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Basic Information:

Name:
Shinzui Koori
Secondary Title:
Frostbite
Age:
16
Gender:
Male
Physical Appearance:
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Shinzui has white, hair because of his father "Kurou kaguya".
He styles his hair back with one bang of hair over his forehead.
Because he is a cross breed of both Koori and kaguya, he has a powerfull, muscular body and alot of Kaguya characteristics like a short fuse and white hair with dark eyes.
He is about 168 cm tall and weighs 52.2 kg.

Shinzui always wears his sleeveless, leather body armor in combination with tight, black pants.
He has no sleeves on his shirt because they restrict his movements when he swings his sword, It also shows his powerfull arms.
He wears fingerless, brown leather gloves and brown leather boots.
Also, he wears his Yamato on his left side and the Ryuken on his back.


Personality:
Shinzui is very cold towards most people around him and does not wish to be around people.
In Shinzui's childhood, his only friend died.
Since that day, he never bother making new friends, knowing they would just die on him like his friend.
Shinzui takes alot of pride in his ability's of controlling ice and attacking with swords at the same time.

In his eyes, the sick and weak should just die and be put out of their missery.
He doesnt care alot about his clans status in the village and also doesnt care much for village.
All he truly cares about are his swords and himself.
Because he is a cross breed of Kaguya and Koori blood, he gained some CHaracteristics of the kaguya clan, while having the Koori bloodlike limit.
The day that his Kaguya father died, he became alot more ruthless and merciless towards people.

Shinzui's main objective in life is to do something to earn respect, since he doesnt think that being respected because of your background is true respect.
His second objective is to become the greatest swordsman in the shinobi world.

Catch Phrase:
"You're not even worth killing"
"Just give up, you've allready lost"
"Pathetic"


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Clan Name: Koori (Haku's Clan/ All Ice Jutsu)

Clan Location: Kiri

Clan Traits: -

*Must have Water and Wind As elements

Kekkei Genkai: The Bloodline limit of the Koori clan is purely elemental. This meaning that they are one of the few ninja in the world that on top of the regular elements that all ninja have an opportunity of access to, they can also access a singular advanced element. All members of this clan have the basic elements of wind and water. They can combine the properties and fundamentals of both to create the ice element. This is done by the wind chakras adding a chilled factor to the water chakras, causing it become an over all colder chakra. When exuded from the body, its heat level is to low to be liquefied water, and instead takes the form of solid ice.

All of their clan jutsu focus around this singular concept of creating and manipulating ice. A user is capable of taking pre-existing bodies of water, large or small, and manipulating them into ice, as well as pre-existing ice formations and using them for their techniques. This ice is generally very durable and difficult to break, taking an excessive amount of physical damage for most techniques, and is also, in contradiction to naturally occurring ice, displays a resistance to fire, though is not purely immune to it its melting effects.

Secret Clan Jutsu:

Name: Demonic Ice Crystal Mirrors
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Ice
Description: Using their kekkei genkai, Koori members can create a dome of twenty-one mirrors made out of ice to trap an opponent. Twelve remain at ground level, eight are placed above the first twelve and angled toward the ground, and the final mirror is above the rest and facing the ground. They can then enter one of the mirrors and instantly transport to another mirror. While moving about he bombards the opponent with attacks at very high speeds, such that the rest of the world appear to be moving in slow motion compared to him. If the mirror the user is in is broken, they can leap out of one of the fragments and continue their attack or move to another mirror. The technique requires a large amount of chakra to maintain, so Their movement becomes progressively slower the longer they maintains the mirrors. Roughly a B ranked amount every two posts. Though they are made from ice, the mirrors are imbued with enough chakra to resist fire almost completely

Name: Ice Disk Technique
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Ice
Description: This jutsu turns the moisture particles in the air into an ice disk. They can be hurled with tremendous force at a target and are hard to dodge because of their transparency. They can also be strung together to spy on areas. They can also be used defensively, creating highly durable shields or disks to stand on to hover in the air.

