound and throwing salt in it? The cold breeze ruffled her black hair and drew it over her eyes, hiding the tears shining on her face.
“She-….She asked me why my parents didn’t come back from their mission, and left us alone. W-When she knows why!”
She cried out, only to be rewarded by the bird flying from the tree. It made her angry that the bird left her there to feel this anger alone. Then she felt her brother’s warm embrace and she turned around to hide her face in his black training shirt. He held her for a long time, as if he’d never let her go again. Then he said something so low she barely heard him.
“We’re not alone; we will always have each other.”
She scowled into his shoulder. She had heard that so many times, over and over, that she held it to heart. Although, her mother and father said that to. Maybe not in the same words, but similar ones. Now, where were they? One was dead, the other no where to be found. When he said it it should have soothed her aching heart, but yet this time had failed. What was different about him that made her pull away and stare into his face questioningly? As she did this, he gave her a puzzled look back as he spoke in the same sweet tone.
"Whats the matter?"
Shaking her head, Tsuki looked away for a moment. Should she ask what was wrong with him today? Was it just her own imagination that sensed something wrong?
"There is something different about you, brother."
He looked a bit startled for a moment, staring at her like she'd found something out about him and he was busted. With a sigh, he silently stood and walked away to the window. For a long time he leaned against the pane, gazing out on the village laid out before them with a calm expression, almost peaceful. It scared her a little bit seeing him like this. This was something he did when deep in thought, debating with himself as she could see through his eyes. There was something going on, and he wasn't telling her about it. Finally, what seemed like ages later he looked back to where she was. Giving a soft, almost sad sort of smile as he walked back to her. Placing a hand on her shoulder he knelt before her.
"I'm sorry...but i have to leave the village for awhile."
THE ARSENAL. ~Supplementary
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Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique Rank: E Type: Genjutsu Range: N/A Medium: Optical Element: N/A Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others. Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: 10 meters Element: N/A Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread. Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand. Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu. Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor. Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Chozou no Jutsu • Storage Technique Rank: E Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed. Chakra Cost: 1 to seal; 1 to unseal.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: NA Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall. Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post) ~Katon
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Name: Goukakyuu no Jutsu - Great Fireball Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Katon (Fire) Description: Katon • Goukakyuu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. The ninja does the necessary hand seals, draws chakra from their mouth into their chest and them immediately exhales it. They then blow a stream of fire which erupts into a large sphere of flames. To better manage the flames the ninja will bring their hand to their mouth to control it. Chakra Cost: 5 (2 per post)
Name: Housenka no Jutsu - Mythical Fire Phoenix Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: Katon (Fire) Description: Katon • Housenka no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. The ninja does the necessary hand seals and then emits a series of small fire balls. The ninja can also hurl a projectile which is covered in these same flames. To the opponent the attack appears to be only the balls of flame, they do not see the hidden threat within the flames. Meaning that even if the flames are put out, the projectiles still converge on the target. The flames can be used to cover different projectiles like shuriken or kunai. Chakra Cost: 5
Name: Ryuuka no Jutsu - Dragon Fire Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Mid (5m - 10m) Element: Katon (Fire) Description: The user breathes fire along a cord or any other type of long object, which rushes forward in straight line catching the enemy on fire. The flames are meant to target, and assault the enemy's upper body just like a projectile weapon. Chakra Cost: 5
