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KIOKU AME

THE INFO.

Name: Ame Kioku
Nickname: 生き嵐  – The Living Tempest
過去の精神 – Spirit of the Past
冬はローズ – The Winter Rose
めーめ -  Me-Me
雷影様 – Raikage-sama

Age: 24
Gender: Female
Apperance:
Quote :

Hair - White
Eyes – Deep Blue
Height – 5’ 8” (173cm)
Weight – 141 lb (64kg)
Dem Eyes:

Ame was born a bastard girl between a common girl in the Land of Lightning and a “great ninja”. However her mother never told her who it was and her looks gave no hint to ties to any clan the only thing she’s told her father gave her is her eyes. However her eyes are rarely what others notice about her first. She has stunning white hair which on most occasions is worn with the back tied up and a tuft of it running along the right side of her face above the eye. However, no matter the occasion she wears an hourglass around her neck with a platinum chain and frame and glass made of crystal.

Hourglass:

Winter Uniform
During the winter months, when Ame is on a mission, training, or doing other official business that could include combat she elects to wear a two piece outfit that is lightweight and mobile but maintains the main purpose of winter clothing in its warmth. It has a tank top that has a three-quarter cloak that covers her left side and back starting at her waist; the top has silver trim. On her legs, she wears flexible hunting tights. On her hands she wears long black gloves that end just before her shoulder and leave her fingers bare. On her feet are long black boots with a small heel that reach just below her knees. Around her neck is a white muffler that she had made to have her forehead protector on just for winter. Often times if her business takes her outside the village or if the night is especially cold she will wear a purposely tattered red hooded cloak that flows hauntingly on a windy night as if she were only a ghost.

Winter Uniform:

Red Cloak:

Winter Formal Dress
During the winter months, when Ame is going to a formal event in the village or if she’s going out and about and wants to look regal she will wear a flowing white and icy blue gown with silver stitching outlining winter roses. For these  occasions she puts more effort into her hair making it instead fall across her face in feathery white locks that go down just past her cheek towards the left with the part above the corner of her right eye. In her hair she wears a broach that takes the form of the Kumogakure sigil hanging from the broach are violet feathers that appear to have an electric current running through them when they flow elegantly as she walks. The sleeves droop low in a traditional formal fashion.

Winter Formal Dress:

Fall Uniform
During the Fall months, when Ame is on a mission, training, or doing other official business that could include combat she assumes a multi-layered outfit of well fitted breathable silk and painted leather. For the first layer of her upper body she wears a hooded long-sleeved burnt orange shirt that has vermillion trim. On the second layer of her upper body she wears a black fitted leather corset with midnight blue accents and crystals that shine like stars when light catches them. On her bottom she wears silk pants of matching color and material to her top; covering from her feet to her mid-thigh she wears black leather boots. This is one of her rare regular outfits in which she doesn’t have her hair styled as it would interfere with her hood so she wears her hair down while in this uniform.

Fall Uniform:

Fall Formal Dress
During the fall months, when Ame is going to a formal event in the village or if she’s going out and about and wants to look presentable she will generally be found in a Qipao colored white as snow with gold trim and accents. On her left wrist she wears a gold bracelet with the Kumogakure sigil inlaid with platinum. She generally carries a white wagasa with a cherry blossom design on it to add to the look. On very cold nights she will sometimes where her cloak however she doesn’t like to as it detracts from the flow of her Formal Dress.

Fall Formal Dress:

Summer Uniform

During the Summer months, when Ame is on a mission, training, or doing other official business that could include combat she wears a small tunic made of wispy silk that breathes well so she doesn’t overheat. She has a wide leather belt around her waist; she keeps a brown cloak tied in a large bow above her bottom and around the belt in case of adverse weather. She wears simple brown leather boots and ties her Forehead protector around her left thigh.

