Allya
Age : 30
Posts : 152
 |  Subject: Amaya Hikari Char Application.... Tue 27 Apr 2010, 9:34 pm | |
| (CORRECTIONS IN PROGRESS)
/...Jutsu used...\
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||Name: Water Release: Shiroppu Amimono no Jutsu (Water Release: Syrup web Jutsu) ||
||Rank: D||
||Type: Ninjutsu||
||Range: Medium, 0-50 feet||
||Element: Suiton||
||Description: This Jutsu expels a very sticky web lick substance from the user’s fingers or palms and can cover a rather large area. It can be used for restraining someone easily, or for a simple pleasure such as a hammock. It does not stick to the user, kind of like a spider does not stick to the web.||
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Caranore
Age : 35
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Allya
Age : 30
Posts : 152
| | Subject: Re: Amaya Hikari Char Application.... Wed 28 Apr 2010, 4:04 pm | |
| | I've read over the guide about oh say... 12 times now? I don't see whats wrong with my applications. It might help not to be so vague and just tell me what I did wrong. |
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Caranore
Age : 35
Posts : 1492
| | Subject: Re: Amaya Hikari Char Application.... Wed 28 Apr 2010, 5:01 pm | |
| | Did you look at the character creation guide template?, Because all this is, according to that, is your RP sample. Theres no name, age, cvillage affiliation or rank, your jutsu arent on here, no history, clan, etc. The guide goes over how to utilize the template and gives examples. You have nothing beyond RP/history from that guide. |
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Allya
Age : 30
Posts : 152
| | Subject: Re: Amaya Hikari Char Application.... Wed 28 Apr 2010, 9:22 pm | |
| | SHOOT SORRY!!!! NOT FINISHED T_________T'' Argh...Sorry Caranore I forget to enter everything else... |
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Travis
Posts : 414
| | Subject: Re: Amaya Hikari Char Application.... Wed 28 Apr 2010, 11:05 pm | |
| Fix your coding, or please add the coding, it helps greatly for the sections.
Break up your looks and personality, no one likes to read a wall of text.
Chuunin is closed in all villages.
Remove any B rank jutsu or items you may have. |
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CYANIDE CANDY
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| | Subject: Re: Amaya Hikari Char Application.... Mon 31 May 2010, 6:17 am | |
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