Weapons and some items. [Done]

Age : 33 Posts : 428

ITEMS:

Name: Special Mission Clothes
Rank: E
Type: Supplement
Natural Abilities:

Spoiler:

There is absolutely nothing special about this outfit. Its sole use is to mask the identity of the person using it and to hide any signs of an village, so nobody could find out from where does the person wearing comes from. While using this clothes, Marcus keeps his Runner Sword on his backs, and it is the only weapon which he uses, together with his Fuuton and Doton Ninjutsu. This is so he could mask his fighting style as well. While wearing this uniform, he is know as "Unknown", or at least that is how he likes to call himself.

Name: Super Special Mission Clothes
Rank: D
Type: Supplement
Natural Abilities:

Spoiler:

For different missions, Marcus has different clothes. This set of clothes is used for higher ranking missions, for which he is required to use his Kusari-Gama. It is also used to hide the real identity of the person using it. But, unlike the first suit, this one has a special thing about it. When the user stands in the shadows of a couple of trees or buildings, Marcus can use the Cloak of Invisibility Technique with this clothes to hide his presence. Instead of an actual cloak, this clothes serve him as one. This will work till his still and not moving. One step, and the technique will wore out.

Age : 33 Posts : 428

Completed.

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Quote :: Name: Super Special Mission Clothes
Rank: D
Type: Supplement
Natural Abilities:

For different missions, Marcus has different clothes. This set of clothes is used for higher ranking missions, for which he is required to use his Kusari-Gama, together with his Ninjato Blade. It is also used to hide the real identity of the person using it. But, unlike the first suit, this one has a special thing about it. When the user stands in the shadows of a couple of trees or buildings, Marcus can use the Cloak of Invisibility Technique to hide his presence. This will work till his still and not moving. One step, and the technique will wore out.

How does it hide your presence any more then the standard cloak of invisibility technique? What keeps a sensor from detecting you?

Chakra storage gloves are a flat out no. Unless you are a fuuin user, sealing chakra away for later use is impossible for most people. I might consider it as part of a puppet or something of the sort, but not in the way it was presented here.

You'll need to add dimensions to your weapons, how they were constructed (folded steel, drop forged, which material, etc). Also, swords aren't really an impulse buy item, unless you are filthy stinking rich. A well made folded steel blade can take a long time to complete, they aren't a dime a dozen.

Age : 33 Posts : 428

Well, it is exactly the same as standard cloak of invisibility....This clothes by their self do not do that, but Cloak of invisibility could be used on them to give the effect described before. Sensor can detect them...I never said they can not....

Removed the glove.

Why not...I mean, just look at it, it is pretty...Who wouldn`t want to buy it? Money does not matter when it comes to love towards pretty weapons. And Marcus should have enough money for it, since he spends money only on weapons and clothes....he lives with his parents....so there is no need to spend money on anything else...

Sword and Ninjato edited.

Age : 28 Posts : 2538

Even though your weapons are only of E & D rank, I would feel more comfortable if you added more to their descriptions. At least a paragraph rather than two sentences. Try to add things like what they are best for (slicing, slashing, cutting, etc), what colours they are, where they are stored on your body, etc.

Apart from that, this looks good. I'm going to leave the cloak to Steven, seeing as he had more experience in Equipment than me.

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If the suit doesn't do anything the normal technique doesn't then that part is a waste of space, unless you meant that the suit takes the place of the cloak... which isn't what you wrote.

Plastic alloy's don't exist. Other then that it's not too bad. I'd like a better story then an impulse buy. Was there a reason why he was shopping in the first place? Maybe his old weapon had broken, but instead of leaving with a new kunai he got talked into buying a katana. Or perhaps he felt that his kunai just wasn't cutting the mustard anymore and that he needed something with a little more umph to it. I'm sure you can come up with something. Just an fyi, but the wrapping around the tsuka of a katana is traditionally made of ray skin.

Age : 33 Posts : 428

Weapons removed....I give up on them. This was my first time trying to make a sword like weapon, so I do not actually know from what are they actually made of and things like that.

Quote :: If the suit doesn't do anything the normal technique doesn't then that part is a waste of space, unless you meant that the suit takes the place of the cloak... which isn't what you wrote.

Yes, the suit is used as the cloak. I think I fixed it now.

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Approved.

On a side note, there is a thing called google you can use when you want to know more about something. I put a lot of work into staying on top of the equipment section, so not taking the time to look up information which is easy to find and then claiming ignorance isn't going to fly. I didn't know is often not a valid excuse.