Summer Uniform:

Summer Formal Dress
During the summer months when the nights are warm and short and Ame is going to a formal event in the village or if she’s going out and about and wants to dress up she will wear a very tight black dress. Her summer dress is jet black like the night sky. With it she wears black socks with dark gray stripes up to her mid-thigh and high heels. She wears her hair normally but adds a red rose that she sticks in her hair above her right ear. She will commonly wear her red cloak with this if she wants to stand out in the crowd or in the case of a formal event to cover more skin. To show here allegiance to her village she wears silver earrings in the shape of the Kumogakure sigil that have rubies inlaid.

Summer Formal Dress:

Spring Uniform
During the Spring months, when Ame is on a mission, training, or doing other official business that could include combat she dons a yellow halter necked battle robe with white trim. Around the waist she wears a red silk wrap. To keep her legs covered she wears socks that reach her mid-thigh. On her feet are red flats that are kept on with red ribbons that secure on the top of her feet and wrap decoratively up her legs to her knees. She wears half sleeves that start at the base of the wrist and reach just past her elbow as nothing more than an accent. To keep her hair up in its normal fashion it is tied with a wide black ribbon that has the Kumogakure sigil embroidered in white along the length of it.

Spring Uniform:

Spring Formal Dress
For her formal occasions and most day to day activities during the Spring, Ame tries to draw attention with features other than intricate clothing and bright colors; it is a short and low cut white dress with pink ribbon decorations and straps. With it she wears white high heels with lots of straps. Around her wrists she wears very shiny gold bracelets with sparkly gems. Her hair is tied up in its regular fashion however it instead has a large white ribbon bow. Along with her normal hourglass necklace she has a long chain with a charm of the Kumogakure sigil at the end which rests … well they have an excuse to stare at it.
Spring Formal Dress:

Casual
On the occasion that Ame does not have to do any official business, doesn’t care to dress up or on the off chance that she’s caught at home being a hermit, she is seen a variety of different form. There are two constants for such occasions; for one, she generally has done nothing with her hair so it falls to around the height of her bosom at its longest point. The other constant is the glasses that she wears to attempt to disguise her appearance (it doesn’t do much but it works sometimes; some whisper out of earshot that she actually needs glasses but doesn’t wear them usually to hide signs of weakness). Most of the time when she’s in casual attire she will not be wearing a tribute to her village.

Casual Sample (shows glasses and hair):


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Forehead Protector: Depends on occasion, detailed in the appearance.

Personality:

Ame: At first contact with Ame she shows every politeness and courtesy one would expect from a woman. She’s a little bit awkward and distant when speaking to men due to sorrow caused by them in the past. Although her outer appearance is that of an outgoing person she’d rather not let people get too close so in case she has to make a difficult choice she doesn’t have to sacrifice the ones she loves to save the ones she lives for. This doesn’t mean she won’t be nice to them or go out of her way to help them she just won’t become too attached. Seeing as she didn’t have much in terms of real family she’s made her family the select few that melt the ice on her burning heart and will protect them at whatever cost. She has a soft spot for children and will act as their white knight in many situations.

The Winter Rose: On more serious occasions - generally ones having to do with combat or official business - she ceases being Ame and becomes The Winter Rose. She’s beautiful as a rose and just as friendly, but every rose has its thorn; hers are made of ice. In such situations she is cold, calculating and merciless. She has been known to chastise the mistakes of her comrades sometimes to the point of appearing cruel. She doesn’t forget how to show proper respect to those that command it however, and will generally try to diffuse situations before they explode into violence.

The Living Tempest: Everybody has that one thing that just makes them insane, that one thing that if somebody does too much it makes them want to break a couple of their limbs. Except they’d never do that because it’s wrong and they might get punished; Ame doesn’t care if she gets caught getting revenge on whoever has wronged her over her little pet peeve. It’s a simple thing she asks for too, be nice to her little sister. She’ll tell you once when she introduces you to her sister and she gives one reminder when you cross the line; after that she will snap and more often than not cause severe bodily harm to the poor fool who ignored her. If her sister is hurt in any physical manner, may god have mercy on your soul. Other than that she has the patience of a saint that has been built up by dealing with such an odd sister for most of her life. Those that have seen her wrath gave her the title of The Living Tempest.