Name: Endan - Fireball Rank: D-A Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m – 10m) Element: Katon (Fire) Description: Katon • Endan is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. After doing the necessary hand seals, the ninja draws chakra to their lungs before swiftly exhaling it, allowing them to blow a jet of fire from their mouth. Depending on the rank at which it is performed, Endan ranges in size and heat. Starting at a moderate level of heat and a reach of up to 3m, at D rank, and increasing in temperature to an intense heat and up to a 10m reach, when performed at A rank. Chakra Cost: D: 4 (1 per post), C: 5 (2 per post), B: 12 (3 per post), A: 23 (5 per post)
~Fuuton
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Name: Daitoppa - Great Breakthrough Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m) Element: Fuuton (Wind) Description: This is a relatively simple technique that creates a sudden gust of wind, but its scale varies greatly depending on the user. If used by a superior shinobi, it has enough destructive power to knock down a large tree. The wind from the squall can blow away all things in the user's line of sight. A variation of the technique involves a smaller blast of wind which gets ignited with flame. Chakra Cost: 9
Name: Kami Oroshi - Godly Wind from the Mountains Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m) Element: Fuuton (Wind) Description: The user will generate a whirling vortex of wind which he or she can send snaking towards his or her target. This wind can be used to help cause an explosive blaze when used with certain fire and earth techniques. Chakra Cost: 7 (2 per post)
Name: Reppushou - Gale Wind Palm Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+) Element: Fuuton (Wind) Description: Fuuton • Reppushou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Wind Element. After forming the needed hand seals, the user will send a strong gust of wind towards his/her target. When acting in conjunction with another thrown weapon, the wind can increase its power and deadliness. Chakra Cost: 5 ~Kugutsu
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Name: Kawara Shuriken - Roof Tile Shuriken Rank: C Type: Puppetry Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: This jutsu is similar in principle to Manipulating Attack Blades, but uses spinning tiles instead of regular weapons. In addition to being able to control the tiles remotely, the user can pressurize the tiles with chakra to make them far stronger than normal and capable of dealing the same damage as regular shuriken. Chakra Cost: 7
Name: Kugutsu no Jutsu • Puppetry Technique Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m) Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to use a puppet to attack from afar in battle. This is done by using chakra and forming them into strings which are then emitted from the fingers to the puppet. Should the user’s hands become disabled, either through physical injury or chakra impairment, this technique becomes neutralized. Chakra Cost: 5 (2 Per Post)
Name: Soushuuha - Manipulate Advancing Blades Rank: C Type: Puppetry Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m) Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to hover multiple kunai in the air with their chakra, and direct them to an opponent. Using this technique, the user can unleash a torrent of kunai much more quickly than if each one was thrown individually. By using the Puppet Technique with this jutsu, the user may control discarded or already used weapons. Chakra Cost: 7 ~Hyuuga
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Name: Byakugan (Activation) Rank: E-S Type: Bloodline - Doujutsu Range: Description Clan: Hyuuga Description: Byakugan "White Eye" is a dōjutsu kekkei genkai of the Hyūga clan. This technique is the activation of the ability from the eyes previous dormant state. When activated the users lavender eyes become more focused, their pupils become more distinct, and the veins near their temples bulge. Byakugan gives the user a near 360º field of vision, except for one small blind spot at the back of the neck above the third thoracic vertebra. The second ability is being able to see through solid objects, and can use a degree of telescopic sight. The user is able to see into vasts distances in which a regular eye cannot behold. They are capable of seeing insects behind trees with distinct perception and look behind wall with the Byakugan's ability. The third and one of the greatest uses of the Byakugan is the ability to see chakra, chakra flow as well as the chakra circulation system inside the body with great detail. It is from this particular ability that they are able to employ their ultimate attack style: Gentle Fist. It was also noted that the Byakugan can also discern a transformation and a real person using the eye's ability to see chakra, as well as barriers. The distance and the degree of telescopic sight varies from member to member. [C-Ranked] activation is able to see 50m in radius. [B-Ranked] activation is able to see 150m in radius. [A-Ranked] is able to extend 400m in radius. And finally [S-Ranked] is able to extend 900m in radius. Chakra Cost: 3CP per Post; A-rank 4CP per post; S-rank 5CP per post.