Name: Ice Prison Technique
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Ice
Description: This technique requires the user to use either water from underground which they can bring up, ice underground which they can bring up, or water in the air in a highly saturated environment. If using water as a source it will cost an extra D rank amount of chakra due to having to freeze it first. The user can then trap their opponent within the ice by controlling its movements and completely surrounding them in the ice. This jutsu is strong enough to withstand basic fire jutsu, because the ice has already been infused with the user's chakra. This allows this jutsu to double as a defensive technique, by the user encasing themselves in the ice.

Name: Ice Release: One Horned White Whale
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Element: Ice
Description: This jutsu allows the user to create a humongous whale, the size of a small island, out of ice to attack their opponent. The user needs a source of ice or water in order to use this technique. This jutsu is used more as a distraction technique, or to block an opponents movements, because of its size. If using water will take an extra C rank amount to freeze the vast supply into ice.

Name: Ice Release: Swallow Snow Storm
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Ice
Description: This jutsu creates a cluster of ice needles in the shape of miniature swallows, which the user then throws at the opponent. These needles can change direction in midair and will maim the opponent with their sharp wings.

Name: Ice Release: Tearing Dragon Fierce Tiger
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Ice
Description: his jutsu allows the user to create a giant tiger made out of ice. The user needs a nearby source of ice or water in order to use this jutsu. When using water an extra C rank amount of chakra is needed to freeze it for the technique. This jutsu is cold enough to freeze any Water Release techniques it comes into contact with.

Name: Ice Release: Ice Spikes
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Ice
Description: This justu unleashes great spikes of ice that come out from the users body. They cannot be specifically controlled and are not for attack, strictly defense for a quick and uncontrolled technique. They do not bear any resistance to fire as some other Koori Ice jutsu do. The Ice created from this can be further used for other Ice techniques as well. This defense is fairly weak and can be shattered with the simplest of techniques of almost any kind only being able to turn aside the most basic taijutsu (simple punches and kicks with no chakra added), and basic weaponary (simple nonenhanced metal or wooden weapons with no added chakra capabilities.)

History:
Shinzui Koori [ready for check] Icesymbol

The Koori clan are The Mist Villages second most well known clan as its co-founder and unique ability to manipulate and create the ice element. In the time before the great villages were constructed they were one of the lesser clans for hire but they were still well known all the same and held a certain level of respect and honor. Unlike the accursed Kaguya clan they are actually quite peaceful by nature though quite deadly in battle. Despite there grand foothold in the society of Kiri, they at one point, just like the Kaguya were persecuted by the normal villagers for there arcane abilities which were beyond what normal shinobi could do. There faith in the village never wavered though, and unlike the Kaguya, they never struck back against there critics.

When the Kaguya rebellion came to pass, they led the resistance to the struggle and were the main cause for the ending of the feud. As a result of this they single handedly brought their village closer together and ended the persecution, the two clans gaining more respect and stature then ever before amongst their home. For many years they have served as the primary protectors of the village and its most well known family name.


Clan Details: Open


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Rank Information:


Rank:
Genin [C rank]
Village Affiliation:
Kumogakure no sato


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Special Information:

Character Speciality:
Main: Weaponry
Sub: Ninjutsu

Weaponry speciality:
Main: Swords
Sub: Ranged

Elemental Affinity:
Main: Suiton
Sub: Fuuton [not yet learned]


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Special Characteristics:

Able Bodied
Shinzui is in excellent physical shape. He heals quickly and is seldom ill.
He had gained this through daily practice with his grandfather and his senpai "Mangetsu".
His grandfather thought that his great stamina came from him being part Kaguya.

Ruthless
Shinzui doesnt have to think twice when having to kill someone.
Because all people that where truly important to him either died or left him, he isnt very emotional anymore.
To that extent, he wont hessitate to kill an enemy or someone standing in his way.
This is also something that he might have gained because of his part Kaguya blood.