Me-Me: For enjoyment she generally takes to reading books by famed writer Robin Uzumaki, if her sister is occupied in a place that Ame deems safe (extremely unlikely) she will take time for herself and go out for a walk and ponder whatever may come to mind. When she’s not at home she will keep a flask on her person at all times when she is at home she keeps a bottle within arm’s reach. It helps keep her patient with her peculiar little sister; more importantly it helps deal with the past. When asked she tells people she drinks so she won’t worry about her sister too much but it doesn’t really help with that.


Clan: None.

Nindō: “Cherish your Memory lest it becomes Regret.” Ame regrets nothing as she holds memory as the most valuable thing in life.

THE NINJA.

Origin: Kaminari no Kuni
Affiliation: Kumogakure no Sato
Rank: 五代目雷影 Godaime Raikage
Specialties:
- Genjutsu
- Eijutsu

Elemental Affinities:
- 風遁 – Fuuton
- 水遁 – Suiton

Combat Style:

Special Characteristics
Chakra Based:

Physical:
THE BACKGROUND.

History:

Roleplay Sample:

Kaigara was pleased to know that the location of her introduction to her team and one of the Ryokukage was nearby her home. As she walked out of one of her lavish homes in the "rich" district of Ryokugakure, she looked around for anything out of the ordinary. Noticing nothing she frowned and began to wander towards the location of her meeting. In the distance she noticed a boy with two cat-like tails this immediately hit a note in her head and activated her thoughts, they are racing with excitement, due to the sight of this boy. Half cat, half boy ... a catboy! I must know how this was done, my dream of hybrids may be possible. Science is about to get it's greatest gift the knowledge on how to create armies of hybrid creatures. Screw this meeting! I need to follow this boy.

Kaigara decides to watch the boy from a fair distance and follow him until he makes a wrong turn or the like where she will snatch him up for testing. Odd he seems to be heading in the same direction as my original destination... She continues tailing the boy, she notices that it appears the boy is alone. This just keeps getting better and better, he's heading where I need to go and he's alone. Ughhh I wish we could skip this following business and go straight to the torture. [color=purple]People don't take kindly to people who snatch children. Whatever, just hurry it up. With all this arguing with her second spirit she momentarily lost the boy, Kaigara panicked for a brief moment while she canned for the catboy, she finally caught sight of him again just before he turned another corner. As Kaigara went around the corner she noticed that he wasn't just heading towards her destination she was heading to the same building as her. The boy entered the kage tower and Kaigara followed him in. Deciding it was too late for her to kidnap this boy she simply headed towards the room she was instructed to meet with her team at. Teams... why did I sign up for a team. I should be leading this team! You signed up to find people to torture and to discover a way to create things like the catboy. While clearly you are superior to whoever might be placed before us for this "team" you need to be smart, don't get us killed. Interesting ploy, you mean I should try to "listen" to my leader and my "peers"? Kaigara's time for talking to herself was up as she reached the door of her room.

Kaigara opens the door and she couldn't believe what she saw already sitting in it. The catboy was there Why do I have such luck? "Hello there little ... cat ... boy ... thing. How did you come to be mixed with another creature like that? I am Kaigara, Kaigara Dōkutsu, if that is too much for your feeble child mind; you can call me Imo. Did you get lost on your way to the ... cat park? No matter ... say how would you like to get some candy and some yarn in exchange for some completely safe and completely humane test volunteering?"

Riven
Origin: League of Legends Link to Wiki page
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PostSubject: Re: Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] EmptyTue 26 Feb 2013, 12:50 am

THE ARSENAL.