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Name: Hosomi Otoko [細身男][Slender Man] Rank: C Appearance:- Spoiler:
Hosomi Otoko is a puppet modeled after a regular human, though is NOT a human puppet. It stands at a height of 5'9" with long silver hair, white eyes, and black paint on it's face. It wears an extremely thin but triple layered cloak that looks tattered but allows free movement of the limbs and chest mechanisms. It wears nothing on it's feet. Body Slots:Slot 1:Name: Over-sized Needle Rank: C Slots Required: 1 Type: Melee Description: Basically, this is just as the name suggests. A needle that has been enlarged to about a foot in length that retracts back into the left arm of the puppet via the palm. It has a slender shape with a wickedly sharp tip. Slot 2:Name: Hooked sword Rank: C Slots Required: 1 Type: Melee Description: Basically a small sword that is retractable from the right palm of the puppet. It is about a foot long with a sharpened, curved hook much like you would see on a grappling hook. It has a sharp edge which is good for cutting wires, ropes, and other various things while also good for trapping the opponents non-cuttable weapons such as kunai, knives, blades, and more. Slot 3-4-5-6:Name: Flamethrower Rank: C Slots Required: 4 Type: Elemental Launcher Description: A simple flame thrower, located in the mouth of Hosomi Otoko. It is able to reach up to 3 meters with the flame jet, and is weaker then say a C rank fire technique. The heat can reach up to about 4 meters. Because this is not a chakra based flame, it's fuel is located in the belly/lower body of the puppet. Each post where the stream is used takes up 50% of the fuel.
FACE CLAIM. Character Claim: Sakura, Kyouko Source: Mahou Shoujo Madoka★Magica Image URL: https://2img.net/h/i197.photobucket.com/albums/aa291/crimson1995/SakuraKyouko6001142750_zpsaa4192b7.jpg
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| | | CleverYamanaka
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Tsuoh [Kiri Genin] Sun 24 Mar 2013, 8:32 pm | |
| Stuff:- Needs a tiny bit more personality. Should be a good two paragraphs, but it's not needed.
- Needs a tiny bit more appearance. Should be two paragraphs, but it's not needed.
- Everything else on the app is fine with me, other than the flamethrower on your puppet. I know that flamethrowers have been denied in the past, although they were built with a slightly different approach. Change the personality and appearance and by then I should have word on the flamethrower. Thanks.
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| | | Allie
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Tsuoh [Kiri Genin] Sun 24 Mar 2013, 8:40 pm | |
| There we go. All fixed up. |
| | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29 Posts : 1688
| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Tsuoh [Kiri Genin] Sun 24 Mar 2013, 8:54 pm | |
| - Personality: Check.
- Appearance: Check.
- Flamethrower: Checked with a fellow mod and came to the conclusion that it is fine to be modded as long as certain things are covered. If problem arises the next mod to stamp approval on your app can order it be taken off. However, as it is now, it's going to need a bit of clarification and specification. The things I want are as follows:
1. You need to clarify that, because this is not actually using chakra, it's natural power is not nearly that of a C rank fireball jutsu.
2. Cut the range to three meters. Cut the heat range to four meters. That's still a lot for not having to pay chakra for a flame technique.
3. If this is a flamethrower that's not using chakra, that means that it runs on fuel, correct? If that's the case, it would run out at a certain point, seeing as you'd be drawing it from a finite source. As such, you need to have a limit imposed on how long this can actually shoot flame, in a post by post way. As in, for each post that it uses fuel, a certain percent would be taken out. I am going to suggest that every post that it uses the flame, 50% of the fuel is removed, seeing as it burns fast and the puppet is not logically large enough to hold a huge amount of heavy liquid.
4. Where is the fuel stored in the puppet? I ask, because that would be a weak point on the puppet, theoretically speaking.
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| | | Allie
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Tsuoh [Kiri Genin] Sun 24 Mar 2013, 9:02 pm | |
| Edited again. |
| | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29 Posts : 1688
| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Tsuoh [Kiri Genin] Sun 24 Mar 2013, 9:03 pm | |
| I see nothing wrong with this. Approved: 1/2 Hope to see you RPing soon!
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| | | Emperor of Rock
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Tsuoh [Kiri Genin] Sun 24 Mar 2013, 9:13 pm | |
| | Ok, before I give you the 2nd approval, I want to see a longer appearance. 2 paragraphs, each at least 250 words.
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Tsuoh [Kiri Genin] Sun 24 Mar 2013, 9:46 pm | |
| Done. |
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Tsuoh [Kiri Genin] Sun 24 Mar 2013, 11:47 pm | |
| | Approved 2/2 Don't forget to make an account here |
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| Subject: Re: Hyuuga, Tsuoh [Kiri Genin] Sun 05 Jan 2014, 9:55 pm | |
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