Ambidextrous
Shinzui is equally adept at using either hand. Although ambidexterity is rare at birth, it can be learned. Most duelists spend their whole lives refining this talent. He spent alot of time to master this because he was dead set on using both swords to their fullest.

Photographic Memory
Shinzui remembers everything he sees and hears with absolute clarity. Since he has been drawing and sketching alot, he tought himself to memorize whatever beautifull thing he sees so he can draw it later. He also used this to create ice skulpture's.


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Academy Jutsu
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Clan jutsu:
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Clan jutsu (custom):
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Suiton jutsu:
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Kenjutsu (Custom):
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Name: Ryuken
Quantity: The only one
Rank: C rank, B-S once the ninja learns to channel their chakra through it.
Appearance:
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The Ryuken sword has a black Saya (scabard), a golden Tsuba (guard) and a red Ito (braid) around it's Tsuka (handle).
It's blade is 0.90 meters long.
Special Abilities/Characteristics: The Ryuken sword has the ability to channel chakra. [Chuunin or higher].
Origin:
The Ryuken sword once belonged to Vergil's best friend and Senpai Mangetsu Koori.
When Mangetsu got murdered on a mission, his squad members took the sword with them and gave it to the Koori clan head.
When Shinzui heard the bad news, he rushed to the clan head.
The clans head was called Hokuto, and was Shinzui grandfather.
Knowing how close the two where, he decided to grant Shinzui permission in having the sword.


Name: Yamato
Quantity: The only one
Rank: C rank, B-S once the ninja learns to channel their chakra through it.
Appearance:
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The Yamato sword has a black Saya (scabard), a golden Tsuba (guard) and a white Ito (braid) around it's Tsuka (handle).
It's blade is 0.90 meters long.
Special Abilities/Characteristics: The Yamato sword has the ability to channel chakra. [Chuunin or higher].
Origin: After he finished his Academy and his Kenjutsu training, his grandfather became very ill.
Teaching him one last lesson in how to take the fullest out of sketching, he died at the age of 89.
Having lost yet another person close to him, he took his grandfather's sword and started training himself till his body couldnt take the strain anymore.
Repeating the same marathon every day, he tought himself how to become ambidextrous and how to wield both sword with evenly matched accurace and power.


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Items carried


Name: Kunai
Amount: 10x

Name: steel wire
Amount: 2 meters

Name: Explosive tags
Amount: 5x

Name: Smoke bombs
Amount: 4x

Name: World map
Amount: 1x

Name: Flare's
Amount: 3x

Name: Mangetsu's Bingo book
Amount: 1x

Name: Bottle of soda
Amount: 1x


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Background Information

History:
Birth arc:
sixteen years ago, a beautifull child was born into the Koori family.
He was the grandson of the clan leader and his father was a noble teacher of the Kirigakure academy.
After a few weeks, baby Shinzui got his first presents from his grandfather.
He got a kendo stick for future practice, and a scroll possesing the clan secret jutsu, so he could start his studies when he was the right age.

Every day of the week, a young boy named Mangetsu came to see the noble grandson.
He watched with joy how the baby tried to crawl out of his crib, and then being picked up and layed back in bed by his mother.
Time after time, the baby kept on trying to bust out of his crib, never succeeding, but never giving up.

Academy arc:
At the age of eight, Shinzui started his kenjutsu training with his grandfather at the same time as he entered the academy.
Because of his youthfull body and his young, but smart way of thinking, he quickly learned to fight with a sword and score A's at the academy.
Because of his smart and a bit arrogant attitude, alot of boys wanted to take it outside very often.
Though they where actually more intimidated then willing to fight, a real fight never came to be.