Jutsu
Academy Jutsu:


Canon Genjutsu
D-Rank(2):

C-Rank(3):

B-Rank(4):

A-Rank(2):


Custom Genjutsu

C-Rank(1):

B-Rank(2):

A-Rank(3):


Canon Eijutsu

D-Rank(3):

C-Rank(4):

B-Rank(3):

A-Rank(4):

Custom Eijutsu

A-Rank(2):



Non-Specialty Jutsu

Taijutsu(2):


Equipment

Kits:

Poisons:

Success in a Ninja World:


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PostSubject: Re: Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] EmptyTue 26 Feb 2013, 8:37 am

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Im like "lol" cuzz you're playing a girl:
  • Your combat style needs to be a lot longer. I would ask a genin application to lengthen that combat status, and you're making a jounin application. It is used and referred to by some evaluation mods and is therefore needed. You need to/should express how you fight different opponents, as well as what your weaknesses are in combat.
  • You're going to need an RP Sample, especially on a jounin app, even if it's just for show. If this is a WIP, then you're going to have to state that in the title.
  • As it is, I only count 35 jutsu on this app, when you're allowed 40 jutsu at jounin starting point.
  • Name: I’m Afraid You Missed -- If they "hit" the "clone" with an attack, does it just go through her? And if she is hit, does the genjutsu continue on?
  • Name: Sands of Time: Ludus -- When you say this jutsu would not work in a battle situation, what do you mean? Unfortunately, I cannot grade a jutsu based on the claim that it'll only be used for story line and plot. What is more, you're going to need to clarify more about this jutsu, seeing as you can basically do anything in the genjutsu that you want as it is (which is highly OP), and freeze a large amount of people in a genjutsu (should it be able to be used in combat). Even so, you could use it "before combat started" and they'd just be there... frozen... for enemies to attack. What I am seeing is a paralysis genjutsu that is almost impossible to avoid and creates an illusion that you can control completely without any real restrictions in place. Also, this genjutsu looks very familiar <.<
  • Name: What’s your name? -- Trigger is not an appropriate medium for a genjutsu. Is this a "focus" genjutsu? Also, the trigger cannot be someone else saying anything, seeing as that makes no sense. Lastly, voice activated genjutsu are limited to a clan and therefore cannot be used by those not of that clan. How long does this genjutsu last?
  • Name: Go to Sleep Darling -- Genjutsu cannot be voice activated. What is more, they could still use pain or "kai" in order to get out of this genjutsu. I dont know how someone would actually open the coffin that does not exist. Lastly, once the genjutsu is broken, it is broken. That means that there would be no paralysis; that would mean that the genjutsu is still affecting them.
  • Name: Sands of Time: Sandstorm -- There is a lot that needs to be explained in this genjutsu. Basically, once they're caught in the genjutsu, they see some sand swirl around them? And that is supposed to hide an entire sand storm? Also, this genjutsu is not going to be able to kill people, regardless of the rational explanation. I had/have a similar genjutsu, but it was ruled that it's unable to kill. Instead, it can possibly knock someone out due to being unable to breathe awhile, but you're not going to kill people. And even with knocking someone out, it's going to have to last (the genjutsu) for at least a good two posts before it knocks them out; and they cannot stay knocked out for more than a post, seeing as that gives you enough time to do basically anything.
  • Name: Sands of Time: Flood -- Same as above. Also, you're only allowed to have two focus genjutsu in total, so pick and choose wisely. You already have too many. Is there no pain involved when the water crashes down on you, or is it just a sudden drowning feeling to kick start the effects?
  • Name: HEY! LISTEN! -- Denied as it is. This is sound manipulation, not fuuton element ninjutsu. What is more, you're not giving any parameters as to how loud you can get, and what the limits on this jutsu are. Basically, as it is, you could shoot a supersonic wave, or ear bursting volume scream for only one chakra point. You could just do that over and over again until their ear drums have burst. So, no.
  • Quote :
    Rank: A
    Quantity: 1
    Contents: 14 Kunai [14], 24 Shuriken [12], 15 Senbon [5], 20 Makibishi [4], 10 Exploding Notes [10], 6 Exploding Pouches [2], 6 Smoke Pellets [2], 21m String [7], 1 Windmill Shuriken [5], 1 File & Scissor [1].
    You forgot the name section on this kit. Add that in, please.

And this TEEHEE

As for the B rank, it does not matter if you're saying that you're only going to use it for character development. I still need to mod it for what it is at face value; that is my job as a moderator. As for the inability to use it in combat, what does that mean exactly? Why is that? Is it that it does not have the ability to stick to those that do not want to be caught within the genjutsu? They can dispell it? They know about it? What makes it unable to be used in combat. Just stating that you cant use it in combat doesnt work, since that provides many loopholes still. And while I trust that you may not exploit those loopholes, I would not be doing my job if I didn't figure out those problems and iron them out.


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PostSubject: Re: Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] EmptyTue 26 Feb 2013, 9:55 am

Alright let's get down to business (to defeat the huns).

  • Your combat style needs to be a lot longer. I would ask a genin application to lengthen that combat status, and you're making a jounin application. It is used and referred to by some evaluation mods and is therefore needed. You need to/should express how you fight different opponents, as well as what your weaknesses are in combat.
    My bad the version on combat style here was a really rough draft I made here and I forgot to revise it. It will be fixed.

  • You're going to need an RP Sample, especially on a jounin app, even if it's just for show. If this is a WIP, then you're going to have to state that in the title.
    I don't post WIP's I had some fail pastes.

  • As it is, I only count 35 jutsu on this app, when you're allowed 40 jutsu at jounin starting point.
  • Name: I’m Afraid You Missed -- If they "hit" the "clone" with an attack, does it just go through her? And if she is hit, does the genjutsu continue on?
    It's not a clone it's an illusion so if they hit the clone their attack would go right through it. if they hit me my focus would be broken and the technique would end.

  • Name: Sands of Time: Ludus -- When you say this jutsu would not work in a battle situation, what do you mean? Unfortunately, I cannot grade a jutsu based on the claim that it'll only be used for story line and plot. What is more, you're going to need to clarify more about this jutsu, seeing as you can basically do anything in the genjutsu that you want as it is (which is highly OP), and freeze a large amount of people in a genjutsu (should it be able to be used in combat). Even so, you could use it "before combat started" and they'd just be there... frozen... for enemies to attack. What I am seeing is a paralysis genjutsu that is almost impossible to avoid and creates an illusion that you can control completely without any real restrictions in place. Also, this genjutsu looks very familiar <.<
    I know I addressed this briefly however would it be acceptable if I made the Kai cost free and also made it so that anybody caught inside would know it's an illusion? I mean I don't care what I need to do for it to be approved.

  • Name: What’s your name? -- Trigger is not an appropriate medium for a genjutsu. Is this a "focus" genjutsu? Also, the trigger cannot be someone else saying anything, seeing as that makes no sense. Lastly, voice activated genjutsu are limited to a clan and therefore cannot be used by those not of that clan. How long does this genjutsu last?
    I suggest you reread the trigger rules as well as the technique as it is laid out exactly how a trigger should be.

  • Name: Go to Sleep Darling -- Genjutsu cannot be voice activated. What is more, they could still use pain or "kai" in order to get out of this genjutsu. I dont know how someone would actually open the coffin that does not exist. Lastly, once the genjutsu is broken, it is broken. That means that there would be no paralysis; that would mean that the genjutsu is still affecting them.
    Edited.

  • Name: Sands of Time: Sandstorm -- There is a lot that needs to be explained in this genjutsu. Basically, once they're caught in the genjutsu, they see some sand swirl around them? And that is supposed to hide an entire sand storm? Also, this genjutsu is not going to be able to kill people, regardless of the rational explanation. I had/have a similar genjutsu, but it was ruled that it's unable to kill. Instead, it can possibly knock someone out due to being unable to breathe awhile, but you're not going to kill people. And even with knocking someone out, it's going to have to last (the genjutsu) for at least a good two posts before it knocks them out; and they cannot stay knocked out for more than a post, seeing as that gives you enough time to do basically anything.
    Being knocked out makes more sense; Done.
    The sand swirl is for show and the sandstorm doesn't appear until the sand clears I can remove it if you want but the sand is part of the illusion so I don't see why it matters.


  • Name: Sands of Time: Flood -- Same as above. Also, you're only allowed to have two focus genjutsu in total, so pick and choose wisely. You already have too many. Is there no pain involved when the water crashes down on you, or is it just a sudden drowning feeling to kick start the effects?
    Removed.