The first skill Shinzui learned was one he completely mastered at the age of 12, the body flicker technique.
Vergil was quite skilled at using it at his young age, and had no problem in combining it with kenjutsu moves.
It was at his 9th birthday that Shinzui learned to create his own technique's using Shunshin and kenjutsu.
When Shinzui finished the academy a year earlier then the other kids, his grandfather and he spent even more time practicing kenjutsu.
Learning various combinations from the basic combat stance, Shinzui became quite the prodigy of the clan and now had a reputation to live up to.

He had alot personal practice with his Senpai "Mangetsu" when they where free from school and missions.
Vergil was by far the most talented of the young clan members, but they where good friends and close family.

Early genin arc:
When he had got his headband, alot of things went wrong in the family.
His best friend and senpai "Mangetsu" died on a mission, his grandfather died of an illness and his biological father was killed for trying to steal medicine from the feudal lord.
It was then that he found out that his real father was not Koori, but kaguya.

Because of the deaths of people close to him or important to him, he left home for a few weeks and started a ruthless training program.
He was dead set on becoming a skilled warrior with both swords he had gotten from his Grandfather and Senpai.
After a few weeks of training, he had learned how to use both the Ryuken and the Yamato at the same time.

Returning home, his attitude had changed alot.
He no longer cared for the village that had caused his Senpai to die, he didnt care for the Koori family that just stood by while his real father got killed and for not being able to save his grandfather.
Once a happy, childish and arrogant kid, he had now become a cold, murderous, hollow shell of his former self.
Because of his newly born hatred for the village and the clan, Shinzui now resides within Kumogakure.
Having spent the money he got from his birthdays and his inheritance from his grandfather and Mangetsu, he bought a mansion in Kumogakure.


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Normal:
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Advanced:
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PS: My posts length depend on how much i have to say to someone, how much they tell me and have to respond to and to whatever i am going to do next.


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PostSubject: Re: Shinzui Koori [ready for check] Shinzui Koori [ready for check] EmptyTue 27 Apr 2010, 12:33 am

Appearance needs to be longer.

Also, the minimum length for an rp at genin level is 150 words. So, your 'simple' rp cannot be used here.

Your app is also somewhat difficult to read. You should try forming longer paragraphs made of five or six sentences.
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Çγαηide Çαηdγ ♥ wrote:
Appearance needs to be longer.

Also, the minimum length for an rp at genin level is 150 words. So, your 'simple' rp cannot be used here.

Your app is also somewhat difficult to read. You should try forming longer paragraphs made of five or six sentences.

I understand, the simple one was when i am completely out of words or dunno how to respond. In this case, it was the ending post of a topic ^^

Appearance is being lengthened asap

and i will try to fix reading difficulty ^^
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Kenjutsu falls under weaponry.

Weaponry: Main:Kenjutsu Sub: Exotic (or something. that is just an example. Refer to weaponry guides for more details)

Please ensure you copied to clan template we provided. there is a spoiler at the end of the Koori clan post with the code. Please use that because it includes he secret clan jutsu in the code.
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Fixed that aswell

Since alot of Koori jutsu rely on present ice, i made these two custom ice jutsu.

Name: Ice Release: Ice shuriken
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Ice
Description: This jutsu turns the moisture particles in the air into shuriken of ice. The jutsu forms about 10-12 shuriken that hover around him for a few seconds before launching themselves at the enemy target. This jutsu isnt used by making handseals, but by raising his index and middle finger to form the shurkien, and then pointing the two fingers at a target to fire them. These are not as powerfull as the metal shuriken, thought they can do alot of damage to a human body and can counter other projectiles.

Name: Ice Release: Path of frost
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Ice
Description: Any Koori clan member can learn this jutsu after they have learned to use Kinobori no waza and Suimen no waza. The Koori clan member focuses his chakra into his feet to walk on water, but instead of using regular chakra, they will use their bloodline limit's Ice chakra to freeze the water on wich they are standing. This can then be used to walk on without the use of chakra and be used for ice based jutsu.

tell me what you think.
If these are okey, then i think i am pretty much done.
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Looks Good. I hereby grant you the ....

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hehe Seal

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