  • Name: HEY! LISTEN! -- Denied as it is. This is sound manipulation, not fuuton element ninjutsu. What is more, you're not giving any parameters as to how loud you can get, and what the limits on this jutsu are. Basically, as it is, you could shoot a supersonic wave, or ear bursting volume scream for only one chakra point. You could just do that over and over again until their ear drums have burst. So, no.
    Removed.


  • Quote :
    Rank: A
    Quantity: 1
    Contents: 14 Kunai [14], 24 Shuriken [12], 15 Senbon [5], 20 Makibishi [4], 10 Exploding Notes [10], 6 Exploding Pouches [2], 6 Smoke Pellets [2], 21m String [7], 1 Windmill Shuriken [5], 1 File & Scissor [1].
    Fixed.
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PostSubject: Re: Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] EmptyWed 27 Feb 2013, 12:55 pm

Added Custom Jutsu.

Updated History


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PostSubject: Re: Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] EmptySun 03 Mar 2013, 12:01 am

Alright:
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It's not a clone it's an illusion so if they hit the clone their attack would go right through it. if they hit me my focus would be broken and the technique would end.
Then please put that in the jutsu so that people can know that by reading its description. Don't just tell me. I am asking these questions because they were unclear to me while reading the jutsu, and therefore I need them to be put in there.

Quote :
I know I addressed this briefly however would it be acceptable if I made the Kai cost free and also made it so that anybody caught inside would know it's an illusion? I mean I don't care what I need to do for it to be approved.
If you specifically put in there that the people will KNOW that it's a genjutsu, through some kind of genjutsu activated brain impulse that you cant hide, and the kai cost is free and instant to get out of, then that would be fine with me. Another mod may not like it still. Basically, what you have here is a jutsu that you can do anything in; jutsu are graded based on what's fair, and we cant know if it's fair if you can do anything in it - in fact, by default, that's not fair. So put that information in there and I'll read it over to see if I like it. I am going to talk to some others about this jutsu, also.

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I suggest you reread the trigger rules as well as the technique as it is laid out exactly how a trigger should be.
It sounded more like a focus to me, and regardless, you cannot use voice activated genjutsu without being a part of the clan that uses that as their jutsu and ability.

Quote :
Name: Go to Sleep Darling
You talk about making a trigger sign, when this is no longer a trigger activated genjutsu. You need to just say "the needed hand seals" or something to that effect.

Quote :
Name: Sands of Time: Sandstorm
I have issues with this jutsu still. You say that "soon they will notice that it's hard to breathe," what does that mean? Within the post that it is activated? How long does the sand storm take to get to them. I need a clear timeline on all of that.
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PostSubject: Re: Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] EmptySun 03 Mar 2013, 1:49 am

Alright, after a long time of skype moderation, I think I have finally come to the point where I feel comfortable approving this. That said, to the next mod that looks over this app, please keep in mind that there are a couple things I want you to look into specifically and use your best judgement on, seeing as I think they're okay, but I am looking forward to seeing second opinions on them. Those things are as follows:

Name: What’s your name? -- This relies ona voice activated trigger (although said by the target not the user), which is not really allowed, seeing as there is a clan whose ability revolves around being able to use voice activated triggers for their genjutsu.

That's all.
Other than that, I give the 1/2 on this app. Have fun.
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PostSubject: Re: Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] Kioku, Ame [Godaime Raikage] EmptySun 03 Mar 2013, 4:08 am

The app is good and all but I have a slight nitpick with a jutsu
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Name: Sands of Time: Sandstorm
Now, 2 posts and the opponent passes out because he didn't breath. That's fast, too fast even. In battle, 2 posts may mean 2 seconds or maybe more. But in the one's I've been, and the ones I've seen, they don't last longer than let's say 10 second. So for a ninja to pass out after not being able to breath after 2 battle posts is highly unlikely. I can hold my breath for a minute easily. Now sure, you can say that it will pass more time when this technique is activated but I would still want 3 posts to get out of this jutsu. 1 is for getting caught, 1 is for trying to get out and the last he will either get out or pass out.
That would be it actually.
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